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Frankie0616UID: 2763738

2月21日 100312NA Do you agree ordisagree with the following statement? To make children to well at school,parents should limit the hour that a child spends on watching TV. Use specificreasons to support your answer.

Nowadays,due to the prosperous development of technology, television gradually gainsincreasing popularity among citizens, especially among juvenile. It isundeniable that television offers us more opportunity and channel to obtain informationand broadens our horizons. However, the popularity and favor of television may giverise to negative consequences, which is opposite to original intension. From myperspective, in order to guarantee the time on study, parents should limit thehour that a child spends on watching TV.

Firstof all, spending too much time watching TV will definitely produce massphysical problems, such as shortsightedness. The research arranged by theHealth and Hygiene Administration in the United States shows that thepercentage of shortsighted students increased from 40 percent to 60 percentduring the last 20 years. In addition, the main reason causing shortsightednessis watching TV or playing computer games without limitation. What’s more, ifone cannot keep a correct gesture when watching TV, he may be likely to appear numerousproblems around necks and backs. To sum up, watching TV without reasonable limitationwill have a negative impact in students’ healthy, which may disturb their regularstudy.

Anothercrucial aspect I want to mention is that some TV program with violence anderoticism may do harm to for young students. Since they are too young todistinguish the right from the wrong, they may learn some bad things or behaviorswhen watching TV without reasonable guidance. Once students attain thoseharmful and violence information, they may unconsciously imitate thosebehaviors. Moreover, those violence behaviors transform into bad characteristicwithout correct direction. In general, parents should not only limit the hourthat children spend on watching TV, but also provide correct guidance forstudents.

Lastbut not the least, spending more time watching TV may naturally reduce the timethat student focus on learning. Take my sister as an example. When she was insenior school, she was fascinated by comic and animation. What’ more, she spentat least 3 hour watching comic program every night. Since she paid too muchattention on comic and animation, she cannot draw her mind and interest onstudy and she failed in the final examination.

Ina conclusion, watching TV has profoundly effect on students’ growing in massaspects. For the reasons presented above, I strongly commit to the fact thatparents should control the hour that children spend on TV and offer correctguidance and direction.

gtlddsUID: 3228712

2月21日 100312NA Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? To make children to well at school, parents should limit the hour that a child spends on watching TV. Use specific reasons to support your answer.
Nowadays, due to the prosperous development of technology, television gradually gains increasing popularity among citizens, especially among juvenile（青少年，没用过这个词学习下~）. It is undeniable that television offers us more opportunity and channel to obtain information and broadens our horizons. （这句感觉挺好的）However, the popularity and favor of television may give rise to negative consequences, which is opposite to original intension. From my perspective, in order to guarantee the time on study, parents should limit the hour that a child spends on watching TV.
表明同意
First of all, spending too much time watching TV will definitely produce mass physical problems, such as shortsightedness. The research arranged by the Health and Hygiene Administration in the United States shows that the percentage of shortsighted students increased from 40 percent to 60 percent during the last 20 years. In addition, the main reason causing shortsightedness is watching TV or playing computer games without limitation. What’s more, If one cannot keep a correct gesture when watching TV, he may be likely to appear numerous problems around necks and backs. To sum up, watching TV without reasonable limit ation will have a negative impact in students’ healthy, which may disturb their regular study.
对健康不好。有例子很充实。
Another crucial aspect I want to mention is that some TV program with violence and eroticism may do harm to for young students. Since they are too young to distinguish the right from the wrong, they may learn some bad things or behaviors when watching TV without reasonable guidance. Once students attain those harmful and violence information, they may unconsciously imitate （喜欢这个说法）those behaviors. Moreover, those violence behaviors transform into bad characteristic without correct direction. In general, parents should not only limit the hour that children spend on watching TV, but also provide correct guidance for students.
不良信息。你看没看另一个人的作文，好多用法都好像啊。。。= =我还以为弄错了
另外这一段最后感觉没有点到点上，应该提及一下对学习的影响。不过这一段结构很清晰。
Last but not the least, spending more time watching TV may naturally reduce the time that student focus on learning. Take my sister as an example. When she was in senior school, she was fascinated by comic and animation. What’ more, she spent at least 3 hour watching comic program every night. Since she paid too much attention on comic and animation, she cannot draw her mind and interest on study and she failed in the final examination.
可以说一下家长限制时间之后的效果，（也就是对学习有帮助了）我觉得更能凸显主题。例子挺清晰的。
In a conclusion, watching TV has profoundly （喜欢。你们可能看了同一篇范文，哈哈）effect on students’ growing in mass aspects. For the reasons presented above, I strongly commit to the fact that parents should control the hour that children spend on TV and offer correct guidance and direction.


你有好多词语都连在一起了，帮你分了分。一定要打空格啊。
你占位之后编辑一下原来的帖子就好，不要再发一个了，差一点没找到你~
你和那位同学惊人的同步了，- -
例子还是写的很详细的。内容也很丰富。
有值得我学习的地方！水平有限，有什么改的不对的地方请见谅！

Frankie0616UID: 2763738

No one could deny that fact that the numbers of graduated students and recruited teachers sharply soar year by year. That phenomenon definitely reflect that the academic environment is perfected gradually, which makes a remarkable impact in education. As to me, I am firmly convinced that we are easier to attain a high quality education than in the past. My reasons are as followed.

The first fact I am presenting is that the academic environment is perfected year by year, since our government provide mass financial support and preferential policy. Even if one does know from concrete example “the Hope Project” arranged by our government, one could deduce it from general principle. Additionally, the quality of learning facilities is apparently improved due to the powerful financial support. As a result, our students are able to gain more opportunities and channels to attain the high quality academic resource.

Another aspect I would like to mention is that more and more outstanding graduates prefer to dedicate themselves to education enterprise, which will bring about profound impacts on students and schools, and even society as a whole. We are able to deduce a classical truth from common sense that is students will receive more excellence education and direction with numerous higher qualities of teachers. Undoubtedly, the quality of teacher will naturally improve since the competition to be a teacher will definitely become fiercer than before. In a word, people are easier to receive better education and guidance by more excellent teachers.

Last but not the least, ever-accelerated updating of internet ensure us to absorb more knowledge and information than before. It is widely acknowledged that computer has become an indispensible part in our daily life, which is conductive to attain knowledge in an easier and more comfortable way. Take myself as an example. In order to improve my English, I always watch many English science programs on line, such as Discovery. It actually benefits not only to my listening, but also enrich my scientific knowledge. In a word, the development of internet directly provides more channels to receive more knowledge in a comfortable way and broadens our horizons.

For the reasons presented above, I strongly commit to the fact that the modern society has provided a more comfortable academic environment for citizens, which ensure us to become educated and obtain functional knowledge more easily and less laborious.

gtlddsUID: 3228712

看到修改了，谢谢

Frankie0616UID: 2763738

4# gtldds 马上改

sodapengUID: 3242849

已改~

sodapengUID: 3242849

我昨天晚上就给你改了啊。。就在楼上啊、、= =

Frankie0616UID: 2763738

7# sodapeng 22号的还没有改

yagushou26UID: 3141058

No one could deny that fact that the numbers of graduated students and recruited teachers sharply soar（soar就有sharply的意思了吧） year by year. That phenomenon definitely reflect（s） that the academic environment is perfected gradually, which makes a remarkable impact in(on) education. As to me, I am firmly convinced that we are easier to attain a high quality education than in the past. My reasons are as followed.

The first fact I am presenting is that the academic environment is perfected year by year, since our government provide mass financial support and preferential policy. Even if one does know from concrete example “the Hope Project” arranged by our government, one could deduce it from general principle. Additionally, the quality of learning facilities is apparently improved due to the powerful financial support. As a result, our students are able to gain more opportunities and channels to attain the high quality academic resource.

Another aspect I would like to mention is that more and more outstanding graduates prefer to dedicate themselves to education enterprise, which will bring about profound impacts on students and schools, and even society as a whole. We are able to deduce a classical truth from common sense that is students will receive more excellence education and direction with numerous higher qualities of teachers（这句话简化一下就是numerous higher qualities 我觉得应该是numerous teachers of higher quality）. Undoubtedly, the quality of teacher will naturally improve since the competition to be a teacher will definitely become fiercer than before. In a word, people are easier to receive better education and guidance by more excellent teachers. ;

Last but not the least, ever-accelerated updating of internet ensure us to absorb more knowledge and information than before. It is widely acknowledged that computer has become an indispensible(indispensable) part in our daily life, which is conductive to attain knowledge in an easier and more comfortable way. Take myself as an example. In order to improve my English, I always watch many English science programs on line, such as Discovery. It actually benefits not only to(去掉to) my listening, but also enrich my scientific knowledge. In a word, the development of internet directly provides more channels to receive more knowledge in a comfortable way and broadens our horizons.

For the reasons presented above, I strongly commit to(commit to?这个用法我没有见过哈~看上去有点奇怪。不知道是不是能用。) the fact that the modern society has provided a more comfortable academic environment for citizens, which ensure us to become educated and obtain functional knowledge more easily and less laborious.

sodapengUID: 3242849

8# Frankie0616 22号我和你不是一组啊、、、

laozhanguotoeflUID: 3246339

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Frankie0616UID: 2763738

Nowadays, a growing number of people tend to live under the illusion that people seem to be not able to establish true friendship with others unless they are similar in material possession. They consistently maintain that there is a certain gap between the rich and the poor, which directly hamper their communication, even ruin their relationship. As far as I am concerned, I firmly oppose this opinion. Of countless facts that strengthen my viewpoint, I will present the most significant and conspicuous ones here.

First of all, what I would like to emphasize is that the equal material foundation is not the sole element to develop a true friendship. Even if one does not know from concrete example the friendship between Marx and Engels, one could deduce it from general principle. Although there was an inevitable gap in some aspects between Marx and Engels, they established their remarkable and pure friendship based on the same faith and mutual support. In a word, friendship, the purest emotion in the world, isn’t based on the mutual benefit of financial profit or meaningless equality on society stage.  

On the contrary, another significant aspect I want to demonstrate is that interest and appreciation are the most suitable catalyst that stimulates a relationship with others. By ways of illustration, one needs to look further than the legend between Plato and Aristotle. Although Aristotle is a famous philosopher, who initiated and instructed Plato at first, they gradually established a friendship thanks to the same faith and favor of philosophy. Since the prosperous development on economics, many people seem to fail to take into account the basic fact that interest and appreciation lead to a pure and lasting friendship.  

Last but not the least; an identical target also contributes to communicate with others, even set up a relationship under mutual support and assistance. Take myself as an example. Recently I made friend with a senior, who are also preparing for Toefl. What‘s more, we provides many constructive suggestions to each other, which are conductive to enhance our English quality. As a result, we become best friend and encourage each other to prepare to examination. In general, a similar goal or target provides people more opportunity and channel to understand each other and strengthen their relationship.

To sum up, given those sagacious reasons which are discussed above, I strongly believe that an identical interest and goal definitely will bring about profound impacts on establishing a true friendship, instead of the meaningless equality on material foundation.

laozhanguotoeflUID: 3246339

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Frankie0616UID: 2763738

Along with the ever-accelerated development of science and technology, the world undoubtedly changes a lot. What’s more, the life style and environment is totally different from 50 years ago when our grandparents lived. Therefore, a portion of people hold an opinion that the advices from their grandparents have no use since they are living in an information era, which is extremely different from 50 years ago. As for me, I firmly oppose this opinion that the advices or instruction from my parents must be emphasized for the following reasons:

First of all, although the world is evolving in a remarkable speed, there are many valuable virtues and standard behavior, which will not change or disappear along with time. No one could deny that we should follow many social standards and inherit valuable virtues from elder generations, and those advices from elder generation should be regarded as sagacious instructions, which will orientate us with a correct direction. To illustrate exemplify this; there is an example that is very persuasive. As the old saying goes, honesty is the best policy. Our grandparents may urge it again and again, in order to make sure we remember and follow it. In a word, we ought to listen carefully and inherit those sagacious instructions given by our grandparents, which provide us with a correct orientation.

Another crucial aspect I would like to maintain is that many advices from our grandparents may be more meaningful and intelligent, since they experienced much more than us. It is undeniable that our grandparents has witnessed numerous historic points, such as World War two, which lead them become more gentle and sagacious. As a consequence, if being in dilemma, we had better ask our elder grandparents for guidance, since they may consider problems more comprehensive and cautious. In a word, advices from well experienced grandparents may be more cautious and intelligence than personal pondering, which deserve to learn and adopt.  

Last but not the least; following advices from elder generations have profound impacts on building up a harmonious relationship with families. If grandparents show more respect and consideration to their seniorities, the relationship between families will definitely become more united than before. In addition, a recent investigation shows that a harmonious family relationship may be conductive to one’s longevity. From what I presented above, we can safely make a conclusion that if one listen and follow grandparent’s advice, it will not only do good to establish a harmonious family relationship, but also make a positive influence on seniorities’ health and longevity.

From the persuasive reasons presented above, I strongly believe that we ought to accept the advices given by our experienced grandparents, which will bring about far-reaching impacts on our personal development and even our family as a whole.

sodapengUID: 3242849

已改~