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对不起，改晚了！！

2月25日 100828NA Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? The main purpose for people who have jobs is for money rather than social status 3 k8 Y9 T. h; K2 O) w0 S6 r

With the rapidly development of modern society, there are many things have changed during past decades. Money and social status are two important factors affect peoples’ lives, and we gain money or improve our social status through working, in another word, having jobs. As far as I know that most people who have jobs are aim for making money rather than social status. I believe that the three most common reasons are as follow（加s）.
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The most important, and sometimes the hardest, human beings need food to survive, which is bought though（through） money, and enough money ensure(加s) people against starve. It means that money is the basic need for human beings. If a man is suffering from hunger, the first thing he want（s?） is money, because money can buy something to eat, he don’t care much about the social status in that case." v2 S3 W& u& O5 J  M
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In addition, we always hear that ‘how much money I could get’ instead of “what a social status I can get” when people get a job. For example, my sister is an engineer now .After she graduated from school, she past(passed) the exam of (the)public functionary. We all happy for her that she could get a good job, but to our surprised, she didn’t go to the government department for work as a official, but work in a foreign company as a worker . she told me that the company pay more money than the government although (一般放句首？)the official has a high social status than a worker. So the main purpose for people who have jobs is for money.# L+

Last but not least, to allow for the increase of the price of commodities, money takes a very important role when people choose jobs, and it is normal that when people gain enough money, his social status would be improved after that. We can see that many richer become the political advisors and political party members.0 A4 D$ k! j- [' {*
In sum, money isn’t everything, but without money you can’t do anything.

楼主君的这篇观点清晰，论据充分，虽然有些小拼写错误，但不太影响。。蓝色是顺便我也学到了的用法~~~~万分期待您的回改~~~谢谢哦！！！

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恩，谢谢你的肯定和建议呢，今天还有篇作文没有完成，明天改你的哈，不好意思哦 16# loveinwc

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加油！

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楼主作文里prepration can make students more confident的点提得特别好！是我没有想到的。

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2.29改完了，迟了些，请见谅！

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楼主君你的三月六日独立呢？如果写完了请站短我哦

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3月9日 110304NA Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? The most important problems affecting our society today could be solved within our lifetime

With the development of our society, we have a convenient and flourish life indeed, however, (there are also many problems) accompanying with some important problems (我个人觉得下划线的内容可换成it), （，可不用）such as pollution, global warming and water shortness（shortage）. It is obvious that we can’t figure them out (我觉得，figure out 是不是用solve 替换更准确呢，仅作参考，呵呵will be unable to solve them) within our lifetime. I want to discuss that in three aspects.

First and foremost, there are(去掉) few people realize the severe results (adverse consequences)of the overrun of industrial development（改为 over-industrialization）. It is a common phenomenon that people desire for more and more profits when they doing their careers (are at work), producing more and more polluted smoke and water(waste gases and water), caring less about the environment . However, as we all know that environment protection is a long hard (long-term) process, it needs everyone take part in, in anther (other) words, it’s a public career (service). So, without the support from the society, without bulk of people pay attention to this, it is hard for us to stop the worse of the environment (environmental pollution aggravating)，我觉得这句话也可以改成：It is hard for us to stop the environmental pollution aggravating without the support from the society and bulk of people)，let alone solve this problem within our lifetime.

In addition, these problems are(do) not appeared suddenly, they can trace back to the early time（many centuries ago）, it is nature(feature) that if we want to solve them, it would take us a long time.(整句可改为：it is feature that would take a long time if we want to solve them) The life span of our (去掉)human being is almost 80 years, despite the babyhood(不懂什么意思), the time we can devote to solve these problems are short.（我觉得可写为：although we can devote our babyhood to solve this problem, we have not enough time to it as well） It is really hard for us solved those problems with our short life.

Last but not least, the region of the problem are wildly, it is not just in our human society, like the global warming, it also effect the animals in the world. For instance, the ice of north is melting year after year, the sea level is increased compared with past decades, result in the polar bear being homeless. We can imagine the difficulty we will face when we figuring these problems, it needs us(to) take care of our animals friends and protect them from food shortness(shortage) or homeless, it needs us (to)put much money and time to do these. Unfortunately, we haven’t (are not) enough capable of doing so with our lifetime.

In sum, human activity is a main factor for forming these important problems, we have to solve these problems though we can’t figure them out within our life span.
觉得，论证的点上可以适当的扩充一下，我的英语挺一般，改的不太好，呵呵，我们互相学习哈(在word里编辑的，传上来后下划线什么都没法显示，，有点不清楚，见谅）