GRE作文6分教学博客

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tesolchina 发表于 2015-1-2 22:44
The following is a memorandum from the business manager of a television station.
"Over the past yea ...

看的很爽！原来argument如此就好！谢谢老师 XD

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tesolchina 发表于 2015-8-5 10:43
Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and  ...

老师您好！
关于第二点 the employers need more informatin and education
不知道如何展开？

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tesolchina 发表于 2014-10-31 11:00
argument 87

In a study of the reading habits of Waymarsh citizens conducted by the University  ...

请问老师，您在倒数第二段写的scritinise是英式写法，这点在考试时会有影响吗？

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谢谢谢谢谢谢谢谢

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Argument177) The following appeared in a memo from New Ventures Consulting to the president of HobCo, Inc., a chain of hobby shops.

"Our team has completed its research on suitable building sites for a new HobCo hobby Shop in the city of Grilldon. We discovered that there are currently no hobby shops in southeastern Grilldon. When our researchers conducted a poll of area residents, 88 percent of those who responded indicated that they would welcome the opening of a hobby shop in southeastern Grilldon. Grilldon is in a region of the nation in which the hobby business has increased by 300 percent during the past decade. In addition, Grilldon has a very large population of retirees, a demographic with ample time to devote to hobbies. We therefore recommend that you choose southeastern Grilldon as the site for your next HobCo Hobby Shop. We predict that a shop in this area will draw a steady stream of enthusiastic new HobCo customers.”  

Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the recommendation is likely to have the predicted result. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the recommendation.

ground/ data: no hobby shop in the area according to the research
g/d: 88% of those who responded - welcome the opening of a hobby shop
g/d: in the area the hobby business has increased by 300%
g/d: large number of retirees with ample time for hobbies
claim: choose Grilldon as the site

questions about the attitudes of the residents
- response rate (if the rate is low, the attitudes of those who do not respond remain unknown)  
- will they spend money in the hobby shop (welcome <> consume)
- what about residents in adjacent areas (are they interested)  

questions about the hobby business growth in the region
- is the increase related to residents that the proposed hobby shop can serve
- is the business growth related to hobby shops (perhaps the online hobby business is the main driver)
- what was the increase in the past 2-3 years (will the trend continue)  

questions about the retirees
- are the retirees willing to spend money in the hobby shop (perhaps they have other hobbies that do not require a visit to a hobby shop)
- do they really have a lot of spare time (maybe they need to babysit their grandchildren or they attend community colleges for continuing education)
- are they physically fit to visit the shop

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Argument176)The following appeared as part of an article in a Dillton newspaper.
"In an effort to bring new jobs to Dillton and stimulate the city's flagging economy, Dillton's city council voted last year to lower the city's corporate tax rate by 15 percent; at the same time, the city began offering generous relocation grants to any company that would move to Dillton. Since these changes went into effect, two new factories have opened in Dillton. Although the two factories employ more than 1,000 people, the unemployment rate in Dillton remains unchanged. The only clear explanation for this is that the new factories are staffed with out-of-town workers rather than Dillton residents."
Write a response in which you discuss one or more alternative explanations that could rival the proposed explanation and explain how your explanation(s) can plausibly account for the facts presented in the argument.

fact to be explained: unemployment rate remains unchanged
explanation: new factories hire out-of-town workers  
other facts: corporate tax rate lowered; relocation grants
other alternative explanations

unemployment rate is the number of workers out of job over the total workforce

Job loss due to tax cut  
- as a result of tax cut, the city government may have to reduce its expenditure; as a result, fewer jobs are available in the government and other organisations relying on government funding
- the job loss in public sector may lead to less consumption which reduces the jobs available in the private sector

Job loss due to relocation grants
- relocation grants may attract factories that compete against the local factories for resources, business opportunities and workers
- local factories may have to lay off some workers
- part of the 2000 workers hired by the new factories may come from the local factories

lack of skills of the local workers
- the local workers especially those that are jobless may not have the appropriate skills demanded by the new factories
- which explains why the factories are staffed by out-of-town workers
- hiring out-of-town workers is not the ultimate reason

increasing number of people seeking jobs  
- due to the poor economy, more people seek for jobs
- stay home mums need to work as the husbands could not make enough money  
- students did not get offers to graduate schools and join the workforce  

  

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您好，我是10.17的考生，托福作文25分（当时出来点问题字数偏少了只有330），G目标分是4.5以上。之前看过了您的issue和argument帖子，请问您的互改小组最近还有活动继续麽~想参加

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tesolchina 发表于 2014-11-18 18:38
2) To understand the most important characteristics of a society, one must study its major cities.
...

老师，请问您这篇范文为什么没有 consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true这一部份呢？

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tesolchina 发表于 2014-11-18 18:38
2) To understand the most important characteristics of a society, one must study its major cities.
...

除了观点的反面是否需要讨论外，我还有一个关于审题的问题。题目指的是one must study its major cities，这是不是说在文章中要论证出大城市独一无二的在小城市不具有的代表性呢，但是我在老师的范文中只看出来大城市具有代表性，但并没有说明这种代表性是小城市不具有的。不知道是我审题审过头了，还是对老师的范文没有理解到，还请老师指点

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tesolchina 发表于 2015-1-9 10:50
Educational institutions have a responsibility to dissuade students from pursuing fields of study ...

老师，在本题中，我若将fields that they are unlikely to succeed 定义为fields that cannot bring them lucrative achievement 来作答可否？

tesolchinaUID：2191404

最近这段时间由于学校的教学和写博士论文任务较重，较少点评版友的作文。https://bbs.gter.net/thread-1873272-1-1.html 这个帖子上的文章我还会抽时间看。其他途径如微信等发给我的习作我可能就没时间看了。最重要的还是看我在论坛上写的范文，从中总结规律和技巧，然后自己模仿。希望发给我的习作是在学习、模仿和思考的基础上完成的。 而不是凭自己的想象写出来的。

tesolchinaUID：2191404

有没有可能建一个wiki的环境进行GRE写作学习？
初步的想法是为每一道issue和argument的题目建一个wiki页面 这个任务可以用程序来完成
然后在针对这道题的页面上可以有一个section链接到范文，包括ETS的，我的还有其他高分版友的
再下一个section就是链接到版友的习作  每一个新建立习作链接都要去编辑反馈上一层的文章
与此同时可以针对不同的写作问题建页面 在反馈的时候可以链接到这个页面去

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tesolchina 发表于 2015-9-18 09:18
有没有可能建一个wiki的环境进行GRE写作学习？
初步的想法是为每一道issue和argument的题目建一个wiki页面 ...

感觉内容和寄托上差不多，用wiki是为了建一个更大的平台吗？
我觉得用wiki的话可以再加入每个题目可用例证的wiki链接

bettershadyUID：3653531

老师， 能否再写篇文章，对比一下你的方法和那本GRE写作5.5？
很多同学的写作入门书都是那一本，但是也有人像我一样觉得它有些提纲不是很好。这几天一直在拜读您的各种教程文章提纲，感觉好像也很不错，就会有和之前5.5书上学来的理论打架了，有点凌乱。
我有注意到您是不太喜欢那本书的理论的，那么具体为什么，什么时候该用谁的方法，您有没有兴趣再阐述一下？:-)

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老师你好！我想请教一下，据说新G的ARGU必须写够6个反驳点才能拿6分，是这样吗？可是写6个需要6段吗？一般没有时间写这么多吧？