求助！！！

wangliubishengUID: 3361351

关于大学生为理论而学还是为工作准备的开头，，，我总觉得我写的开头怪怪的。。请各位大侠指点一下！
The issue of whether university education should prepare students for employment or help students acquire theoretical knowledge should be done is a complex one,since it involves a conflict between the significant of theoretical knowledge and practical skill for students to acquire.IN my point of view,the final judgment should depend on a case-by-case analysis of the two situation.

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本人作文水平不高，看出来点问题，不知道对不对，可以做一下参考~

1. 第一句的主句，如果没有理解错误的话，主语应该是the issue吧，但是在主句的最后写到should be done is a complex one，这点我有点不理解，如果是the issue should be done的话，那么再加一个is a complex one的系表结构就不合适了吧~感觉这点有点问题，如果说错了还请各位指正。

2. significant是形容词，名词形式为significance，楼主想写的是名词形式吧？
建议从句可以换成 since it involves the relative significance between theoretical knowledge and practical skills.
后面的for students to acquire个人认为可以省略。（不知道这句话细节对不对，期待指正...）
不确定对不对还来帮你看...只是个人见解，捂脸逃走...

3. situation是可数名词吧？所以最后一点是不是应该是of the two situations呢？

本人语法也不好，一点点小建议，希望是对的，希望有帮助...

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啊同表示不解should be done……

wrathUID: 2704440

把作文题目表一下

各个题目要用不同的结构

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charlottely 发表于 2013-6-15 10:33
本人作文水平不高，看出来点问题，不知道对不对，可以做一下参考~

1. 第一句的主句，如果没有理解错误的 ...

我也是觉得那个第一句又问题！！所以我觉得那个是不是应该用the issue of whether university education should preparing students for employment or helping students acquire theoretical knowledge should be done is a complex one.
这个the issue of whether……should be done is a complex one, 是GRE作文书上的一个开头结构。 我只是想套用那个结构，， 不知道该如何用。。。。。。。

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wrath 发表于 2013-6-16 14:06
把作文题目表一下

各个题目要用不同的结构

什么意思？？？？？没理解啊。。。。。

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wangliubisheng 发表于 2013-6-16 14:18
什么意思？？？？？没理解啊。。。。。

雅思大作文分五大类：
agree,disagree
benefit, problem & adv,disadvantages
discuss both views
单纯的report
混合型

题目里这五种问法需要不同的行文思路和逻辑结构去扣题

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wrath 发表于 2013-6-16 14:25
雅思大作文分五大类：
agree,disagree
benefit, problem & adv,disadvantages

哦，，我是从我自己对题目的态度分了三类，一个是中立， 一个是赞成， 一个是反对，，然后准备以此为基础，记几个开头句子， 中间找一些论据， 然后在把开头改一改之类的作为结尾，，我的目标是6分以上，不知道这样可行不可行？

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wangliubisheng 发表于 2013-6-16 14:35
哦，，我是从我自己对题目的态度分了三类，一个是中立， 一个是赞成， 一个是反对，，然后准备以此为基础 ...

如果是report和混合型 你有可能杯具

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wangliubisheng 发表于 2013-6-16 14:35
哦，，我是从我自己对题目的态度分了三类，一个是中立， 一个是赞成， 一个是反对，，然后准备以此为基础 ...

写作文不要自顾自的写 你是在答题

注意题目的要求

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wangliubisheng 发表于 2013-6-16 14:17
我也是觉得那个第一句又问题！！所以我觉得那个是不是应该用the issue of whether university education  ...

恩 GRE句型么
如果是练雅思的话还是推荐楼主多研究一下剑桥雅思后面的范文里的句型吧
可能会在雅思考试中更实用些

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charlottely 发表于 2013-6-16 14:49
恩 GRE句型么
如果是练雅思的话还是推荐楼主多研究一下剑桥雅思后面的范文里的句型吧
可能会在雅思考试 ...

恩，好！那我想问一下改过之后的句子还有什么语法错误吗？？

charlottelyUID: 3284238

那你这里的issue就指的是whether university education should prepare students for employment or help them acquire theoretical knowledge should be done？（should后一般都是do或者be doing吧）这个本身说的不太通吧？whether。。。or。。。should be done？那done的到底是哪一个呢？
是书上的句型么？给的有例句木有哇

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charlottely 发表于 2013-6-18 08:19
那你这里的issue就指的是whether university education should prepare students for employment or help t ...

没有给例句，，他就是说 the issue of whether ......should be done is a complex one...

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wrath 发表于 2013-6-16 14:06
把作文题目表一下

各个题目要用不同的结构

您能不能帮忙看一下作文，这样写能不能到6分，，我用了50分钟左右，，，，主要还是不太熟练，第一次写
1. Environmental problems are too big for individual countries and individual people to address. We have reached the stage where the only way to protect the environment is at an international level. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?
作文：
　　Environmental problems are increasingly becoming the focus of government and citizen concern around the globe. An increasing number of people believe that the only way to protect the environment is to cooperate with other country. To great extent, i disagree with the opinion for the following reason:
　　As we all known, along with the development technology and sciences, natural energy resources such as coal and oil are apparently running out quickly and are not renewable.each household and family produce a large amount of waste every week.the number of vehicles is increasing much more rapidly than building of road. All those contribute directly to environmental problems such as air pollution, lack of water and fuel energy, and globe warning.
　　In order to solving those problems, each country not only should meet with collaboration across national boundaries, but also need each country and person make awareness of their unique role in environment protection.
　　As my point of view, each country has its own weaknesses in environmental protection, so it is essential for them to be supervised by others. However,it is not without problems. to achieve consensus on the step, it may take more time.
　　On the contrary, I held firm belief that each country should spare no effort to deal with it depends on their own situation.for the developed country, they should do more on the problem of emission, even though, which can slow down their industrial production. For developing country, it is crucial that government should raises citizen's awareness of conserving resources and recycling them.then, the authorities must focus on building infrastructure.such as increase the number of public buses.it would be an effective way of reducing emissions as well as causing congestion. For the daily life, each person, no matter what country you come from, need use resources properly.
　　Overall, in term of easing the environmental problems, it is more important for us to do what we can, not the way we used.            322