建议G作文分3.5或3.5+的同学写写自己的写作心得体会

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小硕鼠 发表于 2013-9-16 23:49
其实我不太在意AW的分数，专业原因3.5就已经足够足够了
但是我是觉得一个人作文都写不好就等于说话都说不 ...

个人觉得英语写好文章还是挺难的 我们专业写作课闲着没事儿就写个英文论文什么的 所以可能写的多了语言表达上还可以 但是一到AW这种需要逻辑缜密 并且切合ETS要求的作文 就猛然感到一定难度 由此看来 语言关过了不一定AW就高分 但是语言其实还是很重要 虽然AW不是考语言 但是它是美国人也得考的考试 那帮人比咱们英语可强多了

哈哈 感觉上面一段话就逻辑混乱。。。掩面
总之小硕鼠加油~~

crazyrobinUID: 2368627

破Safari一打字就崩溃。

AW语言只是载体，灵魂的是你的观点和你拿出来的例子。

你二战追求的应该是积累10几个例子。然后用简单的句子写出想表达的话。

AW4.5或者5没那么难。

请扔掉那些华而不实的语言。言之无物是最可怕的。你到了美国写paper就懂这个道理了

小硕鼠UID: 3411565

失落的谁 发表于 2013-9-16 23:54
个人觉得英语写好文章还是挺难的 我们专业写作课闲着没事儿就写个英文论文什么的 所以可能写的多了语言表 ...

谢谢！
懂的，其实都学了两年数学了感觉自己还是没有逻辑的人，逻辑题也是经常跪的。。。
总之，不会放弃的就是了，反正有效时间就只有一年了……

小硕鼠UID: 3411565

crazyrobin 发表于 2013-9-16 23:57
破Safari一打字就崩溃。

AW语言只是载体，灵魂的是你的观点和你拿出来的例子。

all right
谢谢版大中肯的批评！
我也觉得AW不是目的，说不清楚话是最可怕的
这个我会多加注意
good night~

SunkworldUID: 3413082

考场上同题作文增加例子，改进语言后3.0, 那这篇估计只有1-2了- -...可以求拍么～～

In any field of inquiry, the beginner is more likely than the expert to make important contributions.

Although it seems good to think that beginners are not as intellectual constrained as do expert, so we students may make more important contributions than our professors, it is indeed untenable. As far as I'm concerned, experts would be neccesary for a important discovery, and the cooperation of those two is the very approach towards big contributions.

As is known, beginners has many advantages which the experts exactly lack. Now that they have not yet to submerge themselves in the field of research, they can think of something which seems ridiculous to experts since it probably inpinge the entrenched principles that is god-like to most experts. However, innovation is always something that overturned the long-held principles and make some modification or establish new principles of their own. These are the most prominent contribution in the history and the most-appreciated discoveries. In this sense, beginners who always have whimsical ideas seem to have a really huge advantage in comparison of the seemingly pedant experts. Thus, many people think that we students would be likely to have important discoveries at the very beginning.

However, this claim is nothing but wholly our optimistic imagination. The reality would not be so auspicious as is thought to be. While beginners possibly have a whimsical idea which is the very point of important innovation or discovery, with a lack in expertise, they are not able to continue their way along to the brilliant result. Chances are large that they come up with a resplendent idea, and then find they cannot use that idea to do anything, nor could they think of any way to validate their theory. Eventually, the vital idea is just easily jettisoned by them without a second thought. They would think it is just rubbish which emerged in their mind not worthy of any exploitation or inquiry. Sometimes when they encounter the real rubbish, they choose to go further, thus come up with some fallacious and indeed ludicrous conclusion without consideration of many important factors just because they do not know them. This kind of people is now called the folk scientists, refering to those doing the alleged research without knowledge of basic principles. This is the inevitable tragedy and paradox of beginners, as the saying “thinking without learning is dangerous” indicates.

Thus, only the experts would possibly make headway with their sensibility of valuable ideas and mastery of expertise. Given that beginners are unlikely to make progress with their idea, experts are unlikely to come up with innovative ideas, it would be the best solution to have them cooperate to make the real important contribution to their research field. This probably accounts for the generation of research group that have not only experts but also beginners included to produce the best result.

In sum, beginners and experts both have their advantages and disadvantages, and huge contributions are likely to be made by the cooperation of beginners and experts.

crazyrobinUID: 2368627

Sunkworld 发表于 2013-9-17 20:02
考场上同题作文增加例子，改进语言后3.0, 那这篇估计只有1-2了- -...可以求拍么～～

In any field of in ...

我就看了第一段，你的作文最多值三分
1. although，so 用错了，没有although so的用法
2. constrained as do expert, 语法错误， do删掉，你只能说 as expert does，或者as expert
3.Although it seems good to think that beginners are not as intellectual constrained as do expert, so we students may make more important contributions than our professors, it is indeed untenable. 两个逗号链接了一个不是clause的句子。出现了dangled sentence
4. experts would非过去时态和虚拟语气永远用will
5. an important discovery not a
6. and the cooperation of those two, cooperation between.

心事付瑶琴UID: 2727285

Sunkworld 发表于 2013-9-17 20:02
考场上同题作文增加例子，改进语言后3.0, 那这篇估计只有1-2了- -...可以求拍么～～

In any field of in ...

单复数问题和主谓一致问题方面的错误稍微有点多啊

SunkworldUID: 3413082

crazyrobin 发表于 2013-9-17 20:09
我就看了第一段，你的作文最多值三分
1. although，so 用错了，没有although so的用法
2. constraine ...

so是that引导的定语从句里连接两个分句用的，和although没关系吧，第三点也是。。不这样该怎么写@_@
would不是可以表委婉的意愿么- -...
cooperation between这种搭配该怎么学。。感觉每次都是临时凭感觉瞎编的- -...
单复数神马的确实有点多。。我错了QAQ

SunkworldUID: 3413082

心事付瑶琴 发表于 2013-9-17 20:13
单复数问题和主谓一致问题方面的错误稍微有点多啊

我错了QAQ平时写完全没在意这些。。

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Sunkworld 发表于 2013-9-17 21:27
我错了QAQ平时写完全没在意这些。。

嗯，细节决定成败。

SunkworldUID: 3413082

心事付瑶琴 发表于 2013-9-17 21:29
嗯，细节决定成败。

但我考试时是写一句看一句的啊，因为写过了就把节奏放慢了的。。

心事付瑶琴UID: 2727285

Sunkworld 发表于 2013-9-17 22:45
但我考试时是写一句看一句的啊，因为写过了就把节奏放慢了的。。

这就需要平时多练了，争取一遍过，把正确变成一种习惯

clever_orangeUID: 3461827

crazyrobin 发表于 2013-9-16 23:43
不知道他想用什么
fail in的用法也很少见。
不知道这些搭配怎么想出来的。

想请教下大牛 我上次G作文也是只得了3分 toefl一战作文25 然后觉得中国考生这个分实在是不咋滴 我的文章里面关于example一般是泛泛的举例 比如doctors.....,engineers....,etc.大概三个排比的句子来支持我的论点 写argument时 我找的几个大点是并列关系 中间的某一点是递进 比如A不成立 即使A成立 B也不成立 即便B成立 对于这个问题我们还有其他的解决方法 并不仅有题目所说的C一种 这样 求大神指导下
自己反思的是我当时的issue中出现现在完成时 过去时  一般现在时三种可能时态有问题 或者是我的aw没有按要求写/略跑题或者是响应题目要求不太明显...

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clever_orange 发表于 2013-9-17 23:47
想请教下大牛 我上次G作文也是只得了3分 toefl一战作文25 然后觉得中国考生这个分实在是不咋滴 我的文章里 ...

泛泛的example没用，这个还是空话，如果你想用泛泛的example的话，我给你一篇满分作文你看下。

The term "hero" comes from the ancient Greeks. For them, a hero was a mortal who had done something so far beyond the normal scope of human experience that he left an immortal memory behind him when he died, and thus received worship like that due the gods. Many of these first heroes were great benefactors of humankind: Hercules, the monster killer; Asclepius, the first doctor; Dionysus, the creator of Greek fraternities. But people who had committed unthinkable crimes were also called heroes; Oedipus and Medea, for example, received divine worship after their deaths as well. Originally, heroes were not necessarily good, but they were always extraordinary; to be a hero was to expand people's sense of what was possible for a human being.

你如果show不到这种程度的文学功底，我建议你还是老老实实的积累十几个，二十几个素材。
否则很难突破3.5

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crazyrobin 发表于 2013-9-18 02:20
泛泛的example没用，这个还是空话，如果你想用泛泛的example的话，我给你一篇满分作文你看下。

这种definition也是可以积累的吧。wikipedia对hero的阐释差不多就是以上了。