【NINE小组】第3次作业-by ymxjtu

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The issue states that nowadays none living person is possible to regard as a hero. Although it is true if considering some reason appearing in this rapid and busy world, we still need hero, especially living person as a hero. People create and need hero in this time as before, and we respect passing hero as well as living person as our hero for the living hero may inspire us more than passing one.

Firstly, what is a real hero? Different people may have different definitions. In my opinion, a hero is person with some special aspects better than others, such as good moral: honesty, tolerance, fidelity, and insistence, or certain abilities and actions likewise of good communication with people, protecting animals, strong responsible feeling to help the poor or disable individuals, and so on. A hero may be a famous star like Micheal Jackon and Kobe Bryant, a conscience writer as Liu Xun and Han Han, who is a very advocated young writer in China, or even our parents, so different people have various heroes in their hearts from the past to now. Therefore it is very possible for person regard a living person in today as his or her hero.

Do we now need a hero, especially a living person as a hero? There are some reasons for people now to suspect that whether we need a hero in this rapidly changing age. One reason is that people now hear a lot of heroes from all kinds of medians, such as TV, the Internet, papers and magazines so that they can’t tell who is a real hero. People has less trust in living hero because we often find that one a hero today may be a imperfect person tomorrow, for instance the Olympic winner Phelps being also a drug addict. The other reason is that more and more people see themselves as their own hero rather than considering other people because they advocate unique personality as well as maverick actions. My young brother, a 90s born boy, is just a person without believing any other people as hero, but himself. In my view, these above two reasons lead to many people are unsure of whether they need a hero, especially a living person in the same time. Just as some say, I will be a hero if I want in this era.

Although there are some reasons influencing person’s view as to hero, we still need heroes, especially living hero to inspire us in modern life. We need living hero to teach us what is insistence like Yao Ming keeping playing basketball to be a very great NBA star as an Asian, to help us to find our sympathy and kindness to poor people like Angelina Julie, a UNHCR goodwill ambassador, and to remind us take attention to wild animals like Jackie Chan. All these heroes are near to our daily life because of their shows or their news so that their actions establish good examples directly to us to learn from them. In my opinion, the living heroes may influence people more effectively than passing person since they are vivid in our daily life.

In conclusion, with different definition of hero in our minds, we can regard different people if we think one was, not limiting in the passing people. In addition, we need heroes as every time as before, particularly living person as heroes because living heroes in our heart can encourage our thinking and actions more directly.

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Theissue states that nowadays none living person is possible to regard as a hero.Although it is true if considering some reason appearing in thisrapid and busy world, westill need hero, especially living person as a hero. People create and needhero in this time as before, and we respect passing hero as well as livingperson as our hero for the living hero may inspire us more than passing one.(感觉这句话不是很顺hero出现好多次，然后根据《39+3》aswell as句型旨在强调前者。是不是稍微调整下顺序和用词会好点？)

Firstly, what is areal hero? Different people may have different definitions. In my opinion, ahero is person with some special aspects better than others, such as goodmoral: honesty, tolerance, fidelity, and insistence, or certain abilities andactions likewise of good communication with people, protecting animals, strongresponsible feeling to help the poor or disable individuals, and so on. A heromay be a famous star like Michael Jackson and Kobe Bryant, a conscience writer as Liu Xun and Han Han, who is avery advocated young writer in China, or even our parents, so different peoplehave various heroes in their hearts from the past to now. Therefore it isvery possible for person regard a living person in today as his or her hero.

Do we now need a hero, especially a living person as a hero? There are somereasons for people now to suspect that whether we need a hero in this rapidlychanging age.(这句我觉得可以简洁一点，感觉whether后面的和上面那句重复了) One reason isthat people now hear a lot of heroes from all kinds of medians（median MS是中位数的意思，media就是媒体medium的复数）, such as TV, the Internet, papers andmagazines so that they can’t tell who is a real hero. People has less trust inliving hero because we often find that one a hero today may be a imperfectperson tomorrow, for instance the Olympic winner Phelps being also a drugaddict. The other reason is that more and more people see themselves as theirown hero rather than considering other people because they advocate uniquepersonality as well as maverick actions. My young brother, a 90s born boy, isjust a person without believing any other people as hero, but himself. In myview, these above two reasons lead to many people are unsure of whether theyneed a hero, especially a living person in the same time. Just as some say, Iwill be a hero if I want in this era.（我觉得这段论证有点偏，后面的感觉是在讲大家不把living ones 看做hero的原因，特别是第一个原因，如果要用来说明一些人觉得不需要living hero的话，是不是换个说法比较好，比如说，因为living heroes在其他的方面，给人们带来负面的影响。比如说菲尔普斯吸毒，这会让一些少年模仿他，一起吸毒。。之类的）

Although there are some reasons influencing person’s view as to hero, westill need heroes, especially living hero to inspire us in modern life. Weneed living hero to teach us what is insistence like Yao Ming keeping playingbasketball to be a very great NBA star as an Asian, to help us to find oursympathy and kindness to poor people like Angelina Julie, a UNHCR goodwillambassador, and to remind us take attention to wild animals like Jackie Chan.All these heroes are near to our daily life because of their shows or theirnews so that their actions establish good examples directly to us to learn fromthem. In my opinion, the living heroes may influence people more effectivelythan passing person since they are vivid in our daily life.

In conclusion, with different definition of hero in our minds, we can regarddifferent people if we think one was, not limiting in the passing people. Inaddition, we need heroes as every time as before, particularly living person asheroes because living heroes in our heart can encourage our thinking andactions more directly.



本文先讨论了什么是英雄得出结论把活着的人看做英雄是可能的。然后讨论我们是否需要英雄，一些人认为不需要（原因balabala）然而还是需要的（balabala），感觉连接不是太紧密。然后我觉得是不是重新组织下，比方说，先说把living man 看做英雄是可能的—>然后人们因为神马神马原因不把living的看做英雄—>然而，我们的社会急切需要living hero->最后总结下，我们应该如何处理。。或者有木有可能拿passing的hero和living的进行对比来写？刚想的。。

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Argument 部分，有劳橙子美眉啦！

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The argument asserts that the C Note jazz club would be profitable for the main three reasons of distance, the number of people liking jazz, and the nationwide survey. It may be not true as what the author says because some questions needs exact answers to make the assertion more persuasive.

Firstly, whether the people going to jazz club mind the distance or not is not sure. Although the nearest jazz club is over 60 miles away from Monroe, people may not consider more about the distance but their service, price, ornament and so on. If so, the new club will have no advantage in location. Moreover, a study on the sales situation of the jazz music club needs to do to provide whether many Monroe people like to patronize it, maybe like to enjoy the free jazz music from radio, TV, the internet rather than paying listening in the jazz club.  

Secondly, do numerous people like jazz in Monroe city? The number over 100,000 people attended Monroe’s festival last summer does not fully support that most of the people were in Monroe City, may be a large part of them came from other places. In addition, even if most of the attended people are Monroe, it can’t decide whether there are many people like jazz in Monroe if these people only take a very small part of Monroe population. If  these two ratios are the high at the same time, it will help to evaluate the prediction. The last, the argument provides that several well-known jazz musicians live in Monroe, and the highest-rated radio program in Monroe is 'Jazz Nightly.'  In fact, these evidences do not imply that there are many people liking jazz music or many people love to enjoy jazz music in club. Perhaps, people prefer listening jazz music from radio or free-paid jazz music instead of going to club. If , the author survey the need of Monroe people of the Jazz music club large enough , the club may be profitable.

Thirdly, the nationwide study of the cost of the typical jazz fan can’ t also indicates that Monroe people would like to spend as much money as $1000 per year in the jazz music club. If the cost study of the Monroe people spending in the jazz music club infer people will cost quite money in jazz music club for their entertainment, the C Note club will have a good predict of their profit.

In conclusion, more detail survey on evidences provided in the argument are required to support the assertion. If more work done like the above suggestions, it will be helpful for the new club to decide whether to do or not.

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Theargument asserts that the C Note jazz club would be profitable for the mainthree reasons of distance, the number of people liking jazz, and the nationwidesurvey. It may be not true（感觉true用在这里不是特别好） as what the author says because some questionsneeds exact answers to make the assertion more persuasive.

Firstly, whether the people going to jazz club mind（感觉有点口语化mind）the distance or not is not sure. Although thenearest jazz club is over 60 miles away from Monroe, people may not considermore about the distance but their service, price, ornament and so on. If so,the new club will have no advantage in location. Moreover, a study on the salessituation of the jazz music club needs to do to provide whether many Monroepeople like to patronize it, maybe like to enjoy the free jazz music fromradio, TV, the internet rather than paying listening in the jazzclub.  

Secondly, do numerous people like jazz in Monroe city? The number over 100,000people attended Monroe’s festival last summer does not fully support that mostof the people were in Monroe City, may be a large part of them came from otherplaces. In addition, even if most of the attended people are Monroe, it can’tdecide whether there are many people like jazz in Monroe if these people onlytake a very small part of Monroe population. If these two ratios are thehigh at the same time, it will help to evaluate the prediction. The last, theargument provides that several well-known jazz musicians live in Monroe, andthe highest-rated radio program in Monroe is 'Jazz Nightly.'  Infact, these evidences do not imply that there are many people liking jazz musicor many people love to enjoy jazz music in club. Perhaps, people preferlistening jazz music from radio or free-paid jazz music instead of going toclub. If, the author survey the need of Monroe people of the Jazz music clublarge enough, the club may be profitable.

Thirdly, the nationwide study of the cost of the typical jazz fan can’ t（打成cannot更好） also indicates that Monroe people would like tospend as much money as $1000 per year in the jazz music club. If the cost studyof the Monroe people spending in the jazz music club infer people will costquite money in jazz music club for their entertainment, the C Note club willhave a good predict of their profit.

In conclusion, more detail survey on evidences provided in the argument are required to support the assertion. If more work done like the above suggestions, it will be helpful for the new club to decide whether to do or not.

感觉A 比I 还难改出东西来啊。。。
总体感觉没什么太大的问题，然后第二点的时候中间的让步说法会比较好，然后提的一些建议比较好。
但个人觉得这三大点问题间有主次之分的话，会比较好

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第一次修改
The issue states that nowadays none living person is possible to regard as a hero. Although it is true if considering some reason appearing in this rapid and busy world, we still need hero, especially living person as a hero. People create and need hero in this time as before, and we respect living hero as well as passing one， for the living person may inspire us more than passing people.
Firstly, what is a real hero? Different people may have different definitions. In my opinion, a hero is person with some special aspects better than others, such as good moral: honesty, tolerance, fidelity, and insistence, or certain abilities and actions likewise of good communication with people, protecting animals, strong responsible feeling to help the poor or disable individuals, and so on. A hero may be a famous star like Michael Jackson and Kobe Bryant, a conscience writer as Liu Xun and Han Han, who is a very advocated young writer in China, or even our parents, so different peoplehave various heroes in their hearts from the past to now. Therefore it is very possible for people regard a living person in today as his or her hero.

However, there are some reasons for people now to suspect living hero in this rapidly changing age. One reason is that people now hear a lot of heroes from all kinds of media, such as TV, the Internet, papers and magazines so that they can’t tell who is a real hero. People has less trust in living hero because we often find that one a hero today may be a imperfect person tomorrow, and they have some negative aspects, for instance, the Olympic winner Phelps being also a drug addict. The other reason is that more and more people see themselves as their own hero rather than considering other people because they advocate unique personality as well as maverick actions. My young brother, a 90s born boy, is just a person without believing any other people as hero, but himself. In my view, these above two reasons lead to many people are unsure of whether they need a hero, especially a living person in the same time. Just as some say, I will be a hero if I want in this era.
Although there are some reasons influencing person’s view as to hero, we still need heroes, especially living hero to inspire us in modern life. We need living hero to teach us what is insistence like Yao Ming keeping playing basketball to be a very great NBA star as an Asian, to help us to find our sympathy and kindness to poor people like Angelina Julie, a UNHCR goodwill ambassador, and to remind us take attention to wild animals like Jackie Chan. All these heroes are near to our daily life because of their shows or their news so that their actions establish good examples directly to us to learn from them. In my opinion, the living heroes may influence people more effectively than passing person since they are vivid in our daily life.

In conclusion, with different definition of hero in our minds, we can regard different people if we think one was, not limiting in the passing people. In addition, we need heroes as every time as before, particularly living person as heroes because living heroes in our heart can encourage our thinking and actions more directly.