12月27日，1T作文第四期同主题写作。

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Undoubtedly, automobiles have become one of the essential parts of modern people’s life that can no longer be ignored. Among various advantages that automobiles bring to our society and daily life are more production, convenient traveling and a promising industry.

Automobiles bring the modern markets productions of more kinds, larger quantities, and more freshness. Children living near the Santa Clause who belongs to an ice and snow world can also enjoy the bananas and mangoes from tropical areas, while I, a Chinese girl, can watch the latest American movie in the city of Beijing.

Another factor may benefit us is that we would spend only a short while to arrive at a far, faraway place. In the ancient time, mailing proves tough due to undeveloped transportation. Remember that Pheidippides, the first marathon runner, dropped dead seconds after saying: “Rejoice! We conquer!” Today we have aero plane mails and express mails. Mails no longer be a problem for ordinary people.

Moreover, automobiles industry itself is a profitable business and sure to become increasingly bright in the future. 2.1 million automobiles have been sold in China in 2003, while there’s a population of almost 1.3 billion which means huge markets.

All in all, the impact that the automobiles has have on our daily life and society in general, is undeniable for it has made the world smaller, faster and even more productive.

cuteUID: 2152397

I prefer the airplane as the one which changed people's lives. The reason on which I base on (没有说以原因为基础的吧？换个搭配)is that it has met our dream （固定搭配是满足需要不是满足梦想吧？）of flying in the sky. It makes possible somethings hardly to be accomplished. At the same time, it links people all over the world to be united humankind.

Long ago, we always had a dream of flying in the sky like free birds to see the earth where we lived from another view point. （开头最好 提出分论点）In old （改成ancient比较好）China, many precursors had made wooden birds and let them fly in the air although it can not last long. In the history of humankind we have tried many methods but until （是not until吧）the Wright brothers invented the first heavier than air flying machine can we believe we can fly as birds, though there are some differences. From then on, our flying dream comes true

In addition to（to what?）, many people can not imagine heavier machines can float in the water or fly in the air （搭配还要斟酌）until the steamboat and airplane are present. The Wrighter brothers' success proved that like the steamboat the airplane made by heavy metals can wing in the air. It shapes our view towards the world: there is nothing impossible as long as we try. To some extent, it encourages the tempting of the rocket and space navigation to explore the world we do not know. Not only the airplane itself changes our lives, but also its inspiration galvanizes us to proceed

The most practical profit for us of the airplanes is that it can send us to anywhere in the earth we need. No matter the European countries or Asian countries, even the African tribes, are convenient to achieve in no more than a day. With the help of the airplanes, the Washington is not only a dot on the map for people of other countries and we can communicate with each other quickly and easily. We should acknowledge the foreigner is not a usual word as before. We can meet people with different colors everyday and we are adapted to. If we can not afford a bit expensive plane tickets, we can correspond by air. People from distinct parts of the world are not strange to each other.

In sum, through three reasons presented above, we can conclude airplanes indeed change our lives both in practical and in spiritual aspects

北回归线UID: 2130044

Originally posted by cute at 2005-12-31 16:03
Undoubtedly, automobiles have become one of the essential parts of modern people’s life that can no longer be ignored. Among various advantages that automobiles bring to our society and daily life ...

Undoubtedly, automobiles have become one of the essential parts of modern people’s life that can no longer be ignored. Among various advantages that automobiles bring to our society and daily life are more production(?...我又回看了整句一遍是理解你的意思了,但是似乎确实比较不顺), convenient traveling and a promising industry.

Automobiles bring the modern markets productions of more kinds, larger quantities, and more freshness(我觉得把这句中的名词换成修饰production的定语可能更好些,呵呵,个人意见^^). Children living near the Santa Clause who belongs to an ice and snow world can also enjoy the bananas and mangoes from tropical areas, while I, a Chinese girl, can watch the latest American movie in the city of Beijing.(例子举得很有意思:)但是最好多说明几句吧,要不,并不能充分反映Automobiles带来了什么change呀)
Another factor may benefit us is that we would spend only a short while to arrive at a far, far away place. In the ancient time, mailing proves tough due to the undeveloped transportation. Remember that Pheidippides, the first marathon runner, dropped dead seconds after saying: “Rejoice! We conquer!” Today we have aero plane mails and express mails(呀呀,怎么能说到飞机了呢?俺们说的不是automobile么). Mails no longer be a problem for ordinary people.(况且这段的ts和内容不是很贴切啊,这是个问题.)

Moreover, automobiles industry itself is a profitable business and sure to become increasingly bright in the future. 2.1 million automobiles have been sold in China in 2003, while there’s a population of almost 1.3 billion which means huge(建议改成even huger^^) markets.

All in all, the impact that the automobiles has have on our daily life and society in general, is undeniable for it has made the world smaller, faster and even more productive.

个人感觉文章短了一点,还有不少地方是可以多写上一两句的,那样文章也会丰满很多,更具说服力啊~~

[ Last edited by 北回归线 on 2005-12-31 at 17:13 ]

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第一次限时30min写作，很紧，只有252w，大家拍拍吧。
With the development of society, more and more transportation vehicles have been invented, originating from bicycles , automobiles to airplanes, which are making a great impact on our daily lives. Thanks to automobiles, especially, even though there are some advantages, not only can our lives be more convenient, but also more efficient now. So goes as follows.

The first reason for my propensity is that automobiles make our traveling convenient. Nowadays, you can drive your car to friends’ home 100 kilometers away in just one or two hours, which may take you a whole day or so to go there without cars. Furthermore, you can go anywhere you want on holiday, are the roads available, and you don’t have to struggle for your sour feet or tired body.

Another reason is that automobiles can make freight-carrying easy and efficient. Long ago, the great wall was built by millions of workers carrying the stones and blocks by their hands, and the whole construction work lasted many years. Nevertheless, now all of these carrying work can be done by automobiles efficiently, and less workers will be required.

Admittedly, some disadvantages of automobiles are obvious. To fuel the automobile, more and more petroleum is in demand, which cause the crisis of petroleum all over the world. And automobiles emit lots of polluted exhaust gas doing harm to environment.

In a word, automobiles do change our lives in many aspects including many advantages and disadvantages. But, taking further consideration to automobiles, their advantages outweigh there disadvantages.

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Choose one of the following transportation vehicles and explain why you think it has changed people's lives     
Automobiles
bicycles
airplanes
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

Since the first one was invented, automobiles have never stop improving their technology to achieve various requirements of  humans. With growing number of family having their private car, and automobiles have deeply changed people’s lives in both positive and negative ways. Not only have people been enjoying the convenience brought by them, but also bearing side effects created by them.

The speed, provided by automobiles, make people’s life much more comfortable than before. Network of roadway and the lines of bus just like spider’s web lead people to their diverse destinations using much less time, without suffering the freezing wind in the winter and straightening into glare sunshine in the summer. What is more, Automobiles help people to do more things with the same time used before by saving the time wasted in the way. Not only do automobiles save time but also can save people’s precious life. It is the existence of ambulance that make it possible to provide timely help to emergent patients such as suffering heart attract.

What is more, automobile help to bridge the gape between people. The people of a big family are likely to scatter in different part of county for own development. Some time even living in the same city, family member rarely meet each other, because the city has become terribly large for the over rapid development. The long physical distance lessens the times of members’ reunion and loosens the emotional tie between the relatives. The same problem has troubled my own family before, in the same city with my grandfather, our family seldom got together both for long distance and busy working of my parents. So luck are we, my family has our own car and the condition changes a lot. Whenever we miss each other, we can get reunion. To some extent, automobile enhance the emotion between people.

However, automobile also contribute to the declination of people’s lives , such as air pollution, bad healthy condition, traffic jam and so forth. The exhaust gas produced by automobiles gives a rise to air pollution, gray sky with no stars, high rate of lung cancer and so on , consequently resulting in the quality of life to decline. Moreover, automobiles have substituted some people’s feet , as a result people can reach destination with fast speed, but lose the opportunities to exercise. Some unhealthy figure is created: big body and head but thin legs and arms. But the problems can be solved by humans such as producing green fuel, inventing new way to exercise and so forth.

Simply put, automobiles has altered people’s lives greatly. Although having some negative effects, automobile will give much more positive effect to people’s lives though our effort in the future .

cuteUID: 2152397

Undoubtedly, automobiles have become one of the essential parts of modern people‘s life that can no longer be ignored. Among various advantages that automobiles bring to our society and daily life are more kinds of production(?...我又回看了整句一遍是理解你的意思了,但是似乎确实比较不顺), convenient traveling and a promising industry.

Automobiles bring the modern markets more kinds, larger quantities, and more
fresh productions (我觉得把这句中的名词换成修饰production的定语可能更好些,呵呵,个人意见^^). Children living near the Santa Clause who belongs to an ice and snow world can also enjoy the bananas and mangoes from tropical areas, while I, a Chinese girl, can watch the latest American movie in the city of Beijing. Those
things have hardly been imagined before automobiles were invented. Common though they were, automobiles do change our daily life.(例子举得很有意思但是最好多说明几句吧,要不,并不能充分反映Automobiles带来了什么change呀)
Another factor may benefit us is that we would spend only a short while to arrive at a far, far away place. In the ancient time, traveling proves tough due to the
undeveloped transportation.
, automobiles industry itself is a profitable business and sure to become increasingly bright in the future. 2.1 million automobiles have been sold in China in 2003, while there’s a population of almost 1.3 billion which means even huger(建议改成even huger^^) markets.

All in all, the impact that the automobiles has have on our daily life and society in general, is undeniable for it has made the world smaller, faster and even more productive.
个人感觉文章短了一点,还有不少地方是可以多写上一两句的,那样文章也会丰满很多,更具说服力啊~~

北回归线UID: 2130044

hehe~俺说的几处都改掉了呀:)
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Originally posted by nebel at 2005-12-28 21:20
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The train is one of vehicles for distane transportation, and it is impressive for the students whose campuses is from their motherlands.Unfortunately, the long time taken in the train and uncomfort also impress them. I bet if they have an opportunity to take the plane in the spring breek, they must be surprised for its speed and comfort.Thus, I think nowadays, the aircrafes will play an significant role in the 2lst century.

The major point for my penchant is that it is the plane that will promote the merchadise blossom. It is all known that some airports must be built for the planes. Where there is and airplace, there is plenty of factories and mills. In this case, Changle city, one of counties of China has been benefiting the economic great development, since the airplane was set up three years ago. Every year, more than one million travelers come and go throngh the port, which stimulate the transportation prosperity, and generate thousands of job opportunities.What’s more, after the airport operated, many factories have been set up or are building. We can prodict that several years later, a new economic circle will appear near the airport.

If we analysis the inflnence of the plane from another ascept, the conclusions will be reached that the aircraft benefit the development of distance business. The distance between the Shanghai and Beijing is opproximate 800kms, but the plane cover it within one and half an hour,more than 20 hours for trains. That is if a businessman convey vegetable from Shanghai to Beijing in the early morning,the citizenry in the captical city will buy fresh vegetable for their lunch, which is unimaginable 20years ago.

Certainly, we shouldn’t ignore the role of the trains and the bicycle.The train still is a cheap method for long-range convey. And the bicycle is the first choice short-range transportation. However, as the celerity and function concerned, the plane will play more influence in the 2lst centuary.

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A significant aspect of modern science is the invention of airplane, which are applied to all over the world and hence as a major force in shaping and changing people's attitude toward transportation. Therefore, it has not gone too far to say that the airplane is the greatest transportation vehicle.

The first advantage of airplane is that it provides fast speed and cozy way for people from one place to their final destination. In nowaday people's mind, thousands of miles in a trip has no special meaning but some Arab digital. However, in the ancient China, it is tedious, sometimes even danger for people having a long trip. Generally, it will take at least several months for people to accomplish a long distance trips. People have to get cross mountains and rivers. Often, they will meet animals, robbers, and atrocious weather. While it is only take 3 hours for a passer by the air and what should they do is just have a snap or read some magazines. A manager can have a breakfast in Beijing, then take a plane to Shanghai and have a lunch with his customer. Then come back and prepare dinner for his wife.

Another significant benefit of airplane is the contribution to the globlelization. About 500 years ago, a great Italian explorer Christopher Columbus found the new land. However, there is still a quandary for Europe traders to sail there crossing the pacific where the sea have caprice tempers. Until the invention of airplane, the fast communication among different counties and areas become possible. A famous automobile exhibition, will be holded in China every two years. Most of automobile manufacturers in the world will take their cars and automobile related products to China for exhibition. The airplane can carry all those products and transport them safely to China. From political aspect, a government leader will visit other counties by the air. United States government even prepares a special plane for their president working. Without airplane, can we imagine that a president take a train or other transportation vehicles to join a national meeting? Then their most time must be consumed on the trip.

In sum, airplane not only provides people the fast and cozy way for traveling, but also contributes to the economic and political communication among different areas and countries in the earth. Airplane actually has changed people's lives.

改82楼的
Since the first one was invented, automobiles have never stop improving their technology to achieve various requirements of humans. With growing number of family having their private car, and automobiles （状语and 名词，感觉怪怪,不知这样写可否？The rapid growth of private car）has deeply changed people’s lives in both positive and negative ways. Not only have people been enjoying the convenience brought by them(automobile), but also bearing side effects created by them.

The speed, provided by automobiles, make people’s life much more comfortable than before. Network of roadway and the lines of bus just like spider’s web lead people to their diverse destinations using much (using much是修饰什么呢？直接用in 就可以表达)less time, without suffering the freezing wind in the winter and straightening into glare sunshine in the summer. What is more, Automobiles help people to do more things with(at) the same time used before by saving the time wasted in the way( than last where much more pressure time was wasted on roads）. Not only do automobiles save time but also can save people’s precious life. It is the existence of ambulance that make it possible to provide timely help to emergent patients such as suffering heart attract.

What is more, automobile help to bridge the gape (gap) between people. The people of(in) a big family are likely to scatter in different part (parts)of county for own(own 一般要有修饰语，如 their own) development. Some time even l(Even sometimes) living in the same city, family member rarely meet each other, because the city has become terribly large for the over rapid development. The long physical distance lessens the times of (family)members’ reunion and loosens the emotional tie between the relatives. The same problem has troubled my own family before, in the same city with my grandfather, our family seldom got together both for long distance and busy working of my parents. So luck are we, my family has our own car and the condition changes a lot. Whenever we miss each other, we can get reunion. To some extent, automobile enhance the emotion between people.(这段写的比较充分，并且结合事例来分析，比较有说服力)
However, automobile also contribute to the declination of people’s lives , such as air pollution, bad healthy condition, traffic jam and so forth(on). The exhaust gas produced by automobiles gives a rise to air pollution, gray sky with no stars, high rate of lung cancer and so on , consequently resulting in the quality of life to decline. Moreover, automobiles have substituted some people’s feet , as a result people can reach destination with fast speed, but lose the opportunities to exercise. Some unhealthy figure is created: big body and head but thin legs and arms. But the problems can be solved by humans such as producing green fuel, inventing new way to exercise and so forth.

Simply put, automobiles has altered people’s lives greatly. Although having some negative effects, automobile will give much more positive effect to people’s lives though our effort in the future
哇，491个字，强人。考试的时候要是能写这么些字就很强了:victory:
逻辑有条理，思路清晰，
但要注意避免拼写的错误，个别的句子还要仔细推敲。
共同进步。:handshake

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原帖由 stoneSQ 于 2005-12-29 17:43 发表
I prefer the airplane as the one which changed people's lives. The reason on which I base on is that it has met （realize?）our dream of flying in the sky. （这句话有 ...

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