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No one could doubt the use of history study, so that human never give up the research on history. Whether history is relevant to our daily life or not, it has two main purposes on society development and individual mature, which includes experiences and lessons. What is more, the study of history has influence on both past and now as well as future.

First of all, the study of history has value on our daily lives. Many of us could conclude that our lives nowadays is very different from what is several years ago. Why? Because numerous inventions, creations, innovations, discoveries, contributions, endeavors has been made to make our life better. These new changes are always come from the past foundations and historical theories. Scientists and specialists think of new inspirations after detailed study on history. We always could hear that new medicines are produced and marketed with some improvement on old one, as a result, new ones are welcomed more warmly by doctors and patients.

Secondly, history study is necessary to help us become mature. From the history celebrities and famous people, we can learn many advantages and disadvantages which may lead us to think over how to make a success. History provides us with many valuable examples and models which tell us being honest, hardworking, curious, brave, bold is likely to success. Newton teaches us keeping broad-minded is useful to find inherent regulation. Fraklin tells us remaining curious is helpful to solve difficult problems. So in base of their experiences and lessons, we could avoid lots of unnecessary attempts in our life and try our best to better this world efficiently.

Thirdly, history is like a mirror which makes us know the philosophy of event development which brings us a large number of information to work, to study and to live. Because we see the great disaster left after wars, so we make every effort to make world peace. Because we know the results of wealth gap, so we are intended to raise employment rate and decrease income differentiation. Because we find the environment becomes worse after industrialization, so we are now trying to protect our once beautiful planet.

In conclusion, studying history bring us so many inspires that we are hoped to search more knowledge from it. Not only daily life but also individual mature can receive benefit from history learning. So we had better engage more in study history and construct our world better.

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Issue103"The study of history has value only to the extent that it is relevant to our daily lives."

No one could doubt the use of history study, so that human never give up the research on history. Whether history is relevant to our daily life or not, it has two main purposes on society development and individual mature, which includes experiences and lessons. What is more, the study of history has influence on both past and now as well as future.
[写的很好，建议加一句来明确表示你的立场]

First of all, the study of history has value on our daily lives. Many of us could conclude that our lives nowadays is very different from what is several years ago. Why? Because numerous inventions, creations, innovations, discoveries, contributions, endeavors[很强大的并列，但是真有必要么？我的想法：1 这些词都很抽象，附加实例更生动；2 inventions, creations, innovations之间的细微区别对论证作用不是很大，没必要挨个写；3 inventions和后面的contributions, endeavors并列在一起不太合适] has been made to make our life better. These new changes are always come from the past foundations and historical theories. Scientists and specialists think of new inspirations after detailed study on history. We always could hear that new medicines are produced and marketed with some improvement on old one, as a result, new ones are welcomed more warmly by doctors and patients.[例子后再小结一句，说明例子是如何支持分论点的，不然不仅显得例子很孤立而且段落结尾太突然]

Secondly, history study is necessary to help us become mature. From the history celebrities and famous people, we can learn many advantages and disadvantages which may lead us to think over how to make a success. History provides us with many valuable examples and models which tell us (that) being honest, hardworking, curious, brave, bold is likely to success. Newton teaches us keeping broad-minded is useful to find inherent regulation. [加点连接词吧，感觉是把例子堆砌在这儿] Fraklin tells us remaining curious is helpful to solve difficult problems. So in base of their experiences and lessons, we could avoid lots of unnecessary attempts in our life and try our best to better this world efficiently.

Thirdly, history is like a mirror which makes us know the philosophy of event development which brings us a large number of information to work, to study and to live. Because we see the great disaster left after wars, so we make every effort to make world peace. Because we know the results of wealth gap, so we are intended to raise employment rate and decrease income differentiation. Because we find the environment becomes worse after industrialization, so we are now trying to protect our once beautiful planet.[3个排比，气场好大，但是它们放在这儿是怎么论证观点的呢？确实有必要费点口舌说明一下]

In conclusion, studying history bring us so many inspires that we are hoped to search more knowledge from it. Not only daily life but also individual mature can receive benefit from history learning. So we had better engage more in study history and construct our world better.

[你的语言非常精致，感觉你在这方面下了很多功夫；题目中既然有only这个词，那是不是该特意提一下呢？不要忽视only的存在嘛；建议看看官方6分范文及ets对它的评价]

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