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发表于 2013-8-7 03:47:07 |显示全部楼层
本帖最后由 chenchengtao 于 2014-2-7 01:41 编辑

新手初報到,煩請大家幫忙給建議了,感謝!

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Do you agree or disagree following sentence: A low-paid but secure job is better than a job with a high salary but easy to lose.

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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? It is better to relax by watching a movie or reading a book than by doing physical exercises.

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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? The rapid growth of cities has a mostly positive impact on the development of the society.

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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? The rules that the whole society today expect young people to follow are too strict.

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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? In a team, those who do not accept others’ criticism cannot succeed.

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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Competition between friends always has a negative effect on their friendship.

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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Parents should give school-age children money as a reward for getting a high mark (grade) in school.

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As life becomes more complex, it is essential for young people to have the ability to plan and organize.

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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Teachers had a greater influence on young people in the past than they do today.

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TPO8 综合写作

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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? In the past young people depended on their parents for making decisions. Today, young people are better able to make decisions on their own.

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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Teaching is harder than it was in the past.

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Do you agree or disagree: All high school students should take basic economics courses.

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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? It is important for governments to protect wild animals and wilderness areas for the future generations.

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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Teaching is harder than it was in the past.

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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Improving schools is the most important factor for the successful development of a country.

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发表于 2013-8-9 22:57:43 |显示全部楼层
哇 竟然是沙发
楼主语法问题比较多,句子会出现缺少谓语的情况
另外在理解听力材料信息方面还需加强
这是我修改的,如有不当,请多包涵
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发表于 2013-8-10 00:57:59 |显示全部楼层
哈囉~ 謝謝河馬,多謝您的修改,我會在明天中午前把您的文章改完上傳的,謝謝您寶貴的建議。

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发表于 2013-8-12 12:26:20 |显示全部楼层
楼主在语言方面尽量多注意一下吧,少犯点小错误,然后注意把句子、意思说清楚。
加油!

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发表于 2013-8-13 15:53:58 |显示全部楼层
楼主思路没有太大的问题,可是句子晦涩难懂啊。建议先练简单一点的句子,至少保证每句有谓语。

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发表于 2013-8-13 18:22:35 |显示全部楼层
xmuyiyueyuan 发表于 2013-8-13 15:53
楼主思路没有太大的问题,可是句子晦涩难懂啊。建议先练简单一点的句子,至少保证每句有谓语。

好!很棒的建議,謝謝  ^^

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发表于 2013-8-13 19:35:30 |显示全部楼层
不好意思,有事情耽搁了~~~

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发表于 2013-8-13 21:45:53 |显示全部楼层
8.12改好啦

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发表于 2013-8-13 23:29:22 |显示全部楼层
sheepmiemie 发表于 2013-8-13 19:35
不好意思,有事情耽搁了~~~

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发表于 2013-8-13 23:29:36 |显示全部楼层
duaifeili 发表于 2013-8-13 21:45
8.12改好啦

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发表于 2013-8-14 21:41:02 |显示全部楼层
8月13日 已改
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ps:卤煮是不是忘了我的作文...存在感好低...

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发表于 2013-8-15 01:18:15 |显示全部楼层
yukirine 发表于 2013-8-14 21:41
8月13日 已改

ps:卤煮是不是忘了我的作文...存在感好低...

>< 不好意思遲了,以貼在妳的樓了 謝謝妳 :)

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发表于 2013-8-15 13:14:57 |显示全部楼层
我的修改处女座~ 哈 (水平拙计,水平拙计)

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发表于 2013-8-15 20:07:01 |显示全部楼层
8.14, 已改,LZ台湾人埃,写的很好啊,例子都很写实哈,尤其那句 they will lose the election.
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发表于 2013-8-16 01:59:50 |显示全部楼层
夏洛克 发表于 2013-8-15 20:07
8.14, 已改,LZ台湾人埃,写的很好啊,例子都很写实哈,尤其那句 they will lose the election.

ok!謝謝你的建議,很棒很受用!感謝您 :)

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