issue5 第一次写10天后就考了，求帮助啊！！

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As is described in the issue, in order to thrive, the author proposes that it is necessary for the government to ensure that their major cities receive the financial support they need. He claims that it is because that a nation’s cultural traditions are preserved and generated primarily in cities.  It’s essentially imperative that the proposal and purpose, as well as the reason for the proposal should be thoroughly analyzed before we reach the conclusion. To begin with, the reason in the statement may not hold true in some certain scenarios. In addition, it should be analyzed whether the proposal is applicable to be carried out effectively. What’s more, it can be, to the popular mind, described in a possible scenario in which the proposal will not be able to fulfill the assignment. Unless the core concept is systematically examined, the conclusion will prove inadequate and ineffective. In my point of view, I hold the opinion of general disagreement. My opinion will be greatly strengthened by the following discussion.
Admittedly, it is shrewd to acknowledge the truth that this proposal, although disadvantaged by some discernable shortcomings, is partially indisputable. After all, in many countries, where the level of urbanization is so high that most of their populations live in cities, it is obvious that the nation’s economy and culture, as well as the new technology are all preserved and generated in cities. For example, Japan, with an urbanization level of 79%, thrives mainly because of the highly development of its cities. Tokyo and Osaka are well-known international cities in the world. Therefore, the way to develop countries like Japan is surly to ensure their cities’ financial need. Accordingly, I tend to concede that when it comes to some certain circumstance, it is partially appropriate.
However, as opposed to the alleged result, the reason in the statement may not hold true in some scenario. The author points out that a nation’s culture traditions are preserved and generated primarily in cities, which is unlikely to be true in some countries. For instance, China, as a country with a long history, has a huge amount of newly built cities like Shanghai and Shenzhen which were built within 100 years from now. Cultures of these cities are mainly influenced by the western world rather than the Chinese traditions. Therefore, it is erroneous for us to say that culture traditions are preserved and generated primarily in cities. Unless the reason proves valid and reasonable, the consequence will not surely take places.
In addition, the claimed proposal might generate a divergent outcome in some situations: in some agricultural countries, where agriculture contributes most of their state revenue, if financial support is primarily given to cities, those countries might suffer from a significant lowering of economy. In this case, the claimed proposal is invalid and ineffective.
Furthermore, in spite of the fact that ensuring the financial support of cities may possibly result in thriving of a country, yet it is only approach to reach the conclusion. It is undeniable that other method will correspondingly lead to the same result. Developing new technology and education is considered a good way to thrive, for both agricultural and industrial countries.
From the aforementioned analyses, simply based on the inadequate reason that a nation’s cultural traditions are preserved and generated primarily in cities, it is irrational to reach an agreement that governments should ensure the financial needs of their cities.

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