跪求PP。 求指导。SA

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What is happiness? Many people consider that having a lot of money brings happiness to businessmen. Students think no homework is the happy thing for their children to have a good mark. It is a popular misconception that that this problem result in laziness. A person needs only 3 things to be truly happy in this world, someone to love, something to do, and something to hope for. Happiness is a way for a travel, not a destination.

Someone to love is a popular topic these days and everyone seeks true happiness. Life and the pursuit of happiness are a common truth. In fact, happiness is simple thing. There is no exact definition of the word happiness. From my point of view: someone to love is truly happy. What is true love between two lovers? They trust each other and the man always looks after and protects her, but nevertheless love is a luxury. Someone has to spend lots of time and money on life. You have to make sense to someone. Maybe some time later, you will find a like Cinderella’s girl, below your happiness. If you love her, please give your words. Someone to love, in my opinion, we should love ourselves first, and then we know how to love others!

Read books is an importance things. From my point of view, books are an enrichment of life. If you read book everyday, it is good hobby. You will acquire lots of knowledge. A book is ocean of knowledge, boundless creation. My English teacher is a good reader and he keeps reading books everyday. I saw he always reads book in somewhere. He knows the things that happened in the past, especially the political, social, or economic development of a nation. Of course, read a good book, make your life happiness in accordance with interest. Choose a good book for yourself.


If you still have lots of hopes, you can get over the entire problem. Hope that a situation will end well when there is a risk of thing going wrong. Sometimes no matter what you plan to do, something gets in your way and gets you off track. Don’t worry, who cares? Just hope for things. Every time there’s trouble, I have to go along and sort it out. Whether the problems that make something difficult, spoil your plans, make you worry. Firstly, take it easy. Don’t find faults, find a remedy. We should look for a way for dealing with problems. Then continue to hope for this problem even when it is unlikely to happen. Try your best.

You can find happiness everywhere. Happiness is bound up with knowledge and joy, dreams. Happiness can help us understand something and happiness is something you are always finding. Therefore, as the evidence above demonstrates, getting knowledge is one way to realize happiness, gaining joy from your every life is on the road to happiness for my life. Happiness is a kind of goal and I try my best to explore it. Can you tell me what’s truly happy in yours?

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占下沙发。  BODYPARAGRAPH 写的不好。

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没人么？.....那我交了呗。

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题目是什么？

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在不知道题目的情况下我没法给你分析结构。
随便瞄了几眼LZ，觉得LZ的语言功底还有待加强。
首先，句法单一，多是XXXX is XXXX的单句，短句。建议提高句子的复杂性和多变性。
其次，语法错误颇多，比如Read book is  an importance things这种开头的简单短句就有2处语法错误，实在不该。
再次，高级词汇使用太少，基本上都是“大众情人”词，应多加强动词和修饰词的使用。
不过最后这点相对于前两点来说比较次要。

继续加油！