第一次练Argument【44】，求批改~

lyricorpseUID: 3427133

第一次练，憋了2个多小时。。。题目是CCC，要求是assumptions。
感谢帮助批改的同学~~

我希望得到的反馈主要有以下两方面：
1. 从ETS的角度看，大概能得几分？
2. 相对于攻击点（实质内容）而言，我更想学习如何快速有力地组织攻击（语言组织，句式结构等）。
    练习的时候憋很久主要还是因为语言功底一般，遣词造句上琢磨好久。最后一段还是照搬了模板。。。
    不知道有没有比较好的材料专门教人相关句式结构的？我希望写的eloquent一点。

再次感谢各位！

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The following appeared in a letter to the editor of a journal on environmental issues.

"Over the past year, the Crust Copper Company (CCC) has purchased over 10,000
square miles of land in the tropical nation of West Fredonia. Mining copper on
this land will inevitably result in pollution and, since West Fredonia is the home
of several endangered animal species, in environmental disaster. But such
disasters can be prevented if consumers simply refuse to purchase products that
are made with CCC's copper unless the company abandons its mining plans."

Write a response in which you examine the stated and/or unstated assumptions of
the argument. Be sure to explain how the argument depends on these assumptions
and what the implications are for the argument if the assumptions prove
unwarranted.

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二本先生UID: 3325150

我是9月14号北美二战新G。修改好的文章在附件，附上一个很好的GTER帖子，LZ可以参考！~~

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lyricorpseUID: 3427133

二本先生 发表于 2013-8-21 10:29
我是9月14号北美二战新G。修改好的文章在附件，附上一个很好的GTER帖子，LZ可以参考！~~

好的，非常感谢~~