～豆豆～改作文的小屋子(Last Updated: Oct. 17th)

深海lavenderUID: 2350207

哈哈,帮顶.豆豆同学很热心呢.

豆豆～UID: 2378384

其实。。。我有一点私心啦。。。改作文的时候正好练习语法了。。。

嘘～这是个秘密。

深海lavenderUID: 2350207

:lol 利人又利己,很不错啊.

豆豆～UID: 2378384

明天就要上学去鸟。。。要被关起来鸟。。。

不爽。

深海lavenderUID: 2350207

你们明天才上学?这假放的可真爽啊......羡慕ING.

破海沧澜UID: 2401581

建议豆豆申请高亮。
还有，我有一个想法， 寄托上没有TOEFL写作的专署论坛， 而太傻和追梦都有，我在考虑在站务中心申请这样一个论坛，我们去当版主，就算是我大家做贡献。
而且考虑到10，11，12月我有托福考试（不知你的考试日程怎样），我想把论坛开放时间定在12月初。特来征求一下你的想法。

菠萝油王子球UID: 2193028

又有rp,又有实力!!!

popsywinterUID: 2120302

https://bbs.gter.net/viewthre ... &extra=page%3D1

当然是你有空的时候~~我觉得看到你的修改启发挺大的~这个是刚写的,想写轻松点,不套模板,我看到很多高分范文也写的很简单~猜想着T的作文毕竟不象GRE那样要求深度~
麻烦豆豆帮我看看语法和语言~谢谢哦~

豆豆～UID: 2378384

我觉得可以，但是不知道系统允不允许，还有就是大家会不会好好利用。因为我看到CD上的写作论坛基本没什么人。。。大家还是把作文帖到了toefl ibt的大版面上-_-|||这样就是资源浪费了。。。所以还是得多观察观察:-)不过如果要申请开个写作的分论坛，我同意^_^

我是11月3号考，不过最近都要准备essay和recommendation letter，还要上学，所以不知道能不能抽出那么多时间，别到时候挂了名字不干事就不好了，呵呵。

豆豆～UID: 2378384

我现在成天想着申请的事。。。上学都听不进去。。晕。。。。

豆豆～UID: 2378384

已修改:-) 请查收！

lucy0207UID: 2344434

:) 豆豆~ 以前你已经帮我改过几篇了 我收获很大:) 谢谢
这次能不能再帮我改一下啊  thanx a lot !!:)

Animals are in danger. Although the protecting technique has improved a great deal, the danger of extinction has been larger than it ever was. Accordingly, zoos are of consequence, especially for some endangered species.

For one thing, zoos contribute to increase the population of endangered species and thus maintain the ecological balance. It cannot be denied that the natural environment is no longer a suitable habitat for some species, which are on the verge of extinction, due to the deterioration of environment. Extinction can be a natural evolutionary process, but a majority of them, especially those occur at a faster rate than natural, are caused by humans. This is particularly true in our country. Many species have become extinct(adj) because of deforestation, over- fishing or large-scale land clearing, which is aptly illustrated by the recent extension of lipote vexillifer. 10 years ago, thousands of vexillifers lived freely in the Changjiang River, however, recently scientists announced that through 60 days’ exploration, they did not find any lipote vexillifer in the Changjiang River, which means that we will not see this animal forever. Such case is not rare, in the second half of the 20th century, the earth lost 300,000 species. If we do not start thinking of “keeping the balance and sharing the harmony with nature”, the nature will eventually find a way to punish us.

Besides protecting endangered species, zoo also plays an important role in improving the public knowledge of animals. Animals in zoo keep people in touch with a more natural and animal world. Perhaps it would suffice to mention my little brother joe, who is now seven years old and often goes to the zoo located in the center of my city. Whenever he sees an animal that he has not seen before, he would ask the zookeeper, “what is its name? where does it come from ? how old is it ?”. “I find the zoo fantastic,” one day joe said to me, “just step around the zoo, then I can see the animals all over the world.” I could be fully aware of joe’s excitement, because in the final examination of this semester he got full score in Science and Nature, largely due to the assistance of the zoo. However, without zoos, many children could not even distinguish a tiger from a lion.

To conclude, zoos serve as an excellent approach, not only to the protection of endangered animals but also to the improvement of public knowledge.

豆豆～UID: 2378384

请打上题目，并把作文放到论坛上让大家一起改:-) （而且到时候我做链接也会方便许多呵呵）

谢谢合作，呵呵

红颜祸水UID: 2242528

也帮偶改改烂作吧，写的头都大了～给我提点意见作文那些地方一定要改正的，谢谢啊

D/A: A teacher’s ability to relate with the students is more important than have sufficient knowledge being taught.


In our modern society, the statement is such a debated one that which one plays a more important role in students’ learning, a teacher’s ability or his knowledge, not only because of people’s respective personality but also because of their alien understandings. Personally, I sanction that teachers should pay more attention on their sufficient knowledge so that they can educate students well.

The first reason that can be presented to develop my opinion is that a teacher’s chief task is teaching. It means that the basic standard to judge a teacher is how many useful things he can teach to students. To illustrate, let us consider that if all teachers forget about their responsibility, how schools can continue to exist, if teachers are lack of academic knowledge, what students learn will be a mess of fragments of words, if teachers stop to learn new knowledge, where students stand is always in the past time. Hence, common sense and former experience inform us that teachers have to study and educate endlessly.

In addition, there is another reason for me to choose this statement and the reason is not far to seek: What a student wants to learn from a teacher is what the teacher’s knowledge and skills. A good example can be found in the case that my brother Tim, a primary school student in Grade Five, told his mother that he would rather stay at home to read some interesting books and learn some advanced information, rather than get up early, hurry to school and listen to teachers’ old stories about why the Earth is round, when the first computer was invented and how human beings take on the moon, because he has already known about those outdated information and can’t get what he really wants from his teachers. In another word, he should learn all the latest knowledge all by himself but not from his teachers. Therefore, if teachers don’t have enough knowledge, how can they meet the demands for those modern students?

Finally, to speak frank, there is also a more practical reason that a teacher having good relationship with students may give an inadequacy evaluation. As far as I see, some teachers prefer to give more research opportunities to their favorite students and are more likely to give an “A” on their thesis. On the contrary, they are often not willing to guide many things to the students they don’t like so much. In addition, researchers are telling us that the better relationship between teachers and students, the easier to have unfair evaluations. So we can’t say that every teacher is definitely fair because of his natural partiality and every “A” level student is certainly excellent due to teacher’s specific care.   

To sum up all the reasons involved, my final point rests on a persuasive opinion towards a more essential requirement for teachers to get enough academic knowledge and professional skills (not just get along well with students). Then I believe the education system will be more regular and advanced.
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破海沧澜UID: 2401581

不好意思， CD上的写作斑竹就是我的同桌。。。。 他最近在准备SAT可能没什么时间吧。 你准备报什么学校嘛？
顺便问一句，你也是高中生吗？:)