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I totally disagree with the attitude that technology has made children less creative than they were in the past.

For one reason, novel technology is a fantastic toy for children to understand and enjoy,which would trigger their potential capability and passion by inducing children to learn deeply. Because it is pretty intersting to children. As a matter of fact,technology can be the very thing which would lighten children’s brain,improve their intelligence,and practise their mentality.For instance,my little bro was a naugty and patienceless guy,once he received an ipad as his birthday gift from our parents,then change happened.The crying boy devoted himself into the new technology,but he couldn’t use it proficiently at the beginning.However,he didn’t give up and persist to study the function of the ipad.Finally ,he mastered it.Now he is rather self-motivated to become a promising scientist.Therefore,I believe technology could inspire children’s intersts in something and let them focus to study it, you know,interst
and focus are the parents
of creation.

Moreover,there is not any evidence testifying that technology is one of the reason to make kids less creative.However, there are too many researches reminding us of the progresses about how the technology become a cutting edge method for kids to creat or invent new things they like,such as the Facebook.

On the other hand,in my view,it’s obviously unfair to atrribute less creation to technology.There are numerous facts which making children more and more negative and reluctant to creat or take risks.Such as strict controls from parents,stereotype from educators and the stupid institution that demand kids not to try any idea they come up with in case of failure and wrong dicision.All of these adverse pressures despress the children’s emotion to creat. While technology is a coin with two sides for children,if parents and teachers can conduct children to use this cool tool,they would creat so many awesome things.They can draw,paint,invent softwares and so on.However,it’s the out-date concepts and managements of education rather than the tech-tools impact the children’s passion to creat and invent.

In a word,technology could be a positive opportunity to inspire children a lot to be creative.