alohasally的作文园地~~

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…………基本没有改的改好了……

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1# alohasally
齐活了，但是大神你写的太好了。。。。

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同赞！

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10-13  duli 10月13日.doc (23.5 KB, 下载次数: 6)

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楼上的亲们 非常感谢 看到你们修改和留言 我真心的受到激励， 但是更让二战的我惭愧了 惭愧到家了，  总之 让我们共同进步

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你写的真好，请问你是哪天考试呢？

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20# hearteyes

我是10-27考试  
下面是10-14的作业   10月14日.doc (22.5 KB, 下载次数: 8)

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我简单的改了一下你的作文~加油哦~

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改好了   10月14日 alohasally(revised by hyl).doc (15 KB, 下载次数: 3)

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10-15  独立 10月15日.doc (22 KB, 下载次数: 4)

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rjj21664264UID: 3004467

不好意思晚了，改好了！

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10月15日 20100813NA Doyou agree or disagree with the following statement? More and more people spend too much money on their pet (dogs, cats and others), although there are better uses for these money. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

So many lifestyles that are different from before emerge along with the development of the  society and people’s life quality, one of which is  raising  pets as  family members. The ensuing question is that how much people should spend on pets. In my perspective, there should be a limit of it(“it” change into “expenditure on pets”) and much money should be utilized in other conditions.

Admittedly, building a comfortable living place for the pets is a sign of love from the host who would like to spend the money for animals. Dogs, cats, rabbits and so on are adorable animals that can connect emotions with human beings, which is the reason why people regard them as family members. Especially, single workers struggling in the  metropolises or lonely old people in the community will feel the allegiance and care from pets when they can not expect these from the far-away families. Obviously, buying things for the ones they love is understandable.

However, many more costs on the pets for more enjoyable environments seem to be kinds of waste on the condition that there are so many other places or people who are wanting such money desperately for living on. Consider the activities held by  various public charity institutions as examples. We still remember the scenes that poor children are shaking in the winter in the rooms without windows, which touch us so much or even make us crying. If the dog in our home could be sleeping sweetly besides us, no more money is needed for the dog bed. On the  contrary, the money for the dog bed can help to repair the windows for that children. So can other excessive spending for the pets. Betters usages  of the money may totally reveal our love and compassion as well.

Furthermore, except for the usages of money in charity fields, with respect to the big picture, development for the society will be accelerated by the money of each  individual. As the saying goes ‘Roads are essential to the development for isolated towns’.  Building a highway by the money which  is wasted on pets would be easily done if everyone had paid more attention to the big picture rather than their own animals at home. It is the worthy using the money on the cases which can benefit everyone.

To sum up, there should be a limit of the spending on pets since better uses of such money will bring about more products. Giving a hand to the people in need and concerning about the developments of the hometown are of  precious meaning.


感觉你的语言功底，词汇量好强大，主要是修改了一下人称下的s...不能传附件，copy上面又没有了修订格式，就把终稿弄上来了，海涵！

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24# alohasally

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10-17  movies 10月17日.doc (27 KB, 下载次数: 2)

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我可能要晚一点才写好。不好意思哈

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10-18 两篇   这次独立写得很差 多多拍吧 10月18日.doc (27.5 KB, 下载次数: 2)

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