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发表于 2012-2-10 18:28:22 |只看该作者
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The lecture pointed out that team work is not the most efficient way to accomplish a project, which contradicts the reading passages' statement that group work is the best form of working.

Firstly, as the professor mentioned, team work will not benefit any single individual of the group. While the passage insists the opposite point that a group process is rewarding for every group member. The reason is that some group members get free ride from the teams' effort. While those who contribute to the project can not recieve their deserved recognition, unlike the passage says that they will shine and get confidence.

Also, the professor pointed out the inefficiency of group work, which disagrees with the reading. If a group is formed, then every decicion of the team should go through the discussion of every group member, in order to reach agreement. This is obviously time-consuming. Therefore, on the contrary to the statement in the passage, group work consumes more time and energy than independent task.

Finally, as for the creastivity of group work mentioned in the reading, the professor insist the otherwise that teamwork has nothing to do with creative thinking, which on the contrary elliminate individuals' ability of creation. The reason is understandable. Group members are often unwilling to offer creative ideas because usually the most influntial member of the group will discourage different opnions, which in the end leads to group's inability to creat anything meaningful.我听的这边跟LZ不太一样,我是听那个有影响力的人会因为觉得members提出的不好就直接drop掉不discuss,然后如果有人说direction不对,其余的人也会无视。 (不过我好像整篇都听乱了听错了- -)

To summarize, according to the professor, group work is not the best choice to accomplish a poject, considering its slow process, unfair recognition and lack of creativity. 结尾好~

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According to a prestigious educator最好能说个名字, Parents’ influence on their children accounts for 70 percent of all the infulential factors in children’s life. The crucial role parents play in the education of their off-spring determines在前面加个partly之类的词吧,不然有点太绝对 the independence and competence of the children after they grow up. Gone are the days when traditions require parents to control childrens’ life by doing everything for them. Modern education method concerns nothing but fostering childrens’ independence.

Independent thinking comes from ealy education of children,没看懂。。 which contribute to childrens’ futrue(future) life to a great extent. It is not uncommon that parents naturally tend to help children by replacing their roles both in their study and dailylife. This phenomenon, mostly considered to be parents’ natural expression of the parental love, indicates however an unscientific education method. Those kids lack some basic living skills and independent thinking even in their adulthood, after being spoiled and exploited of their right to choose their own life. Take one of my classmates for instance, she liked music a lot in her childhood while her parents insisted she going to science school.(while her parents insist her to go to science school?) Unfortunately, the choice her parents made for her turned out to be inappropriate due to her lack of interest in science study. What’s worse, later in her life, she found her enable to choose her career because she has already got used to her parents choice. Thoses overprotected kids will lose their independent thinking ability, which leads to a tragedy in their life.

As for parents, it is also beneficial if they transfer their role from manipulating their kid to encouraging their kid to stand on his or her own. This education method not only saves parents’ time of doing everything for kids, but also spares their worry about children’s enability to decide their own life. Happiness will be gained after their kids grow up with strong ability to handle their own life as well as helping their parents.觉得这段的主题句应该花大笔墨论证论证的。

To conclude, the best education depends entirly on parents’ encouragement, rather than their overprotection for children, which lead to manipulation.

还是觉得跟上一篇一样。。。该论证的反而一笔带过。。。

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发表于 2012-2-11 16:24:35 |只看该作者
谢谢批改~~~
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发表于 2012-2-11 16:59:22 |只看该作者
2月11日 综合
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发表于 2012-2-11 20:26:17 |只看该作者
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The lecture pointed out that team work is not the most efficient way to accomplish a project, which contradicts the reading passages' statement that group work is the best form of working.

Firstly, as the professor mentioned, team work will not benefit any single individual of the group. While the passage insists the opposite point that a group process is rewarding for every group member. The reason is that some group members get free ride from the teams' effort. While those who contribute to the project can not recieve their deserved recognition, unlike the passage says that they will shine and get confidence. (我觉得楼主这段passage里的观点较多,OG上的指导主要以听力为主 这里写听力里说的 不工作反而收获团队荣誉 这样更充实一点)

Also, the professor pointed out the inefficiency of group work, which disagrees with the reading. If a group is formed, then every decicion of the team should go through the discussion of every group member, in order to reach agreement. This is obviously time-consuming. Therefore, on the contrary to the statement in the passage, group work consumes more time and energy than independent task.

Finally, as for the creastivity of group work mentioned in the reading, the professor insist the otherwise that teamwork has nothing to do with creative thinking, which on the contrary elliminate individuals' ability of creation. The reason is understandable. Group members are often unwilling to offer creative ideas because usually the most influntial member of the group will discourage different opnions, which in the end leads to group's inability to creat anything meaningful.(这段貌似和听力里不是很一样啊。。)

To summarize, according to the professor, group work is not the best choice to accomplish a poject, considering its slow process, unfair recognition and lack of creativity.(其实综合写作不要求结尾的 四段就好~)
额、、楼主字数是不多了点 要求150-225之间。。。综合的重点应该是lecture,passage 里的内容可以一笔带过。楼主多注意哈~~~加油。。。~
希望以及为了希望所付出的醉生梦死般的努力,才是我们青春存在的意义。

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你的***罚写墙***太可爱了,学习!!!!!!!

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发表于 2012-2-12 12:02:03 |只看该作者
已改~求互拍~
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希望以及为了希望所付出的醉生梦死般的努力,才是我们青春存在的意义。

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发表于 2012-2-12 14:36:36 |只看该作者
综合部分已改好~~
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发表于 2012-2-12 16:35:12 |只看该作者
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2月15日 综合 TPO6
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发表于 2012-2-16 17:02:56 |只看该作者
楼主的英文功底很不错,词汇和句式很丰富,语法也很赞。
以楼主的基础,再稍加练习,作文成绩肯定在28+。
楼主可能稍微得注意一下,降低单词拼写错误。
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发表于 2012-2-17 14:12:59 |只看该作者
2月17日~~~再接再厉~~
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