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从今开始练写作~ 10-11(choose friends fun or need).doc (22 KB, 下载次数: 10)

2012-10-12 09:57:13 上传

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10-9  从第二个论点到结尾 有点崩..

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已改~~

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Flaviapq 发表于 2012-10-10 19:39
已改~~

再次多谢修改 这回写到了380字...好吧多花了一个小时

10-11 坐等狠批...

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guang123yyy 发表于 2012-10-11 21:10
再次多谢修改 这回写到了380字...好吧多花了一个小时

10-11 坐等狠批...

加油，我今天不一定跟你分在一组哦~~所以不一定帮你改哦~~

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已改完:)

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xiaobanI 发表于 2012-10-12 14:23
已改完

能不能帮我也改改啊 我没有在什么组。。

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seeker2013 发表于 2012-10-12 15:00
能不能帮我也改改啊 我没有在什么组。。

好:)，你的作文在哪？

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xiaobanI 发表于 2012-10-12 15:55
好，你的作文在哪？

In modern society,people focus more on the importance of education than before.Due to this phenominon,a topic whether people in nowadays are getting more convenient to get educated than past years has been discussed wildly.As far as i am concern, I think we are easier to get educated than before for following reasons.

Firstly,people are now living in a high pace lives and get more competitions for the growing number of people.In order to fulfill the mission quickly and do better than others,we have the impetus inside ourselves to get more educations.For instance,it is very common to see a worker to take part-time master programs.Why did they do this on the condition that they are already very tired after work?Obviously,they want work and study hard to get more knacks and advantages.In consideration of this condition,people of course will be easier to be educated.

What's more,Internet is a powerful and convenient tool for us to study in modern society .We can get the information whatever you want form the Internet.Typically,as we know is On-line school.One of my friends whose major is statistics show a great interest in computer science,but he has no time to go to the class to listen to the teachers.So he uses the internet to watch the Open-courses,do the homework,take notes while taking the on-line school. You know what that he get first intermship in a software company.With the help of internet,can you say we are more difficult to get educated?

Last but not least, we are now have many transfer programs in many schools.You can get an access to go to another school to study.It's so amusing to experience different types of teaching,school living and studying.My roommate was transfered to Taiwan university last year,he chose a golf class as his sports course.Among chinese universities ,there are few schools offering this class.Without the transfer program,my roommate did not have a chance to learn golf in class.

As the reasons mentioned above,It is therefore my view that we are getting easier to get educated.

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xiaobanI 发表于 2012-10-12 15:55
好，你的作文在哪？

我去 我自己回过看 都发现好多错误了。。。

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seeker2013 发表于 2012-10-12 16:07
我去 我自己回过看 都发现好多错误了。。。

改完了，个人意见:) by seeker2013 revised by xiaobanI.doc (33 KB, 下载次数: 3)

2012-10-12 16:26:12 上传

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xiaobanI 发表于 2012-10-12 16:26
改完了，个人意见

OK 非常感谢  还有我觉得字数有点少

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10-11 revised by Darren.doc (29 KB, 下载次数: 4)

2012-10-12 19:24:18 上传

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已改好
求改我的~别忘了···https://bbs.gter.net/forum.phpmod ... age=1#pid1776277186

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10-13 一个半小时...

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奉上1013修改稿
10-13 (young people help) revised by feihong76.doc (31 KB, 下载次数: 9)

2012-10-14 18:23:09 上传

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