issue4 3.31考 求拍u~~谢啦

山依格紫UID: 3171867

4) Scandals are useful because they focus our attention on problems in ways that no speaker or reformer ever could.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim. In developing and supporting your position, be sure to address the most compelling reasons and/or examples that could be used to challenge your position.

I partially agree with the claim "Scandals are useful because they focus our attention on problems in ways that no speaker or reformer ever could". Admittedly, the exposure of scandals could attachment importance to some facts that we once overlooked and help to put problems in perspective. However, excessive exposure of scandals would have a detrimental impact on people's cognition about things.



Indeed, focusing our attention on problems that we ever neglect, scandals is of use to some extent. Celebrities' scandals could make people realize people's being imperfect , as well as the severity of some problems. Consider Liu Xiaoqing, one of the most well-known actresses in China and the chairman of a media company. Twenty years ago she was accused of tax evasion and tax fraud. With the exposure of this news, all the Chinese were shocked. She was numerous people's idol, how could she evade taxes? However, so it is. It made people have a reconsideration of superstars' status in their heart. Moreover, people became aware of the seriousness of tax evasion and tax fraud among celebrities. As people paid more attention to those celebrities' achievements on the stage than something others beneath the stage, some illegal acts they perform were neglected more easily than ordinaries, thus, the phenomena of tax evasion and tax fraud was popular among those stars. Therefore, scandals are helpful to re-recognize people and problems.



However, too much attention to scandals could make us lose objectivity and impartiality while evaluating people or things. Two months ago, Li Yang, the creator of Crazy English and an excellent English educator in China, was exposed to have domestic violence to his wife, Kim Lee, an American women. With the exposure of this event, it lashed a crowd into anger and people changed their attitudes toward Li. Indeed it makes people realize the seriousness of domestic violence, now when it comes to Li Yang, numerous people would say: he is a violent people. And people seem to neglect his great contributions to the development of English education in China. Indeed he has faults, but he also has numerous achievements and contributions. Unfortunately, some people pay so much attention to scandals that they overlook one's contributions, thus their judgements tend to be tinctured with prejudice.



In addition, in order to be famous some people use scandals to create a hype, which has a detrimental impact on people's cognition, especially on the development of adolescents' psychological health. Take Luo Yufeng as an example, who became an celebrity by speculation. In 2009, she gained attention after passing out flyers in Shanghai seeking for a marriageable boyfriend, who was required to meet excessive requirements. Her overnight fame twists values of a great many of adolescents: if one want to be famous, he/she does not need take pain, he/she can make it just by some outrageous behaviours or words, which badly influences adolescents' development of psychological health.



Summed up,scandals are helpful to some extent, but by no means should we lose sight of the downsides that scandals conduce to. So it is highly suggested that we make a proper balance about scandals and train the ability of analysizing problem objectively.

elee2131UID: 2404579

LZ的用词，词组，句式都好的没话说，
只怪自己才疏学浅，读完还是没整明白文章啥意思
没想到现在GRE作文都进化到这种程度了。。。。。。
还有李阳应该是个violent person，对吧？

山依格紫UID: 3171867

LZ的用词，词组，句式都好的没话说，
只怪自己才疏学浅，读完还是没整明白文章啥意思
没想到现在GRE作文都进化到这种程度了。。。。。。
还有李阳应该是个violent person，对吧？
elee2131 发表于 2012-3-9 08:50

呜~看来我写的很不好~别人都不知道写的啥意思~

chasedream2012UID: 3238888

an American women应是woman吧。
楼主写得是这个：scandals are helpful to some extent, but by no means should we lose sight of the downsides that scandals conduce to. So it is highly suggested that we make a proper balance about scandals and train the ability of analysizing problem objectively.
但是题目要求写得是：
Scandals are useful because they focus our attention on problems in ways that no speaker or reformer ever could.
文中没见到speaker or reformer 这个字眼，感觉要些什么吧，虽然我也觉得貌似不好写。

sophiaqustUID: 3017453

等高人来给点评下，学习~

synchronizationUID: 3217937

同LSS, 我觉得我们需要“解构”这句话，就是把里面的assumption和inference找出来，而不是在承认这句话的基础上来进行让步型的结果论证。比如说一些问题是，scandal对于社会的作用究竟是什么？这些作用是好的吗？让人们开始关注以前没有focus的问题真的是scandal的价值吗？以上是个人意见哈~

ZTreeUID: 3165682

最后一段的例子：如果不是中国人或者不上网的话，恐怕看不懂你的point在哪，这个比前两个事例要失色

另外你没有觉得你前两个例子其实是一回事吗？都是名人、偶像，然后爆出丑闻，然后声名败露。可是怎么就变成一个是揭示真相，一个是偏激攻击了呢？把你第二自然段后半部分所有的tax evasion都换成domestic violence然后接到第三自然段，或者第三自然段中的英语教育改成电影事业然后接到第二段试试，一样都说得通。你的逻辑看似全面，实则混乱。这不是成功的论证。