【Daily Writing作文特训小组】figuechen的作业帖

figuechenUID: 2850619

3月4日北大的T，去年考的G，作文水平退步不少，希望能够和大家一起进步~

感谢每位帮助我改作文的童鞋！~

figuechenUID: 2850619

2.13 独立

题目：
One of your classmates needs help with some schoolwork. Which solution would you recommend your classmate should do: to ask you for help or to find a professinal tutor for help. Include reasons and details to in your response.

我的习作：

In my opinion, seeking help from a professional tutor is a better way.

First of all, tutors have professional knowledge required for solving difficult schoolwork problems, while his classmate might not be qualified enough. Professional tutors have been trained for a specific subject or course. When you turn to their help, they have the capability to answer your questions. For example, it is sometimes incredibly hard to solve certain mathematic problems. Only through taking command of all the formulas and equations in a familiar way can one go through these problems. For the professional tutor, it may be a piece of cake due to his familiarity with schoolwork. However, as for a friend, he may misguide you with his own idea instead of the true answer.

Secondly, tutors acquire the professional qualities for tutoring, such as experience and patience. They have experienced a lot in questions and answers so that they are acquainted with the reason students cannot solve certain questions, or the point where most students are confused of. In that way, some questions seem to be a piece of cake for them. More important, they usually own the quality of being patience, which is a remedy for those whose fundamentals of the subject is not solid at all. Through patient tutoring, hard problems could be dissolved into small parts, and then be solved.

Last but not least, tutors possess the art of telling you the answer. With experience, they will probably not tell you the answer right away, but offer you hint instead. For one thing, cues from tutor might inspire you with ideas of solution to the question. It is widely acknowledged that the question will leave you a deeper impression if it is you who have done it rather than someone else tell you the answer. In contrast, his classmate might give out the answer immediately, which will bring no actual benefit for him.

In conclusion, turning to a professional tutor is more helpful. I believe he should call a tutor at once.

感谢批改的童鞋们！~

figuechenUID: 2850619

2.14 作文
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? The most important problems affecting our society today could be solved within our lifetime.

I disagree with the argument that most important problems facing our society today could be overcome in our life time.

What are the most important problems? In my opinion, they are poverty and war. Despite the fact that many people live well in the developed countries, there are billions of people starving in the regions like Africa and mid-Asia. Besides, the conflicts between countries have made millions of residents homeless. These two problems are the major problems that halt the development of human beings.

Unfortunately, there is only little hope that these problems could be solved in a century.

First of all, poverty and war have been existed for centuries. Great emperors and kings had created a splendid dynasty, but none could bring peace and wealth to people all over the world. Actually, those political or military leaders even accelerated the process by invading other nations. The glory of their dynasty was achieved at the cost of poverty and war to other countries.

In addition, poverty and war are close related to the nature of human being, which is difficult to alter. In some occasions, the greed leads to the war, and the war leads to the poverty. Most countries suffering from poverty are involved in regional wars between nations, and it is always the desire of acquiring more land or raiding more gold that resulted in the conflict, which is hard to avoid. Although technology advancement has greatly refigured the human mind, it can seldom change our greed for wealth.

Moreover, it is no surprise that scientific technology is essentially widening the gap between rich and poor countries. The developed countries are running in a positive cycle in that they use brains to generate wealth, while the poor countries are struggling because of the lack of funds and knowledge investment. The poverty and illiteracy are facilitating the fall of the nation. Technologies monopolized by the developed world have played a negative role, slowing the step of the developing world.

Last but not least, leaders around the globe have gathered several times, trying to solve these problems in recent decades. However, they simply failed to achieve the expectations of the people. The global cooperations have already become a battlefield between various politicians. The project aiming at helping poor country often evolves into the strategy to control the resource of that country.

It is true that technologies like the Internet have connected the world together. However, the disparity in interests of people coming from different countries dooms the failure of eliminating poverty and war nowadays. I admit that there is possibility in thousands of years later, but not now, not so fast.

感谢批改的童鞋！~

baxiacandyUID: 3203456

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of all, tutors have professional knowledge required for solving difficult schoolwork problems, while his classmate might not be qualified enough. Professional tutors have been trained for a specific subject or course. When you turn to their help, they have the capability to answer your questions. For example, it is sometimes incredibly hard to solve certain mathematic problems. Only through taking command of all the formulas and equations in a familiar way can one go through these problems. For the professional tutor, it may be a piece of cake due to his familiarity with schoolwork. However, as for a friend, he may misguide you with his own idea instead of the true answer. f# i4 ]4 I4

Secondly, tutors acquire the professional qualities for tutoring, such as experience and patience. They have experienced a lot in questions and answers so that they are acquainted with the reason students cannot solve certain questions, or the point where most students are confused of. In that way, some questions seem to be a piece of cake for them. More important, they usually own the quality of being patience, which is a remedy for those whose fundamentals of the subject is not solid at all. Through patient tutoring, hard problems could be dissolved into small parts, and then be solved.

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Last but not least, tutors possess the art of telling you the answer. With experience, they will probably not tell you the answer right away, but offer you hint instead. For one thing, cues from tutor might inspire you with ideas of solution to the question. It is widely acknowledged that the question will leave you a deeper impression if it is you who have done it rather than someone else tell you the answer. In contrast, his classmate might give out the answer immediately, which will bring no actual benefit for him. * Q6 _% |% F- y

In conclusion, turning to a professional tutor is more helpful. I believe he should call a tutor at once.

实在是不知道怎么改，觉得写得太好，无论是句子还是整体文章的构思，都相当的漂亮。而且自己水平有限，这样的作文多多学习的来不及，不要说改了！大侠加油，写得很好。不好意思，这么晚才发上来

蓝色字体是我觉得用的很好的搭配，学习了！

sillydsUID: 2985444

I disagree with the argument that most important problems facing our society today could be overcome in our life time.
What are the most important problems? In my opinion, they are poverty and war. Despite the fact that many people live well in the developed countries, there are billions of people starving in the(删除) regions like Africa and mid-Asia. Besides, the conflicts between countries have made millions of residents homeless. These two problems are the major problems that halt the development of human beings.

Unfortunately, there is only little hope that these problems could be solved in a century. First of all, poverty and war have been existed(have existed) for centuries. Great emperors and kings had created a(删除) splendid dynasty, but none could bring peace and wealth to people all over the world. Actually, those political or military leaders even accelerated the process by invading other nations. The glory of their dynasty was achieved at the cost of poverty and war to other countries(Furthermore, for the glory of their dynasty, those political or military leaders accelerated the expansion of region through invasion, at the cost of poverty and war to other countries.)

In addition, poverty and war are close(closely) related to the nature of human being, which is difficult to alter. In some occasions, the greed leads to the war, and the war leads to the poverty. Most countries suffering from poverty are involved in regional wars between nations, and it is always the desire of acquiring more land or raiding more gold that resulted in the conflict, which is hard to avoid. Although technology advancement has greatly refigured the human mind, it can seldom change our greed for wealth.

Moreover, it is no surprise that scientific technology is essentially widening the gap between rich and poor countries. The developed countries are running in a positive cycle in that they use brains to generate wealth, while the poor countries are struggling because of the lack of funds and knowledge investment. The poverty and illiteracy are facilitating the fall of the nation. Technologies monopolized by the developed world have played a negative role, slowing the step of the developing world.

Last but not least, leaders around the globe have gathered several times, trying to solve these problems in recent decades. However, they simply failed to achieve the expectations of the people. The global cooperations have already become a battlefield between various politicians. The project aiming at helping poor country often evolves into the strategy to control the resource of that country.

It is true that technologies like the Internet have connected the world together. However, the disparity in interests of people coming from different countries dooms the failure of eliminating poverty and war nowadays. I admit that there is possibility in thousands of years later, but not now, not so fast.

文章总体不错，简洁的开头，论证较好，
但有语法错误，纯属个人意见

figuechenUID: 2850619

2.17
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? People today can solve many important problems so they do not need help from the government. Use specific reasons to support your answer.


In my opinion, it is certainly not the case that people can solve important problems without the help from the government.

It is admitted that non-government organizations (NGO) has been playing a significant role in both regional and worldwide events. There are many NGOs which aim at not only eliminating the intrusions of human rights, but also aiding the poor in undeveloped nations. Great progress has been made thanks to the efforts of these organizations.

However, that does not mean that government can be neglected when people are trying to reach a deal which will solve important problems.

First of all, governments are closely related to both domestic and worldwide issues. Take poverty and war for example, countries suffering from poverty are always linked with regional wars. Conflicts between nations can only be figured out through negotiations between the political or military leaders who enjoy the immense power over these issues. In such cases, whether wealth and peace for people in those countries can be acquired depends not only on the aiding of the NGOs, but also on the endeavor of the leaders. Despite the call of the mass media, civil wars have remained in some countries in Africa, bringing endless pains and sufferings to the residents. It fully indicates that people alone is unlikely to work out the problem unless the government is involved.

What's more, government is the concentration of power, in other words, they can make full use of these power in emergencies. When it comes to the economic crisis, people could have argued with one another and failed to make an accord, while the government could stand out and launch a new policy to recover the economy. What the U.S. President Roosevelt has done during the Great Depression serves as an excellent example. More important, when the disaster strikes an area, the government could send out troops without hesitation to help people there deal with the catastrophe, like what Chinese government did after the Sichuan Earthquake. The Chinese army marched three days without resting in order to reach the town cut off from civilizations by the high mountains, which is demanding for NGOs. They might play an active role in the reconstruction in these areas, but would probably fail the expectation of the refugees to respond fast.

In conclusion, despite the fact that NGOs can perform well in certain fields, they are not capable to find a solution to every problem without the presence of the government now.

figuechenUID: 2850619

2.18 独立
100821NA Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? We should never be impolite to another person.  

In my opinion, politeness should always be adopted as one of the major principles in communication.

Viewed in a utilitarian perspective, impoliteness such as anger, arrogance, not to mention junk words spilled to someone, might eventually deprive you of a potential good friend. Since it is universally acknowledged that mutual respect is the fundamental of a pair of friends, every rude behavior may harm your friendship, just like pouring the water to the ground. It is not difficult to perform it, but impossible to reverse the process, and win your friend back. Friends are the paths to your destination, and an enemy is like a high mountain which cut the route. You will feel regret when you realize that your impoliteness has built numerous obstacles towards your life goal.

However, that does not mean that you should act like a doll to mask your inner impoliteness. In a philosophical sense, impoliteness merely reflects your impotence. To be a person of strong will, respect for others from bottom of your heart is essential. For example, anger leads to hatred, and thus violates the inner peace, and the impulse which is often related to anger sometimes ruins your positive emotions and sensibilities, without which incredible offences are far from rare. Another example is that arrogance, which is closely connected with bias, always exerts great influence on the formation of discrimination. Although the idea that every man is born equal has served as the primary principles in civilized world, arrogance still plays a negative role in communications among people and worse still, leads to the intrusion to that principle.

Obviously, nothing should be spared to create an inner peace in our mind, resulting in less offences to others. Politeness derives from not only respect and equality but also inner strength. When you hold on your fury next time, please tell yourself that you are gaining a friend, reducing the number of your enemies, and more important, consolidating your inner sense.

美蓝UID: 3211855

改得有些晚了，昨天的作文实在没有来得及写，不好意思。。。

下垂眼之兔UID: 3249047

楼主啊 我不是歪楼，新手一枚想问一下 如何链接到你当天的文的呢？

figuechenUID: 2850619

改得有些晚了，昨天的作文实在没有来得及写，不好意思。。。
美蓝 发表于 2012-2-18 20:44

多谢啊~~改得真认真~以后等你写了PM我，我再帮你改~

figuechenUID: 2850619

楼主啊 我不是歪楼，新手一枚想问一下 如何链接到你当天的文的呢？
下垂眼之兔 发表于 2012-2-18 21:06

编辑你的帖子，然后再点“参与/回复主题”，这时地址栏上的链接就是你修改的帖子了~

idealibtUID: 2667256

每次看这样的习作都觉得是一种视觉及mental的享受。。。。

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sodapengUID: 3242849

。。。。。膜拜中，什么时候我也能写出这样的文呢。。。哎。。自己的作文太肤浅了。。

figuechenUID: 2850619

每次看这样的习作都觉得是一种视觉及mental的享受。。。。

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idealibt 发表于 2012-2-19 21:07

感谢！~你的作文昨天才放上来吧？我今晚改哈。。。

figuechenUID: 2850619

。。。。。膜拜中，什么时候我也能写出这样的文呢。。。哎。。自己的作文太肤浅了。。
sodapeng 发表于 2012-2-20 00:26

非常感谢~~共同进步~