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发表于 2012-8-9 10:12:16 |只看该作者
maoqiu007 发表于 2012-8-7 12:33
zuowen?

太抱歉了!这几天突然有急事,所以没有顾忌上,作文忘贴了,也没有给你们改。我今天会帮你们看好作文的。我的作文贴在27楼。谢谢!!!

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发表于 2012-8-15 10:16:22 |只看该作者
0814作文: easier to be educated today?
I agree with the prompt that people today have more possibilities and abilities to get educated than before. The chances are becoming greater that one child receives long period of free education because of better economic conditions. Also, the widespread of the Internet add more opportunities for people to study by themselves, which greatly improve their learning abilities.

First, Children are easier to get a systematic long-term education than before. This is because the economic growth of my country brings about the prosperity of families as well as education institutions. Put it in another way, individuals are getting richer and they are possible to afford the tuition of a longer period of schooling, and the government also puts huge amount of grants into education section and implements a policy of ‘9-year compulsory education’ which provides high-quality but low-tuition education to every child in this country. In addition, schools have more funds (received from the government and the company) nowadays to upgrade their teaching facilities and to hire more qualified faculties. While in contrast. 50 years ago, a family of average level of income could only afford its children to accept 5 years of education, which means children would drop the schools even before they got a primary school diploma. Besides, there are few schools and universities that people can choose from. The academic atmosphere in most of these institutions is not satisfying because they have no money to hire good teachers and maintain experiment equipment. At that time, people tend to concern more about their living conditions rather than educational environment. Nowadays, economic growth provides possibility for people and schools to pursue better education. Therefore, being educated has become easier.

Second, the employment of the Internet enhances our ability to study independently, providing more knowledge to every Internet user. People in the past can only get information via books and word of mouth. This kind of studying method is limited to time and place. Also, a book may not include changed things and additional information after its publication and verbal communication may convey the wrong idea or lose some key information due to the errors made by individuals. However, we have embraced the era of Internet today, which means the speed and accuracy of information spread is largely increased. People can obtain cutting-edge academic news and papers by an easy click. They are able to discuss opinions on a certain topic at any time, any place, as long as they can get access to the Internet. Furthermore, huge amount of information can be stored in the cyberspace and people can easily update or revise them if they need. Internet has immensely facilitated today's education channels and people have more confidence to fully educate themselves.

In conclusion, due to the economic burgeoning and the invention of the Internet, people have the money to pay their education and have various channels to receive their education. It seems that being an educated person is not a difficult task any more. (497)

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发表于 2012-8-15 11:23:36 |只看该作者
已改 0814作文——revised by lazysheep.doc (31.5 KB, 下载次数: 4)

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发表于 2012-8-15 12:52:40 |只看该作者
0814作文修改。。。级别不够,发不了附件,直接贴上来吧。。。


0814作文: easier to be educated today?
I agree with the prompt that people today have more possibilities and abilities to get educated than before. The chances are becoming greater that one child receives long period of free education because of better economic conditions. Also, the widespread of the Internet add more opportunities for people to study by themselves, which greatly improve their learning abilities.

First, Children are easier to get a systematic long-term education than before. This is because the economic growth of my country brings about the prosperity of families as well as education institutions. Put it in another way, individuals are getting richer and they are possible to afford the tuition of a longer period of schooling, and the government also puts huge amount of grants into education section and implements a policy of ‘9-year compulsory education’ which provides high-quality but low-tuition education to every child in this country. In addition, schools have more funds (received from the government and the company) nowadays to upgrade their teaching facilities and to hire more qualified faculties. While in contrast. 50 years ago, a family of average level of income could only afford its children to accept 5 years of education, which means children would drop the schools even before they got a primary school diploma. Besides, there are few schools and universities that people can choose from. The academic atmosphere in most of these institutions is not satisfying because they have no money to hire good teachers and maintain experiment equipment. At that time, people tend to concern more about their living conditions rather than educational environment. Nowadays, economic growth provides possibility for people and schools to pursue better education. Therefore, being educated has become easier.

Second, the employment (不知道用这个词是不是合适?)of the Internet enhances our ability to study independently, providing more knowledge to every Internet user. People in the past can only get information via books and word of mouth. This kind of studying method is limited to time and place(是要表达时间和空间的限制,是不是place太简单了?). Also, a book may not include changed things and additional information after its publication and(感觉这里and后面一个句子和前面的内容不能放一起啊,因为前面and连接的是include后面的内容?前面是不是可以加一个逗号?) verbal communication may convey the wrong idea or lose some key information due to the errors made by individuals. However, we have embraced the era of Internet today, which means the speed and accuracy (internet 比book要accuracy ?这个可以忽略哈)of information spread is largely increased. People can obtain cutting-edge academic news and papers by an easy click. They are able to discuss opinions on a certain topic at any time, any place, as long as they can get access to the Internet. Furthermore, huge amount of information can be stored in the cyberspace and people can easily update or revise them if they need. Internet has immensely facilitated today's education channels and people have more confidence to fully educate themselves.
(感觉这段是不是长句有点多?看完以后有点累赘的感觉)
In conclusion, due to the economic burgeoning and the invention of the Internet, people have the money to pay their education and have various channels to receive their education. It seems that being an educated person is not a difficult task any more. (497)

文章不错啊,学习了。谢谢楼主给我的修改,我才刚开始,还有好多要学习的,谢谢哈~

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发表于 2012-8-15 13:09:32 |只看该作者
skyslywd 发表于 2012-8-15 12:52
0814作文修改。。。级别不够,发不了附件,直接贴上来吧。。。

thanks! 多交流。长句确实多了不好,应该改正~

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发表于 2012-8-15 13:12:53 |只看该作者
lazysheep 发表于 2012-8-15 11:23
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which使得句子变长,并且属于复合句。现在美国人不喜欢长句子,尽量少用。我的作文用得也不少也得改

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发表于 2012-8-18 11:24:39 |只看该作者
0817. Do you agree or disagree with the following statement:  People should know about events happening around world even if they have little influence on their daily lives.

I believe that we should know news and events surrounding us because we are living in a more connected world than before. Many big events, albeit do not influence our lives directly and immediately, will have some impacts indirectly in the future. In addition, we are not simple animals that merely demand food and shelters; we have additional pursuit to meet the mental demands such as curiosity.

First, in a highly-connected world it is inevitable to be affected more or less by world events. For example, US president election may not change any aspect of common Chinese people's daily life, but it may influence their lives in the future in an unnoticed way. Different president candidates may have a different attitude to the international trade with China. If a pro-China candidate wins the game, he or she may be supportive in importing goods from China and this action may result in an increased recruitment of workers in corresponding manufactures. Therefore, in 5 or 10 years after that candidate becomes the US president, common Chinese workers may find easier to get jobs in manufacturing factories which aim to export goods to America. Furthermore, some changes in today's economics issues may have effects on our lives. The rising costs of importing silicon always affect directly the chip companies, but also indirectly raise the price of personal computers, mp3 and so on. This is because factories and companies can transfer the rising costs to the eventual prices of their product, causing common customers to pay for the extra costs of the silicon. There are many examples that illustrate big events having indirect impact on daily lives.

Second, knowing the events occurring around us is a need for our curiosity. Nowadays, most people in developed countries do not need to worry about basic living conditions. They are free and eager to know more about big things such as surprising discovery in astronomy. Much of today's astronomy findings may not have a practical application. Rather, these fundamental researches satisfy our curiosity about the universe and the objects in it. Our lives will not be changed even slightly if we discovered a new planet in another star system, but our curiosity continuously drives us to know more about outer spaces.

In conclusion, As global citizens we should not limit our knowledge to the things that have direct relations to us because we are driven by the curiosity and one cannot predict that a certain event will not affect his life in the future.

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发表于 2012-8-18 17:26:54 |只看该作者
lz写得很赞,加油:)

8 17 by mresc revised by henhen.doc

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henhen1011 发表于 2012-8-18 17:26
lz写得很赞,加油

你过奖了。。没看过什么写作真经啊。。能否给个链接我看看?

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mresc 发表于 2012-8-18 22:41
你过奖了。。没看过什么写作真经啊。。能否给个链接我看看?

没链接。。貌似网上都封了

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发表于 2012-8-20 21:35:32 |只看该作者
0810. Research or educating students?

There are many indicators to judge the success of a university. The quality of research and graduate students are undoubtedly two important indicators. As for professors, they should probably pay more attention to educating students rather than merely working on their own research because it is only in the university that students can achieve a systematic learning in one certain field. In addition, students' behavior in the future will affect the reputation of a university and his mentors more greatly than the research will.

First, the main aim of a university is to educate its students. The fact is that there are many other institutions that more specialize in doing research such as a scientific section of an ambitious company, R&A institutions, and national scientific associations, whereas these kinds of institutions cannot play the role of educating the next generation. In this sense, teaching students is a unique function for a university and its professors. In most of the universities, every professor must open at least one course to the students. It is apparently a good opportunity for students to know their professors' work and the cutting-edge information about their fields of study because their teachers are professors, who are proficient in that area. Therefore, professors play a leading role in educating students and this meets the core goal of the university education.

Second, Student's accomplishment in the future will increase the reputation of their university and contribute to the whole academic world. Professors should spare no effort to help them get more involved in what they are pursuing because the future belongs to the next generation. To some extent, professors have contributed a lot to the university and human knowledge and many important findings and inventions are usually conducted by young scholars. Their achievements weigh much more than old scholars' research. In addition, a university needs funds and grants to continue the facilities and teaching. And most of money is usually donated by alumni who were once beneficial from that university’s education. Therefore, professors' effort in educating students actually helps the university to be more self-sufficient in terms of funds and influential in terms of academic accomplishment in the future.

I have to admit that publishing research papers is still a very important component of a university professor's work because he or she must prove their ability in research and one of the indicator to judge one's academic achievement is to see his or her papers in the academic journals and the influent factor of the papers. However, I believe that professors can balance the relationship between their research and teaching. They can demand their students to get involved in their research and in this way, their research burden is assuaged and their students also get a good chance to learn more and experience the real academic life. (469)

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发表于 2012-8-21 07:39:40 |只看该作者
lz你这水平……根本不需要参加特训小组嘛,完全改不出来有什么问题啊!!!!:mad::mad::mad:

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氢氟酸 发表于 2012-8-21 07:39
lz你这水平……根本不需要参加特训小组嘛,完全改不出来有什么问题啊!!!!

额。。。。。。来晚了,一会儿给你看。说明你给我看得不仔细啊~~

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发表于 2012-8-22 09:29:09 |只看该作者
TPO15 综合作文:
In the lecture, the speaker develops her counterargument by proving that the methods advocated by the reading are neither effective nor friendly to the local environment. Therefore, the cane toads are not easy to eliminate.

First, Building a national fence cannot prevent the toads from establishing new colonies. Although it can block the motion of the adult toads, young toads and toad eggs, which are usually found in the water, can spread easily through the river and stream from one side to another. Therefore, building fences may not result in a successful separation of this species.

Second, it is admitted by the speaker that huge number of volunteers can destroy toads and their eggs. However, untrained volunteers are also highly possible to cause damage to the innocent frogs which are very similar in appearance to young toads. In addition, this kind of frogs is a native habitant and some of them are endangered. The death of them may cause a big trouble to the local ecosystems. Therefore, it is not wise to ask untrained volunteers for help.

Third, using virus weapons may bring about an even severer damage to the ecosystem as a whole. As the reading says, the disease-causing virus may infect a number of reptile and amphibian species as well as the cane toads. Some infected reptile and amphibian species may travel to the Central and South America and have some interaction with local species there. If they attack American cane toads and hence propagate the deadly virus to them, the toad species, which are native to Central and South American ecosystems, will definitely suffer from a terrible disaster not only for this species but also for the local biological balance. Therefore, the consequence of using virus against Australian toads is devastating.

In conclusion, we should take all possibilities into consideration before taking any action to kill the cane toads. (312)

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发表于 2012-8-22 13:27:07 |只看该作者
不好意思。文章刚刚改完,迟了一下下,望体谅!! mresc 8.20 by corrine97.doc (30 KB, 下载次数: 5)

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