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发表于 2011-5-20 00:13:38 |显示全部楼层
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In this materialized society, it is more or less a generic standard to possess enough necessities and a certain luxuries in order to talk about happiness. Hence I think people in general feel happier if they have more possessions for them to use and control.
When we consider the living standard, we effectively refer to the things we need in our life such as house, transportation, medical service and education. The more we have acquired the more happiness we think we have achieved. For example we will consider a young fellow who have better access of money as a lucky guy, because he can buy things we want but cannot afford. Or when we want to go further education to pursue our dream but fail to do so due to lacking of fund, you will feel unhappy. In short, this pragmatic society is built on a monetary system. This system imposes an inevitable reality to us. That reality is the happiness is mainly obtained by procurement of various kinds of life necessities and luxuries.

Another important underlined psychological reason is people tend to believe they have secured happiness if they can control their life or make others to obey them. In this sophisticated society, the problem with it is we have too many desires to be fulfilled. We are unsure whether we are happy enough because we do not know whether we can obtain all the things in our mind. This scarce of being assured is believed to be solved by getting many resources that are profound to our life. They may not necessary need use all these resources or plan to use them in any near future. But they will be confident that their happiness is warranted by having enough resources to choose or influence the others in order to satisfy their needs. In another word, how well we perceive our happiness depends on how much we can control our life.
In conclusion, it is essential for us to acquire enough basic life needs in order to be happy. And when we want to improve the status of happiness, we must find ways to obtain more resources.


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The lecture believes the hydron based fuel cell engine is not an ideal solution or alternative source for cars. It points out problems such as the difficulties of obtaining pure hydrogen, the pollution released during production of this pure hydroden and the expensive raw materials of making the cell functionable.
The hydrogen is very hard to be produced and stored in liquid form. In order to make use of the hydrogen engery, it must be in liquified which is not simply achieved because it requires a very low temperature. Hence althogth there are plenty of hydrogen element in the earth, they are not in the form easily for application. That is to say the hydrogen based cell is not very readily practible under current situation.
When the hydrogen is purified, it requires a lot of energy. This requirement of energy results in a significant amount of pollution due to burning of coal and oil. As a result, the hydrogen based fuel cells donot effectively reduce the pollution problems cased by traditional engines.
It is also very expensive to build the whole unit of a hydrogen based fuel cell becuse it requires the scarce element platinum as electrode. Without platinum, it bascially cannot have the chemcial reaction which produces the electricity.
So far, there is no cheap source for supply of the platinum. Hence it is not true that the fule cell engines will be economically available for major use.

In sum, the hydron based fuel cell engine has its varius drawbacks which can limit its potential to become an substitution of the internal-combustion engines.

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发表于 2011-5-20 04:39:37 |显示全部楼层
楼主,independent writing 题目是啥?

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发表于 2011-5-20 13:20:12 |显示全部楼层
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发表于 2011-5-20 13:50:03 |显示全部楼层
楼主,改好了,请有空批改我的

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发表于 2011-5-20 19:30:15 |显示全部楼层
楼主不好意思,今天发烧发了一天,看到英语脑子昏昏的,等我明天好点了帮你改好吗?不好意思啊
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发表于 2011-5-21 23:44:53 |显示全部楼层
本帖最后由 xiangtuo 于 2011-5-21 23:46 编辑

In this materialized society, it is more or less a generic standard to possess enough necessities and a certain luxuries in order to talk about happiness. Hence I think people in general feel happier if they have more possessions for them to use and control.3 A, x+ E) @% t8 }$ R6 }, |0 _, }! @
When we consider the living standard, we effectively refer to the things we need in our life such as house, transportation, medical service and education. The more we have acquired the more happiness we think we have achieved. For example we will consider a young fellow who have better access of money as a lucky guy, because he can buy things we want but cannot afford. Or when we want to go further education to pursue our dream but fail to do so due to lacking of fund, you will feel unhappy. In short, this pragmatic society is built on a monetary system(金融名词,货币制度?). This system imposes an inevitable reality to us. That reality is that(不能省略) the happiness is mainly obtained by procurement of various kinds of life necessities and luxuries.
Another important underlined psychological reason is that people tend to believe (that就可以省)they have secured happiness if they can control their life or make others to obey them. In this sophisticated society, the problem with it is that we have too many desires to be fulfilled. We are unsure whether we are happy enough because we do not know whether we can obtain all the things in our mind. This scarce of being assured is believed to be solved by getting many resources that are profound to our life. They may not necessary need use all these resources or plan to use them in any near future. But they(和上一句的they指代的内容不一样哦,还是不要用) will be confident that their happiness is warranted by having enough resources to choose or influence the others in order to satisfy their needs. In another word, how well we perceive our happiness depends on how much we can control our life.
In conclusion, it is essential for us to acquire enough basic life needs in order to be happy. And when we want to improve the status of happiness, we must find ways to obtain more resources.# @' J3 m3 {: `
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。。。that从句。。。
不可以省略的情形:
1. 在主语从句、表语从句、同位语从句中(除宾语从句),that 不能省。如:

That the seas are being overfished has been known for years. (主语从句)
The truth is that nobody knows who invented eyeglasses. (表语从句)
We have to face the fact that land is fragile.(同位语从句)

2. agree, argue, hold, learn, observe, remark, suggest, indicate, conceive这种比较正式的书面语的谓语动词后,that不可省略。如:

Both candidates agree that the biggest local concern is unemployment.
Studies indicate that we have a limited amount of self-control.

3. it作形式宾语的宾语从句前,that不可省。如:

They found it difficult that they would finish their work in two days.

4. 在由andor所连接的两个宾语从句时,第一个从句中的that可以省;而第二个从句中的that不能省。

It is depressing to think (that) life is purposeless and that evolution has no higher destination.

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不好意思晚了一天~谢谢啦~~
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发表于 2011-5-24 00:11:17 |显示全部楼层

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The lecture does not agree with the readings on the concern of less literature being read. It refutes the reading by following three reasons.

Firstly, a book does not need to be literature in order to be intellectual stimulation.
Other than the novels or poems, scientific , political, and historical books can also be high quality readings. They are as createive as a traditional literature book. Hence it is wrong to assume a person cannot be trained intellectually if they donot read literature books.

Next, when people spend more time on movies and musics, it does not necessarily lower down the general culture standard. Basically, the culture has been changed so far. The excellant movies or musics can address the contemporary issues better than the old art forms such as literature. That means there is no worry for poor culture standard due to diversified public interests.

Finally, it is not ture the less support of literature is due to the readers. In fact, it is because of the authors. They unfortunately make the literature very hard to read. Even the old generation cannot comprehend the current literature well. So the reduced public support for literature cann not be blamed on readers.

In sum, the trend of spending less time on literature does not reflect a drop of public
culture standard. People can learn as much as literture from other forms of arts such as movies and musics . The writes should also review on their way of writtting such that they can attract the general interest on literature again.

Do you think that young people should take several different kinds of job before they take acareer in a long term

Normally when we think of choosing a career, we will use criterions such as how well it is related to our study or how much money we can make from it. However, for young adults, they should be encouraged to try on diferent kinds of job. In this way, they can discover their true insterest and their abilities in the real working environment. Afterwards, they will find their ture path on the career life and hence achieve success.

Generally speaking, when we start our career, we normally are not clear about the purpose of working. As a fresh graduate, we can be intrigued by high paid job or high profile work. We feel this kind of work sounds very proud when we talk to friends.
What we ignore is our real interes or ture talent. We may not be very suitable for certain types of work even we are recruited by any chance. Or perhaps we will find we do not like doing it after
working for some time. So what will happen if we just continue doing it for the sake of money? Sooner or later we will find we are trapped in a certain level comparing to others who have succeed in the long term. The result is not surperised because we cannot perform well due to lacking of enough quality or passionate on the work.

Then, how about those finding the work related to their majors? Well, it seems they are making wise choice since the work is in the area of their study.
But again,
it does not warrant
they can stay on the job for long time due to similar reasons mentioned above. We have heard some people study a certain subject for 4 years undergraduate then they realise they waste their time on studying it because their interes is on it or they chose it due to famlity pressure.
We can also feel regretted after we work for some time if we are not doing work for self fulfillment. Futhermore study is different from work. In the school you are evaluated by marks. However you are appraised by many different factors in the work.
Hence in order to excel in the job, we should consider the work based on our own special talents other than what we have learnt in the school. In short, we may have to take on different kinds of work to understand our ture interest and most valuable ability.

After discussing about the disavantage of limiting the career choice due to finacial or major concern, the good advice to the young adults is to be brave to try out several possibilities before they make up their minds. They can learn about themselves better by looking at themsevles from different angles. Only by having experiences through different choices, they can find the most suitable career which is profound to one's life.

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发表于 2011-5-24 13:54:04 |显示全部楼层
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发表于 2011-5-24 17:21:25 |显示全部楼层
本帖最后由 champ_gz 于 2011-5-24 17:29 编辑

奇怪了 附件上传不了 5.23 独立+综合修改独立:
In this materializedsociety, it is more or less a generic (common) standard to possess enoughnecessities and a certain luxuries in order to talk about happiness. Hence Ithink people in general feel happier if they have more (mass of)possessions for them to useand control.
When weconsider the living standard, we effectively refer to the things we need in ourlife such as house, transportation, medical service and education. Themore we have acquired the more happiness we think we have achieved.For example we will consider a young fellowwho have better access of money as a lucky guy, because he can buy things we want butcannot afford. Or when we want to go further education to pursue our dream butfail to do so due to lacking of fund, you will feel unhappy. In short,this pragmatic society is built on a monetary system. This system imposes aninevitable reality to us. That reality is the happiness is mainly obtained byprocurement of various kinds of life necessities and luxuries.

Another important underlined psychological (这三个形容词连用?) reason is people tend to believe they have secured happiness ifthey can control their life or make others to obey them. In this sophisticatedsociety, the problem with it is we have too many desires to befulfilled. We are unsure whether we are happy enough because we do not knowwhether we can obtain all the things in our mind. This scarce of being assuredis believed to be solved by getting many resources that are profound to ourlife. They may not necessary need use all these resources or plan to use themin any near future. But they will be confident that their happiness iswarranted by having enough resources to choose or influence the others in orderto satisfy their needs. In another word, how well we perceive our happinessdepends on how much we can control our life.  p6 R  R( V* X3 i, E1 P- A
Inconclusion, it is essential for us to acquire enough basic life needs in orderto be happy. And when we want to improve the status of happiness, wemust find ways to obtain more resources.# R4 U' I7 k8 [( b
# }5 L; r0 r) _( X9 |: t. N
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综合:
The lecturebelieves the hydron based fuel cell engine is not an ideal solution oralternative source for cars. It points out problems such as the difficulties ofobtaining pure hydrogen, the pollution released during production of this pure hydroden and theexpensive raw materials of making the cell functionable.
The hydrogenis very hard to be produced and stored in liquid form. In order to make use ofthe hydrogen engery, it must be in liquified which is not simply achievedbecause it requires a very low temperature. Hence althogth there areplenty of hydrogen element in the earth, they are not in the form easily forapplication. That is to say the hydrogen based cell is not very readily practible undercurrent situation.
When thehydrogen is purified, it requires a lot of energy. This requirement of energyresults in a significant amount of pollution due to burning of coal and oil. Asa result, the hydrogen based fuel cells donot effectively reduce the pollutionproblems cased by traditional engines.
It is also veryexpensive to build the whole unit of a hydrogen based fuel cell becuse it requiresthe scarce element platinum as electrode. Without platinum, it bascially cannothave the chemcial reaction which produces the electricity.3 U* d3 Q" q7 m, {4 y& |7 L; N
So far, there is no cheap source for supply of the platinum. Hence it is nottrue that the
fule cell engines will be economically available for majoruse.
In sum, the hydron based fuelcell engine has its varius drawbacks which can limit its potential to become ansubstitution of the internal-combustion engines.

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发表于 2011-5-24 18:01:12 |显示全部楼层
5.23独立改完

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发表于 2011-5-24 20:14:46 |显示全部楼层
0523_综合_鱼小白.doc (24.5 KB, 下载次数: 3)
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发表于 2011-5-25 22:10:19 |显示全部楼层
楼主还没帮我改23号的独立啊。。

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发表于 2011-5-25 23:24:07 |显示全部楼层
24-5 independt and tpo 13

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发表于 2011-5-26 11:55:10 |显示全部楼层
楼主什么时候写了的话给我发个短消息就成~
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