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本帖最后由 hanhongwei90 于 2010-12-17 23:31 编辑

Issue 208
"The way people look, dress, and act reveals their attitudes and interests. You can tell much about a society's ideas and values by observing the appearance and behavior of its people."
The author asserts that through the appearance and behavior we can make a judgment on the attitude and interests of a people, which I can hardly totally agree with. And what is more, based on the assumption, the author takes it for granted that we can know a lot of a society’ ideas and values through the appearance and behavior of its people, without concerning about the difference of the a person and a society.[persons and societies]
On a certain degree, the appearance and the behavior of a person can reflect his attitudes and interests. As we known, the person who often dress colorful and bright clothes may turn out to be a open and lively person, while a person, usually having dark color clothes on seems to be introverted and somewhat rigid.[这个例子有点牵强，给人以反驳的机会] A stamp-collector may be inclined to get interested in the topic of collecting stamps, as the same way, a Mackel-fan may get so fancied that he listens to Mackel’ songs when walking, eating, and at any other square time. From such characters we can apparently figure out the person’ inter mind.
On the other hand, what we can see is what is like on the surface, which does not equal to the inter thought in the person’ deep heart. People can sometimes lie or
camouflage under certain situation. A person holding a different idea may compromise because his view contradicts with all others’ opinion. A clerk，tough complains about the unappreciated of the arrangement,
may obey the order of his conductor as the one who say no to manager will get fired in his company. The girl may pretend to be happy tough she does like the gift her boyfriend bought for her because she know the gift is full of love of her boyfriend. [这些身边观察的情况很难有说服力啊]So in some cases, the appearance and behavior may cheat us. It is by long-time mutual acquaintance that can we finally known the essence of a thing or a person.
As for the society, it seems to be more complicated because it is consisted of individuals that can hardly be the same. Admittedly, We can acquire some knowledge of its ideas and values through the people’ appearance undoubtly[undoubtedly]. A society encouraging creative ability may witness more people devoted in the new inventions , also a society emphasizing on multicultural atmosphere may inspire his people to go outside the door of the home to broad their minds and involves into international communication and cooperation. The society which view the contribution to human society as the true meaning of life may become the cradle of the such kind of people who count work as first. As the people’ appearance and behavior has connection with the society he lives in, we can, in some respects, tell the opinion and value from the appearance and behavior.
While the people’ appearance and behavior is generated by influence of many factor, apart from the society they live in. Sometimes, by the appearance, it is not sufficient to conclude the whole society’ opinion and value. One apt illustration involves the period of the Second World War. Hitler incited the Germans to believe that the jews[Jews] is the inferiority nations and should be eradicated from the world. So a lots of German regarded that it is justice and their[their] responsibility to kill all the jews, then a large quantity of the jews are slaughtered. In the case, the behavior of the people can not reveal the a real ideas and value of the socity.[society]
All in all, though the statement has some reasonbler[reasonable] points, which can guide us in looking into the inner thoughts and ideas of a person or a society, but a more wise mind should take whole aspects into account.
通篇看下来觉得总是在说例子缺少对题目的分析，而且例子中很零碎没有针对的分析。

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Issue 208
NO7
"The way people look, dress, and act reveals their attitudesand interests. You can tell much about a society's ideas and values byobserving the appearance and behavior of its people."

The author asserts that through the appearance and behavior we canmake a judgment on the attitude and interests of a people, which I can hardlytotally agree with. And what is more, based on the assumption, the author takesit for granted that we can know a lot of a society’ ideas and values throughthe appearance and behavior of its people, without concerning about thedifference of the a person and a society.(对于what is more, 是不是也该给出一个你的态度呢)
On a certain degree, the appearance and the behavior of a personcan reflect his attitudes and interests. As we known, the person who oftendress colorful and bright clothes may turn out to be a (an) open and livelyperson, (标点)while aperson, usually having dark color clothes on seems to be introverted andsomewhat rigid. A stamp-collector may be inclined to get interested in thetopic of collecting stamps, as the same way, a Mackel-fan （我孤陋寡闻，这是什么，我很好奇）may get sofancied that he listens to Mackel’ songs when walking, eating, and at any othersquare time. From such characters we can apparently figure out the person’inter mind.
On the other hand, what we can see is what is like on the surface,which does not equal to the inter thought in the person’ deep heart. People cansometimes lie or camouflage under certain situation. A person holding adifferent idea may compromise because his view contradicts with all others’opinion. A clerk，tough complains about the unappreciated of the arrangement, mayobey the order of his conductor as the one who say no to manager will get firedin his company. The girl may pretend to be happy tough she does like the gifther boyfriend bought for her because she know the gift is
love of her boyfriend. So in some cases, theappearance and behavior may cheat us. It is by long-time mutual acquaintancethat can we finally known the essence of a thing or a person.
As for the society, it seems to be more complicated because it isconsisted of individuals that can hardly be the same. Admittedly, We canacquire some knowledge of its ideas and values through the people’ appearanceundoubtly（undoubtedly）. A societyencouraging creative ability may witness more people devoted in the new inventions,also a society emphasizing on multicultural atmosphere may inspire his peopleto go outside the door of the home to broad their minds and involves intointernational communication and cooperation. The society which view thecontribution to human society as the true meaning of life may become the cradleof the such kind of people who count work as first. As the people’ appearanceand behavior has connection with the society he lives in, we can, in somerespects, tell the opinion and value from the appearance and behavior.
While the people’ appearance and behavior is generated byinfluence of many factor, apart from the society they live in. Sometimes, bythe appearance, it is not sufficient to conclude the whole society’ opinion andvalue. One apt illustration involves the Nazi period. Hitler forced the Germansto believe that the jews is the unwanted nations and should be eradicated fromthe world. So the German regard that it is justice to kill all the jews，
then lotsof the jews are slaughtered. In the case, the behaviorof the people can not reveal the a real ideas and value of the socity.[society]（我觉得这个例子不是很贴切）
All in all, though the statement has some reasonbler[reasonable] points, whichcan guide us in looking into the inner thoughts and ideas of a person or asociety, but a more wise mind should take whole aspects into account.
语言上有很多学习的地方
个别拼写，用词的细节有些问题
文章整体结构上，我觉得侧重点有一点偏向于说个人那个层面的问题
例子的针对性比较差，分析相对较少，读完的最大感觉就是例子很多，对于说明你的问题没有过多的帮助
最后感觉好像没有写完，文章整体找不到一个明确的中心，你只说了你不同意作者的观点，仅此而已。