darkathrun(法律文氓)的进军美利坚作文帖

darkathrunUID: 2813505

同学们我错了。。。



Date: 29/07/2010


Topic: （09.01.23 NA） Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Young people should try several different jobs before they take a long term career.


Taking what concerns me into consideration, I firmly agree with the notion that young people should try several different jobs before they take a long term career. The following statements will account for this.
First and foremost, only after trying several different jobs can a person locate himself in the society accurately. Admittedly, a person may have difficulty in finding what he’s really eager to, and the first job is what he concerns as the first step of practice, working as a probe to detect what is the apple in the eye to him. Nowadays has witnessed an unprecedented amount of part-time workers doing tiring and dislikable job for the sake of making ends meet with an ambition to establish an empire for themselves. Taking Bill Clinton as an example, once a worker at gasoline station while never considering himself a worker for the entire life, he took courses in school which helped him go to Yale and firmly became a counsel, which contributed a lot to his reaching the peak of his career, the job as the president of the United States.
Apart from the considering of oneself locating, one has to accumulate working experience through doing one’s job, and change could bring one various opportunity to exercise oneself from adapting to differentiating situations and circumstances, enable people pursue one’s own goal with tenacity and perseverance. Besides, the more jobs a person takes, the more likely the person will be a higher paid person due to the background of different experience.
Moreover, the financial crisis should be taken into consideration. Due to the subprime crisis’s side effect, the global economic has been stuck ever since 2002, which leads to the graduates’ unwilling acceptance of a lower-paid or an unfair job. Regarding to this kind of example, the people will with no doubt seek for another job which is more suitable to them.
Thus, it can conclude that, young people should try several different jobs before they take a long term career. The following statements will account for this. Though sticking to one single job in one’s entire life can earn oneself good remarks as loyalty, changing is always beneficial to people.

xqsissyUID: 2812149

改好了！

Taking whatconcerns me into consideration, I firmly agree with the notion that youngpeople should try several different jobs before they take a long term career.The following statements will account for this.
First and foremost,only after trying several different jobs can a person locate himself in the societyaccurately. Admittedly, a person may have difficulty in finding what he’sreally eager to, and the first job is what he concerns as the first step of practice,working as a probe to detect what is the apple in the eye to him. Nowadays has witnessed an unprecedented amount ofpart-time workers doing tiring and dislikable job for the sake of making endsmeet with an ambition to establish an empire for themselves. Taking BillClinton as an example, once a worker at gasoline station while never consideringhimself a worker for the entire life, he took courses in school which helpedhim go to Yale and firmly became a counsel, which contributed a lot to hisreaching the peak of his career, the job as the president of the United States.
Apart from theconsidering of oneself locating, one has to accumulate working experiencethrough doing one’s job, and change could bring one various opportunity toexercise oneself from adapting to differentiating situations and circumstances,enable people pursue one’s own goal with tenacity and perseverance. Besides,the more jobs a person takes, the more likely the person will be a higher paidperson due to the background of different experience.
Moreover, thefinancial crisis should be taken into consideration. Due to the subprime crisis’sside effect, the global economic has been stuck ever since 2002, which leads tothe graduates’ unwilling acceptance of a lower-paid or an unfair job. Regardingto this kind of example, the people will with no doubt seek for another job whichis more suitable to them.
Thus,it can conclude that, young people shouldtry several different jobs before they take a long term career. The following statements will account for this. (重复说了，应该删去吧) Though sticking to one single job in one’s entirelife can earn oneself good remarks as loyalty, changing is always beneficial topeople.

作者写的很好哦。
有很多词语的句子用的很地道。水平很高！
我都看不出问题，例子举的别具一格！
结尾的最后一句很经典！！
领教了！

16# darkathrun

darkathrunUID: 2813505

17# xqsissy 恩好的，晚上改好传上去给你

sosodiuUID: 2731702

改好了~~哈哈 迟到组~~~~~~~~~

darkathrunUID: 2813505

19# sosodiu 谢谢你了~话说你的作文贴我只找到挺久前的。。有链接么

darkathrunUID: 2813505

Date 31/07/2010

Topic: (09.02.21 NA) Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Newspapers and magazines are the best ways to learn about a foreign

I totally disagree with the claim that newspapers and magazines are the best ways to learn about a foreign. As a matter of fact, nowadays has witnessed an unprecedented innovation of science, which has completely changed the way we communicate, declaring that the era of newspapers and magazines has far gone with the replacement of new media, using electronic facilities such as TV and computers, which, I firmly believe, is the best way to capture information, including the multi-knowledge about a foreign. While on the other hand, taking what concerns me into consideration, I firmly hold the idea that newspapers and magazines have insurmountable shortages.
First and foremost, compared to new media, the fresh news loaded on newspapers and magazines will be unavoidably lagged. Considering the time necessarily consumed in interviewing, composing and printing, what a foreign represents on newspapers and magazines may be a days-before foreign, or even a years-before one. On the contrary, the new media ensures us instant reports via new technology, keeping us accompany with what happens right now in the foreign.
Apart from this, the form of representing a foreign is what counts as well. What newspapers and magazines represent is regretfully merely composed of images and essays, lack of descriptions from every aspects. Differentiating from newspapers and magazines, new media create an entire digital world for viewers with various means to represent. What you have to do is to name it, and technology will ensure you get it. For example, when we are eager to having a multi-knowledge of Britain history, which one will do you more benefit, reading unsystematically organized news on newspapers and magazines, or watching a BBC video? With no doubt we will choose videos. Only in this way can we have a better understanding of the foreign, which may be totally a mystery to us.
Thus, it can conclude that newspaper and magazines are no longer the best way to learn about a foreign country. Perhaps several among us regard new media as fussy and quite a bad way to communicate due to its difficulty to control news which is unconfirmed and its potential to cause uneasiness and turmoil, especially when it is in a foreign. We have to acknowledge that new media have shortages as well as newspapers and magazines, but this can be overcome, and the application of new media will no doubt be beneficial to us.

againproUID: 2723437

很幸运，又见范文。无论文字用法还是思路都很棒。

darkathrunUID: 2813505

22# againpro 多谢批改了。
第二处我自己没想到影射的问题，本来是想到未经证实的消息过于泛滥的传播会引发社会动乱，还是多谢你的提醒了

fanfan1247UID: 2591669

修改好啦~~~
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是文氓  我晕~~~~~~

darkathrunUID: 2813505

修改好啦~~~
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是文氓  我晕~~~~~~
fanfan1247 发表于 2010-8-1 18:01

好的，多谢你了~~~
你的我晚上发上去给你，现在我要先出门下

darkathrunUID: 2813505

Date 03/08/10
09.02.27NA
TOPIC: & V, m1 y. n- u7 @& qDo you agree or disagree with the following statement? A job with more vacation time but a low salary is better than a job with a high salary but less vacation time.
Taking what concerns me into consideration, I firmly hold the idea that a job with more vacation time but a relatively low salary is better than a job with a high salary but less vacation.

First and foremost, payment doesn’t mean everything in an employment. As a matter of fact, nowadays has witnessed an unprecedented zeal for finance-related employment among the graduates, most of who seek for a relatively high salary so desperately that they will never hesitate to sacrifice leisure and recreation. However, what they get has no comparativeness to what they’ve lost. As is known to us, leisure is a significant factor contributing to the improvement of health, without which people will never achieve any goals, and less vacation time leads to a weakened body, which can never be healed by the increasing sum of money.

Apart from this, vacation time has much more significance to our family. Perchance someone will regard money as the initial phrase to the family, holding the belief that money is what counts for its usage in living and traveling that covers everything throughout one’s life, however, sentiment is what they leave behind. On one hand, vacation time act as a chance for family to enjoy themselves all together without any interruption from work, which ensures the family tie close, functioning as the glue of the family. On the other hand, vacation time is of great importance for kids to learn. The differentiating landscape helps kids to build up a primary understanding of geography as well as broadens their horizon, which benefits kids in a long-term way that the kids can never receive from their all day long watching TV or playing computer experience.
Thus, it can conclude that a job with more vacation time but a relatively low salary is better than a job with a high salary but less vacation. Money can ensure several aspects and provide a richer life, as my standpoint is, which will never have the same significance of the precious time consumed in vacation and leisure.

zungeUID: 2660136

Taking what concerns me into consideration, I firmly hold the idea that a job with more vacation time but a relatively low salary is better than a job with a high salary but less vacation.

First and foremost, payment doesn’t mean everything in an employment. As a matter of fact, nowadays has witnessed an unprecedented zeal for finance-related employment among the graduates, most of who seek for a relatively high salary so desperately that they will never hesitate to sacrifice leisure and recreation. However, what they get has no comparativeness to what they’ve lost. As is known to us, leisure is a significant factor contributing to the improvement of health, without which people will never achieve any goals, and less vacation time leads to a weakened body, which can never be healed by the increasing sum of money.- X" Y8() K% v. z" L( a5 i+ x$ S
(没有读懂这一段的说理)

Apart from this, vacation time has much more significance to our family. Perchance (木有见过这种用法…)someone will regard money as the initial phrase to the family, holding the belief that money is what counts for its usage in living and traveling that covers everything throughout one’s life, however, sentiment is what they leave behind. On one hand, vacation time act as a chance for family to enjoy themselves all together without any interruption from work, which ensures the family tie close, functioning as the glue of the family. On the other hand, vacation time is of great importance for kids to learn. The differentiating(这个词不是这么用的) landscape helps kids to build up a primary understanding of geography as well as broadens their horizon, which benefits kids in a long-term way that the kids can never receive from their all day long watching TV or playing computer experience. ! Y" Y8 t5 F% [0 @
Thus, it can conclude(one can conclude) that a job with more vacation time but a relatively low salary is better than a job with a high salary but less vacation. Money can ensure several aspects and provide a richer life, as my standpoint is, which will never have the same significance of the precious time consumed in vacation and leisure.

(There is no any practical example in this essay. And the word usage turns out to be Chinglish. However, sentences are less to be recognized as recited ones, which is encouragable.)

王亚冉UID: 2758328

hi, 你好，你的作文很棒，学习了~
有空去看看我的哈，先谢谢了~

yezi2010UID: 2722638

你好，谢谢你给我作文的修改，晚些我会给你修改，现在有点儿事，抱歉~~~

darkathrunUID: 2813505

Date 05/08/10
09.05.30NA
TOPIC: ' h6 K& E9 f$ `4 eDo you agree or disagree with the following statement? Younger school children (ages five to ten) should be required to study art and music in addition to math, science, history and language.
Taking what concerns me into consideration, I firmly hold the idea that besides math, science, history and language which count for kids’ scholastic aptitude test, younger school children should have the right to study art and music, which are quite crucial to emotional fosterage and future improvement.
First and foremost, music and art are the key factors contributing to kids getting emotional training, which should be the initial phrase to parents, while sarcastically nowadays has witnessed a trend to applying utilitarianism, leaving subjects such as music and arts aside due to its irrelevance to the imminent exams. As a matter of fact, music and art improve children’s ability to feel by conveying various feelings to kids via vibrant sounds or differing colors, which have obvious effect in calming kids down and lightening their face. By learning music and art kids become more smart and sensitive, and they can feel much more than the ordinary kids.
Apart from this, music and art do contribute to the future development of the kids. Once a study shows that a kid who receives music and art study in childhood is more likely to be successful in life. Several reasons listed below accounts for this phenomenon. On one hand, kids adopt the ability to distinguish, which helps a lot for them to pave the way to succeed. One the other hand, with the literature background, it enhances people to consider things in detailed aspects as well as on the overall situation, which is quite significant for kids to find a way to achieve their goals.
Thus, it can conclude that, younger school children should be required to study art and music in addition to math, science, history and language. Though maybe the music and art has never functioned as impulse for a high score in SAT, music and art promote a kid to be a better person by emotional fosterage and future improvement. Math, science, history and language indeed contribute to the handling of survival ability, however, they can never touch the soul level.