issue26 最近写得还比较满意的一篇，请大家拍砖

tly823UID: 2145205

TOPIC: ISSUE26 - "Most people would agree that buildings represent a valuable record of any society's past, but controversy arises when old buildings stand on ground that modern planners feel could be better used for modern purposes. In such situations, modern development should be given precedence over the preservation of historic buildings so that contemporary needs can be served."

提纲：
1老建筑的重要性。它们是历史的见证者和传承者，对它们的破坏就是对历史的背叛。其次，历史建筑还对带动经济发展提供渠道。
2另一方面，当老建筑太破旧以致会造成生命危险时，或挡住文明的发展时，而它本身没有多大价值或占地过多，就应该退出历史的舞台。
3当面对进退两难时，我们可以想出一个权宜之计，比如说对文物的搬迁或用先进科技记载下来。

When a country or city intends to present its centuries-old history , it seems futile to describe the past merely by words. City, as a piece of blank paper, requires the accumulated pictures---that is the the city's buildings to demonstrate its history convincingly.If we scrub the well-described pictures off frequently, there is no scene left, and no history as well. In the worldwide scope, we cannot deny that many countries are preserving their historic buildings as great treasure, which witness the long history of these nations and prove the evolvement of the society, and at the same time, they attract foreigners' eyeball as tourism resorce of historical significant. However, with the expansion of modernization and urbanization, these old buildings inevitably stand on the way of city development plans, and consequently launch a fierce controversy in a global scale.

There is an old saying," Forgeting history means betraying ", and it is the blame in the case of destorying the historic witness and heritage. The age-old building serves as a history textbook to record the past ,which is worth of constant recollection and demand the descendents to promote the everlasting spirit until now. It is the Taj Mha that engraves the romantic love between Shah Jahan and his wife three hundred years ago; It is the Status of Liberty that represents the Americans' national spirit---eternal longing for freedom; It is the Great Wall that records the Chinese's diligence, endurance, and outstanding initiative; It is the Triumph Arch that maintain the great victory of Napoleon and glory of French army...From all of these historic heritages, we can personally access the history of various nations, apprehend the grandeur of their cultures and national spirit. Moreover, historic buildings are of great ecomomic significance for a nation. Take China for example, it is the fourth largest tourist destination of the world , and the tourism renders China a favorable opportunity ot expand other relevant industies---such as the handcrafts, communication, entertainment,etc.,all of which contribute to the national revenues largely. Thus, not only does the old buildings conserve the history but create enomic development channel as well.

On the other hand, the old builings, which severely block the expansion of modernization and urbanization or virtually occupy large precise land with comparatively little realistic meaning, have to give precedence to the new epoch. Admittedly, not a few old buildings after enduring thousands years erosion of weather or other natural forces, are more likely to lose the original glaring beauty, and even are in a dangerous state which may not worth the candle if they would threaten people's lives. In additin, in most cases, the city long-term run plan ineluctablly severe conflicts with the maintaining of historic building, and the only way out is to demolish them. For instance, as constructing the Aswan Hign Dam, the predicted water area will submerge copious of beautiful palaces and historic heritage. Nevertheless, with the comprehensive analysis of the protential benefit and necessarily contribution, the scientists and historists finally reach the agreement to relocate the most significant temples, such as the Edfu Hieron, the Mut Hieron and Montu Hieron. In these cases, the historic buildings have to sacrifice themselves to the more potential and proficial modern plan.

Accordingly, when confronting these dilemma, we should make out an expedient to nither demolish the history carriers nor inhibite the modernization. Consequently, the scientists are responsible to consider the avilability of relocating the historic sites or shrinking them into models which can be displayed in museum or record them by advanced technology such as video.

To sum up, under the crash of global culture, many countries have already lose their own culture identity and been assimilated increasingly. Regardless of the possibility of losing nation distinct charactor, of which historic building are specific representatives, great heritage have given way to the climbing skyscrapers and expanding high way constructions. Without strike a balance between, these cities are virtually the betrayers of history.

wendyyueUID: 2118679

When a country or city intends to present its centuries-old(不知道有这种用法么) history, it seems futile to describe the past merely by words. City, as a piece of blank paper, requires the accumulated pictures---that is(---和this重复) the (the) city's buildings to demonstrate its history convincingly. If we scrub the well-described (delicate/delineative) pictures off frequently, there is no scene left, and no history as well. In the worldwide scope, we cannot deny that many countries are preserving their historic buildings as great treasure, which witness the long history of these nations and prove the evolvement of the society, and at the same time, they attract foreigners' eyeball as tourism resorce(resources)of historical significant. However, with the expansion of modernization and urbanization, these old buildings inevitably stand on (in 是想表达阻碍)the way of city development plans, and consequently launch a fierce controversy in a global scale.
(第一段 最好在末尾有比较明显的提示词来表达自己的观点:即对于有价值的建筑我们要保护,对于没有..我们要拆除,是在进退两难,我们要devise a expedient)
There is an old saying," Forgeting (Forgetting ) history means betraying(treachery) ", and it is the blame in the case of destroying the historic witness and heritage. The age-old building serves as a history textbook to record the past , which is worth of constant recollection and demanding the descendents ( descendance ) to promote the everlasting spirit until now. It is the Taj Mha that engraves the romantic love between Shah Jahan and his wife three hundred years ago; It is the Status of Liberty that represents the Americans' national spirit---eternal longing for freedom; It is the Great Wall that characterize the Chinese's diligence, endurance, and outstanding initiative; It is the Triumph Arch that maintain the great victory of Napoleon and glory of French army...From all of these historic heritages, we can personally access the history of various nations, apprehend the grandeur of their cultures and national spirit.
最好一段论述一个分论点
Moreover, historic buildings are of great economic significance for a nation. Take China for example, it is the fourth largest tourist destination of the world, and the tourism renders China a favorable opportunity ot (to) expand(nurture/flourish/spwan) other relevant industries---such as the service industry, handcrafts, communication, entertainment, etc, all of which contribute to the national revenues largely. Thus, not only does the old building conserve the history but create enomic(economic) development channel as well.

On the other hand, the old builings (buildings), which severely block the expansion of modernization and urbanization or virtually occupy large precise (?)land with comparatively little realistic meaning, have to give precedence to the new epoch. Admittedly, not a few old buildings after enduring thousands(thousand/thousands of) years erosion of weather or other natural forces, are more likely to lose the original glaring beauty(glamour), and even(把 even 去掉,加上at the even worse. They ) are in a dangerous state which may not worth the candle (worth the candle?是什么意思?一文不值?)if they would threaten people's lives. In additin(addition), in most cases, the city long-term run(run?去掉) plan ineluctably(ineluctably) severe (poses)conflicts with the maintaining of historic building, and the only way out is to demolish (dismantle)them. For instance, as constructing the Aswan Hign Dam, the predicted water area will submerge copious of beautiful palaces and historic heritage. Nevertheless, with the comprehensive analysis of the protential(potential) benefits and necessarily contribution, the scientists and historists finally reach the agreement to relocate the most significant temples, such as the Edfu Hieron, the Mut Hieron and Montu Hieron. In these cases, the historic buildings have to sacrifice themselves to the more potential and proficial (profitable)modern plan.

Accordingly(Deep down: 深入下去,意为:进而), when confronting these dilemma, we(government 尽量不要出现we I you的词) should make out(devise/conceive) an expedient to nither(neither) demolish the history carriers nor inhibite(inhibit) the modernization. Consequently, the scientists are responsible to consider the availability (availability) of relocating the historic sites or shrinking them into models which can be displayed in museum or record them by advanced technology such as video.

To sum up, under the crash of global culture, many countries have already lose their own culture identity and been assimilated increasingly. Regardless of the possibility of losing nation distinct characto(characteristic)r, of which historic building are specific representatives, great heritage have given way to the climbing skyscrapers and expanding high way constructions. Without strike a balance between, these cities are virtually the betrayers of history.

wendyyueUID: 2118679

https://bbs.gter.net/thread-629379-1-1.html

edison_ldUID: 2253039

When a country or city intends to present its centuries-old history , it seems futile to describe the past merely by words. City, as a piece of blank paper, requires the accumulated pictures---that is the city's buildings to demonstrate its history convincingly.If we scrub the well-described pictures off frequently, there is no scene left, and no history as well. In the worldwide scope, we cannot deny that many countries are preserving their historic buildings as great treasure, which witness the long history of these nations and prove the evolvement of the society, and at the same time, they attract foreigners' eyeball as tourism resorce of historical significant. However, with the expansion of modernization and urbanization, these old buildings inevitably stand on the way of city development plans, and consequently launch a fierce controversy in a global scale.(开头会不会罗唆了一点，而且最后都没有明确亮明自己的态度。不过语言确实觉得不错，拼写可能需要注意一下，楼上的真细心，全都帮你改过来了)

There is an old saying," Forgeting history means betraying ", and it is the blame in the case of destorying the historic witness and heritage. The age-old building serves as a history textbook to record the past ,which is worth of constant recollection and demand the descendents to promote the everlasting spirit until now. It is the Taj Mha that engraves the romantic love between Shah Jahan and his wife three hundred years ago; It is the Status of Liberty that represents the Americans' national spirit---eternal longing for freedom; It is the Great Wall that records the Chinese's diligence, endurance, and outstanding initiative; It is the Triumph Arch that maintain the great victory of Napoleon and glory of French army...（这个排比真不错）From all of these historic heritages, we can personally access the history of various nations, apprehend the grandeur of their cultures and national spirit. Moreover, historic buildings are of great economic significance for a nation. Take China for example, it is the fourth largest tourist destination of the world , and the tourism renders China a favorable opportunity to expand other relevant industries---such as the handcrafts, communication, entertainment,etc.,all of which contribute to the national revenues largely.(这里给出去改进其他设施的建议好像没有必要，不如建议应该好好维护古建筑，而且更应该说明中国的古建筑是怎么具体起作用的，需要一些details) Thus, not only does the old buildings conserve the history but create economic development channel as well.

On the other hand, the old builings, which severely block the expansion of modernization and urbanization or virtually occupy large precise land with comparatively little realistic meaning, have to give precedence to the new epoch. Admittedly, not a few old buildings after enduring thousands years erosion of weather or other natural forces, are more likely to lose the original glaring beauty, and even are in a dangerous state which may not worth the candle if they would threaten people's lives. In additin, in most cases, the city long-term run plan ineluctablly severe conflicts with the maintaining of historic building, and the only way out is to demolish them. For instance, as constructing the Aswan Hign Dam, the predicted water area will submerge copious of beautiful palaces and historic heritage. Nevertheless, with the comprehensive analysis of the protential benefit and necessarily contribution, the scientists and historists finally reach the agreement to relocate the most significant temples, such as the Edfu Hieron, the Mut Hieron and Montu Hieron. In these cases, the historic buildings have to sacrifice themselves to the more potential and proficial modern plan.（这一段的拼写错误实在太多了，楼主可要注意了。）

Accordingly, when confronting these dilemma, we should make out an expedient to nither demolish the history carriers nor inhibite the modernization. Consequently, the scientists are responsible to consider the avilability of relocating the historic sites or shrinking them into models which can be displayed in museum or record them by advanced technology such as video.

To sum up, under the crash of global culture, many countries have already lose their own culture identity and been assimilated increasingly. Regardless of the possibility of losing nation distinct charactor, of which historic building are specific representatives, great heritage have given way to the climbing skyscrapers and expanding high way constructions. Without strike a balance between,（？？怎么好像断了） these cities are virtually the betrayers of history.


头一回帮人改只能看出这么多了，而且我水平有限呐，呵呵，你比我好多了，一起加油吧
等我发新的了也请帮忙改改，谢先了

tly823UID: 2145205

这么晚了大家还帮我改作文，感激啊
尤其是还有那么多拼写错误，惭愧！

edison_ldUID: 2253039

https://bbs.gter.net/thread-629979-1-1.html
可以的话帮我改改吧，认真听取意见，呵呵