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In contemporary society, with the advancing of modern life level, an increasing number of people earn much more money than before. Numerous individuals turn to recreational or art activities besides basic need for food and warm. When it comes to which one is worthy more money from the government, however, different people hold discrepant opinions. In my view, art museums and music performance centers, which prevail over recreational facilities, are of more significance.
To begin with, not only can art museums and the music performance centers create a perfect circumstance for people to escape from work or study, but also improve the cultural qualities of local people. Music and art, with their profound influences and prevalent acceptance among people, nowadays have made citizens enjoy the wonderful art paradise, releasing the heavy load from work or study of people as well as comforting them with soft music or elegant atmosphere. Moreover, after listening to a musical performance or visiting an exhibition, people may wonder what type of music is the one they listened to or《
which style the drawing they saw in that show belongs to.(我有点不理解这句话的意思)》(这个例子这里是不是应该在加强一下啊,例如说人们在听音乐看表演的时候体会到各种不同的音乐表演,增加了知识,同时也思考,我觉得还应该在加强一下) That, thereby, cultivates and fosters the art qualities of local citizens.
To put the opinion future, art museums and music performance centers represent the city they are built in, and tell the great legends in the process of local culture developing and art to foreigners. To illustrate this point, I would take an experience of me being a volunteer in the city museums for instance. One time I was wandering around the area I was in charged for, I noticed that a foreigner standing in front of an ancient drawing seemed quite confused. So I asked him if(if我读着觉得有点怪,换个词是不是会更好) he needed any help, he said that the introduction of the drawing was so abstract in English that he could not understand that painting at all(写个他不能明白绘画的内容,或者是正确的表达是不是会更好?). Afterwards, although I gave him (加个some更好一点? ) detailed information about that picture, there are still plenty of foreigners who cannot get familiar to our culture out there. Art museums and music performance centers call for fund from government, on both the facilities and guider trainings in order to spread our local cultures to the outside world.
(你要是再在这里在写一句强化主题的,会更好,就是总结你的观点的,之后在转折,在强化)On the other hand, recreational facilities such as swimming pools and playgrounds are originally in need of fewer budgets than those art centers. Plus, people can do exercises even in the open air. In sum, rather than recreational facilities, they are art museums and music performance centers that starve for more finance from the government.
凉凉,你的文章写得这么的美,第二段的句子衔接叫我很佩服!很欣赏!真有一种把你文章当做范文背下来的冲动!我找不到半点的语法错误,我找不到任何的错误!叫我惊叹你的文章的同时,很鄙视自己的单薄的英语水平。我真的认真的看完你的文章了,但是我就是找不到错误,我真的批过,认真的看过没一句话,我很害怕你误会我没好好批你的文章,怎么可以写的这么好。)(顺便能教教我怎样能把文章写得这好吗?)像你学习啦!
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