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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?

In the busy and crowded world today, we should not expect people to be polite to each other.


The speaker asserts that we should not expect people to be polite to each other in the busy and crowed world today. People may have different opinions on the assertion according to their various experiences. As far as I am concerned, I strongly disagree with the speaker as being polite to each other is very important in daily life.

Admittedly, with the development of the human society, there is a sharp increase in the population and our world seems to be more and more crowded today. We all have the experiences of walking in the crowded street and going to work in a crowded bus. However, it does not mean that it is not necessary for us to be polite to others as the world is getting more crowded.

There is no denying that being polite is one of the most important symbols of human civilization. People in many countries in the world have the custom of being polite to others, especially in the old eastern countries with a long history such as China and so on. Being polite is one of the most important social usages in the society in the ancient time of China. Nowadays, Chinese still regard being polite to each other as a virtue. For a country, being polite to each other is very important in building a harmonious society and a country can develop well only when it has a society in harmony.

On the other hand, contrary to what the speaker insists, it is the fact that our world gets busy and crowded that makes being polite to each other becomes much important than the past. Experience tells us that if the busier and more crowded the world is, the more often conflicts will happen between people because the public resource is limited. Therefore, it is necessary for people to be polite to each other when they live in this crowded world.

In sum, as discussed above, it is very important for people to being polite in this increasing busy and crowded world because being polite is one of the most important symbol of human civilization and being polite to each other can help people get avoid of conflicts and  build a more harmonious society.


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The speaker asserts that we should not expect people to be polite to each other in the busy and crowed world today. People may have different opinions on the assertion according to their various experiences. As far as I am concerned, I strongly disagree with the speaker as being polite to each other is very important in daily life.

Admittedly, with the development of the human society, there is a sharp increase in the population and our world seems to be more and more crowded today.Admittedly,后面应该讲的是诚然，politeness 是很难做到，为什么“不礼貌”情有可原。。而不是诚然，我们的社会的确人口增多，更拥挤更繁忙。因为要讨论的是应该期待“礼貌”和“不礼貌”，社会背景是已知既定无需再做讨论的前提。We all have the experiences of walking in the crowded street and going to work in a crowded bus. However, it does not mean that it is not necessary for us to be polite to others as the world is getting more crowded.

There is no denying that being polite is one of the most important symbols of human civilization. People in many countries in the world have the custom of being polite to others, especially in the old eastern countries with a long history such as China and so on. Being polite is one of the most important social usages in the society in the ancient time of China. Nowadays, Chinese still regard being polite to each other as a virtue. For a country, being polite to each other is very important in building a harmonious society and a country can develop well only when it has a society in harmony.三段论的写法应该是：第一句，礼貌带来和谐社会，第二句，只有和谐社会才能发发展，第三句，所以只有人人都礼貌，社会才能更好发展。 建议再加一句论证才完整。
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On the other hand, contrary to what the speaker insists（speaker好冤枉。。speaker 只是问你同意不同意以下观点，没有Insist什么）, it is the fact that our world gets busy and crowded that makes being polite to each other becomes much important than the past. Experience tells us that if the busier and more crowded the world is, the more often conflicts will happen （ between people because the public resource is limited）due to the limited resources. Therefore, it is necessary for people to be polite to each other when they live in this crowded world.

In sum, as discussed above, it is very important for people to being polite in this increasing busy and crowded world because being polite is one of the most important symbol of human civilization and being polite to each other can help people get avoid of conflicts and  build a (more)删掉，没有比较 harmonious society

首先有个大的印象，独立和综合不一样，没有一个speaker，只是给一个观点让我们阐述。所以，你多处把它说成是一个speaker，并把它作为对立面来反驳，不是很好。.
其次，整个有点空洞，讲了两个段，但是都可以并成一个理由：polite让社会更和谐。两段讲的实际上都是这个。这个理由有点太大了，而且没有很好的例子去展开。
建议，两段并成一段，充分论证“polite让社会更和谐”这个观点。，如，：礼貌能带来怎样的社会，不礼貌这个社会会怎样。要用具体的事例来说服，比如举个例子，在一个人人都很友好的工作环境，工作效率会更高，工作会更有归属感和满足感，倘若所在的学习或者工作环境，人与人之间勾心斗角，粗鲁对待，会对工作和生活都带来负面效应。
另外，再想一个角度，礼貌的好处……
其实观点不用太大的社会角度，小的方面讲的好一样精彩，比如拥挤的社会如果人人都礼貌就不那么拥挤了。举地铁站公交车商场如果有秩序，大家都礼让、排队的话。。。

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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? It is often not a good idea to move to a new city or a new country because you will lose old friends.


The speaker asserts that moving to a new city or new country is often not a good idea because you will lose your old friends. People may have different opinions on the idea according to their various experiences. As far as I am concerned, I disagree with the speaker.


On one hand, moving to a new city or new country does not mean that we will lose our old friends. Admittedly, if you go to live in a new city or new country far away from your friends, you may have fewer opportunities to stay together with our friends. However, with the development of the technology, it is convenient for you to communicate with your friends through many ways. You can use email to your emails to your friends to share your happiness with them, send a present to your friends on their birthday and call your friends anytime and anywhere as you like. All these can help you keep in contact with your old friends and will never lose your friendship easily. A true friendship will not disappear because the distance between the two friends. On the contrary, the long distance may help to make our friendship more cherish. For example, when I received my birthday present from my friends in another city, I cherish it very much and found it very impressive because it meant a lot to me. Therefore, moving to a new city or new country does not mean you will lose your old friends.


On the other thing, moving to a new city or new country is not often a bad thing because there are many other things besides friendship which also play an important role in our daily life. Many people move to a new city or new country for a better job, a better living environment, a better education and so on. For these people, moving to a new city or new country will be a good thing because they get a chance to pursuit a more wonderful life. Even if they lose some of the old friends they had in the past, they may soon meet new friends and set up a deep friendship after some time. Therefore, for some people, moving to a new city or new country may not often be a bad thing as it gives them a new start, a new chance and new friendships with other people.


In sum, as discussed above, it is not often a bad thing for people to move to a new city or new country because they will not lose their old friends and it often gives them a new start, a chance and new friendships with other people.


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The lecture completely refutes the passage because the professor thinks the reasons shown in the passage are questionable and the salvage logging may cause environment damage in the long term.

To begin with, contrary to the belief in the passage that salvage logging can help the forest areas recover from the disaster by removing the dead trees away and providing more space for the new trees, the professor indicates that without the progress of the decomposition of the dead trees, the soil in the forest contain less nutrition, which will have negative effect on the growth of the new tree.

Besides, the professor also challenges the view in the passage that salvage logging can prevent the healthy trees from the damage caused by insects such as spruce bark beetle. He claims that the insects have lived in the forest areas for hundreds of years and no destruction has been caused by them. What is more，the removing of the decaying wood will do a greater damage to the long term health of the forest because there are many birds and other animals besides the insects that use the decaying woods as their habitats.

In addition, the passage says the salvage logging has economic benefits for people, while the professor states the economic benefits are small and will not last for long. Furthermore, the salvage logging may not create additional jobs for local people because the outside experienced workers may be hired to do the work and the jobs provided are temporary.

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The lecture completely refutes the passage as the professor thinks the measures shown in the passage will be unsuccessful because they cannot stop the spread of cane toads and will damage the environment.

To begin with, contrary to the belief in the passage that a national fence will help to blocks the advance of cane toads, the professor claims that the national fence cannot stop the spread of the toads as the young toads and the eggs of toads can travel from one side to the other through the water way such as rivers and streams. Therefore, the measure is not likely to be effective of block the spread of toads.

The professor also challenges the view in the passage that by organizing a campaign among Australian citizens to destroy and capture the toads, the number of this animal will be under control. She points out that during this campaign, many native frogs, especially young frogs may be killed because the untrained volunteers may regard them as toads. If this is the case, the measure will certainly damage the local ecosystem.

In addition, the writer indicates that the disease-causing virus designed by the researchers will harm only the cane toads and has little negative effect on other species. While in the lecture, the professor states that it is highly possible the using of disease-causing virus will cause an environmental disaster by citing the example of an environment damage the America suffered because of the disease-causing virus used in Australia in history.


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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? To achieve successful development of a country, a government should spend more money on young children’s education rather than on universities.

The speaker asserts that in order to achieve successful development of a country, the government should spend more money on young children's education rather than on universities. People may hold different views about the assertion according to their preference. As far as I am concerned, I disagree with the speaker.

Admittedly, the education of the young children is very important because they are the future citizens of the country. After the effective education, the young children will make lots of contribution to our society and be beneficial to our world when they grow up. On the contrary, if the children who are not educated are likely to be criminal and become harmful to our society when they enter the society in the future. Therefore, it is a necessity for the government to spend much money on the young education in order to ensure the children to be well educated.

However, it is unwise for the speaker to claims that the more money should be spent on the young children's education than on universities. There is no denying the education of the universities plays an important role in the development of the country. Nowadays, the competition between countries lies on the development of science and technology. Only when the students in the universities receive a good education can they be competitive after they enter the society and contribute a lot to the development of the science and technology of a country, which will determine the density of a country. In a word, the better the quality of the university education is, the better the country can develop. On the other hand, as many important scientific and technological researches in the universities are highly cost, much more money will be need in the university education than the young children's education. Therefore, a bigger amount of money should be spent on the university in order to ensure the quality of the education of the universities and the progressing of the important researches done in the universities and they are both crucial to the development of the country.

In sum, both the young children's education rather and university education are important for a country's development and it is unwise to say more money should be spent on young children's education rather than on universities. Actually, as discussed above, much more money should be spent on the university in order to ensure the development of the country.



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The lecture completely refutes the passage as the professor thinks the measures shown in the passage will be unsuccessful because they cannot stop the spread of cane toads and will damage the environment.  

To begin with, contrary to the belief in the passage that a national fence will help to blocks（block） the advance of cane toads, the professor claims that the national fence cannot stop the spread of the toads as the young toads and the eggs of toads can travel from one side to the other through the water way( 不知道有没有through the water way 的说法，个人感觉by water好点) such as rivers and streams. Therefore, the measure is not likely to be effective of (to) block the spread of toads.

The professor also challenges the view in the passage that by organizing a campaign among Australian citizens to destroy and capture the toads, the number of this animal will be under control. She points out that during this campaign, many native frogs, especially young frogs may be killed because the untrained volunteers may regard them as toads. If this is the case, the measure will certainly damage the local ecosystem.

In addition, the writer indicates that the disease-causing virus designed by the researchers will harm only the cane toads and has little negative effect on other species. While in the lecture, the professor states that it is highly possible the using of disease-causing virus will cause an environmental disaster by citing the example of an environment damage the America suffered because of the disease-causing virus used in Australia in history.

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