1月4日，1T作文第六期同主题写作

tj_zhdjUID: 2137831

第一次写 32min 320words 希望大家能多提意见，我快没有时间了

Should parents make important decisions for their older teenage children? When faced to this question, many children ,often 15 to 18 year-old, would refuse their parents' or relatives' suggestion. However, I do not agree with these children but support the decisions made by parents. My reasons go as follow.

First of all, lots of children who are green-handed in making decision would not consider these things carefully, they do not realize the importance of some decisions which would have a huge influence on them.. Most children do not have well-developed brains when they are still 15 or 18 ages. If they were given the chance to make decisions all by themselves, they could be very likely hurt. However, their parents can help to decide them for their children because they know their children very well and they have broad views about life as well. They could make very suitable decisions for their kids. That is the main reason why I support the parent's decisions.

In the other hand, make decisions for children is one of the parents' task. Parents should not refuse to do it. We all know that there are a lot of children wondering on the street and sometimes rob passages of handbags. This is a very common phenomenon in some big cities. These children have not got their parents' protection, so they decide for themselves. They become a thief gradually. So without correct directions made by parents, children are very likely to become bad boys. This is the other reason parents must made decision for their children.

Without denying, I agree that making decision by children have some advantage. It is good for their future living without parents. But the most important thing is that they are too young and it is not the right time. In order to keep their growth in a nice condition, parents should no hesitate to take their responsibility to give their children the right decision.

suney2006UID: 2111332

First, let's consider some important factor influential to the success of a man. Whether he or she can determine to do if he wants to. Whether he can hold on. Does he understand the fact without too much precipitance.
There are mainly two types of kids grown up in two different family and education systems. One is independent. There is an old saying that "The poor's children keep the house younger", because from early childhood, they have to teach themselves a lot because of nobody teach them, including taking care of themselves, adapting positively to the environments and helping others. Most important, they can be independent.
some other children were born in another case. Their parents are successful and able to consider everything for them through the whole process of their growth up. There rarely need to worry about something. As a sequence, they are accustomed to be looked after by others instead of themselves. The only thing they have is a Day Dream made without considering the actual situation. They have no idea how to deal with actual difficulties from all aspects, how to cooperate with others, how to stick on themselves but only be frustrated when the bubbles of day dream broke out. How bad it is! So when they are only a teenager, they also need parents' guide. By the way, adults need give them more chance to practice，or they will behave childish.
So the answer to this question is depend the teenager himself. the more factors he possess like an adult, the more should decision made by his parents.

HenryJacobUID: 198409

第二次发文章  超时很多

I am always amazed when I hear people saying that they have made important decisions for their children who are already seventeen or eighteen years old. The children within this age range, I believe, are not little kids any more. Their parents should allow them to make decision themselves, because making self decision can enable the teenagers to choose the path they are interested in, to grow up quickly, and to increase their self-confidence.

First of all, children’s freedom of making their own decisions make sure that these young men can choose the path they really want to follow. In deciding significant things, such as choosing a future career, parents’ help tend to be of no effect at last. They usually think about questions in their own way, rather than from the prospective of their kids, and their children may not have much enthusiasm in the road directed by others. However, if permitted to decide for themselves, the children can at least ensure that the path they choose is in agreement with their interests. This may lead to much better results than those caused by parents’ decisions.

Second, making decisions independently is a living skill that the teenagers must master. These young men will grow up and they have to decide for themselves sooner or later, and they would never be able to make their own decisions unless they are given the chance to practice. So for their good, the earlier they begin to think independently, the quicker they can grow up and be on their own.

The third advantage of making decision independently involves the opportunity that children can develop their confidence. Decision-making not only let the young learn a lot during the process but gives them a feeling of accomplishment after finishing it. Gradually, their self-confidence grows. Even though they may sometimes fail in making decisions, they can still learn valuable lessons from the setback, which is actually a stem toward the right direction.

It is true that parents may seem to be more responsible if they could make important decisions for their children. But they can not do these in their children’s whole life. Letting young people make their own decisions is greatly beneficial in choosing the proper path, helping them grow up, and increasing their confidence in themselves.

逆风飞羊UID: 182440

大家不要总是抱怨没有人改自己的作文，希望都能想一想，自己是不是也改过别人的作文呢？如果每个人在这里贴一篇再改哪怕一篇别人的作文，这里的气氛就会完全不一样。
不要总是说自己水平不够没能力改别人的，其实大家都是学生，牛人不会而且也用不着到这里来和别人一起互改。希望每个人，比如luoluo，一起加油，每期改一篇别人的作文，自己也会有收获！

这篇文章首先字数太少了。再加三四十词比较合适。而且，你的B1比较奇怪，前一部分写的不错的，可是到了Secondly，本来完全可以另起一段，是一个很好的方面，可是却在B1里只写了一句草草结束。
另外，现在不能满足于40分钟了，要把目标定在35——38。还要多准备一些闪光句型。

逆风飞羊UID: 182440

[size=-2]请所有同学注意：

说三点事情：
1，希望大家贴一篇自己的作文，改一篇别人的作文。互相提高，具体在楼上的回帖里说了。

2，希望大家主动回拍改了自己作文的同学的文章，拍别人作文的同学请在改后留下自己作文的连接或者楼层。礼尚往来，互帮互助。同主题刚开始时有同学说道：“拍我者我必回拍！！”何等地激情与丈义！复习了这么久，可能好多同学都产生了疲惫消退了激情而却不自知。我们现在需要再度兴奋起来，从说出这句话开始！

3，评改别人作文者，小羊我必狠拍他！！

huangtingtingUID: 2162352

支持羊羊的观点


改18楼文章


I am always amazed ( surprised )  when I hear people saying that they have made important decisions for their children who are already seventeen or eighteen years old. ( 与题目给出的年龄范围有出入，最好能够切题 )The children within this age range, I believe, （没有必要加插入语这里） are not little kids any more. Their parents should allow them to make decision themselves, （可以改为 which can enable 。。。使结构 更紧凑） because making self decision can enable the teenagers to choose the path they are interested in, to grow up quickly, and to increase their self-confidence.

First of all, children’s freedom of making their own decisions make sure that these young men can choose the path they really want to follow. （ 改为 the freedom of making  decision ensure that the direction is exactly they want to follow   ）   ( 可以加一个例子，比如专业的选择正是上面的观点，再跳转到下一点更自然)  In deciding significant things ,  （faced some significant decisions ） such as choosing a future career, parents’ help tend to be of no effect at last. ( ) They usually think about questions in their own way, rather than from the prospective (perspective ) of their kids, and their children may not have much enthusiasm in the road directed by others. However, if permitted to decide for themselves, the children can at least ensure that the path they choose is in agreement with their interests. This may lead to much better results than those caused by parents’ decisions
Second,(secondly ) making decisions independently is a living skill that the teenagers must master. These young men will grow up (one day ) and they have to decide for themselves sooner or later, and ( 可以另写一个句子，没必要用and 连接) they would never be able to make their own decisions （if they had never given the chance to do it before ）unless they are given the chance to practice. So for their good, the earlier they begin to think independently, the quicker they can grow up and be on their own.

The third (another ) advantage of making decision independently involves (is that it give the children ) the opportunity that children can ( to develop ) develop their (self) confidence. Decision-making not only let the young learn a lot during the process but （also） gives them a feeling of accomplishment after finishing it. Gradually, their self-confidence grows. Even though they may sometimes fail in making decisions, they can still learn valuable lessons from the setback, which is actually a stem toward the right direction.

It is true that parents may seem to be more responsible if they could make important decisions for their children. （ it is true that the parents should take responsibility of their children when they are not mature enough to make their decisions） But they can not do these in their children’s whole life. Letting young people make their own decisions is greatly beneficial in choosing the proper path, helping them grow up, and increasing their confidence in themselves.）

你的文章结构还是很清晰的， 前后呼应以很好，呵呵，一起努力吧。我得文章在3 楼有空看看:victory:

[ 本帖最后由 逆风飞羊 于 2006-1-5 18:45 编辑 ]

huangtingtingUID: 2162352

sorry
贴了一些码进去，希望还能看得清楚:p

逆风飞羊UID: 182440

原帖由 huangtingting 于 2006-1-5 16:53 发表
sorry
贴了一些码进去，希望还能看得清楚:p

改好了　呵呵
你的一会儿就看:handshake:D

bamboo2142003UID: 2135987

写的不太顺，这几天忙考试焦头烂额，停几天久已只要考到13号了~~~~~~~~~~~~
大家给拍一下吧，练的机会不多了.......
（35min,392words)写的有点多……

With the development of society , people more and more emphasizing the importance of educating children in a more natural and durable way ,are focus on whether parents or other adult relatives should make important decisions for their older teenage children or not .Which you agree depends on your experiences ,life styles and emotional concerns .However ,if I was forced to make a choice ,mine would be for a more durable way .Parents or other adult relatives help and lead their older teenage children to make important decisions .
  Older teenage children are not mature enough to make important decisions .Children ,fifteen to eighteen years old ,do not have much experience in society .They do not know whether their decisions are right or not .What’s more ,children in such age are so conscious that they will always change their decisions because they listen to others’ advices and do not have the ability to tell apart which one is better .As a result ,it is important for their parents or other adult relatives to help them ,giving them appropriate suggestions .Therefore ,teenage children could make them as references and make their own decisions .
  In other hand ,parents and other adult relatives should not make important decisions for their older teenage children .Children ,fifteen to eighteen years ago ,will be an adult soon ,who will make their own decisions by themselves .If parents and other adults relatives still make important decisions for them ,they will not know how to make a proper decision for themselves .We can not imagine the results of this case .
  So a better way for parents and other adult relatives to do is to help and lead their older teenage children to make their own important decisions .They may give their children some advices ,and what’s better ,they could analyze every possibilities of one dicisions and detail the advantages and disadvantages .In such ways ,children could develop their mature attitudes and it will make them more thoughtful as well .
  In conclusion ,no matter how the parents and other adult relatives do ,their aim is to help their children .What they have to do is just to find a better way .In my opinion ,I think parents and other adult relatives helping and leading their older teenage children to make their own decisions is a better one .

bamboo2142003UID: 2135987

小改3楼的文章^-^
There are several crucial decisions to make for the teenagers such as the choice of major or university .（感觉for the teenagers放句尾更好些） Whether these decisions should be made by the teenagers themselves or by their parents and adult relatives . personally , I suggest letting（let) the teenagers make their own decisions with the advices from their parents or relatives .

First of all , the parents or other relatives opinions(the opinions from the parents or other relatives) may not coincide with those of teenagers . taking(take) the choice of major as an example , parents would prefer(to) choose a major which has a potential(in or to)  development or which(which省略） will provide a well paid（well-paid) job rather than consider the really(这个really不合适，不知道true怎么样，说法也要换一下） interests and talents of their children . some teenager fascinated by the astronomy may be forced to learn(to play the) pianos(piano). at the age of 15 or older 18 , even though sometimes not mature enough .  teenager has the ability to make their own decision . they are no longer the little baby in the parents arms nor the puppet controlled by others. They should learn to take responsibility to their own decision whether the result is satisfy(satisfactory) or disappoint(disappointed) . there is one idiom saying .(,") the fortune we have when we are young is the chance to make fault .(") It is essential for the teenager(to) learn to be responsible and independent by making their own decision.

Further more(Furthermore) , the executor of the decision is the teenager . What if he is compelled to achieve the goal made by their parents rather than derived form himself (没明白这句话）. how can we expect him to act actively and with full of energy 。（这句话也没明白明确要表达的意思)
Although the parents and others relatives points of view(the point of view made by parents and relatives) are sometime(sometimes) reasonable ,because they have more experiences than the teenagers , plus their insights of problem are more profound .I still insist the teenagers have the right to make their own decisions . the role of parents or other relatives should not be a supervisor(to make)  all decisions for their children but   a consultant who analyze(s) the situation for the teenagers as well as give them wisdom advices

呵呵，我们观点不一样啊^-^
感觉没有十分明确的结尾，第二个理由段不是很好，也太简单了。另外，不知道是不是打字的缘故，标点和大小写注意的不是很好。嗯，几个所有格用的都不对，可以注意一下。呵呵，你用的一些词，我不是很熟悉，不知道对不对^-^
呵呵，我的在24楼,一起加油吧

[ 本帖最后由 bamboo2142003 于 2006-1-5 19:58 编辑 ]

amethyst111UID: 2147702

There are some arguments about whether parents or other adult relatives should make important decisions for their older teenage children. After a close scrutiny, as far as I am concerned, as for older teenage children, it is necessary for their parents or other adult relatives to make decisions that are of great importance for them.

First of all, older teenage children are not adults after all, which would do various negative influences on their making decisions in many aspects. On one hand, their thoughts are not as mature as that of adults, so they might have considered only one or several sides when dealing with matters. On the other hand, older teenage children are short of capability of self-control, so it is much easier for them to lose their cool heads when faced with problems of making important decisions such as which school they should choose to go to.

At the same time, parents or other adult relatives are more adept than older teenage children in the process of making significant decisions. Owning more experience makes them look through the problem and see much clearer, so the decisions they made for their older teenage children are more correct.

Admittedly, making decisions for older teenage children may do harm to the cultivation of self-dependence ability to some extent, but I do not say that parents should make all decisions for older teenage children, instead some important decisions older teenage children can not make by themselves with their own power should be made by the aid of their parents or other adult relatives.

So, in conclusion, there are always some important decisions difficult for older teenage children to make correctly, so at this time it needs their parents or other adult relatives help to make decisions for them.

amethyst111UID: 2147702

自己写完后再看例文，虽然观点是一致的， 但明显例文就丰满的多，学习，再学习！

下面开始互拍阶段！

amethyst111UID: 2147702

Everyone has to walk through his/her older teenage years. In this period of time, many important decisions should be made at several crossings. Although experienced parents or other adult relatives should play an active role in the procedure, they should not make decisions for their older teenage children.

Commonly, children at the age between 15 with 18 have the ability of deciding for some extent. It is high time that they should be trained to expand such ability. Parents or other adult relatives can give their advice to children instead of deciding everything for their offspring. Through the adults’ guidance, older teenagers will reach their correct decision and gain their confidence. They will do even better in following situations.

From another aspect, some people hold the idea that the teenagers are too immature and too inconsiderate to make decisions. I should say that one's experience and ability are established on the base of continuing exploration, including failure at times. If a child is kept away from the real world by parents all the time, he/she may be totally blocked when faced with a practical dilemma. On contrast, if he/she made his/her own decision, even if that decision led him/her to a wrong place, he/she would still learn a lot from it. Sometimes it is helpful to allow teenagers to make some mistakes, for the experience attained from failure is much more valuable.

In addition, there is not a person who is always completely correct. Even our parents or other adult relatives would make some mistakes. Therefore, once they make a wrong decision for their children, the consequence would be very troublesome. It is possible to be a fuse of a dispute, and even has some bad effects on the relationship between parents and children.

To conclude, during the decision-making process, parents or other adult relatives can use their knowledge and experience to give their children advice, then let the older teenagers arrive their own decisions. It will benefit the teenagers a lot in gaining their confidence, accumulating their experience, and all in all, improving their own ability of deciding.

题目说的是应该做重要决定（should make important dicisions），但是作者在文章第一段最后一句却说不应该做决定，是不是审题有偏颇？（相互探讨，个人意见，呵呵:handshake）

下面的论述倒是很清晰，也很充分，很有说服力，所以整篇文章还是挺好的，除了个别词语使用需要注意之外

amethyst111UID: 2147702

Everyone has to walk through his/her older teenage years. In this period of time, many important decisions should be made at several crossings. Although experienced parents or other adult relatives should play an active role in the procedure, they should not make decisions for their older teenage children.

Commonly, children at the age between 15 with 18 have the ability of deciding for some extent. It is high time that they should be trained to expand such ability. Parents or other adult relatives can give their advice to children instead of deciding everything for their offspring. Through the adults’ guidance, older teenagers will reach their correct decision and gain their confidence. They will do even better in following situations.

From another aspect, some people hold the idea that the teenagers are too immature and too inconsiderate to make decisions. I should say that one's experience and ability are established on the base of continuing exploration, including failure at times. If a child is kept away from the real world by parents all the time, he/she may be totally blocked when faced with a practical dilemma. On contrast, if he/she made his/her own decision, even if that decision led him/her to a wrong place, he/she would still learn a lot from it. Sometimes it is helpful to allow teenagers to make some mistakes, for the experience attained from failure is much more valuable.

In addition, there is not a person who is always completely correct. Even our parents or other adult relatives would make some mistakes. Therefore, once they make a wrong decision for their children, the consequence would be very troublesome. It is possible to be a fuse of a dispute, and even has some bad effects on the relationship between parents and children.

To conclude, during the decision-making process, parents or other adult relatives can use their knowledge and experience to give their children advice, then let the older teenagers arrive their own decisions. It will benefit the teenagers a lot in gaining their confidence, accumulating their experience, and all in all, improving their own ability of deciding.

题目说的是应该做重要决定（should make important dicisions），但是作者在文章第一段最后一句却说不应该做决定，是不是审题有偏颇？（相互探讨，个人意见，呵呵:handshake）

下面的论述倒是很清晰，也很充分，很有说服力，所以整篇文章还是挺好的，除了个别词语使用需要注意之外

huangtingtingUID: 2162352

原帖由 bamboo2142003 于 2006-1-5 19:54 发表
小改3楼的文章^-^
There are several crucial decisions to make for the teenagers such as the choice of major or university .（感觉for the teenagers放句尾更好些）[/col ...

谢谢你的修改，很细心呀，我得第二段是要分成两段的，发现自己很多细节的地方做的不好。 不灰心，继续努力！:)