ISSUE43 LEADERSHIP DADA‘

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Issue43 [总频87]"To be an effective leader, a public official must maintain the highest ethical and moral standards."【翻译】一个公仆如果想成为一位杰出的领导者就必须保持最高的伦理和道德标准。

Does an effective leadership require highest ethical and moral standards in the first place? Although highest ethical and moral standards has became a catch-phrase in the statement of politician and some public preachers, it seems to me that effective leadership in public fields somehow tied up with qualified ethical and moral standard rather than the highest, as the speaker asserted.

First of all, it is undeniable that an effective leadership at least involves charismas to inspire others, make the fellows conform to his/her idea. MahatmaGandhi. with his philosophy of nonviolence and his passion for independence, Martin Luther King’s resolution to free blacks from the yoke of segregation both are apt illustrations of how spiritual leaders show efficiency in their leading. On the other hand, history is also bound with examples of leaders who demonstrate extraordinary ability of leading, but low ethical and moral standards. Just consider Hitler, the conductor of World War Ⅱ. No one would suspect his effectiveness to persuade and unite people, concerning his achievement to convince almost the whole country that Jewish is evil and needed to be diminished. But can we acknowledge him an effective leader regard to those accomplishment? I believe any reasonable person would firmly say no after taking the World War Ⅱinto consideration, because this man brought disaster almost to the whole world, and sacrificed Germany to his personal fanaticism. We can conclude here that once the effectiveness of a leader are served for personal interest instead of the well-being of the society, the leadership would be ineffective.

Nevertheless, as no one is saint, some flawy leaders are also effective providing their slips are not indeed harm the well-being of the society. Take Martin Luther King for an example, despite his devotion to the liberal career, his love affair is known to all too, including his wife. However, this alone doesn't decline our respect toward his determination and contribution to the process of human development. Or consider Clinton’s affair, his dishonesty surely has hurt the feeling of America, but the prosperity of economic during his two terms ranked highest in America history. We might accept that flaws and foibles are unavoidable to ordinary people, even those outstanding one. Clinton apologized eventually, Hilary stood besides him along the way, citizens accepted their flawed president at last, aware it is unworthy to lose a good president who at most of time conduct out of the whole country's interest.


Finally, although somehow the ethical or moral mistakes conducted by a leader could be forgiven by his people, it is still imperative for the leader to show highest ethical and moral standards to the public all the time. Thinking a effective leader could pay less attention on restricting his personal behavior would damage the prospect of a potential leader. The voters are always seeking for the most trustworthy one, in turn, we would never let a divorced candidate role our country. Simply put, Clinton had a love affair before his election comparing, or Martin Luther King' affair were known to all before his persuasive speech, would they be what they are now? I think it is apparent enough that as a public figure, a leader first should at least appear to be equipped with highest ethical and moral standards, and continue stick to the goal of achieve this standards throughout his tour of duty.

In sum, in order to be effective, a public official should constantly yielding to the highest ethical and moral standards, even if himself/herself is lacked specified capacity to finally achieve it.

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Does an effective leadership require highest ethical and moral standards in the first place? Although highest ethical and moral standards has[have] became a catch-phrase in the statement of politician and some public preachers,[看不出这里有转折的意思] it seems to me that effective leadership in public fields somehow tied up[怎么用过去时，查了一下，tie up是及物动词，而且用联系之意不太恰当把，have or possess?] with qualified ethical and moral standard rather than the highest, as the speaker asserted.

First of all, it is undeniable that an effective leadership at least involves charismas to inspire others, make the fellows conform to his/her idea.[我觉得这样一个topic sentence （主题句）不好，用某些人的话讲就是回应无力：你怎么谈起了charismas?应该是道德推得charismas吧，首句应该说道德的确好，我们要支持，再说这样的道德能带来什么，然后具体说带来的东西又有什么好处，可以作为段的分层展开模式论述, 而你这样将让人摸不到头脑] Mahatma Gandhi. with his philosophy of nonviolence and his passion for independence, Martin Luther King’s[King with his] resolution to free blacks from the yoke of segregation both are apt illustrations of how spiritual leaders[为什么单挑spiritual leaders] show efficiency in their leading. On the other hand, history is also bound[replete比较好] with examples of leaders who demonstrate extraordinary ability of leading, but low ethical and moral standards. Just consider Hitler, the conductor[这个词不太恰当，用一个罪魁祸首或始做者之类的词来得更形象] of World War Ⅱ. No one would suspect his effectiveness[怎么首先承认他effective了，虽然后面又限定，但也不太妥，换个genius, abilty, merit之类] to persuade and unite people, concerning his achievement to convince almost the whole country that Jewish is evil and needed to be diminished[eliminated]. But can we acknowledge[consider或acknowledge him as/to be] him an effective leader regard to[with the regard to或 regarding] those accomplishment?[这个问句好，赞一个，对话中出思想嘛！] I believe any reasonable person would firmly say no after taking the World War Ⅱinto consideration, because this man brought disaster almost to the whole world, and sacrificed Germany to his personal fanaticism. We can conclude here that once the effectiveness[这里更严重，又承认了，你要明白立什么驳什么] of a leader are[去are] served for personal interest instead of the well-being of the society, the leadership would be ineffective.
[段落展开用的是正反面论证，跟我用的一样，很好。主要问题，1、主题句要明确；2、明确自己的立场。我觉得你可能是effective这个词理解上出现偏差，新东方翻译成杰出，但我们习惯上的解释是高效，所以两个意思在打架，所以用的时候稍不留神就误用了，是把？我觉得我们要谨记effective在全文就一个意思“杰出”才行！]

Nevertheless, as no one is saint, some flawy[在某方面欠缺比较好，moral deficiency] leaders are also effective providing their slips are not indeed harm the well-being of the society.[这句话前后逻辑有问题，应该是缺陷导致harm不是人] Take Martin Luther King for an example, despite his devotion to the liberal career, his love affair is known to all too, including his wife. [是将他打老婆的事件吧？是不是写出来，并不是每个人都知道，而且写出来更显得具体，具体好呀！]However, this alone doesn't decline our respect toward his determination and contribution to the process of human development. Or consider Clinton’s affair, his dishonesty[主要是性丑闻把，dihonesty还算是小的，写sexual scandal比较好，怎么跟我的例子一样！！] surely has hurt the feeling of America, but the prosperity of economic during his two terms ranked highest in America history. We might accept that flaws and foibles are unavoidable to ordinary people, even those outstanding one. Clinton apologized eventually, Hilary stood besides him along the way, citizens accepted their flawed president at last, aware it is unworthy to lose a good president who at most of time conduct out of the whole country's interest.[例子论述太多的话，应该加个段落总结句，画龙点睛嘛！]
[看这里，觉得你的展开文字主要是例子来充斥，好是好，但不是每篇都这样容易找例子，而且很容易跟别人撞车。我开始写的时候，也跟你一样，大量搜例子，往死里搜，但花了很多时间，很多时候空手而归，既浪费时间又浪费精力，你可以试着学一些论证方法，坛子有很多网友写的文章，不要看用词和观点，捡优点看，主要是文章和段落展开思路，你会有意外惊喜，你要记着，论述可以弥补例子的不足]

Finally, although somehow the ethical or moral mistakes conducted by a leader could be forgiven by his people, it is still imperative for the leader to show highest ethical and moral standards to the public all the time. Thinking a effective leader could pay less attention on restricting his personal behavior would damage the prospect of a potential leader. The voters are always seeking for the most trustworthy one, in turn, we would never let a divorced candidate role our country. Simply put, Clinton had a love affair before his election comparing, or Martin Luther King' affair were known to all before his persuasive speech, would they be what they are now? I think it is apparent enough that as a public figure, a leader first should at least appear to be equipped with highest[这个highest给了这篇文章重重一击] ethical and moral standards, and continue stick to the goal of achieve this standards throughout his tour of duty.
[这一段还是在讲道德的好，我非常气愤，而且还是highest的道德，开头不是明确不用Highest吗？而且前面一段已经举例说了可以有效缺陷，搬起石头扎自己的脚呀！前面几段看得很舒服，但这一段的论述彻底把文章的档次划在4分以下]

In sum, in order to be effective, a public official should constantly yielding to the highest ethical and moral standards[看不懂这句什么意思，特别是yielding无法理解], even if himself/herself is lacked specified capacity to finally achieve it.
[收尾有点匆忙，虽然要速战速决，但也不至于没有基本的框架把，可以引入摸版]

[总体来说还不错，除了些致命的错误，第三段是文章的败笔
结构上，我不太赞成：好、不好、好的结构，我比较赞成：好、某方面更好、咦，还有不足地方耶，或者：好、不能以偏概全，很多方面不太好、笨蛋，你还忽视更好的东西，不要丢了西瓜捡芝麻哟！不知道你明白没有？具体多看看北美范文，你就有体会，其实道理很简单
段落内部展开你可以多样化
语言，还不错吧，不是母语嘛！重点挑了前两段的错误
你还有一个月的时间，能写成这样很不错了，加油]

[ 本帖最后由 siyuanding 于 2007-1-28 17:39 编辑 ]

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Does an effective leadership require highest ethical and moral standards in the first place? Although highest ethical and moral standards has[have] became a catch-phrase in the statement of politician and some public preachers,[看不出这里有转折的意思](我的意思就是虽然社会上很推崇HIGHEST，但是我觉得只要够格就可以了) it seems to me that effective leadership in public fields somehow tied up with process(有这个用法“有密切的关系”不过好像不地道) qualified ethical and moral standard rather than the highest, as the speaker asserted.
First of all, it is undeniable that an effective leadership at least involves charismas to inspire others, make the fellows conform to his/her idea.（我这段根本没写TS汗~~忘了补上补上，难怪你看地痛苦） Mahatma Gandhi. with his philosophy of nonviolence and his passion for independence, Martin Luther King’s[King with his] resolution to free blacks from the yoke of segregation both are apt illustrations of how spiritual leaders[为什么单挑spiritual leaders](这就是不限时的问题了，我本来打算从几个方面写的，然后写到这里我就去找资料，没找到中意的，回来就忘了之前写了个spiritual leaders~~) show efficiency in their leading. On the other hand, history is also replete with examples of leaders who demonstrate extraordinary ability of leading, but low ethical and moral standards. Just consider Hitler, the arch-criminal of World War Ⅱ. No one would suspect his effectiveness[怎么首先承认他effective了，虽然后面又限定，但也不太妥，换个genius, abilty, merit之类](我是觉得我这里单方面说他鼓动人的手腕强，但是整个人由于出轨了就没的效用，只有破坏力) to persuade and unite people, concerning his achievement to convince almost the whole country that Jewish is evil and needed to be diminished[eliminated]. But can we acknowledge him as an effective regarding those accomplishment? I believe any reasonable person would firmly say no after taking the World War Ⅱinto consideration, because this man brought disaster almost to the whole world, and sacrificed Germany to his personal fanaticism. We can conclude here that once the effectiveness[这里更严重，又承认了，你要明白立什么驳什么] (错了反省反省，我脑袋里面一直把EFFECTIVE当2个东西，一个是手段上的一个是整个人对外界的作用，觉得既然都没分别说清楚过，这样混着讲大家都昏头)of a leader  served for personal interest instead of the well-being of the society, the leadership would be ineffective.
[段落展开用的是正反面论证，跟我用的一样，很好。主要问题，1、主题句要明确；2、明确自己的立场。我觉得你可能是effective这个词理解上出现偏差，新东方翻译成杰出，但我们习惯上的解释是高效，所以两个意思在打架，所以用的时候稍不留神就误用了，是把？我觉得我们要谨记effective在全文就一个意思“杰出”才行！](恩谢谢，我觉得开篇就应该下个定义比较合适)
Nevertheless, as no one is saint, some leaders with moral or ethical deficiency could also be effective providing their slips are not indeed harm the well-being of the society.[这句话前后逻辑有问题，应该是缺陷导致harm不是人] （我是想用their slips来代表他们犯的错误不知道合适不）Take Martin Luther King for an example, despite his devotion to the liberal career, his love affair is known to all too, including his wife. [是将他打老婆的事件吧？是不是写出来，并不是每个人都知道，而且写出来更显得具体，具体好呀！]（看来还真不是大家都晓得啊~~是真正的affair~~ extramarital affairs）However, this alone doesn't decline our respect toward his determination and contribution to the process of human development. Or consider Clinton’s affair, his dishonesty[主要是性丑闻把，dihonesty还算是小的，写sexual scandal比较好，怎么跟我的例子一样！！] (我找例子的时候看了很多文章都用他的例子，当时都想不用的，可是又没想到更好的，看来不能依赖例子啊) surely has hurt the feeling of America, but the prosperity of economic during his two terms ranked highest in America history. We might accept that flaws and foibles are unavoidable to ordinary people, even those outstanding one. Clinton apologized eventually, Hilary stood besides him along the way, citizens accepted their flawed president at last, aware it is unworthy to lose a good president who at most of time conduct out of the whole country's interest.[例子论述太多的话，应该加个段落总结句，画龙点睛嘛！]（我的总结在上一句，本来算完了的，无聊又多写几句~~~）
[看这里，觉得你的展开文字主要是例子来充斥，好是好，但不是每篇都这样容易找例子，而且很容易跟别人撞车。我开始写的时候，也跟你一样，大量搜例子，往死里搜，但花了很多时间，很多时候空手而归，既浪费时间又浪费精力，你可以试着学一些论证方法，坛子有很多网友写的文章，不要看用词和观点，捡优点看，主要是文章和段落展开思路，你会有意外惊喜，你要记着，论述可以弥补例子的不足]（我难得找多点例子哈哈~~）
Finally, although somehow the ethical or moral mistakes conducted by a leader could be forgiven by his people, it is still imperative for the leader to show highest ethical and moral standards to the public all the time. Paying less attention on restricting personal behavior would damage the prospect of a potential leader. The voters are always seeking for the most trustworthy one, in turn, we would never let a divorced candidate role our country. Simply put, Clinton had a love affair before his election campaign, or Martin Luther King' affair were known to all before his persuasive speech, would they be what they are now? I think it is apparent enough that as a public figure, a leader first should at least appear to be equipped with highest[这个highest给了这篇文章重重一击] ethical and moral standards, and continue stick to the goal of achieve this standards throughout his tour of duty.
[这一段还是在讲道德的好，我非常气愤，而且还是highest的道德，开头不是明确不用Highest吗？而且前面一段已经举例说了可以有效缺陷，搬起石头扎自己的脚呀！前面几段看得很舒服，但这一段的论述彻底把文章的档次划在4分以下]（这又是我自己的想法了，我写的意思是并不用真有HIGHEST，但是至少要让大家看上去你是HIGHEST的~~~太空想主义了~~~~欢迎和我讨论）
In sum, in order to be effective, a public official should constantly yielding to the highest ethical and moral standards[看不懂这句什么意思，特别是yielding无法理解]（我的想法是虽然不能实现但是至少要把HIGHEST当成目标，YIELDING用得的确不对：））, even if himself/herself is lacked specified capacity to finally achieve it.
[收尾有点匆忙，虽然要速战速决，但也不至于没有基本的框架把，可以引入摸版]（好的）
结构上再讨论下：）