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Ocean~SprayUID: 2847693

TOPIC: ISSUE184 - "It is a grave mistake to theorize before one has data."
WORDS: 415
TIME: 00:45:00
DATE: 2010-7-12 20:43:38

In general I concede to the contention that to theorize before one has data is a grave mistake. With the advanced technology and wide-spread use of statistics, data play a more and more important role in the society.
What contributes to the gaining popularity of data first is that data usually derive from a large amount of similar facts, which makes the data representative of the truth behind the surface thus people tend to rely on data. In the field of mass media, professional news reporter convince us with various data, including "national favorite basketball player"-data from fans and critics; or "the disaster will not strike the province"-data from experts and professions. Those information with accurate data are more supportive and convincing mostly because of the resource it come from-facts. Facts, compared with casual hearsay and subjective judgments, are definitely more convincing. Necessary data make people theorize more objective and justifiable.
Another significant factor making the data fundamental to theories is that provided proper data people are able to analyze，compare and discover the deep discipline in order to theorize. Otherwise, the conclusions and theories are so superficial and ephemeral that can withhold little attacks. In the field of science and technology, scholars and scientists have to conduct a series of cogent researches and experiments before they come to any conclusion. As we all know, ideas can only be called conclusions and theories with sufficient evidences and data, otherwise they are merely assumptions like raw materials.
However, in some very special condition, it may not be a grave mistake to theorize before one has data. For example, the government wants to persuade the residents to follow some of the policies in order to achieve a tough goal. In that case, to claim the theories from data may be too late or may be too discouraged for the residents to follow, so government tends to distribute some news and theories that they wish to be accepted by the citizens. If the morale still exists, the government leaders have time and opportunity to union their people thus go through the hard period. As a result, theories play a role of active inspiration rather than intermedium of truth.
In sum, to theorize before one has data is necessary, when objectiveness comes in the first place, such as in the field of science and technology. Yet when targets are more complicated and are involved with more subjective efforts, to theorize before one has data is forgivable and inevitable.

JonathanmmUID: 2738719

我喜欢评空白贴。

文章第二段写的不错，其余的都是在凑字数。
反面例子举例那不是一般的惊世骇俗。
真正合适的反面例子lz还需多想想。

heartleadingUID: 2850897

In general I concede to the contention that to theorize before one has data is a grave mistake. With the advanced technology and wide-spread use of statistics, data plays a more and more important role in the society.

What contributes to the gaining popularity of data first is that data usually derive from a large amount of similar(加similar这个限定后反而觉得意思涣散了) facts, which makes the data representative of the truth behind the surface thus people tending( thus 词性adv.) to rely on data. In the field of mass media, professional news reporter convince us with (convince of) various data, including "national favorite basketball player"-data from fans and critics; or "the disaster will not strike the province"-data from experts and professions. Those（That）(information 不可数) information with accurate data are(is) more supportive and convincing mostly because of the resource it come from-facts. Facts, compared with casual hearsay and subjective judgments, are definitely more convincing(acceptable 避免与之前的supportive and convincing 中的convincing重复). Necessary(这段没有对必要与不必要展开论述 necessary 可删,以用力总结本段) data make people(leads to:段首句已用make，尽量避免重复) theorize more objective and justifiable.(adj.àadv. adv.修饰v.)

Another significant factor,(加’,’ 使句子长短交错)making the data fundamental to theories, is that provided proper data people (交换位置或另起一句加逗号)are able to analyze，compare and discover the deep discipline in order to theorize. Otherwise, the conclusions and theories are so superficial and ephemeral that can withhold little attacks. In the field(area 避免重复使用field) of science and technology, scholars and scientists have to conduct a series of cogent researches and experiments before they come to any conclusion. As we all know, ideas can only be called conclusions and theories with sufficient evidences and data, otherwise they are merely assumptions like raw materials.(otherwise 为adv. 此句需独立成句)(或As we all know, without sufficient evidences and data, ideas just can be called assumptions like raw materials instead of theories. )

However, in some very special condition, it may not be a grave mistake to theorize before one has data.(可以考虑用art等无数据例子做反例；或者考虑此段以 过度的data的坏处 立意) For example, the government wants to persuade the residents to follow some of the policies in order to achieve a tough goal. In that case, to claim the theories from data may be too late or may be too discouraged for the residents to follow, so government tends to distribute some news and theories that they wish to be accepted by the citizens. If the morale still exists, the government leaders have time and opportunity to union their people thus go through the hard period. As a result, theories (to theorize before one has data) play a role of active inspiration rather than intermedium of truth ( a grave mistake).(以此总结本段)

In sum, to theorize before one has data is necessary, when objectiveness comes in the first place, such as in the field(realm避免重复使用field) of science and technology. Yet when targets are more complicated and are involved with more subjective efforts, to theorize before one has data is forgivable and inevitable.
尽量避免重复用词
扣题时再精准些
有误解文章用意的地方还请见谅。
文章2，3段写得不错

一起加油！