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发表于 2011-6-7 14:44:10 |只看该作者
Nowadays, movie has become an important way for people to enjoy life. Children like to watch cartoon films like films made by Disney. Teenagers often watch some fantasy movies like Avatar. Old people may like to watch some films related to history such as Pearl Harbor. There are more and more different and creative themes which aim at attracting various needs of people. In my point, I totally disagree with the idea that only movies that can teaching us something about real life are worth watching.

Admittedly, I acknowledge that people can benefit from movies related to daily life. For example, the movie Forrest Gump included many history events. The role Forrest Gump just likes a common person around us, and he overcame all difficulties and finally attained his happy ending. Since this kind of movies are often adapted from real events, it can easily touch people's heart. However, there are also other sorts of movies which are worth watching.

Take cartoon films as the first instance. Cartoon films are popular among children. Although they usually contain many fictional characters, children still love them. These movies aim at entertaining people, so they usually create some characters which don't exist in the real world but have some interesting feature like long ears and colorful eyes. Children like to watch this kind of films due to its creative idea and joyful theme. They can be relaxed and feel happy by watching cartoon programs. Besides, since cartoon movies are commonly designed for children, the designers also aim at teaching children some ethic laws. Like the famous cartoon film Mickey Mouse, it can teach little children how to keep well with friends, how to be a good friend and so on. Despite the themes of cartoon films are far away from our real life, they are still worth watching.

Science fiction movies are also worth watching, since they allow us to think of new ideas. For instance, many movies imagine there are really ET exists, such as the movie E.T, which make people feel exciting. Because of the development of science and technology, it is not impossible that these things happen. So many scenarists fancy how things will go if these things really happen. For example, The Day After Tomorrow, it depicts the scenery when the earth is destroyed. After watching it, audiences will begin to consider what cause the bad endtragedy是不是能好点?) and what we should do to avoid all these things. These movies not only broaden our mind, but also let us to think about something which may happen in the future.

To sum up, it is too absolute to claim only movies which teach us something about real life are worth watching. There are also other kinds of movies are equally worth watching.

让步写得不彻底。虽然。。。但是。但是后面没东西了,没有真正削弱前面“虽然”所讲的方面,没有做到真正的让步。像这种错得太明显的题目不用写让步,直接3个观点反驳就可以了。

其实看了楼主的作文,我一直再想,如果有人问我,你是否认为只有表现有关现实的电影值得看这一观点,我该怎么论述会比较完整。我觉得我肯定先会说,这个观点是不正确的。然后第一个论点,人们看电影是为了轻松娱乐,孩子们会比较喜欢看童话什么的,动画片电影也可以啊;第二个论点写有人看电影是想扩大知识面,比如看历史片,探索某个星球什么的,这个也不是现实生活的电影能带来的;第三个观点写有人看电影是为了寻求刺激,星球大战啊,阿凡达啊什么的。
楼主的两段其实表达的观点就是我第一及第三个观点,但是问题是动画片、科幻片是例子,本身不是论点,要论述这个论题,只写两个例子虽然能驳倒对方,但是缺乏完整性,就是你自己的旗帜没有竖起来。
楼主在语言雕琢方面做得非常好。
以上仅仅是我个人的意见,如有异议欢迎联系。
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发表于 2011-6-8 08:36:53 |只看该作者
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发表于 2011-6-8 12:54:42 |只看该作者
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发表于 2011-6-9 08:33:51 |只看该作者
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发表于 2011-6-9 08:58:16 |只看该作者
本帖最后由 qianhuang 于 2011-6-9 11:23 编辑

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发表于 2011-6-9 13:45:56 |只看该作者
6.8独立。。
综合和我写的不是同一篇,我得先听, 但是我现在有事出去 所以晚上回来给改。。 不好意思哈
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发表于 2011-6-9 22:55:17 |只看该作者
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