求斑竹求各路大神指导作文~~

sweetrainbow89UID: 3186874

小女子真的迷茫纠结快致死了....真心不知道自己作文水平到了那个程度，不知道怎么改才能博取高分？~~求各路大神施舍指导~小女子感激万分！


Topic: Increasing the price of petrol isthe best way to solve growing traffic and pollution problems.
To what extent do you agree or disagree?
What other measures do you think might beeffective?

Facing the severe problem, which is related to traffic and pollution,we human being have no alternative but to devise a measure available to addressit. In someone’s view, heightening the price of petrol is suitably the optimalmeans. However I tend to disagree with this point of view.
Surely, traffic congestion and polluting situation are primarily dueto the wide use of excessive amount of vehicle based on gas. Further, it isespecially true that only when the rate of transportation tools need gas islowered can the serious issue be handled greatly. But rising the petrol’sprice, I believe, would indisputably have a negative impact on citizens ratherthan figure out the problem discussed above. I am pretty sure that people whosefinancial income is not supportive to the raising petrol price will keepcomplaining invariably, which may be lead to another problem.
In my opinion, suggesting people who have private vehicles to reducethe frequency of using cars they own through the mass media is the mostappropriate way to slow down the pace of growth of pollution and traffic jam.Taking public transportation tools or riding a bicycle instead of driving a caris ale to largely make the road more unimpeded and will decrease the releasingof polluting gas.
In conclusion, the urgent issue we human facing have to be coped withby looking for a suitable measure such as through advertisement, education institutions.Citizen should be told that the importance of protecting environment and theemergency of traffic problem.

bqianaUID: 193168

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angelvan2011UID: 3104727

楼主，字数不够吧。

另外段与段之间空一行。

sweetrainbow89UID: 3186874

Thanks, could u give a little bit detail comments?

sweetrainbow89UID: 3186874

3# angelvan2011 ok,谢谢

sweetrainbow89UID: 3186874

2# bqiana thx,could u give a little bit detailed comments?

angelvan2011UID: 3104727

2# bqiana thx,could u give a little bit detailed comments?
sweetrainbow89 发表于 2012-3-25 08:24

先重写吧，字数不够是肯定不行的。一开始不用卡40分钟写，越慢越好，写到你自己觉得心满意足再拿出来。找自己的写作问题最重要。