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发表于 2010-11-23 22:30:50 |显示全部楼层
While the argument is well-described, it is not completely well-analyzed. By citing a study in which two group patients are treated in two ways, by a doctor who specialized in sports medicine and by a general physician, the author concludes that all the patients suffering the muscle strain should take antibiotics as part of treatment. However, a better qualified individual might probe into the issue further, finding the argument suffer several flaws, which renders it not convincing.
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The threshold problem with the argument involves the reliability of the study. There is no evidence that provided about the he number of the two groups of patients. If the number of the patients is so small, such as no more than ten people, that it will lose its statistically significance, it can hardly make any conclusion from such a small sample. In addition, the author omits to inform us that the two group of patients’ health conditions prior to the experiment. Perhaps the first group is much healthier than the second one, they would recover more quickly on matter how they are treated with ; Or perhaps the extent of suffering of the first of group is more slightly than the first group of patients, even without treatment by Dr. Newland, they are able to restore in a short time.


The argument fails to identify other possible alternatives that might be helpful for the quicker recover of the first group of patients from the muscle strain .It is largely possible that the first group have taken some other types of medicine besides antibiotics which are effective in curing muscle strain during the treatment by Dr. Newland. The recover from the disease does not result from antibiotics but other medicines. Such alternatives also might include the fact that because the a doctor specialized in sports medicine, they appear to be more professional compared with a general physician in curing the muscle strain, it would have a psychological effect on the patients, the positive mood might lead to a sooner recover for the first group of patients.


Finally, the author unfairly makes a broader conclusion that all the patients suffering the muscle strain should take antibiotics as part of treatment relying on simply a study. The argument neglect to consider the individual difference of the patients. Maybe there are some people suffering from an allergy to antibiotics, they are not fit to take antibiotics to treat with muscle strain, Or perhaps there are many kinds of muscle strain, such as in the different parts of bodies, antibiotic might be useful to cure a certain kind of muscle strain, such as arm strain, so it is not reasonable to include that all the patients suffering the muscle strain should take antibiotics as treatment. Only after evaluating all the ideas might one agree that all the patients suffering the muscle strain should take antibiotics as part of treatment

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发表于 2010-11-24 19:28:56 |显示全部楼层
修改建议by zhangwanying

ARGUMENT 51修改建议by zhangwanying.doc

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发表于 2010-11-28 19:24:01 |显示全部楼层
本帖最后由 daniexia 于 2010-11-28 21:09 编辑

argument 51by lornazhang 评 daniexia.doc (28.5 KB, 下载次数: 4)

还有两周要考了,加油!
感觉最好能把argument好好修改几篇,然后把argument的提纲都列一下。
Issue的话,提高太难,所以把写过的都好好修改一下,能够列一下高频100的提纲就最好了。

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