issue17

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ISSUE17 - "There are two types of laws: just andunjust. Every individual in a society has a responsibility to obey just lawsand, even more importantly, to disobey and resist unjust laws."

The author concludes that there are two types of laws in theworld: just and unjust and every individual should obey just laws and disobeyand resist unjust laws. However, I strongly hold that though some laws mightseem just and vice verse, it is extremely difficult to distinguish just lawsfrom unjust ones. Consequently, every individual should obey laws, regardlessof its justness.

There is no absolute answer as to whether laws are just arenot. It is entirely possible that a law considered just in some people's eyesmight be thought unjust by some others. For this, we need look no further as toabortion, a hot issue all over the world in recent decades. Some people with acertain kind of religious belief might regard abortion as unreasonable whileothers might think otherwise. Another important issue at hand is the lawsregarding the drainage of waste water. There is no denying that local people,as for as their health problems are concerned, might highly welcome such kindof laws. Nevertheless, factory owners, in order to earn a huge amount ofprofits and thus unwilling to buy high-priced facilities, might show theirdiscontent with such kind of laws.

Laws are enforced to maintain the well-being of society.Consequently, as a member of society, we should spare no effects to obey laws,whether they seem just or not. Otherwise, we might face the risk of beingpunished. If the factory owner mentioned above continues to throw waste waterinto the river without buying some technological facilities to improve thequality waste water, then he or she might be punished by law. The factory mightsuffer some economical crisis and might even face the risk of being closed.

Though it is our responsibility to obey laws regardless oftheir justness, it does not necessarily mean that we have no control over thoselaws that seem unjust to us. However, we should not disobey and resist unjust laws;otherwise there is no doubt that we might be punished by law. The best wayshould be to obey these laws and at the same time tell our government orlaw-makers that these laws might suffer from some fallacies. Then after fullyconsideration, there is a possibility that small modifications might be made tothese laws. Even if there were not, it might be highly probable that these lawsare made to ensure the benefits of others and we should restrict our behaviorsto meet these regulations as well.

As what has been discussed above, we can safely arrive atthe conclusion that the justness of laws differs from people to people. As aresult we should obey every sort of laws regardless of its justness butmeanwhile we should focus on the refinement of those unjust laws in our eyes.
(2007-6-19 15:37:25)

coraoneUID: 2233021

收下了，改好了给你发上来哈，期末考试中

coraoneUID: 2233021

ISSUE17 - "There are two types of laws: just andunjust. Every individual in a society has a responsibility to obey just lawsand, even more importantly, to disobey and resist unjust laws."

The author concludes that there are two types of laws in theworld: just and unjust and every individual should obey just laws and disobeyand resist unjust laws. （我觉得这个复述有问题，光是简单的复述而不是转述不说，你没有说出关键，就是even more importantly，我觉得应该点名作者的倾向）However, I strongly hold that though some laws mightseem（eem是什么。。seem么，请LZ校正好自己的文章再发上来） just and vice verse, it is extremely difficult to distinguish just lawsfrom unjust ones. Consequently, every individual should obey laws, regardlessof its justness.

There is no absolute answer as to whether laws are just arenot. It is entirely possible that a law considered just in some people's eyesmight be thought unjust by some others. For this, we need look no further as toabortion, a hot issue all over the world in recent decades. Some people with acertain kind of religious belief might regard abortion as unreasonable whileothers might think otherwise. Another important issue at hand is the lawsregarding the drainage of waste water. There is no denying that local people,as for as their health problems are concerned, might highly welcome such kindof laws. Nevertheless, factory owners, in order to earn a huge amount ofprofits and thus unwilling to buy high-priced facilities, might show theirdiscontent with such kind of laws.（这段分析的有问题，我觉得just和unjust law是这个issue的backgroud，没必要去论述到底是不是这样一种情况，何况你举的例子不具有很强的代表性，factory owners觉得waste water好说明这个事务就是对的了么？不是把，你是想说每个人对于一件事物有不同看法，但是你注意到没有，你没有把你这个观点和law联系起来，完全没有关系的一点摆在这里？）

Laws are enforced to maintain the well-being of society.Consequently, as a member of society, we should spare no effects to obey laws,whether they seem just or not. Otherwise, we might face the risk of beingpunished. If the factory owner mentioned above continues to throw waste waterinto the river without buying some technological facilities to improve thequality waste water, then he or she might be punished by law. The factory mightsuffer some economical crisis and might even face the risk of being closed.（看到第二段，提个建议，在每段开头把标志词摆出来，把文章的框架立好，to begin with， next， also， 这些~）

Though it is our responsibility to obey laws regardless oftheir justness, it does not necessarily mean that we have no control over thoselaws that seem unjust to us. However, we should not disobey and resist unjust laws;otherwise there is no doubt that we might be punished by law. The best wayshould be to obey these laws and at the same time tell our government orlaw-makers that these laws might suffer from some fallacies. Then after fullyconsideration, there is a possibility that small modifications might be made tothese laws. Even if there were not, it might be highly probable that these lawsare made to ensure the benefits of others and we should restrict our behaviorsto meet these regulations as well.

As what has been discussed above, we can safely arrive atthe conclusion that the justness of laws differs from people to people. As aresult we should obey every sort of laws regardless of its justness butmeanwhile we should focus on the refinement of those unjust laws in our eyes.

我没有逐字逐句去给你改了，我基本上不去改语法错误，这不是我强项。
从文章内容上，LZ你没有把握住这个题目的要点，有点偏，分析得不深刻，没有能够拿出令人信服的例子和逻辑严密的论证。注意改进哈。加油，语言还是可以。
https://bbs.gter.net/thread-690948-1-1.html我的Issue17有空可以帮我改改，诚心听取你的意见。
coraone