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2月29日 100924NA Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? College or University should offer students more preparation before they start working.

The last few decades witnessed the expansion of population and university plan, graduates in growing numbers are crowding into the competitive job markets. As a matter of fact, lack of practical experience and professional knowledge, a certain number of graduates seem to be not able to adapt to the employment market and display their talent. Therefore, I firmly believe that more essential preparation should be provided for students before graduation by college or university.

In the first place, no one can deny the basic fact that a qualified university shoulders the responsibility to instruct and cultivate their students that ensure they can handle enough professional knowledge and apply it to practical situation. Most important of all, the occupation-orientated curriculum contributes directly to successfully obtain employment and accomplishment. In a word, compared with professional curriculum, occupation-orientated curriculum is also an indispensible part of education, which should be emphasized by colleges.

What is also worthy to mention is that those preparation before graduation will become a examination, which may test whether students obtain enough knowledge and professional skills for practical work. Take myself as an example. Major in journalism, if I have an internship in my school newspaper, I will definitely figure out if my professional knowledge and ability is enough to become a professional journalist. A recent survey shows that those graduates who had internship experience before graduation will perform more excellent than others. To sum up, if colleges or universities offer more opportunities to internship, students will not only correct their shortcomings, but also perform more excellent in practical work.

Last but not the least, with advanced preparation and guidance, students are able to adjust their attitude towards competitive society and job market and put them into a beneficial position in the job markets. In Tsinghua University, every year the seniors share their own experiences with the new graduates about how to overcome difficulties they encountered in work, and how to adjust to the entirely different environment. This kind of activities, arranges by universities, will assist students to get a clear understanding of society and adjust their attitude as soon as possible.

From what have been discussed above, as an indispensable part of education, this kind of preparation and orientation will bring about profound impacts to graduates, which may force them to strengthen their abilities and correct attitude towards competitive. Hence, it is obligated for college and university to offer more preparation and guidance to their students.

yxlucy321UID: 3258583

The last few decades witnessed the expansion of population and university plan, graduates in growing numbers are crowding into the competitive job markets. As a matter of fact, lack of practical experience and professional knowledge, a certain number of graduates seem to be not able to adapt to the employment market and display their talent. Therefore, I firmly believe that more essential preparations should be provided for students before graduation by(应该用from？) college or university.

In the first place, no one can deny the basic fact that a qualified university shoulders the responsibility to instruct and cultivate their students that （换为，which非限定性定语从句岂不更清楚？）/color]ensure they can handle enough professional knowledge and apply it to practical situation. Most important of all, the occupation-orientated curriculum contributes directly to successfully obtain employment and accomplishment. In a word, compared with professional curriculum, occupation-orientated curriculum is also an indispensible part of education, which should be emphasized by colleges.
What is also worthy to mention is that those preparation before graduation will become a examination, which may test whether students obtain enough knowledge and professional skills for practical work. Take myself as an example. Major in journalism,（这里是短语嘛，必须得是句子的嘛） if I have an internship in my school newspaper, I will definitely figure out if my professional knowledge and ability is（are） enough to become a professional journalist. A recent survey shows that those graduates who had internship experience before graduation will perform more excellent than others. To sum up, if colleges or universities offer more opportunities to internship, students will not only correct their shortcomings, but also perform more excellent in practical work.
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Last but not the least, with advanced preparation and guidance, students are able to adjust their attitude towards competitive society and job market and put them into a beneficial position in the job markets. In Tsinghua University, every year the seniors share their own experiences with the new graduates about how to overcome difficulties they encountered in work, and how to adjust to the entirely different environment. This kind of activities, arranges by universities, will assist students to get a clear understanding of society and adjust their attitude as soon as possible.
From what have been discussed above, as an indispensable part of education, this kind of preparation and orientation will bring about profound impacts to graduates, which may force them to strengthen their abilities and correct attitude towards competitivecompetition?. Hence, it is obligated for college and university to offer more preparation and guidance to their students.
红色的好词，紫色的修改，楼主的观点不错~~请不吝赐教~
小妹新手，，改的不好，，共同进步哈~

Frankie0616UID: 2763738

3.1 独立写作
Which one is the major responsibility of a qualified professor? Doing scientific research or trying hardest to instruct students? In the last few years, this problem has caused widespread public concern. From my perspective, I strongly believe the primary mission of a college professor is doing scientific research, which will have far-reaching impacts to students, as well as the world in a whole. Among countless factors that strengthen my viewpoint, there are three conspicuous aspects.   

First of all, those researches may produce extraordinary influences in the world and lead to a real breakthrough, such as a solution to global warming or a medicine for Aids. However, many parents firmly maintain that students are being neglected by professors, because professors do research day and night. Those parents seem to overlook the significance and nature of scientific researches. An authoritative investigation shows that in the last few decades most of drugs and medicines were foremost manufactured by professors in the laboratory. In a word, what the professors pursuing and striving will undoubtedly benefit everyone in the world, including university students.  

Furthermore, behind my preference lies an equally important fact that doing research forces professor to enlarge his knowledge and keep at the forefront of the science field. It is undisputable the science and technology change with every passing day and the competition is more intense than ever before. As a consequence, only doing research consistently can the professor keep at the forefront of the field. Meanwhile, his or she will have more impetus and enthusiasm to share him or her research achievement to students, which makes them keep a clear understanding of science.

Another crucial aspect I would like to mention is that students will gain more practical knowledge and experience when assisting their professors to do research. Students in growing number are inclining to study in research laboratories as assistants. It definitely enriches students’ professional knowledge and experience when helping professors take experiment, analyze data as well as writing a report. Compared with the boring teaching, it is more effective and vivid to combine teaching with doing research. This method may be conductive to both teachers and students.

Take into account what have been mentioned above, we may safely draw the conclusion that the major responsibility of a professor is to do research, since it will produce more profound impacts to students as well as the society as a whole.

Frankie0616UID: 2763738

3.1 综合写作
The reading material points out that the buzzing is very harmful to both customers and society. However, the lecture given by a buzzer argued that the passage was misleading. And he casted doubt on the reading material by providing 3 points are contrary to the passage.
In the first place, the buzzers always tell truth to customers. According to the reading material, since the buzzers are paid, they always provide the customers with incorrect information. However, the buzzer stated that he was paid by company, because he will tell the truth and his own experience about using the product to the customers, instead of paying to lie. The point obviously contradicts what the passage shows us.
Secondly, the consumers who listen to buzzers will not always believe what the buzzer said, and ask many questions to buzzer about the product. The buzzers claimed that when he chats with a consumer, the consumer will not believe unless he perfectly replied the questions about the product. This point differs from the reading material in the reading states that consumers always listen buzzers without any criticism and doubt.
Third, the buzzer maintained that, on the contrary to the reading, the buzzing will not do harm to the social relationship. The reason explained by the buzzer is that they sincerely communicate with consumers to introduce the product, which they had good experience to use it. This still contradict to the reading, because the reading material illustrates that after meeting buzzer socially, people will have unfavorable attitude towards trusting others in the society.

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亲，你的三月一日综合君哦~~
期待你的回改哦~~~

Frankie0616UID: 2763738

3.2号综合

The listening material, the lecturer made several points about the"let it burn" policy. The professor argued that the fires would nothave disastrous impacts but produce creative influences in the long term.However, the reading passage contended that the "let it burn" policymay cause the large scale of damage such as the forest fires in Yellow Park.The professor casted doubts on that reading passage by providing 3 points arecontrary to the passage.

First of all, the population and diversity of the plants and vegetationincreased after the fire in Yellowstone. According to the reading material,some trees died out and smaller plants were incinerated. However, the professorindicated that fires gave more opportunities to new plants, which has beenshielded before. This directly contradict what the passage shows us.

Second, the population of animals did not affected by the fires. Theprofessor claimed that the population of animals recovered soon after the firesand other animals obtained more living opportunities, which made the food chainbecame stronger than before. This point differs from the reading, which statesthat the fire may destroy the habitats of animals and kill some small animals.

Thirdly, the professor maintained that, on the contrary to the passage,fires would not happen frequently and it doesn't make any negative effects tothe tourism. The reason explained by professor is that the park recovered fromthe fires and tourists came to Yellowstone as usual. This still contradictswhat the reading passage indicates, it illustrates that the fires destroyed thevalue of tourism and the number of tourists may decrease, which deduced theeconomic income.

echo52888UID: 3260900

3.1作文改完了，不好意思晚了！

Frankie0616UID: 2763738

3.2 独立写作

The majority of university students may have ever encountered some academic problems when conducting scientific experiments or writing lab projects. Confronting with certain complex puzzle, we may seek good solutions from acquaintances around, who will be the most suitable person selected? Classmates or a professional tutor? Choices naturally vary from person to person. From my perspective, I am inclined to teach him or her by myself. I will reason and provide cogent evidences to strengthen my points as follow.

In the first place, assisting friends in solving academic problems will actually correct their deficiencies and reinforce our relationship to a certain extent. No one could deny that basic fact that one will become pleasure to be the first person whom is turned to when encountering problems. As a consequence, I will definitely try hardest to help my friends figure out the puzzle and point out their blind points at certain areas. Compared with stranger tutor, I may be more enthusiastic and warmhearted, since this kind of assistance will produce driving influence to further our relationship. It is indisputable that sincere assistance is beneficial to establish a stronger relationship.

Another essential aspect I would like to maintain is that, although professional tutor are skilled in some certain aspects, they are not familiar with our curriculums or professors. On the contrary, because my classmates and I learned the course at the same time and instructed by the same professor, I could totally seize the key points in the course. Then those crucial and puzzling points I caught may be the most adequate solution that solved my friend’s problem. However, professional tutors must spend mass time and energy on finding out the crucial point in our course, which may be less efficient and more laborious. Asking classmates for assistance is a sagacious choice, since it is more efficient and convenient.

Last but not least, it is undeniable that mutual aid leads to mutual progress. When helping classmates seek the correct solution when confronting with puzzle, we may unconsciously reinforce our professional knowledge at certain areas. For instance, if my friend turned to me when puzzled by a chemical experiment, I must comprehend every process and detail in the experiment. After guiding him or her to conduct the experiment perfectly, I may procure a new understanding of this difficult experiment and enlarge my professional knowledge. To sum up, providing aid to others will enhance individual ability at the same time.

From what I have explained above, it would be reasonable to believe that compared with receiving guidance from professional tutor, instructing classmate to solve problem will be more sagacious.

Frankie0616UID: 2763738

3.3综合
The passage claims that genetic modified trees will bring a lot of benefits. However, the professor raised serious counterarguments against this statement by providing the disadvantages of genetic modified trees.

First, genetic modified trees cannot survive when facing serious natural disaster. According to the passage, it states that genetic modified trees will be hardier than nature trees, since it has been designed to prevent from certain problem such as virus infections. However, the professor argued that since all genetic modified trees are genetically uniform, no trees could survive when facing a different condition such as climate changing. This point is absolutely contradicted to the passage.

Second, the professor contended that genetic modified trees would cost money than natural trees, because farmers who plant those trees must spend much more money on buying seeds and pay money to company every year. This point differs from the reading passage in that passage states that genetic modified trees will grow faster than nature ones, will make more profits.
                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                  
Third, the professor pointed out that, on the contrary to the reading, genetic modified trees would hamper nature trees’ growth, even made them died out. The reason explained by the professor is that since genetic modified trees will compete with nature trees and get more resource than others, nature trees may gradually extinct. This still contradicted to the reading passage, because it maintains that genetic modified tree will prevent wild trees from overexploited.

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改好了~~楼主过目~
记得回改哦~~

Frankie0616UID: 2763738

3月5日 100213NA Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? People who cannot accept criticism will not succeed in a team.

In contemporary society, solidarity and cooperation is undoubtedly the shortcut to implement one’s goal. There is no denying the fact that the strength of an individual is limited, but that of a team is boundless. Therefore, we must adjust to the surrounding and learn to how to get along with teammates to make mutual progress, especially accepting other’s well-meaning criticism. Personally speaking, I am inclined that an individual who cannot handle criticism from others of a team will not have an excellent work performance and eventually be discarded by his team.

The first plain truth I am presenting is that those well-meaning criticism provide us with a valuable opportunity to correct our drawback and improve our comprehensive ability. However competent you are, however experienced, you must have some unknown and possess some shortcomings. Generally, everyone will make mistakes that we may ignore them unconsciously. On the contrary, if one of your teammates point out your mistake and give your criticism and guidance, you will no longer erase your shortcoming. Gradually, those suggestions and criticisms will further your personal ability and shape your character. In a word, accepting criticisms from others will bring about profound impacts on our personal development.

What is also worthy to mention is that whether team worker, especially leader is willing to accept criticisms from others or not plays a vital role in determining the work efficiency of a team. The efficiency in a team will be sharply reduce if one dominates every event and refuse any constructive criticism. In contrast, if everyone in the team is willing to accept criticism modestly, the decision they made will be most sagacious and all-around. In addition, they working efficiency and productivity will soar in the foundation of solidarity and cooperation. So, most striving conclusion is that accepting criticism provide engine for reinforce the teamwork and cooperation, which will correspondingly increase the efficiency.

Another essential aspect I would like to highlight is that accepting criticisms shows your respect to others and create a better impression with your teammates. It is widely acknowledged that on one is inclined to cooperate with an arrogant and impolite person. In a word, if you express a favorable attitude to accept other’s suggests and criticism, you are more likely to establish a good relationship with your teammates, and even become sincere friends.

Take account into what I have presented above, it is easy to deduce the reasonable conclusion that accepting criticism is the key to success. Criticism is not only force us to progress, improve work efficiency as well as building up favorable relationship with teammates. All these elements contribute to success.

Frankie0616UID: 2763738

The reading passage points out that the new policy that employees work for a four-day week will bring about many benefits. However, the professor raises serious counterarguments against this statement by providing 3 cogent reasons that are contrary to the passage.

First, a four-day week will not increase company’s profits, but increase their cost. However, according to the passage, it indicates that since employees will feel more rested and make few errors what will reduce the unnecessary cost. The professor argues that since employees work less, they must hire more people, which will naturally increase their cost, such as health insurance and training expense. This point contradicts what the passage shows us.

Secondly, the professor maintains that a four-day week will not reduce the unemployment rate but lay more stress to the employees. The reason explained by the professor is that, although the work hour is shortened, the company will not hire addition official employees but request their employees to finish the same task in a shorter time. This point differs from the reading material in that material states that if some employees work a four-day week, the workload will shift to others, which will increase the employment rate.

Third, the professor suggests that, on the contrary to the passage, under the new policy, the employees' live standard will not improve, since their incomes will decline. What's more, if they work in a shorter time, they will lose the opportunities of promotion. This point still contradicts to that passage, because the passage illustrates that a four-day week will provide them more time to enjoy life or accompany with families.

Frankie0616UID: 2763738

3月6日 101009NA Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? People can take care of their family members better when they living big cities than in the countryside.

Along with the tendency of modernization and urbanization, people tend to lay more emphasis on chasing a high living standard, including professional medical treatment, advanced education resource and spiritual enjoyment. As a consequence, people in growing number have an inclination to dwell in large cities, where provide more benefits than rural places for living. Personally speaking, I firmly support this statement that living in advanced cities contributes to a higher living standard and more favorable personal development for everyone, including youngsters and the aged. Among the countless reasons strengthen my viewpoint, I will present the most cogent ones here.

First and foremost, compared with rural place, advanced cities provide residents with more efficient and effective medical treatment, which may lead to longevity. Along with the promotion of medical technology and update of medical network, nowadays citizens are able to cope with numerous diseases than before and live longer. In large cities, if one of your families feels uncomfortable, you just call 120 and the ambulance will arrive in on more than 5 minutes. Since well-developed medical treatment, few and few citizens died unnecessarily and wastefully. What’s more, the government is adopting a great number preferential policy to residents, such as free medical insurance for the aged, which may directly benefit to them. Therefore, providing more perfect medical treatment and social warfare, our families will possess a higher quality of living and live healthier and longer.

Furthermore, behind my preference lies an equally important fact that our children are able to acquire more excellent education and further their comprehensive ability. On one could deny the basic fact that large cities absorb more outstanding teachers due to higher salary and possess top facilities and equipments such as computers, professional laboratories and comfortable dorms. In contrast, children in rural place may correspondingly lose the opportunities to obtain advanced education. In a word, living in metropolis is instrumental for children to take access to excellent education and put them into a beneficial position when growing up.

Another aspect I would like to mention is that, since more perfect public sites built up for entertainment and exercise, we may have more available choices when accompanying with families, which is beneficial to reinforce our relationship. For instance, I always play tennis with my father in a modern gym at weekend, which not only help me keep healthy but also strengthen the family relationship with my father. We are surrounded by innumerous public facility, such as parks, gyms and theater in which we can enjoy leisure time with families and build up more harmonious relationship.

All in all, due to well-developed medical treatment, advance educational condition, and abundant public equipments, people will enjoy a higher living standard in modernized cities, by which can people provide favorable care with their families.

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3月6日 101009NA Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? People can take care of their family members better when they living big cities than in the countryside.
Along with the tendency of modernization and urbanization, people tend to lay more emphasis on chasing a high living standard, including professional medical treatment, advanced education resource and spiritual enjoyment. As a consequence, people in a growing number have an inclination to dwell in large cities, where provide more benefits than rural places for living. Personally speaking, I firmly support this statement that living in advanced cities contributes to a higher living standard and more favorable personal development for everyone, including youngsters and the aged. Among the countless reasons strengthen my viewpoint, I will present the most cogent ones here.
First and foremost, compared with rural places, advanced cities provide residents with more efficient and effective medical treatment, which may lead to longevity. Along with the promotion of medical technology and update of medical network, nowadays citizens are able to cope with numerous diseases than before and live longer. In large cities, if one of your families feels uncomfortable, you just call 120 and the ambulance will arrive in on(no) more than 5 minutes. Since well-developed medical treatment, few and few citizens died unnecessarily and wastefully. What’s more, the government is adopting a great number preferential policy to residents, such as free medical insurance for the aged, which may directly benefit to(to删除） them. Therefore, providing more perfect medical treatment and social warfare, our families will possess a higher quality of living and live healthier and longer.
Furthermore, behind my preference lies an equally important fact that our children are able to acquire more excellent education and further their comprehensive ability. On one could deny the basic fact that large cities absorb more outstanding teachers due to higher salary and possess top facilities and equipments such as computers, professional laboratories and comfortable dorms. In contrast, children in rural place may correspondingly lose the opportunities to obtain advanced education. In a word, living in metropolis is instrumental for children to take access to excellent education and put them into a beneficial position when growing up.
Another aspect I would like to mention is that, since more perfect public sites built up for entertainment and exercise, we may have more available choices when accompanying with families, which is beneficial to reinforce our relationship. For instance, I always play tennis with my father in a modern gym at weekend, which not only help me keep healthy but also strengthen the family relationship with my father. We are surrounded by innumerous public facility, such as parks, gyms and theater in which we can enjoy leisure time with families and build up more harmonious relationship.
All in all, due to well-developed medical treatment, advance educational condition, and abundant public equipments, people will enjoy a higher living standard in modernized cities, by which can people provide favorable care with their families.

写的真好，学了很多词，我找了些你用的比较多的词，比如the aged,along with, excellent,要是能多用些他们的同义词就锦上添花了