彼岸 argument4

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TOPIC: ARGUMENT4 - The following was posted on an Internet real estate discussion site. "Of the two leading real estate firms in our town-Adams Realty and Fitch Realty-Adams is clearly superior. Adams has 40 real estate agents. In contrast, Fitch has 25, many of whom work only part-time. Moreover, Adams' revenue last year was twice as high as that of Fitch, and included home sales that averaged $168,000, compared to Fitch's $144,000. Homes listed with Adams sell faster as well: ten years ago, I listed my home with Fitch and it took more than four months to sell; last year, when I sold another home, I listed it with Adams, and it took only one month. Thus, if you want to sell your home quickly and at a good price, you should use Adams." WORDS: TIME: 00:30:00 DATE: 2010/12/14 20:29:27 In the letter, the author claims Adams is the better choice if you want to sell your home quickly and at a good price solely based on unsound comparisons and shaky assumption. I will argue about those fallacies as follows. First of all, the author unfairly assumes that quantity of agents and whether they are part-time workers determine quality. However, common sense tells us that it is not the case. Without more information of more details accessing the quality of agents, it is totally possible that although Adams has more agents, agents of Fitch have more experience and ability. What's more, agents in Fitch may deal with their job in limited time because of their higher quality while agents in Adams need all the time to deal with same mount of work. In that case, if the author cannot offer more details considering which is better, he cannot make a conclusion only rely on the number of agents and whether they work part-time. Secondly, even admitting that agents of Adams is better than those of Fitch, the author further assumes that company's revenue and sell price can tell which one is better. However, the total mount cannot tell whether they can sell at a good price while it is possible that Adams deal with much more numbers of trades with more agents, and the average price of home is not as well as Fitch. What's more, the averaged price cannot either predict a better price of your home because they cannot ensure every one is good and of most important, the author does not tell us if they sell same or similar houses. Without more information about the houses, we can also decide that Adams do worse than Fitch at selling houses. Thirdly, the author hastily generalizes Adams can sell home quick solely based on a comparison have almost ten years between. It is clear that so long time gap can generate a difference in the situation which may cause the different results. For example, it is likely that ten years ago home are over supplied, selling a house it quite difficult, while last year houses are in serious demand and many people want to buy a house, leading the situation differ from ten years ago. Without taking time gap into consideration, we cannot figure whether Adams can sell more quickly. To sum up, the author want to persuade us that Adams sell home quick and at a good price, but he commits several mistakes. To strengthen his conclusion, he should further provide information judging the quality of agents and about the selling details. Moreover, he should compare the quickness at the same time.

choupgheadUID: 2969431

TOPIC: ARGUMENT4 - The following was posted on an Internet real estate discussion site. "Of the two leading real estate firms in our town-Adams Realty and Fitch Realty-Adams is clearly superior. Adams has 40 real estate agents. In contrast, Fitch has 25, many of whom work only part-time. Moreover, Adams' revenue last year was twice as high as that of Fitch, and included home sales that averaged $168,000, compared to Fitch's $144,000. Homes listed with Adams sell faster as well: ten years ago, I listed my home with Fitch and it took more than four months to sell; last year, when I sold another home, I listed it with Adams, and it took only one month. Thus, if you want to sell your home quickly and at a good price, you should use Adams." WORDS: TIME: 00:30:00 DATE: 2010/12/14 20:29:27

In the letter, the author claims Adams is the better choice if you want to sell your home quickly and at a good price solely based on unsound comparisons and shaky assumption. I will argue about those fallacies as follows.
First of all, the author unfairly assumes that quantity of agents and whether they are part-time workers determine quality. However, common sense tells us that it is not the case. Without more information of more details（有点重复） accessing the quality of agents, it is totally possible that although Adams has more agents, agents of Fitch have more experience and ability. What's more, agents in Fitch may deal with their job in limited time because of their higher quality while agents in Adams need all the time to deal with same mount（amount） of work. In that case, if the author cannot offer more details considering which is better,(上面刚说完，这种基本上不包含内容的话语能少就少，而且considering which is better修饰的谁呢 感觉有点不通) he cannot make a conclusion only rely（relying） on the number of agents and whether they work part-time.
Secondly, even admitting that agents of Adams is better than those of Fitch, the author further assumes that company's revenue and sell price（这个搭配好像不对劲） can tell which one is better（换一种说法，出现了很多次better）. However, the total mount(?) cannot tell whether they can sell at a good price while it is possible that Adams deal with much more numbers of trades with more agents, and the average price of home is not as well as Fitch.(这里与题目下一句给出的信息矛盾了，举例不当，而且你的意思难道是说有可能平均价格不如F高，这里是承认平均价格了么？那又与下文你攻击平均价格矛盾了) What's more, the averaged（average） price cannot either predict a better price of your home because they cannot ensure every one is good and of most important, the author does not tell us if they sell same or similar houses.(这里举得可能很难有说服力，看起来像凑成的；利润涉及到成本和收入，有可能卖价高成本也高，反而利润不如F等等。。) Without more information about the houses, we can also decide that Adams do worse than Fitch at selling houses.（如果前面论证的详细有力，可以加这种“废话”，否则会更加引起考官的厌恶。）

Thirdly, the author hastily generalizes Adams can sell home quick solely based on a comparison have almost ten years between.（还有一个是去年的） It is clear that so long time gap can generate a difference in the situation which may cause the different results. For example, it is likely that ten years ago home are over supplied, selling a house it quite difficult, while last year houses are in serious demand and many people want to buy a house, leading the situation differ from ten years ago. Without taking time gap into consideration, we cannot figure whether Adams can sell more quickly.（值得注意的是，即便没有时间上的差异，都是同一时间的事件，两个不同的房子也不应该放在一起比较，这里再说明一下逻辑上比较完满）

To sum up, the author want to persuade us that Adams sell home quick and at a good price, but he commits several mistakes. To strengthen his conclusion, he should further provide information judging the quality of agents and about the selling details. Moreover, he should compare the quickness at the same time.
       （在下笔之前把整体逻辑框架理清，可以随机抽题训练这种能力，也可以把每个题目都想好背下来，可以参考的是，即便A比F好也不一定应该选择A，我们卖房子必须通过中介么？）