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09.06.12NA   Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Students should not take part-time jobs while they are studying in universities.


When students are old enough to study in universities, they have the ability to control themselves and know how to arrange their study life. So a part-time job is a staging for their potential fulfilling rather than an obstacle in their education. The saying” experience is the best teacher” is not an old cliché and the part-time jobs are the necessary lessons for students supposed to learn.

Basically, most university students have to take the part-time job to pay the high expense during college life. For instance, if one is willing to buy the reading materials required in each course that can’t borrowed in the library for the lacking, he need money. If one fail in the application of scholarship but his family can’t afford the tution, he need money . if one want to rent a better house without
disturbing or promote the living standard, he need money. So much money that a student could get is just by taking part-time jobs.
On the other hand ,part-time job can motivate students to work hard in their special disciplines. When they know how the future career would be like or how hard the job could be well-done, they tend to develop a more professional approach to their studies. As can be seen in my own case that during the time I work in a drug maker，I found the analysis to deal with the relationship between the costs of production and the experience approach is more important to use a sophisticated theoretical way which is regardless of the cost. So I put my learning emphasis on the integration of my curriculum instead of the trivial details in each course.

In addition, students who seize more opportunities of part-time jobs have more chance to be versatile and mature. Just as the view that John Dewey hold ----the educational system with continued experimentation and vocational training to equip students to solve practical problems is the most promising approach to personal growth. Furthermore, a job may bring students into contact with people from different social backgrounds , which enable the students to have better sense of judgment and the society-thinking way.

So personal experience and common evidence leads me to conclude that the advantages of taking part-time job outweigh the disadvantages .university students should allow themselves to gain chance in society job. It’s good to branch out and have a abundant study life.

woshixiaozUID: 2889514

When students are old enough to study in universities, they have the ability to control themselves and know how to arrange their study life. So a part-time job is a staging for their potential fulfilling rather than an obstacle in their education. The saying” experience is the best teacher” is not an old cliché and the part-time jobs are the necessary lessons for students supposed to learn.6
staging >stage
the necessary > necessary
去 supposed

Basically, most university students have to take the part-time job to pay the high expense during college life. For instance, if one is willing to buy the reading materials required in each course that can’t borrowed in the library for the lacking, he need money. If one fail in the application of scholarship but his family can’t afford the tution, he need money . if one want to rent a better house without disturbing or promote the living standard, he need money. So much money that a student could get is just by taking part-time jobs.
>Say something about how they earn money instead of why they need money.

On the other hand ,part-time job can motivate students to work hard in their special disciplines. When they know how the future career would be like or how hard the job could be well-done, they tend to develop a more professional approach to their studies. As can be seen in my own case that during the time I work in a drug maker，I found the analysis to deal with the relationship between the costs of production and the experience approach is more important to use a sophisticated theoretical way which is regardless of the cost. So I put my learning emphasis on the integration of my curriculum instead of the trivial details in each course.  i9 E6 v) b+ SIn addition, students who seize more opportunities of part-time jobs have more chance to be versatile and mature. Just as the view that John Dewey hold ----theeducational system with continued experimentation and vocational training to equip students to solve practical problems is the most promising approach to personal growth. Furthermore, a job may bring students into contact with people from different social backgrounds , which enable the students to have better sense of judgment and the society-thinking way.
>What's the relationship between different social backgrounds and better sense of judgment?
> You added 2 more contentions in this paragraph, while neither of  them are well discussed, and you get the last conclusion abruptly. If you cold discuss it more specificly in another paragraph, I think it would be better.

So personal experience and common evidence leads me to conclude that the advantages of taking part-time job outweigh the disadvantages .university students should allow themselves to gain chance in society job. It’s good to branch out and have a abundant study life.
>去掉 SO

Personal opinion is for reference only

nishuowosheiUID: 2843451

用词很高档，手法很熟练~加油加油~

wttyuseUID: 2755832

由于9月4日这篇 文章没写完，语塞中，换了一个话题写，恳请指正。谢谢啦
2009.9.19 NA  l
　　Do you agree or disagree with the following statement:
　　It is more important for the government to spend money on art museums and concert halls than on recreational facilities such as swimming pools and playgrounds.

These days , public debates has been going on over whether it’s more important for government to spend money on art museums and concert halls than on recreational facilities. Admittedly, swimming pools or playgrounds can make people relax in the intense work. Government should certainly fulfill the citizen’s demand. However, from the development angle, it’s more vital for government to guide its people to promote cultural and ideological progress.
        Firstly, art museum and concert halls can fulfill the thirsty of our spiritual demand. It is no exaggeration that we now live in an impetuous era or a lost era. Concentrating on the money, the production or the competition, we are walking too far ahead the mind cultivation. Therefore, having a step into museum and concert hall can let us throw away the rational thinking, and have a sense of romantic, or a thinking of history that we can suddenly realize we are not living in a mechanized society but a vivid country.
        What’s more, knowledge and edification from the museum or concert even helps in daily life.  we know that as the minds of material success like floating dust exist everywhere, our knowledge nutriment structure tend to be more and more imbalanced. In that case,  the museum or other art program would play a role of knowledge complement. People can grasp the core spirit of a country from past to present , from rites to rituals, from antiques to handcraft ,from war to peace. Still, through the country history or other culture we can even find the reflection about the current society.
        In conclusion, as we spend whole time facing the statistics and machines, we need more things about art in the right side of the brain type of thinking, or mysticism. However, the art museum and concert halls are less found nowadays,If the government must choose one to spend money on, I doubtless insist the former. But the rest for the recreational facilities certainly should be all right.

wttyuseUID: 2755832

2009.8.7 NA  是否同意 parents help determined the future of their children or children allow to make their own choices.. N8 D1 w1 q* @1 d2 |2 R4 b5 [& |

Education is a long-term thing in children’s growing. Thus there comes a question about whether parents help determined the future of their children or allow them to make their own choices. It’s true that parents lead an important role on kids’ life style and a proper decision for children can benefit a lot. However, I tend to agree that children should make choices on their own.
        For one reason, most parents are green hands at cultivating a child and they just have a history of their own growth in the age passed. As times are changing, what they deem correct or proper might turn out to be a mistake in their children's era or vice versa. John F. Kennedy once says: ”A child miseducated is a child lost.” if the couple lead a wrong way for their children, they even can’t compensate the loss for unilateral decisions despite drawing lessons from experience of their own. I believe there are no parents can claim that they know how the future would be like and which is the best way the children should go along.
         Viewed from the children’s perspective, they should allow themselves to make choice independently. If an individual always takes sanctuary in his parents, he is unable to rise to the occasion which is new or hard to him. Once he relies on parents’ decision, he would even fail to recognize what he wants, much less find his niche. Also, Just imitate Kennedy’s words: “a child whose future is determined by parents is a child lost.” when a young person works hard to climb high, sacrifices dreams but just fulfill other’s goal in the end, how he or she would be considered? Be more mature, or just get lost?
         Altogether, I insist that parents should allow their children to make own decisions. Though the kids will suffer more, they will not be a passive receptacles but an individual with independent character.

xiaotuffUID: 2685811

9月7号的作业我在你楼下，就顺道看了下，你写的很好哎~~~

wttyuseUID: 2755832

7# xiaotuff 谢谢~~有什么建议的话，请多指教哦~~我觉得自己还蛮缺例子的

naturekdUID: 2702801

Educationis a long-term thing in children’s growing. Thus there comes a question aboutwhether parents help determined(help to determine) the future of their childrenor allow them to make their own choices. It’s true that parents lead animportant role on kids’ life style and a proper decision for children canbenefit a lot. However, I tend to agree that children should make choices ontheir own.
        For one reason, most parents are green hands atcultivating a child and they just have a history of their own growth in the agepassed. As times are changing, what they deem correct or proper might turn outto be a mistake in their children's era or vice versa. John F. Kennedy once says(said):”A child miseducated is a child lost.” if the couple lead a wrong way for theirchildren, they even can’t compensate the loss for unilateral decisions despitedrawing lessons from experience of their own. I believe there are no parentscan claim that they know how the future would be like and which is the best waythe children should go along.( O  S/ \8 [# i6 Y
         Viewed from the children’s perspective,they should allow themselves to make choice independently. If an individualalways takes sanctuary in his parents, he is unable to rise to the occasionwhich is new or hard to him. Once he relies on parents’ decision, he would evenfail to recognize what he wants, much less find his niche. Also, just imitateKennedy’s words: “a child whose future is determined by parents is a childlost.” when a young person works hard to climb high, sacrifices dreams but justfulfill(fulfills) other’s goal in the end, how he or she would be considered?Be more mature, or just get lost?
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         Altogether, I insist that parents shouldallow their children to make own decisions. Though the kids will suffer more,they will not be a passive receptacles(receptacle) but an individual withindependent character.

词汇很丰富，学到不少词。

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文章真的写的很精彩，鸡蛋挑点骨头吧，词汇面换多，句式也多，只是有些词组像go on over, mind of material success,不知道是原创还是固定有的用法~思路逻辑都很清楚，论证的也很充分，继续加油，祝你考试取得好成绩！~~

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[S5]为什么进入博物馆会让我们抛除理智的想法呢？这个逻辑有点不同，可以再探讨一下。Therefore是连词，只能接句子，换成thus



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5# wttyuse

primrose0519UID: 2887617

我用word改的，要是看不清楚，我可以把word传给你 5# wttyuse

zsy2912371UID: 2852365

先占个座 改的晚了 见谅~明天上午奉上批改~

wttyuseUID: 2755832

9月11日交
由于今日作业话题在四楼已经写过，故写了另一个话题，恳请狠狠拍，还有如果有时间的话麻烦也帮忙改改4楼的作文咯，我万分谢谢哩~~
2009.3.14
　　Do you agree or disagree with the following statement:
　　It is better to spend money on traveling and vacation than to save money for the future.
　　(Money)

Some reports conducted by journalists reveal that the more money people have gained, the more likely we are going on traveling and vacation. So significant is the issue that it draws increasing attention. Some doubt that spending money on the short-term entertainment, which will soon fades away, is a lack of reason . however, contrary to the above view is my heart felt agreement with the idea that money on vacation is better than saving for future.
         Firstly, traveling is not reluctant to increase our knowledge. The old saying:” knowledge is wealth.” shows that such expending doesn’t mean wasting. When we get away from the daily grind, not only do we release stress, but also expand our vision, which is not equal to the feeling of just saving much money. What’s more ,it’s by absorbing the nutrients of different cultures that can we be outstanding.
        In addition, as well as being more learned, one who like traveling can be more sociable. Apparently, every man takes the limits of his own field of vision. Thus the communication, especially in a journey can be multiplex and amazing. Just as Circero says: ” friendship makes prosperity more shining and lessens adversity by dividing and sharing it.” For that reason, why don’t we choose to equip ourselves with various ideas in a meaningful trip that make the money increase the value?
        To make up, people who are willing to save money give the reason that they can have insurance in future. They may have a point there, but financially, it can’t use the money to the full because of the Depreciation as time goes by.
        Overall, vacation consumption is a profit-making rather than a waste of money. We should allow ourselves to “make an investment”. For further development, saving minority of the money for emergencies and spending majority on the traveling or some other activities that make sense is needed as suggested.

zsy2912371UID: 2852365

13# wttyuse [/
你的9月9的作文咋找不到呢~

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14# zsy2912371
因为9月9日的作文以前写过，就不打上去了，你可以帮我改改6楼的作文啊。好像也是最近的题目，谢谢咯~~！！