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207  It is known that in recent years, industrial pollution has caused the Earth's ozone layer to thin, allowing an increase in the amount of ultraviolet radiation that reaches the Earth's surface. At the same time, scientists have discovered, the population of a species of salamander that lays its eggs in mountain lakes has declined. Since ultraviolet radiation is known to be damaging to delicate tissues and since salamander eggs have no protective shells, it must be the case that the increase in ultraviolet radiation has damaged many salamander eggs and prevented them from hatching. This process will no doubt cause population declines in other species, just as it has in the salamander species.



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The conclusion that the progress of the decrease of the salamander will no doubt result in the population declines in other species seems to be tenable and sound, however, there are several flaws in the reasoning, and then I will figure them out respectively.

To begin with, the arguer fails to conclude that the population of salamander is going down just from the decline of their eggs in the mountain lakes. For one thing, there is not direct information about this fact that the entire salamander will lay their eggs in this area. If just this species does, how can the arguer inform the dropping number of salamander according to this merely fact? For another, one of species of salamander can not be representative of the whole group. There is also a possibility that just this species' number is decreasing while others are rising which lead to the outcome that the total population of salamander is mounting. Therefore, to bolster the conclusion, we need the data about the changes of other population.

Also, even if the salamander's population is declining, we can not rule out other alternatives that will lead to this phenomenon. In most mountains, the climate is changing all the time, so it is likely that the eggs of salamander are destroyed by the fierce climate not by the ultraviolet radiation. In addition, there is still a possibility that because of the delicious taste of the eggs of salamander their enemies eat them. Therefore, without further investigation about the cause of the break of the eggs, the conclusion will be weakened significantly.

Finally, even given that the decline of salamander results from the ultraviolet radiation, it does not mean that this radiation will make a difference to other species. Firstly, it is the common sense that not all the animals come to this world by the forms of eggs. If that is the case, how could the ultraviolet radiation have a influence on their existence thus lowering the population of that species? Moreover, even if what is discussed above is true, the arguer supplies no evidence that their eggs will also be affected by the ultraviolet radiation because of the fact that their eggs have the consolidating shells to protect them. Consequently, more information is needed to make sure the conclusion is convincing.

Overall, the reasoning behind this argument appears to be well-reasoned and trustful. Nevertheless, after weighing up the facts discussed above, without the further investigation about the population of salamander, all the causes that will affect the existence of the eggs, and the influence of the ultraviolet to the eggs of other species, the arguer would better think twice before coming at the conclusion.

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The conclusion that the progress of the decrease of the salamander will no doubt result in the population declines in other species seems to be tenable and sound(我觉得这就可以结束了用句号), however, there are several flaws in the reasoning(有点感觉没有说完), and then I will figure them out respectively.

To begin with, the arguer fails to conclude that the population of salamander is going down just from the decline of their eggs in the mountain lakes. For one thing, there is not (no?) (前面需不需要有冠词修饰呢？) direct information about this fact that the entire salamander will lay their eggs in this area. If just this species does, how can the arguer inform the dropping number of salamander according to this merely fact? For another, one of species of salamander can not (cannot这个以前说过了) be representative of the whole group. There is also a possibility that just this species' number is decreasing while others are rising which lead to the outcome that the total population of salamander is mounting. Therefore, to bolster the conclusion, we need the data about the changes of other population.(感觉最后一句可以不要了)

Also, even if the salamander's population is declining, we (用第三人称吧author，argu是挑逻辑错误也就是作者的错误那么用we这种会像是自己表达自己的观点) can not(cannot) rule out other alternatives that will lead to (可以变换个短语表达和上面lead有点近了) this phenomenon. In most mountains, the climate is changing all the time, so it is likely that the eggs of salamander are destroyed by the fierce climate (这个短语表达确切吗？) not by the ultraviolet radiation. In addition, there is still a possibility that because of the delicious taste of the eggs of salamander their enemies eat them.(the eggs of salamander maybe too vulnerable to be attacked by their enemies) Therefore, without further investigation about the cause of the break of the eggs, the conclusion will be weakened significantly.

Finally, even given that the decline of salamander results from the ultraviolet radiation, it does not mean that this radiation will make a difference to other species. Firstly, it is the common sense that not all the animals come to this world by the forms of eggs. If that is the case, how could the ultraviolet radiation have a (an) influence on their existence thus lowering the population of that species? Moreover, even if what is discussed above is true, the arguer supplies no evidence that their eggs will also be affected by the ultraviolet radiation because of the fact that their eggs have the consolidating shells to protect them (themselves). Consequently, more information is needed to make sure the conclusion is convincing.

Overall, the reasoning behind this argument appears to be well-reasoned and trustful. Nevertheless, after weighing up the facts discussed above, without the further investigation about the population of salamander, all the causes that will affect the existence of the (删) eggs, and the influence of the ultraviolet to the eggs of other species, the arguer would better think twice before coming at the conclusion.
小结：
1、每一段后面的总结语句我觉得都没有必要 可以集中到最后一段来写
2、最后一段总结是不是模板语言多了？
3、有些句子说的有点长了，我觉得有点别扭


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56"Governments should focus more on solving the immediate problems of today rather than trying to solve the anticipated problems of the future."

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When it comes to the question: Should the government just place their emphasis on today's hazards, neglecting the expected problems of the future? Admittedly, tackling the immediate problems is of great importance, however, it is also not a sensible idea to just focus on the contemporary society and overlook the future of next generation.

To begin with, attaching our importance to the problems is very crucial to keep the stabilization of our society. Now, facing with many problems, the government must take measures to prevent the situation from getting worse. Take the issue of severe unemployment in US for an example. After going through the nightmare---financial crisis, getting job had become more tough than ever, and at that time, in order to solve this problems, the government had launched a series of stimulation policies to provide more jobs including giving the funds to the new merging industries to create more positions. Imagine that if our leaders do nothing to improve the employment market, there is a good chance that those who lost their jobs will make some "problems" to the government.

However, in the long run, in order to provide better legacies to our next generation, neglecting the future problems seems not to be a sage decision. Recent centuries has witnessed the deteriorating environments and the skyrocketing temperature, which means a dark and disappointing future. If we just let those problems go, it is more likely that we will destroy earth at our time. So, with the end of Copenhagen meeting, all the people throughout the world begin to pay much attention to this issue. And through this meeting, the nations who attend this meeting raise 30 millions funds to deal with the carbon dioxide issue. This action is not only to our benefits but also, most importantly, to give our children a better environment and promising future.

Moreover, sometimes solving the threats in the future also makes a great contribution to the solution of problem of now. If you can cast a look at the energy problems, you will find the reasons why I claim this idea. A myriad of experts has put up that in the nearby future the energy in this planet will undoubtedly be run out. Therefore, the governments in many countries starts to invest considerable money in the research of the new resources such as the wind energy or the solar energy, and even the US has launched some projects that they prepare to exploit the resources in other planets especially our most near neighborhood---moon. There is no doubt that the study and investment will be conducive to settling the energy crisis, which is not only today's problems but also the threat to the next generation,

Overall, although sometimes the government has to put the resolving of the immediate problems in the first place to ease the urgent phase, yet it is also indispensible to take into consideration the future problems thereby creating a brighter future to our next generation and ourselves.

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When it comes to the question: Should the government just place their emphasis on today's hazards, neglecting the expected problems of the future? (采用这种问句形式开头了？呵呵When it comes to the question感觉像没有说完一样)Admittedly, tackling the immediate problems is of great importance(这就可以用句号了), however, it is also not a sensible idea to just focus on the contemporary society and overlook the future of next generation.

To begin with, attaching our importance to the problems is very crucial to keep the stabilization of our society. Now, facing with many problems, the government must take measures to prevent the situation from getting worse(是什么样的problems就会getting worse？会给人看的晕不知道你说的是什么，虽然你后面紧接着就是例子但这句话说的我觉得可以再改改). Take the issue of severe unemployment in US for an example. After going through the nightmare---financial crisis, getting job had become more tough than ever, (前后面两个其实没有那么紧密的逻辑关系 注意断句) and at that time, in order to solve this problems, the government had launched a series of stimulation policies to provide more jobs (job opportunities) including (such as) giving the funds to the new merging industries to create more positions(这不就和前面重复了？). Imagine (Imaging的区别在哪？) that if our leaders do nothing to improve the employment market, there is a good chance that those who lost their jobs will make some "problems"(troubles) to the government.

However, in the long run, in order to provide better legacies to our next generation (descendants), neglecting the future problems seems not to be a sage decision. Recent centuries has witnessed the deteriorating environments and the skyrocketing (这个词没用过) temperature, which means a dark and disappointing future. If we just let those problems go, it is more likely that we will destroy earth at our time. So, with the end of Copenhagen meeting, all the people throughout the world (重复了) begin to pay much attention to this issue. And through this meeting,(这个表达不好吧) the nations who attend this meeting raise 30 millions (million) funds to deal with the carbon dioxide issue. This action is not only to (缺不缺一个动词？) our benefits but also, most importantly, to give our children a better environment and promising future. (这一段句子间的逻辑衔接不是很好)

Moreover, sometimes solving the threats in the future also makes a great contribution to the solution of problem of now. If you can cast a look at the energy problems, you will find the reasons why I claim (这个词一般都是没有根据的呼吁) this idea. A myriad of experts has put up (这个短语有点问题吧？) that in the nearby future the energy in this planet will undoubtedly be run (running) out. Therefore, the governments in many countries starts (start) to invest considerable money in the research of the new resources such as the wind energy or the solar energy, and even the US has launched some projects that they prepare to exploit (explore好) the resources in other planets especially our most near neighborhood---moon(such as the moon). There is no doubt that the study and investment will be conducive to settling the energy crisis, which is not only today's problems but also the threat to the next generation. (the future)


Overall, although sometimes the government has to put the resolving of the immediate problems in the first place to ease the urgent phase, yet it is also indispensible to take into consideration the future problems thereby creating a brighter future to our next generation and ourselves.

小结：
1、版主说说理后接着就是举例不是很好，说理有难度，我也在尝试改变
2、我觉得有些句子你是为了写长和复杂而写的，有些绕，可以简单明了一些

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分隔符好大个的说~~
其实我不想占座的~不过本着顶一下的原则我还是来凑个热闹~！

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147 The following appeared in an editorial in a business magazine.
"Although the sales of Whirlwind video games have declined over the past two years, a recent survey of video-game players suggests that this sales trend is about to be reversed. The survey asked video-game players what features they thought were most important in a video game. According to the survey, players prefer games that provide lifelike graphics, which require the most up-to-date computers. Whirlwind has just introduced several such games with an extensive advertising campaign directed at people 10 to 25 years old, the age-group most likely to play video games. It follows, then, that the sales of Whirlwind video games are likely to increase dramatically in the next few months."

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In this article, the editor concludes that the sales of Whirlwind (W) video games are likely to increase dramatically. To strengthen his conclusion, the author points out that W has introduced games with lifelike graphics that will be preferred by players as a recent survey indicated. This argument is not thoroughly well-reasoned. The main flaw of this suggestion will be discussed respectively.

To begin with, the editor provides on evidence to support the recent survey that can be trustworthy.  The survey may involve only small size of players, such as 20 respondents, which will not indicate the real preference of all the players. Even if the size of respondents is large enough, the author fails to take other factors into consideration, such as age or type of game. The young players may pay much attention to the graphics, while the most senior players may take the operations in the game designing as the important factor. And the Role Play Games with lifelike graphics may sale well, while the Real-time Strategy Game may use the attraction of multi-player online to draw players in.

In addition, even if the survey suggesting that the players prefer games that provide lifelike graphics, the author unwarranted assumes that these players will actually buy such kind games. Even assuming the survey could be trusted, the conclusion we can draw is just upon the willingness of players. Preferring the games with lifelike graphics and actually buying such kind of game is entirely different. It is possible that such games with lifelike graphics are required the up-to-date computers that they cannot afford to buy. Therefore, most players may not buy such kind games because they may have low performance running in the common computers or even worse, these games cannot play at all.

What’s more, even assuming most players can afford to buy the video games with provide lifelike graphics, the editor is too hasty to conclude that the sales of W will increase dramatically in the next few months. On the one hand, there is no further evidence to indicate that most players will buy the games produced by W. Perhaps, the games of many others companies seem to be more appealing to the players because of the interesting story and fairly cheap price. On the other hand, even if most players chose to buy such kind games of W, the profits of W may not increase dramatically since sales game with lifelike graphics is only small part of W’s business which cannot take a great contribution to enhancing the whole sales of W dramatically.

To sum up, the conclusion, which made by the editor who has disregarded or chosen to ignore several aspects of his conclusion, is on the basis of scant of credibility. To better bolster to the reliability of the arguer’s conclusion, the author must provide more information about the credibility of the survey. I would also need to know whether players will actually buy the games of W. Only with further evidence provided by the editor can I reconsider the author’s conclusion in a better way.

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In this article, the editor concludes that the sales of Whirlwind (W) video games are likely to increase dramatically. To strengthen his conclusion, the author points out that W has introduced games with lifelike graphics that will be preferred by players as a recent survey indicated. This argument is not thoroughly well-reasoned. The main flaw of this suggestion will be discussed respectively.

To begin with, the editor provides on evidence to support the recent survey that can be trustworthy.  The survey may involve only small size of players, such as 20 respondents, which will not indicate the real preference of all the players. Even if the size of respondents is large enough, the author fails to take other factors into consideration, such as age or type of game. The young players may pay much attention to the graphics, while the most senior players may take the operations in the game designing as the important factor. And the Role Play Games with lifelike graphics may sale well, while the Real-time Strategy Game may use the attraction of multi-player online to draw players in.

In addition, even if the survey suggesting that the players prefer games that provide lifelike graphics, the author unwarranted assumes that these players will actually buy such kind games. Even assuming the survey could be trusted, the conclusion we can draw is just upon the willingness of players. Preferring the games with lifelike graphics and actually buying such kind of game is entirely different. It is possible that such games with lifelike graphics are required the up-to-date computers that they cannot afford to buy. Therefore, most players may not buy such kind games because they may have low performance running in the common computers or even worse, these games cannot play at all.

What’s more, even assuming most players can afford to buy the video games with provide lifelike graphics, the editor is too hasty to conclude that the sales of W will increase dramatically in the next few months. On the one hand, there is no further evidence to indicate that most players will buy the games produced by W. Perhaps, the games of many others companies seem to be more appealing to the players because of the interesting story and fairly cheap price. On the other hand, even if most players chose to buy such kind games of W, the profits of W may not increase dramatically since sales game with lifelike graphics is only small part of W’s business which cannot take a great contribution to enhancing the whole sales of W dramatically.

To sum up, the conclusion, which made by the editor who has disregarded or chosen to ignore several aspects of his conclusion, is on the basis of scant of credibility. To better bolster to the reliability of the arguer’s conclusion, the author must provide more information about the credibility of the survey. I would also need to know whether players will actually buy the games of W. Only with further evidence provided by the editor can I reconsider the author’s conclusion in a better way.

每一点分析的很细。。。。。。很好！！！！！！
我有个疑问
在第一段复述题目时是不是要把原题复述全面？？还是你这样简略的说就好？？？？？这个我一直很有疑问？？？？

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120 "So much is new and complex today that looking back for an understanding of the past provides little guidance for living in the present."

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The issue is a complex and controversial one that whether looking back for an understating of the past provides little guidance for living in the present. Different people have their respective ways of looking at this issue. In my point of view, however, many new things come out as the world changing dramatically. Rather, I hold the opinion that learning from the past contribute to hand the current issues in a better way. My view will be greatly strengthened by the following discussion.

Admittedly, quantities of new tough issues are coming out as the world changing quickly and turning out to be complex, which make us hardly obtain a little guidance from the past. The high-tech crime is a case of point. As the rapid development of modern science, especially the computer technology, many new forms of crime are happening. For example, taking the advantage of computer technology, many criminals hack in the personal computers and extract some valuable private information such as personal Bankcard ID and its password. With such information, the criminals can unawares steal people’s money with no difficulty. In this situation, we have to resort to more advanced technology instead of the past in order to identify the crimes and put the bad guys into jail.

However, learning from the past is significant to handle today’s problems because the experience can avoid making unnecessary mistakes. A telling example is about the medical area. The past experience plays a vital role, when doctors use the traditional Chinese medicine as treatment for many complex and difficult diseases. Because of uncertainty of active ingredients in the traditional Chinese medicine and varieties of prescription of Chinese traditional doctors in dealing the same disease, the treatment of the traditional Chinese medicine seems to be a little “dangerous”. Thus, people will turn to trust the experts who are old meaning ones with the rich experience. Experience accumulated in the past will be sure to help the doctors use the right traditional Chinese medicine to the right patient in the right way.

What’s more, even if the past cannot help us directly, it still has great meaning to guide us toward to the right way because we can easily apply the approaches or methods based on the past experience to cope with the similar problems we have encountered today. For example, we are now undergoing the worldwide financial crisis. Looking back to the history, we may easily find that it is not our first time to suffer such severe economic recession, and there are many past examples to deal with the problem successfully. And can we just replicate the same measurements to handle the financial problem of today? The answer is of course not. However, learning from the past will inspire us that some rules are important to solve the financial crisis, for instance, the importance of using state macro-control, and restoring confidence in the market and creating more job opportunities. With help with the past experience, we will be sure the economic recovery is promising.

To sum up, basing my conclusion on the illustrations and exposition mentioned above, accordingly, I agree that past experience may not be suitable to deal with the problem of today. Rather, in my opinion, the value of the studying past will surely be great helpful. Either directly or indirectly the past will benefit us eventually.

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The issue is a complex and controversial one that whether looking back for an understating of the past provides little guidance for living in the present. Different people have their respective ways of looking at this issue. In my point of view, however, many new things come out as the world changing dramatically. Rather, I hold the opinion that learning from the past contribute(s) to hand(handle) the current issues in a better way. My view will be greatly strengthened by the following discussion.

Admittedly, quantities of new tough issues are coming out as the world changing quickly and turning out to be complex, which make(s) us hardly obtain a little guidance from the past. The high-tech crime is a case of point. As the rapid development of modern science, especially the computer technology, many new forms of crime are happening. For example, taking the advantage of computer technology, many criminals hack in the personal computers and extract some valuable private information such as personal Bankcard ID and its password. With such information, the criminals can unawares steal people’s money with no difficulty. In this situation, we have to resort to more advanced technology instead of the past in order to identify the crimes and put the bad guys into jail.

世界日新月异，出现大量难题 eg.Hi-tech crime hack

However, learning from the past is significant to handle today’s problems because the experience can avoid making unnecessary mistakes. A telling example is about the medical area. The past experience plays a vital role, when doctors use the traditional Chinese medicine(好像这个要大写Traditional Chinese Medicine) as treatment for many complex and difficult diseases. Because of uncertainty of active ingredients in the traditional Chinese medicine and varieties of prescription of Chinese traditional doctors in dealing the same disease, the treatment of the traditional Chinese medicine seems to be a little “dangerous”. Thus, people will turn to trust the experts who are old meaning ones with the rich experience. Experience accumulated in the past will be sure to help the doctors use the right traditional Chinese medicine to the right patient in the right way.

(求助于经验丰富的中医专家好像不能表明 looking back for an understanding of the past provides guidance ,例子上好像不太恰当)

What’s more, even if the past cannot help us directly, it still has great meaning to guide us toward to the right way because we can easily apply the approaches or methods based on the past experience to cope with the similar problems we have encountered today. For example, we are now undergoing the worldwide financial crisis. Looking back to the history, we may easily find that it is not our first time to suffer such severe economic recession, and there are many past examples to deal with the problem successfully. And can we just replicate the same measurements to handle the financial problem of today? The answer is of course not. However, learning from the past will inspire us that some rules are important to solve the financial crisis, for instance, the importance of using state macro-control, and restoring confidence in the market and creating more job opportunities. With help with the past experience, we will be sure the economic recovery is promising.

这个例子举得太好了！！！！学习学习！！！！

To sum up, basing my conclusion on the illustrations and exposition mentioned above, accordingly, I agree that past experience may not be suitable to deal with the problem of today. Rather, in my opinion, the value of the studying past will surely be great helpful. Either directly or indirectly the past will benefit us eventually.

结构清晰，语言丰富，用词准确。。。。。。。我个人认为唯一遗憾的是第二个BODY例子没有紧紧扣题!!! 这个 可以交流交流！！！！加油!!!!!

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Therefore, allpatients who are diagnosed with muscle strain would be well advised to takeantibiotics as part of their treatment." ===========      习作正文 =========== The author's conclusion is that antibioticsare efficient in treating patients diagnosed with muscle stain. This conclusionis based on two experiments: the first group of patients was treated by Dr.Newland(N) and was injected with antibiotics; while the second one was incharge of Dr. Alton(A) and was believed to have antibiotics in their treatmentbut actually not. The result of the two experiments came out that patients inthe first group gets better faster. The argument is flawed in several aspects. Tobegin with, the author falsely assumes that two groups of patients aregenerally the same, so that the treatment they get can be accurately compared.Yet the author provides no evidence to substantiate this assumption. Commonsense informs me that patients in various ages and health conditions mayreceive different effect when being treated the same way. And since that theauthor fails to provide evidence that those patients are generally the same inage and health condition, it is entirely possible that the two groups cannotform a control, which will lead to the failure of the experiments. Additionally, even assuming that patients are the alike in general conditions, the author fails toprove that the treatment conducted by Dr N and A are equivalent except in theuse of antibiotics. Considering their different specializations, it is quitepossible that besides antibiotics, Dr. N also used some medicines or remediesthat finally contribute to the faster recovery of her patients, or equallyperhaps that Dr.A happened to conducted a special treatment for herpatients that prolonged their recuperationand time. Beside, even the difference in the living environment , sanitarycondition, and eating habit may also result in the inaccurate result of theexperiment. Without ruling out these possible scenarios, the author cannotconvince me with the conclusion. Another problem with this argument is that even though the twoexperiments can prove the rightness of the hypothesis that antibiotics areeffectual in helping patients who arediagnosed with severe muscle stain, the author cannot apply this conclusion toall the patients who have muscle stain. Possibly that antibiotics areineffective or even dangerous to less severe patients; or perhaps althoughdiagnosed with muscle stain, some people are allergic to certain antibioticsand therefore cannot use them safely. Unless the author accounted for thesepossible events, the author's recommendation is unsound at all. Asit stands, the argument is not well reasoned. To better support its conclusion,the author should also provide more substantial evidence to prove that thesetwo experiments are reliable. For example, the two groups of patients aregenerally the same in age and health condition, and the two doctors were usingthe same treatment other than antibiotics. Besides, the author should alsoconvince me that antibiotics are also helpful in treating less severe muscletrain patients. ======================= Revised By =======================    ●○●○●○●○●○●○●○●○●○●○●○●○●○●○●○●○●○●○●○●○●○●○●○●○●○●○●○●○●○●○●○●○●○●○●○●○●○●○●○● ===========     Issue题目 =========== TOPIC: ISSUE17 - "There are two typesof laws: just and unjust. Every individual in a society has a responsibility toobey just laws and, even more importantly, to disobey and resist unjustlaws." ===========      习作正文 =========== Established laws are the basis of the orderof society. And I agree that just laws should be obeyed, while concerningunjust laws, people still have to obey them, but they can also use other waysto abolish them.   People in every society should obey just laws. Laws are regulations madeby government or, in the past, ruling classes, to maintain the order of thesociety; only by obeying laws can people in society obtain freedom andsecurity. For example, one's private property is protected by laws, thus peoplewill not firstly think about getting money by robbing, kidnapping and stealing.This regulation assures the security of our property, and even lives, and theorder of our society.    Asfor unjust laws, however, people still need to obey them. There does not exista  clear distinction about just andunjust laws. Some of the clauses in the code of law of Hammurabi in the ancientBabylon seem extremely unjust according to today's moral and ethical standards,yet this law was believed to be the greatest law of that time and people atthat time had to obey that. If people are encouraged to disobey and resist lawsthat they think are unjust, then all of laws are of no use any more. Differentpeople would  have different opinionsabout just and unjust, and therefore, they will use just laws to defendthemselves while violate unjust laws to pursue their illegal interests. This,at last, will render the whole society into pandemonium. Furthermore, theimplement of laws, both just and unjust, are secured by governmental forces,and thus people should think twice before violating unjust laws. In short, lawsare laws, no matter what they just or unjust, people have to maintain them , soas to the order of the society.   Yet this does not mean that we have nothing to do when facing unjustlaws: there are legal ways to abolish them rather than blindly disobey andresist. People can make their voice heard by the government or Supreme Court,through demonstration or media, and let these power officials realize theunjustness of the law, thus bolish some clauses. While in some extremely cases,people could cohered to turn over the original government and establish a newone and make new laws by they will.    Tosum up, in order to maintain the security and order of society, people shouldobey laws, no matter they just or unjust. Yet unjust ones can be abolishedthrough legal, or sometimes, extreme ways. ======================= Revised By =======================

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TOPIC: ARGUMENT1 - The following appearedin a memorandum written by the vice president of Nature's Way, a chain ofstores selling health food and other health-related products.

"Previous experience has shown thatour stores are most profitable in areas where residents are highly concernedwith leading healthy lives. We should therefore build our next new store inPlainsville, which has many such residents. Plainsville merchants report thatsales of running shoes and exercise clothing are at all-time highs. The localhealth club, which nearly closed five years ago due to lack of business, hasmore members than ever, and the weight training and aerobics classes are alwaysfull. We can even anticipate a new generation of customers: Plainsville'sschoolchildren are required to participate in a 'fitness for life' program,which emphasizes the benefits of regular exercise at an early age."
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By citing the sale report of running shoesand exercise clothing as well as the condition of health club, the vicepresident arrives at the conclusion that people in Plainsville are highlyconcerned with healthy lifestyle. In addition, he refers to a school projectfrom which he anticipates future customers. The author states all theseevidence lucidly while unsubstantiated assumptions considerably weaken hisratiocination.

Firstly, the linkage of the sale report ofrunning shoes and exercise clothing as well as the condition of health clubwith citizens concerns with leading healthy lifestyle is cursory at best. Sincevarious factors may attribute to the good sale of running shoes and exerciseclothing, it is entirely possible that other factors, such as the price ofrunning shoes and clothing, are responsible for the good selling report. Forthat matter, running shoes and exercise clothing may sell at a low price withtax privilege provided by the local authority, which lead to the possibilitythat people from cities near by may come to buy running shoes and exerciseclothing. Likewise, the number of members in health club is little indicationthat people in Plainsiville pay much attention to healthy life. Perhaps, peopleregard as a means to meeting new friends and participate in social lives, whichmay also be a reason for the large number of members. Since the author fails toeliminate these possibilities, either scenario, if true, will considerablyweaken the effectiveness of the basis of the conclusion that people inPlainsiville are highly concerned with leading a healthy life. Therefore,unless the author provides compelling evidence to strengthen the linkagebetween the good selling report as well as the high number of members at thehealth club, the author cannot persuade me of the basis of his conclusion whatsoever,let alone his conclusion.

Secondly, the author implies that schoolproject will probably lead to a future generation which pay more attention toliving healthily, basing on the assumption that the school project is an influentialfactors and the influence will be everlasting. However, the vice presidentprovide little information concerning the effectiveness of the project, inwhich case the project may not as effective as he has anticipated. It is notpresumptuous to assumes that mandatory participation may result in children'saversion to product related to 'fitness for life program', in which case theproject is far from an indicator of future generation which is concerned withleading healthy life. For that matter, without providing more convincingevidence to corroborate the effectiveness of the project, hardly can the vicepresident anticipate great many of future customers.

Thirdly, even I concede that citizens inPlainsiville are concerns with leading healthy lives, the argument still firmlyrelies on the premise that citizens in Plainsiville is typical. However, theauthor makes no comparison to substantiate that citizens in Plainsiville aretypical of citizens in other cities. For that matter, it is just as likely thatpeople may prefer other means to lead healthy lives rather that eating healthyfood. Perhaps, they has spent too much on leading a healthy life, which leadsto the possibility that citizen will hardly buy ant product from Natural way.And it is also possible that competition in Plainville is intense that little profit canbe earned, in which case people business in Plainsiville is far fromprofitable.
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TOPIC: ISSUE130 - "How children aresocialized today determines the destiny of society. Unfortunately, we have notyet learned how to raise children who can help bring about a bettersociety."
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Socialization of children, defined as theprocess of children's meeting social needs, determines the destiny of society,as whether children can meet the need of society largely contribute a lot tosocial improvement. Although we have plough lots of social resources to help tosocialize children and it works in one way or another, it is future generation,instead of we, that decides whether the society has become better.

Since children, sooner or later, willbecome the majority of the society, whether they can make social improvementdepends on the quality of their socialization. In other words, whether they canmeet the need of society is the pivot factors. There are numerous examples inwhich well socialization of people led to social improvement. Let us take theRenaissance as a example. In the Renaissance, people began to recognize theimportance of human themselves, rather than god, which leads to the need ofmental revolution. As a result, scores of people, who perfectly meet socialneeds, contribute to this magnificent event in human history. Among them wereDante, the writer of Divine comedy, Boccaccio, Montaigne, Cervantes, the writerof quintessential renaissance work, Don Quixote. As the example demonstrated,whether people can meet the need of society is so significant that it greatlydetermines social improvements.

As people have realized the importance ofchildren's socialization, we have managed to improve our ways in which ourchildren are educated. Ever since the ancient Greek, Aristotle, the famousphilosopher and scientist, has introduced the concept of being educated,defined as the acquaintance with knowledge and the ability to tell insightfulstudy from the nonsense one, in which case people in ancient Greek has tried toeducate children in order to meet social needs. Likewise, the Renaissance man,defined as people with knowledge in various subject, also demonstrate people'seffort to improve the quality of education so that more social and scientificimprovement can be achieved. And nowadays, we have ploughed more socialresource into education, which led to the improvement in preliminary schools aswell as colleges. For instance, students are required to learn various kinds ofsubjects, which are not merely limited to their profession. Students who majorin economics are required to study Physics, while students major in Physics arealso required to study economics or literature. Thus, this continuous efforthas revealed that we have learned and manage to educated children in order toimprove the quality of socialization.

However, it is one thing for us to judgewhat a better society is and it is quite another for our future generation tojudge what a better society is, since ethical standards differs from generationto generation. Although people in the Middle Ages, which focus more on god, willhardly regarded society in the Renaissance, which pays more attention to human,as a better society, people in the Renaissance still regarded their society asa better society. For that matter, we may regarded a society which filled withhigh-tech facilities and citizens living in a fast pace as a better societywhile our children will recognize a society with healthy lifestyle and slowliving pace as a better society. Thus, rather than impose our anticipation of abetter society on our children, we should teach them the ability to innovateand let them to usher in a better society.

As the socialization of children, whichdetermines whether people in the future can meet social need, contributes a lotto social improvement, people nowadays have spared no pains in improvingchildren’s ability to adapt to social needs. Yet, rather that impose ourethical standards on our children, we should let them to decide what a bettersociety is.
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53Thirteen years ago, researchers studied a group of 25 infants who showed signs of mild distress when exposed to unfamiliar stimuli such as an unusual odor or a tape recording of an unknown voice. They discovered that these infants were more likely than other infants to have been conceived in early autumn, a time when their mothers' production of melatonin—a hormone known to affect some brain functions—would naturally increase in response to decreased daylight. In a follow-up study conducted earlier this year, more than half of these children—now teenagers—who had shown signs of distress identified themselves as shy. Clearly, increased levels of melatonin before birth cause shyness during infancy and this shyness continues into later life.
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Grounding on a research and a follow-up study of 25 infants, the arguer comes to a conclusion that increased level of melatonin before birth will cause shyness during infancy and this shyness continues into later life. However, both the research and a follow-up study are full of facets. Firstly, the number of the experimental subject—25, is extremely small; secondly, the argument presumed the casual relationship of the mild reaction of infants with shyness; thirdly, the follow-up study doesn’t reasonable enough to support this assertion.

First and foremost, with only 25 infants, the research really can’t reflect the common condition of all infants. And with another fatal false, the absence of no control group, the research do deserve deliberation to verify the assertion. According to Statistics, every conclusion of an experiment needs to fit the rule of statistic regularity, which appears when having plenty of experiment subjects, but this research fails to apply it. As we all know, mathematicians throw a coin
over thousands even millions time just to reveal a mere fact that roughly half will come up heads and half tails, then how could the researchers come to a conclusion with only 25 infants? What’s more, almost every experiment needs a scientific control group, but this one doesn’t make it. We all know that Gregor Mendel—the father of modern genetics, designed several sharp control groups and spend over 8 years on peas to discover his masterpiece—the two basic laws of genetics. Then how could we trust the result of a research without a control group?

Besides, the arguer arbitrary deduced the casual relationship between the mind reaction of those infants and shyness, as well as that between the shyness and the melatonin. The argument gives no certain information about the symptoms of the shyness, especially for infants. Then does the reaction to unfamiliar stimuli is the main signs of shyness? And it also fails to explain deeply why those infants showed signs of mild distress when exposed to unfamiliar stimuli, except for the expected reason. Maybe they have some problems with sense organs or brains. Moreover, there lie a possibility that other hormone may increase and decrease at autumn, and they are exactly the main course of the shyness.

Last but not the least, with an absence of the detail information of those kids in the follow information and only relying on their self-identification, we have not reason enough to assess them as shy children, not to relate the later shyness with their shyness during infancy. On one hand, identifying themselves as shy doesn’t equal they are really shy. They are just children of thirteen, thus they may not mature enough to tell the exact meaning of shy, and then misidentifying themselves as shy. One the other hand, no clear proof in this follow- up study has show that the shyness is due to that of infancy. Firstly, as we could assume, the family ambience and education and other things are of vital importance when forming the characteristics of a child. An unhappy family environment and a car accident once suffered may also lead to the shyness of a common child. Besides, if most children around them are shy as well, which means shyness is a social, common problem instead of particular phenomenon, the shyness of those children may not be the continual influence of the shyness in their infancy.

In sum, the assertion could be more favorable if the researchers redesign the experiment, to research more infants and exclude other interference elements. What more, investigating more detail of those children in their later life will effectively strengthen the argument.

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50"In order to improve the quality of instruction at the college and university level, all faculty should be required to spend time working outside the academic world in professions relevant to the courses they teach."
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According to a survey conducted by Penn University, it is defined as an integration of clarity, classroom management, knowledge, intellectually stimulating, organized, enthusiasm, fairness, approachability. Accordingly, the quality of instruction seems to be perfectly explained. Though it is not easy to reach a consensus on the definition of the teaching quality, no one would deny the great significance of the quality of instruction, especially at the university and college level. Important as it is, instead of applying single measure to all school faculties, plenty of ways should be considered when trying to improve it.

Apparently, spending time working outside the academic world in professions relevant to the courses is a recommended way to achieve a more effective instruction, but it is not recommended enough to ask all teachers to do so. It is true that through this way, the faculties can connect the academic world and the non-academic world efficiently, which could be seemed as the combination of the theory and the practice. And the possibility that the textbooks may lag behind the changing world will be excluded by such an approach. But just like the saying” overdone is worse than undone” reveals, overemphasize on this measure will lead to nowhere. On one hand, such approach still has some notable vice, for instance, time costing. This measure requires the teachers to spend considerable time outside the academic world, and the time it has cost may not equal the thing they get in return. Moreover, considering the eight element of quality of instruction, working in the non-academic world may have nothing to do with the classroom management and fairness. It needs to be applied along with other approaches. On the other hand, it doesn’t suit for all faculties. As we know, many scientists, like chemists and physicists, need to spend days and nights in lab to do experiments. And mathematicians have less need to work outside their academic world. At these circumstances, it is not a sensible choice to require all faculties to spend time working in the non-academic world for the purpose to improve the quality of instruction.

Corresponding to the eight elements of the instructions as I mentioned above, there are myriads of approaches that can be used
improve the quality of instruction. Being as a faulty of a university or a college, you could substantially improve the clarity with analyzing the materials and difficult ideas in detail, largely power your knowledge by achieving a higher degree or making a study of more references, remarkably raise the enthusiasm and stimulate students’ intellect through playing interesting games while giving your classes. What’s more, being objective when assigning grades can add your fairness. And a basic rule for your class is essential to keep the class management in order. All in all, none of those is hard to approach. So it is clear enough for us to realize that with so many choices to choose from, we have no need to stick to a certain approach to reach our goal.

While the world is changing at such a high pace, the quality of instruction still needs to be laid much emphasis on and to be well improved. But just as the means of education are varies, the methods to hence the quality of instruction are kaleidoscopic. So although working outside the academic world do is a effective way to reach the goal, it is do deserved think twice before asking the entire faculty to take this approach as an essential choice.
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"Doctors have long suspected that secondary infections may keep some patients from healing quickly after severe muscle strain. This hypothesis has now been proved by preliminary results of a study of two groups of patients. The first group of patients, all being treated for muscle injuries by Dr. Newland, a doctor who specializes in sports medicine, took antibiotics regularly throughout their treatment. Their recuperation time was, on average, 40 percent quicker than typically expected. Patients in the second group, all being treated by Dr. Alton, a general physician, were given sugar pills, although the patients believed they were taking antibiotics. Their average recuperation time was not significantly reduced. Therefore, all patients who are diagnosed with muscle strain would be well advised to take antibiotics as part of their treatment."


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At the end of this letter, the speaker draws the conclusion that taking antibiotics will be a sensible supplement for all the patients with muscle strain, based on the fact the secondary infections will prolong the healing process. However, this premise is substantiated by a plausibly preliminary result of the study of two groups, which are treated by different specialized doctors respectively. Therefore, although this statement seems to be well-reasoned, the logical procedure is unconvincing.

First of all, the precondition about the secondary infection largely rests on the outcomes of the study, whereas the speaker provides no explicit evidence that the patients suffering from muscle strain must get secondary infections. Without 100% possibilities that the contamination will occur to them, the speaker cannot convince us of the deduction efficiently, let alone the credulity of the final conclusion. So, in order to make the consequences of the experiment, more direct proof ought to show to us,.

Yet even if the fallacy mentioned above is corrected, the lack of the information about basic conditions of the patients and the changing parameters such as the different doctors in the study will undermine the premise. If the age of the patients varies in the large span or their ability to restore from the pain is different from each other, it’s unrealistic to compare their recuperation time. On the other hand, the totally distinguish doctors who belongs to the two realm of medicine is bound to have a influence over the recovering time. For instance, the first doctor is more likely to cure the patient whose muscle pain is caused by sports for less time. Unless the speaker demonstrates more specific facts about the patients and rules out the affecting ingredients, the hypothesis can be suffice to be ensured.

Finally, the arguer also fails to take the byproduct of the antibiotics into account, which leads to the unwarranted assertion that every patient including the one who are perhaps allergic to this kind of medicine should take it. Despite the fact that antibiotics will shorten the time for patient, we should be conscious of the exception when attempting to make the claim. And if these special groups are overlooked, no more severe results will be brought about to those innocent people. As a result, only when we figure out all the possible problems it will result in can we make the conclusion more grounded.

Overall, the argument which appears to the effective one should be strengthened at least by providing the full-developed stuff to confirm the link between the secondary infection and the muscle strain, conducting the study in the same situation such as the same doctors and the patients of the same age, and work out the problems of the antibiotics. Otherwise, the conclusion can not to say meaningful and trustful.

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50"In order to improve the quality of instruction at the college and university level, all faculty should be required to spend time working outside the academic world in professions relevant to the courses they teach."


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Is it necessary for all faculties to spend time working outside world in professions related with what they teach in the university on the purpose of improving the quality of instruction? The author claims so, however, the idea that the teachers are ought to take the part-time jobs may not have the same beneficial impact on some disciplines as on others because of their own features in the process of teaching.

Undoubtedly, the teachers of some subjects such as finance or other majors in business school should put what they teach in their classes into practice, due to the fact that the economy tendency varies from day to day and the knowledge in this capricious area is updating gradually. The teacher must keep the pace of the change, or their students will exert the obsolete theories on the finance system which perhaps results in the pandemic crisis just like the one in 2008. Bruised by that crisis and starring at the declining applicants, masses of teachers in the business school are beginning to reconsider what they impart to those futures’ businessman. If their theories are out of date and cannot reach the basic goals of pump- priming the economy, the existence of the college and university is meaningless.

Yet when it comes to weigh up the value of working outside for some other disciplines, it seems not to be valuable as it appears. In the society, not all the subjects are able to succeed finding the corresponding jobs or titles. Like the theoretical cosmology, the Hawking’s research field is a case in point. As one of great achievers in the world history, the fully-equipped labs are his secondary homes and the accumulated books are the resource of his inspiration and the place where he can contact other great minds. No one will force him to work outside because it’s unrealistic to apply his theory to the tangible world in the same way as finance does. As a result, spending their precious thinking time on less effective seems not to be a sensible way to improve the quality of instruction.

Finally, the same condition goes for philosophy, which features with the dependent thinking rather than the tangible work. The majority of philosophers like Plato or Aristotle devote their most time into thinking general and fundamental problems concerning matters such as existence, knowledge, values, reason, mind, and language, which is just what the most philosophical professors should follow. Therefore, compared with wasting time working outside, always considering the mundane stuffs and thus relatively cutting down the time of thinking, it will be wiser for those teachers to indulge themselves in the academic world.

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200 Statistics collected from dentists indicate that three times more men than women faint while visiting the dentist. This evidence suggests that men are more likely to be distressed about having dental work done than women are. Thus, dentists who advertise to attract patients should target the male consumer and emphasize both the effectiveness of their anesthetic techniques and the sensitivity of their staff to nervous or suffering patients.

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In this article, the author suggests that the advertisement of dentists should concentrate on the male consumer to attract patients. To strengthened his recommendation, the author points a survey that indicates more men will faint while visiting the dentist. This argument is not thoroughly well-reasoned. The main flaw of this suggestion will be discussed respectively.

To begin with, the author provides no evidence to demonstrate the reliability of the statistics collected from dentists. The survey may involve only a small size, such as 20 respondents, which will not indicate the real situation of all the patients. Even if the size of respondents is large enough, the author fails to take other factors into consideration, such as age. It is possible that male patients are old who will not well bear the pain, while the female patients turn out to be young who has a better management of pain.

In addition, the author unwarranted assumes that men patients are more likely to be distressed about having dental work done than women are. It is entirely possible that most the male patients have severe dental diseases. In the contrast, the female patients have only slight tooth problems. Therefore, it is reasonable that the men seem to be more distressed than the women because the male patients will suffer more pain in their treatments. Maybe, the female patients are more painful than the male patients if the females have the same treatment as the males.

What’s more, even assuming that the men are more likely to be distressed than women are, the author is too hasty to conclude that the best measure for dentists attracting patients is concentrating on the male patients. On the one hand, there are no proofs to sustain that the dentists can earn much more money from the males. Perhaps, men are care about their dental healthy, and there is a little chance to go to the dentists, while the women although they pay much attention to their dental healthy as well, they still go to dentists for their beauty. On other hand, patients no matter male or female will focus other factors such the quality of treatment when they choose to see dentists. The distress can be a minor factor in order to exchange for a healthy tooth. However, it is unacceptable, if the dentists have a low quality of treatment and fails the expiation of patients even if having extremely attractable advertisements.

To sum up, the conclusion, which made by the editor who has disregarded or chosen to ignore several aspects of his conclusion, is on the basis of scant of credibility. To better bolster to the reliability of the arguer’s conclusion, the author must provide more information about the credibility of the survey. I would also need to know whether the advertisement would attract the male patients to go to see dentists. Only with further evidence provided by the editor can I reconsider the author’s conclusion in a better way.

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In this article, the author suggests that the advertisement of dentists should concentrate on the male consumer to attract patients. To strengthen his recommendation, the author points out a survey that more men will faint while visiting the dentist. This argument is not thoroughly well-reasoned. The main flaw(s) of this suggestion will be discussed respectively.

To begin with, the author provides no evidence to demonstrate the reliability of the statistics collected from dentists. The survey may involve only a small size of respondents, such as 20 respondents, which will not indicate (is little indication of ) the real situation of all the patients. Even if the size of respondents is large enough, the author fails to take other factors into consideration, such as age. It is possible that male patients are old who will not well bear the pain, while the female patients turn out to be young who has a better management of pain.

In addition, the author unwarranted(应该是ADV吧) assumes that men（male） patients are more likely to be distressed about having dental work done than women are. It is entirely possible that most the male patients have severe dental diseases. In the contrast, the female patients have only slight tooth problems. Therefore, it is reasonable that the men seem to be more distressed than the women because the male patients will suffer more pain in their treatments. Maybe, the female patients are more painful than the male patients if the females have the same treatment as the males. (the 是否要加呢？)这一段是否应该驳斥它无法从statistic的faint得到distress呢？直接驳斥他的推论是否有效呢？这么写的话，或许会有很多东西写

What’s more, even assuming that the men are more likely to be distressed than women （are）, the author is too hasty to conclude that the best measure for dentists attracting patients is concentrating on the male patients. On the one hand, there are no proofs to sustain that the dentists can earn much more money from the males. Perhaps, men are care about（care about） their dental health, and there is a little chance to go to the dentists, while the women although they pay much attention to their dental healthy as well, they still go to dentists for their beauty. On other hand, patients no matter male or female will focus (on) other factors such the quality of treatment when they choose to see dentists. The distress can be a minor factor in order to exchange for a healthy tooth. However, it is unacceptable, if the dentists have a low quality of treatment and fails the expiation of patients even if having extremely attractable advertisements.

To sum up, the conclusion, which made by the editor who has disregarded or (chosen to这个是否可以删去呢) ignore several aspects of his conclusion, is on the basis of scant of credibility. To better bolster to（bolster 后面是直接接名词的吧） the reliability of the arguer’s conclusion, the author must provide more information about the credibility of the survey. I would also need to know whether the advertisement would attract the male patients to go to see dentists. Only with further evidence provided by the editor can I reconsider the author’s conclusion in a better way.

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70"In any profession—business, politics, education, government—those in power should step down after five years. The surest path to success for any enterprise is revitalization through new leadership."

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The issue is complex and controversial one that it is the surest path to success for any profession to change their leaders every five years. Different people have their respective ways of looking at this issue. In my point of view, considering that there are both advantages and disadvantages changing leader so frequently, our analysis should involve different situations instead of concluding hasty. My view will be greatly strengthened by the following discussion.

Admittedly, new leadership surely benefits for every profession. The reasons are obviously: Firstly, most of the new leaders are the young people with fully passion make the company or institution full of energy, new ideas, and new regulations, which will contribute to the further development of organization. Secondly, periodically changing leadership makes both the leaders and employees work hard. On the one hand, the leaders have the awareness of worrying that their position may be replaced by others if organization cannot have a further development. On the other hand, the employees may see a promising future that they may have an opportunity to be promoted as new leaders. Thirdly, the mechanisms will be sure to avoid the corruption of leaders. Absolute power leads to absolute corruption. The measurement of changing leadership may be a good way for organization because there is little chance for the leaders to aggrandize their own power which will take time.

However, such mechanism of frequently changing leadership has its own flaw. To begin with, the leaders will only care about the immediate interests of organization. They will not consider the future development since they are anxious about being replaced if they cannot get any achievement in their terms. In addition, the news leaders may not prepare for taking the charge of the institution. To well manage the whole organization, one would be expected to be sophisticated, visionary, and enterprising which the new leaders may lack of. What’s more, the some leadership in the organization needs to be stable such as academic authorities. Because of their contributions, these experienced and professional authorities are earned to be the leadership in the academic areas. Such stable leadership is not only the honors for the academic authorities but also make sure they will devote themselves to pursuit great achievements in the academic areas.

Therefore, we can see that whether changing leadership in every five years depends on different situations. In general, but not necessary, for the for-profit organizations we’d better to take the measure periodically, while for the non-profit organizations we’d better to make the leadership as long as stable. But the exact frequency say every five years is too complicated to be generalized. Any board of organizations is responsible to make their own decisions. Although, there are still risks for changing or not changing leadership frequently and cannot make sure it is good for the organization, we can introduce supplementary mechanisms because the leader may not be the most important factor contributes to the development of organization. For instance, introducing the advanced technology, streamlining organizations themselves, and improving professional skills of employees could also help the organizations to be profitable or promising.

To sum up, it is difficult for us to make a general statement that changing leadership periodically, say every five years, will surely benefits institutions considering the mechanisms have both advantages and disadvantages. Plus, there are still other measurements to contribute to the development of organization.

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The issue is complex and controversial one that it is（这句语法没看懂啊） the surest path to success for any profession to change their leaders every five years. Different people have their respective ways of looking at this issue. In my point of view, considering that there are both advantages and disadvantages changing leader so frequently, our analysis should involve different situations instead of concluding hasty（该用adv）. My view will be greatly strengthened by the following discussion. 紫色部分是rater找你主题句的地方，这里是否应该把你的中心观点给完全表达出来呢？

Admittedly, new leadership surely benefits for every profession. The reasons are obviously: Firstly, most of the new leaders are the young people with fully passion make the company or institution full of energy, new ideas, and new regulations, which will contribute to the further development of organization. Secondly, periodically changing leadership makes both the leaders and employees work hard. On the one hand, the leaders have the awareness of worrying that their position may be replaced by others if organization cannot have a further development. On the other hand, the employees may see a promising future that they may have an opportunity to be promoted as new leaders. Thirdly, the mechanisms will be sure to avoid the corruption of leaders. Absolute power leads to absolute corruption.（这个是英文原句吗？是的话，就用得很牛） The measurement of changing leadership may be a good way for organization because there is little chance for the leaders to aggrandize their own power which will take time.

However, such mechanism of frequently changing leadership has its own flaws. To begin with, the leaders will only care about the immediate interests of organization. They will not consider the future development since they are anxious about being replaced if they cannot get any achievement in their terms. In addition, the news leaders may not prepare for taking the charge of the institution. To well manage the whole organization, one would be expected to be sophisticated, visionary, and enterprising which the new leaders may lack of. What’s more, the some leadership in the organization needs to be stable such as academic authorities. Because of their contributions, these experienced and professional authorities are earned to be the leadership in the academic areas. Such stable leadership is not only the honors for the academic authorities but also make sure they will devote themselves to pursuit great achievements in the academic areas.

Therefore, we can see that whether changing leadership in every five years depends on different situations. (TOPIC SENTENCE 是否有些过于笼统呢？)In general, but not necessary, for the for-profit organizations we’d（grel里最好不要用简写） better to take the measure periodically, while for the non-profit organizations we’d better to make the leadership as long as stable. But the exact frequency say every five years is（一句话两个动词？） too complicated to be generalized. Any board of organizations is responsible to make their own decisions. Although, there are still risks for changing or not changing leadership frequently and cannot make sure it is good for the organization, we can introduce supplementary mechanisms because the leader may not be the most important factor contributes to the development of organization. For instance, introducing the advanced technology, streamlining organizations themselves, and improving professional skills of employees could also help the organizations to be profitable or promising.

To sum up, it is difficult for us to make a general statement that changing leadership periodically, say every five years, will surely benefits institutions considering the mechanisms have both advantages and disadvantages. Plus, there are still other measurements to contribute to the development of organization.

文章整体框架已经出来了，你的优点我就不一一列举得，但是我认为你需要注意细节，比如说注意主题句的写法，定冠词的用法之类的。如果对这些细节有一个提高的话，文章一定会有所进步。

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TOPIC: ARGUMENT14 - The following appearedin a memo from the owner of Green Thumb Gardening Center, a small businessserving a suburban town.

"There is evidence that consumers arebecoming more and more interested in growing their own vegetables. A nationalsurvey conducted last month indicated that many consumers were dissatisfiedwith the quality of fresh vegetables available in supermarkets. And locally,the gardening magazine Great Gardens has sold out at the Village News standthree months in a row. Thus, we at Green Thumb Gardening Center can increaseour profits by greatly expanding the variety of vegetable seeds we stock forgardeners this coming spring."
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To begin with, by relying on the nationalsurvey concerning consumers' satisfaction with the quality of vegetables insupermarket, the author falsely infers that the results of this nationwidesurvey can well apply to this specific suburban town. Yet the author providesno evidence to substantiate this assumption. It is entirely possible that thelocal supermarket provides high quality fresh vegetables, and residents aregenerally satisfied with it. Unless the author convinces me that this scenario isunlikely, the conclusion based on this survey is simply unjustified.

The argument is also flawed in that eventhough consumers do not satisfy with vegetables available in supermarkets, thisdoes not necessarily indicates that they will grow vegetables by themselves.Perhaps there are other vegetable stores that deals in high quality freshvegetables that could satisfy consumers; or perhaps although they do not likevegetables available in supermarket, they would continue to buy them,concerning convenience and their lack of facilities.

Additionally, the great sales of GG inVillage News stand dose not mean vegetable growing will be popular amongresidents. For one thing, the sales in only one stand cannot represent itspopularity in this town, and perhaps there are other news stands that have poorsales of this magazine, since the author dose not prove that this is the onlystand in the town; or perhaps this stand reduced the storage of this magazine,and thus even though GG was sold out here, the really amount of this magazinesold was small. Equally possibly that GG has increased its quality recently, orreduced the price, and thus has become more appealing to customers; and evenpossible is that GG actually contain nothing about vegetable-growing at all.

Finally, the author unfairly assumes thatthe suggestion is both sufficient and necessary in increasing profits. Even ifpeople are more interested in growing vegetables, yet the author fails to provethat this popularity is likely to continue in the future, or even to thiscoming spring. Furthermore, simply expanding the variety of vegetable seeds maynot be effective, and maybe people are interested in growing some certainvegetables rather than cultivating a large variety of them. If these are thecases, then the author's suggestion will bring not at all bring profits to thiscompany.

As it stands, this argument is not wellreasoned. To make it logically acceptable, the author should further prove thatthis national survey can well apply to the town where GTGC has its market, andthat people really have the intention to grow their own vegetables. To betterassess this argument, I also need information on whether there are other newsstands in the town, and if this suggestion will be effective.
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TOPIC: ISSUE40 - "Scholars andresearchers should not be concerned with whether their work makes acontribution to the larger society. It is more important that they pursue theirindividual interests, however unusual or idiosyncratic those interests may seem."
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Intoday's society, scholars and researchers play an important role in thedevelopment and progress. Their work directly impulse and decide the directionof our society. The speaker asserts that they should not be concerned  with whether their work makes comtribution tothe large society, but whether they pursue their individual interests, nomatter however unusual or idiosyncratic thos interests might be. However, in myopinion, though interest is one important thing for the study and researchconducted by scholars and researchers , the main goal of their work is tobenefit our large society to keep developing.
  Admittedly, it is important for scholars and researchers to show interests on domain of their study.Once Einstein said:"Interests are the best teachers." , if one cannotbe attracted by his or her study,  it isimpossible for her or him to achieve success. The greatest inventor TomasEdison dovoted all his life to inventions by his great interests. With desireto improve light bulb to give a moderate amount of light and be used for  longer time, he tried sixteen thousand timesbefore the last dicovery of high-resistence carbon- thread filament. Withoutsuch great interests, one may give up at any time- let alone sixteen thousandtimes. Also, without such interests, Faraday's electromagnetic induction whichcost him eleven years would not be made; without such interests,  the mathmatics Fermet's Last Theorem wouldnot be solved by Anndrew Wiles since he spent all his life in Princton University  just because to solve the Theorem is a dreamfrom his childhood. In short, if one is asked to finish the task which he orshe is not interested in, it is quite a sheer waste of time instead of aneffective work.
   However, interests cannot be abused and must stay inside the bottom lineof ethics and morality. It is true that a scientist can gain great successunder individual's interests, but excessive interests that even diobey moraland ethical standards would become disasters. On the  one hand, some researches that cause ethicalproblems would bring chaos to human society. Take stem cell into consideration.Many people are against for the reason that it provide possibility to producechildren exactly genetically same as the one who "devote"  and the two person share the same genes thatcannot be distinguished by current technology . On the other hand, althoughsome researches have good aspects, misuse of them under individual's interests,would lead the world into calamities. Nuclear weapons are so horrible that destroy the entirely planet possible in fewminutes as well as bring catastrophic environmental pollutions. If suchresearches are conducted by scientists who have "unusual andidiosyncratic" interests , the world will be soon into  a piece of debric.
  Still, there are many other goals for scholars and researchers to pursueand the most important one is concerned with the contribution to the wholehuman society. The main purpose of study completed by researchers and scholarsis to provide their results to the society. Hence, it is more important thaninterests which concerns about providing possibility to do better work whildthe  correct  direction of development is concerned withfuture of human society.  Look back toexamples aforementioned. Stem cell also can be used to save patients who suffered deadly disease or other severedisease by transplanting tissues or organs grown from stem cells. And goodexploit of nuclear under control to generate power can greatly release thecrisis of energy in today's world. Accordingly, if we pursue the contributin tothe development of society, the rearches would be more beneficial to us.
   Tosum up, though interest is an important factor in scholars and researchers'work  since it brings more enthusiasm andpassion for their study, yet it cannot be concluded as the most important onein guiding the direction of research. By concerning comprehensive benefit ofcontribution to the larger society, scholars and researchers would greatlyimpulse our society's progress and achieve better development.
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TOPIC: ISSUE208 - "The way people look, dress, and act reveals their attitudes and interests. You can tell much about a society's ideas and values by observing the appearance and behavior of its people."
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By observing people's behavior, we can, to some extent, tell something about one's value (某人的价值吗？是不是有点中国式？价值取向会不会好点？). Since individual is the basic component of society, individual values contribute greatly to social ideas and values.(这个句子放在这是什么逻辑关系？) Although individual behavior, in one way or another, reveals social value, ethical values and ideas cannot be comprehensively manifested merely by observation of individual behavior.(TS前面两句话不知道跟TS有什么逻辑关系还是开门见山清楚明了的好)


As individual behavior reveals one’s interest, it is indubitable that we can draw some conclusion about one's value at shallow level (这个词组真就是这么表达的吗？). In other words, one's appearance and behavior, to some extent, reveal his basic values and ideas.(TS为什么不一下说明白 还要other words一下) For instance, we can hardly regard a sloven (拼写错误？) as someone who is highly concerned with leading a healthy life, in which case he may be someone who pays little attention to the quality of his life as well as his appearance.(没有看懂 主要不知你sloven是什么) What is more, those who speaking loudly in the public places can hardly be regarded as someone who pay attention to public welfare.(你不这么说别人也不会这么以为啊？在公共场合说话的人就是关心公众利益的人？这个例子不恰当) His insolent behavior, in all of its manifestation, tells a lot about his ideas about comity. Therefore, by observation of individual behaviors and appearance can we draw some conclusion about one's values and ideas.(这一段的举例没有什么说服力 逻辑有点问题)

Since individual is the basic and consequential component of society, individual values and ideas greatly determine social value, in which case observation of individual behavior and appearance can reveal social values. For one thing, social character can be observed by generalizing apparent similarity in people's behavior and appearance. (具体内容怎么不展开了？？) For another, differences between behaviors evaluate the diversity of social values and ideas. Take this case (指代不明) as an example. In 1970s, Chinese prefer clothes in blue and green, which, to say nothing of the limit (是不是很中国式呢) cast by economic climate at that time, reveals that people prefer being a part of a whole group rather than being a distinct individual. For that matter, it is not so difficult for us to see that society at that time valued similarity between people rather than individual personality. Comparing with people's preference over clothing, Chinese, nowadays, prefer diverse kinds of clothes, which greatly manifests diversity in social values. Someone may prefer conservative clothing whereas others prefer fashion ones. Thus, there is no denying that we can draw some decisive conclusion about some social values and ideas by observation of individual appearance and behavior.(例子可以就是部分描述有点中国式严重)

However, as individual behavior is also affected by other factors, hardly can we draw any comprehensive conclusion about social values and ideas. In other words, some other factors, such as limited cast by economics and politics, considerably contribute to individual behavior, which leads to the possibility that individual behavior and appearance cannot be a (an) effective indicator of(are not fully consistent with) individual values and thereby social values.( other words好长啊为什么不选择直接说清楚明白呢毕竟是TS 绕大弯子凑字数吗？) Let us take the example I have discussed above. When we take economics limits and politics limits cast by authority in China into consideration, it is prominent that obsolete industry, which can only provide clothing in blue or green, and coercion cast by authority, which force people to behave according to the requirement, were also responsible for the similarity in people's behavior and appearance. (这句好长结构看着很乱) Thus, without eliminating these possible factors which considerably limit, even control, individual behavior, what we got from merely observation is far from comprehensive and conclusive conclusion about social values and ideas.


In sum, as individual values and ideas greatly contribute to his behavior and appearance, individual behavior can be a consequential indicator of individual values and social values as well. However, the comprehensive and conclusive measure of social values and ideas lies in not only the observation of individual behavior and appearance but also lies in analysis about other factors which influences individual behaviors