Daily Writing by danteksj

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这篇。。越写越纠结。。结尾都懒得写了。。修改的同学请包涵吧 完全没思路了


Travelling is always of great attractiveness-to escape from peer pressure and intensive workload, unleash the usually suppressed emotion and impulsive and go to the places you always dream about. Marvelous as it sounds, we cannot neglect the large costs, more often than not, accompanying with travelling. Hence, it would be wise if we save plentiful money for dealing with future contingencies before scheduling our trip and booking air ticket.

To be a financially healthy individual, a rule of thumb is to always save part of one’s income as emergency money-money that can cover the unanticipated expenses. Few of us have the ability to predict and avoid the pitfalls and obstacles in our future way of progress, and the saved money can cushion the blow when we are entrapped and fall down. Even the most solid job can be lost in a minute, and it is not rare that someone we intimately love get serious or even fatal diseases without a warning. It would be a shame if we have no money in our bank accounts when such unforeseen tragedies catch us.

Besides preparing for the unexpected, saving money can bring several bonuses as well. By constantly saving money, one can better develop his or her capability of financial self-control. Those who put part of their salaries in bank commonly live relatively frugal lives and tend to curb the urge of splurge. Such lifestyle is quite beneficial for accumulating wealth. Apart from that, savings can be partly invested in low-risk funds for generating additional incomes, which enable people to become more financially independent and secure.

I am not saying that travelling is a total waste of money It can be a great means of pressure relief and our visions can be greatly broadened during the trips. However its significance fades in comparison with that of money saving. Imagine the following picture: you come home satisfactorily from a fabulous trip on which you spent all your money ，and then find that due to the financial crisis you were just fired. In such case, one without savings would face serious problem in survival.

danteksjUID: 2977437

又看了看觉得跑题了。。sigh。。。

kikyou_lrUID: 3228606

这到底是为虾米呢
我也纠结的一塌糊涂
34# danteksj

柠檬阿猪UID: 2616240

Travelling is always of great attractiveness-to escape from peer pressure and intensive workload, unleash the usually suppressed emotion and impulsive and go to the places you always dream about. Marvelous as it sounds, we cannot neglect the large costs, more often than not, accompanying with travelling. Hence, it would be wise if we save plentiful money for dealing with future contingencies before scheduling our trip and booking air ticket.
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To be a financially healthy individual, a rule of thumb is to always save part of one’s income as emergency money-money that can cover the unanticipated expenses. Few of us have the ability to predict and avoid the pitfalls and obstacles in our future way of progress, and the saved money can cushion the blow when we are entrapped and fall down. Even the most solid job can be lost in a minute, and it is not rare that someone we intimately love get serious or even fatal diseases without a warning. It would be a shame if we have no money in our bank accounts when such unforeseen tragedies catch us.(啊啊…原来我绕了两段的东西可以被这么简洁精确的表达啊..好厉害…学习中…)r9 o  q
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Besides preparing for the unexpected, saving money can bring several bonuses as well. By constantly saving money, one can better develop his or her capability of financial self-control. Those who put part of their salaries in bank commonly live relatively frugal lives and tend to curb the urge of splurge. Such lifestyle is quite beneficial for accumulating wealth. Apart from that, savings can be partly invested in low-risk funds for generating additional incomes, which enable people to become more financially independent and secure. (感觉这段是有点小跑题的说，建议LZ这样改：采用LZ很擅长的分两类模式，既然上一段写了unexpected expenses in future,那么这段就写expected expense in future, 比如出国留学接受更高层教育、考个资格证什么的以提升自身的竞争力而取得更高的成就，又或者是现在做一些长期性的稳定小投资，以让退休后的老年生活有保障)J7 U) c, l9 e5 Z

I am not saying that travelling is a total waste of money. It can be a great means of pressure relief and our visions can be greatly broadened during the trips. However its significance fades in comparison with that of money saving. Imagine the following picture: you come home satisfactorily from a fabulous trip on which you spent all your money ，and then find that due to the financial crisis you were just fired. In such case, one without savings would face serious problem in survival.（这个对比举例表达的好啊好~）


LZ的表达一向简洁精炼啊~ 榜样！
个人意见，LZ参考~ 如果有帮助就太好了~

danteksjUID: 2977437

36# 柠檬阿猪 感谢修改～收获很多

猛龙过江UID: 3220220

拜读了，谢谢

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