issue 11 求改~~

mavismhUID: 2792253

Issue 11
All nations should help support the development of a global university designed to engage students in the process of solving the world’s most persistent social problems

In current world, we have many social problems which are persistent to solve, and the speaker suggest that a global university designed to engage students to solve these problems. However I cannot agree with the speaker in three respects. Demanding all nations to help the development of the global university is infeasible. Addition, the availability of the global university to solve the world’s most persistent social problems deserves a discussion. Moreover, do we really can belive that students can solve the most persistent social problems?

As we know that two kinds of countries exist in this world--the developing ones and the developed ones. In fact, nations in current world have different situations. For example, nations in Africa still troubled by the fundamental problems such as disease. famine，poverty。These nations really need the support from other countries, is it cruel to demand them to support the development of such a university? One forced to strike a balance in how we allocate those resources among competing social objective, thus, it is more reasonable for some nations to use the limited resource to solve immediate problems rather than support a global university which, even if valuable, has a long-term to receive the rewards.

The reason why we called these problems as "the world's most persistent social problems" is that these problems are existed for a long time, regrets as the relics of history. Experienced so many year, these problems still can survive and even troubling not only individuals in their personal life but also the society as a whole. It is obvious that
these problems have a firm fundament which hard to shake. For example, in every minute crimes are happening in some place of the world. However, it is a common sense that the reason of crimes is not a simple one but depends on many elements including civil entanglement，economic problems or even phyical disease, etc. Or consider the environmental pollution, admittedly that the development of technology can ease it at a certain extent, but the fundamental of it is the life style and the industry pollution both need the effort of people all around the world to change the habits and try to make the lest pollution. So it cannot be solved just by the theory or technical skills which students learned in the so-called global university
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Maybe the global university can really teach the students the latest science discovery , the most useful technical skills , the most authentic theories, but the feasibility of students to solve the most persistent problems is still questionable, even it feasible can hardly operate smoothly. What I have to concede is that students who have a lot of creativity, initiatives, charisma can make a difference. However, in the pragmatic respect, youth's inadequacy of experience makes their theories which learned in school weak in practice area. On the other hand, even if the youth have the technical skills but still lack mature. After all, the grown-ups experienced much more social communications than youth, so that when students face the awkward social encounter their way to solve them maybe not satisfies people.

In sum, a global university designed to engage to solve the most persistent problems may make difference, but just make a little contribution to the process of solving problems, and the speaker's suggestion is violets my intuition. Because the infeasibility, and the extreme. The speaker is too certain to simplify the issue that the students from the global university can solve the most persistent problems in the world, even it really does, demanding all nations to support it is hard to operate.

mavismhUID: 2792253

拜托~~ 我现在很没信心， 请高人指点迷津。。

zhangjunzjUID: 2658970

人来了，但不是高人。
刚评论了一篇相同的题目
刚才看那篇也是三个疑问，你也是？不过你们的不一样，还好。
第二段的例子是见过的这个题目中最好的一个。
第三段crime的例子不错for they stem from certain aspects of human nature such as greed and aggression.范文中的句子
第四段中的例子有个漏洞，students就一定是youth吗？students 很可能是从全球选拨的精英在一起强化训练。
最后一段，‘the speaker's suggestion is violets my intuition’。违背你的直觉的都不对吗？虽然我知道这句话是范文上的，但是还是不太妥。最后一句话不是很好。


总之，还不错，论据很好，论点也较为充分，没必要担心什么。其他都不错，继续努力

mavismhUID: 2792253

太谢谢了  真的给我很大帮助 我现在斗志终于又回来了！！ 我会继续改进的 呵呵 范文的句子都被看出来了 看来还是得做些修改~~ 而且我一直都为举不出例子苦恼。。。 呵呵 总之太感谢了！！ 3# zhangjunzj