学签被拒说有移民倾向有什么办法吗？

acevictorUID: 3922349

我是本科刚毕业，申请的college的研究生文凭课程拿到了offer，都是相同的动画专业。申请找了中介，材料应该是很齐全的，他说只能再改改学习计划，他帮我写的我也看了，写了很多，都从我小时候说起了。。梦想进入这行业啥的，也强调了毕业后回国的打算，我看着也不知道还能改啥了
听说还有旅游签转学签的，不知道我适用吗？雅思有6.5，好像是要读个语言课程？

coyote111UID: 3917850

楼主介意把sp出来看看？看看中介水平。话说sp 是study plan还是 statement of purpose

十二楠东UID: 3912982

你多大啊，有工作经验吗。旅游签转学签，必须到加拿大以后6个月通过语言班的课程，拿到学校OFFER就可以转学签了

acevictorUID: 3922349

十二楠东 发表于 2018-11-24 10:28
你多大啊，有工作经验吗。旅游签转学签，必须到加拿大以后6个月通过语言班的课程，拿到学校OFFER就可以转学签了

我刚本科毕业啊。学校的offer有，但是明年一月的，不知道能不能延期

acevictorUID: 3922349

coyote111 发表于 2018-11-24 10:13
楼主介意把sp出来看看？看看中介水平。话说sp 是study plan还是 statement of purpose

Study   Plan
Honorable Visa Officer:
My name is who was just admitted by Sheridan College with Graduate Certificate of Computer Animation program starts in January 2019. I am honored to introduce my personal background and study plan for your judgment, so that my study permit can be approved then.

I was born on September 28, 1995 in Hangzhou, Zhejiang. When I am a young boy, I am strongly interested in painting, animation and design fields. My keen interest prompted me to receive an undergraduate education at Zhejiang Sci-Tech University, and got Bachelor Degree of Fine Arts in Animation in June 2018. The 4-year immersion in learning animation enabled me to grasp fundamental theories on drawing, scene & character design and animation movement rules, and broaden my expertise of animation making techniques. Furthermore, as the skillful English proficiency determines the actual learning effects to some extent, upon graduation, I have spent 2 months to study English at home for better preparing my future study. Thanks to my hard-working, in August 2018, I have got an eligible IELTS score of overall 6.5 with no band below 6.0, which greatly enhanced my confidence to study in a foreign land. I have attached my Resume and parts of my prior Arts Works.

I dream of becoming an eligible technician working in animation industry, who possesses excellent computer animation-marking skills. In order to fulfill the career goal, I have carried out internship projects during my college seasons, in which key techniques were systematically used. However, with the progress of these internships, I increasingly realized the inadequacy of my undergraduate-level knowledge, which has greatly limited my career development: Firstly, my undergraduate curriculum focuses on illustration, computer graphics and advertising design, which is not the professional field of 3D computer animation I am strongly interested in and urgently needed. Secondly, the curriculum setting put emphasis on theoretical learning rather than practical training, which led to my real-working ability falls short of my wishes when operating internship projects. The practical skills are so difficult to understand just by self-learning, and there are no special training courses at Chinese institutes for giving me a really useful guidance. Thirdly, some of its contents are outdated to some extent, which cannot meet future demand for working at modern animation enterprises. It is undoubtedly necessary to accept cutting-edge expertise and update personal knowledge framework at a superior college. Having witnessed the limitations of my undergraduate studies, which are only an entry-level step for future employment, I am well aware of the significance of my further studies for enhancing my key techniques on computer animation.

Pursuing advanced studies at Sheridan College becomes my deliberate decision. Sheridan College is a top-ranking institute enjoys high-quality education in the field of animation. Its programs possess advanced teaching concepts with co-op curriculum setting attached, which focus on cultivation of students’ practicability, creativity and manipulative ability. In view of the insufficient practicality of my prior studies, what I eagerly need to improve is key computer animation skills, such as Maya model making, C4D special-effects production and Zbrush operation, which are all the key contents the computer animation program concerns about! Beyond that, in order to quickly grasp the main skills for real-working, I just need a short-term program, so the well-developed 1-year graduate certificate course at Sheridan College is obviously the best choice for me!

In January 2019, I will be enrolled in Sheridan College with Computer Animation program. The most important purpose is to improve and enhance my applied knowledge and practical skills. I firmly believe that earning a rigorous, challenging and exciting education at Sheridan College will make me scale higher academic and professional heights in computer animation. After I finish my one-year study in Canada, I will certainly come back to China. Computer animation is an emerging industry in China, so there is huge space to go in. This is also a promising career that workers can put a full creativity into their interested fields. I will come back with all my learning from Canada at that time and make an effort on Chinese animation industry. Besides, as the only child in my family, my parents give their entire love to me so I have the responsibility to go back to my hometown and take good care of them. Thank you very much for your time, and I will greatly appreciate it if you give me the chance to realize my dream.

Applicant:

coyote111UID: 3917850

谢谢。作为一个英语业余爱好者，我看了。
写的都是模版化的东西。第一段自我介绍，完全模版。第二段为什么读，添加一点专业词汇。第三段读了有什么好处，泛泛而谈。第四段，要回国，一堆无用的铺垫之后，具体原因也没写出来。

全文模版化，拼接痕迹严重，没有情感，没有连贯性......

acevictorUID: 3922349

coyote111 发表于 2018-11-24 12:06
谢谢。作为一个英语业余爱好者，我看了。
写的都是模版化的东西。第一段自我介绍，完全模版。第二段为什么读，添加一点专业词汇。第三段读了有什么好处，泛泛而谈。第四段，要回国，一堆无用的铺垫之后，具体原因也没写出来。

全文模版化，拼接痕迹严重，没有情感，没有连贯性......

被你这么一说是挺模板化的。。我再修改下吧

huanzhihuoUID: 3917241

acevictor 发表于 2018-11-24 12:20
被你这么一说是挺模板化的。。我再修改下吧

楼主美国日本签证有吗？有这俩签证会有帮助的

acevictorUID: 3922349

huanzhihuo 发表于 2018-11-24 21:58
楼主美国日本签证有吗？有这俩签证会有帮助的

我以前有好几次日本的短期签证。。美签到是没有

acevictorUID: 3922349

huanzhihuo 发表于 2018-11-24 21:58
楼主美国日本签证有吗？有这俩签证会有帮助的

我以前有好几次日本的短期签证。。美签到是没有

huanzhihuoUID: 3917241

acevictor 发表于 2018-11-24 23:51
我以前有好几次日本的短期签证。。美签到是没有

看了你发的中介写的文章感觉我的中介要是写也是这个套路……可能中介都这样吧……楼主可以看看弄个美签，或者花钱某宝上找找专门改这个文件的写手了吧

ianlee1982UID: 3809195

楼主要明白一件事情，加拿大从来没有什么因为所谓的移民倾向，加拿大从来不排斥移民，你有移民倾向，就老老实实申请移民呗。通常被说明移民倾向的拒绝理由是purpose of visit 其实就是说，VO认为你过去的访问目的有问题，申请的是学习，但实际是要移民或者工作。这就是为什么跨专业，倒读不容易过的原因，学习逻辑不通啊。 写sp的目的也就是让vo知道你的这条逻辑线，我是谁，什么专业毕业的，为什么要去加拿大读书，这个专业对我有什么好处。至于未来，我觉得写不写回国，根本不重要，网上你自己搜，不写回国的sp一大把。

anranzhilvUID: 3419123

你这个sp语法错误太多了，用词也很奇怪，最好重写。。
然后句子也很长，没有长短句一起用，显得很不真实，很像凑字数。。

codercasparUID: 3585026

别用这个中介了。。。。。

第一段没几句话还是有语法错误。
第二段一上来“When I am a young boy, I am strongly interested in painting, animation and design fields.” 首先语法时态就错了，应该是When I was a young boy， I was.....。另外，从逻辑上这句话问题也很大。这句话陈述了一个内容，接下来就要举例论证这个陈述啊而不是跳到说本科学了什么。

总之，如果这个是中介弄得，还是换个靠谱中介吧，或者DIY。

ianlee1982UID: 3809195

codercaspar 发表于 2018-11-26 07:06
别用这个中介了。。。。。

第一段没几句话还是有语法错误。

同意，这篇sp的问题很大，主要是申研文，不需要申请时候自己梳理一篇已经被验证过的ps，虽然说ps和sp还是有一点区别，但素材和语法毕竟是可以用的。sp要写些什么，在cic的sds的checklist上写的很清楚。 把上头提的东西，按照自己的逻辑线写出来就可以了，然后自己通读一下，要连自己都说服不了，还是暂时别提交了吧。