【独立写作】黑椒牛肉粒作业贴

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自己在家刷TPO都是猛做阅读和听力，觉得写了作文没人改也不会有长进[一战G AW2.5居然敢不练写作]…

总之有很强的危机感QAQ再也不想折在写作上了QAQ


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young people到底指什么……


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觉得自己有点偷换概念……特别想知道小伙伴们的思路XD


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思路有点问题……QAQ

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不知道写两个分论点合不合适？是三个最好吗？


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简直是由论据堆起来的，写起来不顺畅。这个题太烦了昨天晚上就想写，一直没找到合适的论点，今天硬着头皮上，写完还是觉得怪怪的……QAQ

思路：
1.过去需要集中精力才能做好的领域今天依然需要。（绘画，书法）
2.过去不需要集中的今天也需要了。（数学）

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黄底字是自己检查的时候做了修正的地方，不要在意～


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思路：

广告的常见伎俩：
1、        强调优点，刻意忽略缺点。
2、        营造并非由产品带来的氛围，造成错觉。
因此不能依靠广告挑选产品。

因为我自己完全不觉得今日的广告是“虚假”的，所以怎么写怎么觉得偏题……



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这次的思路非常不流畅QAQ，花的时间超过半小时字数还少，请评的同学帮帮忙，说说你的思路吧～谢谢～

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   好像大家都加了附件？窝也来～ 1-25写作_黑椒牛肉粒.docx (14.63 KB, 下载次数: 7)

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    I suppose that it is reasonable to say that improving schools is the most important factor for the successful development of a country. Improving schools will enhance the overall ability of people and it can provide people with the same idea towards the world and life, thus reduce the possibility of disagreement between people, and results in a stable environment for development.
    Schools are institutions that educate students to build up their sense of moral, cultivate their virtue and develop their capability. And the current leaders and establishers are all from different schools, the future generation would be through different schools, too. Therefore the quality of schools, or the quality of education, would decide the quality of the component of a country: the quality of its people. Thus improving schools would no doubt be benefit to the development of a country. A good example would be schools in Hong Kong, especially universities in Hong Kong. Those universities provide their professors with high wage, thus experts and top studiers come to these universities and students there would gain a top class education. That is an important reason as to why these days, some students who performance the best in the college entering test are willing to study in universities in Hong Kong rather than PKU or THU.
    The other example would be schools in Xijiang province. Because of their believe, some students are sent to scripture schools, where they get the different ideas from students in Han nationality. Some of the scripture schools would infuse some dangerous idea to young students and cause chaos in some areas. Thus the stable environment which benefits the development would be ruined. If government could build enough public schools and enroll much more students, the development of those areas would be better.
    Although the above examples are all about a certain area, it is proper to expand the idea to a larger area: a country. In short, improving schools would not only cultivate the ability of people to accelerate the development, but help keeping a stable environment for development as well.


Idea:
两部分:
1.        学校使学生的能力得到提高，而学生将建设国家，所以好学校好学生好发展。（香港的大学的例子）
2.        好学校使学生拥有正常的三观，三观不正常可能做出影响国家安定的事，破坏发展所需的和平稳定的环境。
（新疆经文学校的例子）


～～～～～～～～～～～～吐槽时间～～～～～～～～～～
窝觉得窝一写作文就不会说人话了！窝觉得窝一写作文就只会说车轱辘话了！

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0125好啦~~

黑椒牛肉粒UID: 3465395

bus- 发表于 2014-1-26 16:16
0125好啦~~

谢谢～已经看完啦！收益匪浅～

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黑椒牛肉粒 发表于 2014-1-26 16:26
谢谢～已经看完啦！收益匪浅～

楼主，那个那个听力有木有简单粗暴有效的方法？我都听了一个多月了还是没什么长进感觉

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bus- 发表于 2014-1-26 16:46
楼主，那个那个听力有木有简单粗暴有效的方法？我都听了一个多月了还是没什么长进感觉

我自己也很苦恼啊～我刷TPO有的时候听力有时全对有时错7个QAQ我听力没怎么练，都是做题，这样可能不太行…可能还是平时多听才好啊～帮不上忙抱歉啊～

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先上附件唉嘿嘿～

DAY35  综合写作

    The lecture tells us that the spread of zebra mussel can actually be controlled nowadays, as the way they spread is by travelling in ships fresh "ballast water", so just asking the ships to use ocean water can prevent zebra mussel to spread. While the passage states that the spread of zebra mussel cannot be stopped, it is obvious that the lecture has changed the idea.
    Furthermore, according to the passage, it seems that once the zebra mussels arrived, they would dominant the whole area, and become a threat to native freshwater fish. Yet in the lecture, we get to know that although zebra mussels might compete with some freshwater fish for food, there food span are not exactly the same as all the other freshwater fish's. Like some fish that lives near the bottom of the water, the arrival of zebra mussels may even increase the amount of them. Thus zebra mussel will not be a threat to freshwater fish population as stated in the passage.
    As for the dominant part, the lecture points out that with the booming of zebra mussel, birds or other predators will substantially include this new fish into their menu. Thus although the condition might be the same, that is, zebra mussels do not have predators, as in the passage, the number of them would still be under control by new predators.




字数：230.

自己的笔记：
controlled
Can notcannot
Whothat
我想用的是subsequently啊啊啊啊！

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1.26 综合已改好

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cactusJean 发表于 2014-1-27 18:41
1.26 综合已改好

谢谢！看完了～我是第二段首句写完才发现“哎不对呀dominant和number of fish好像应该分开写”，所以结构混乱了QAQ实际上我最开始的理解是“因为ZM没有天敌又跟别鱼抢吃的，所以别鱼数量减少，ZM数量激增，最后形成统治地位”这样，看来还是听得不够准确QAQ

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bus- 发表于 2014-1-26 16:46
楼主，那个那个听力有木有简单粗暴有效的方法？我都听了一个多月了还是没什么长进感觉

你听完之后有木有分析错题&&精听~~你是哪里没有长进啊？

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copyzero2 发表于 2014-1-27 19:15
你听完之后有木有分析错题&&精听~~你是哪里没有长进啊？

我是听一句写一句的那种，可是就感觉一听完就忘记他说的什么，而且整篇文章只能一句暂停然后继续下一句这么下来，不能听完一段大致知道意思的那种，更搞笑的事全篇我都一句一句写下来了我都不能很快反应过来整片的意思什么的。。。。。每次错的位置整个句子我都会抄下来，然后继续听，第二天再听一下

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0126改完啦

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bus- 发表于 2014-1-27 19:49
我是听一句写一句的那种，可是就感觉一听完就忘记他说的什么，而且整篇文章只能一句暂停然后继续下一句这 ...

听写tpo？如果是这种情况的话，你可以先不要听写，还是听3遍全文，理清文章脉络之后再做听写。
我觉得你需要做的是听重点的能力，而这个需要你的一个整体把我，才能知道什么才是lecture的重点~~
你可以精听&&听写相结合~~

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copyzero2 发表于 2014-1-27 20:11
听写tpo？如果是这种情况的话，你可以先不要听写，还是听3遍全文，理清文章脉络之后再做听写。
我觉得你 ...

我听得是老托，我试试你说的方法谢谢啦！！！

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bus- 发表于 2014-1-27 19:51
0126改完啦

谢谢谢谢！我今天可能11点之前改不完，白天出去给姥爷过生日去了，实在抱歉QAQ