issue185 [0806G-desperado小组]第二次作业by 绿松石

绿松石UID: 2427549

ISSUE185"Scandals—whether in politics, academia, or other areas—can be useful. They focus our attention on problems in ways that no speaker or reformer ever could."

[outline]:1.提出中立观点：有的时候，丑闻能揭示隐藏的问题；但有时候，对丑闻的关注分散人们的注意力，浪费了社会资金
       2.丑闻能使我们注意到本来可能会被忽略的社会政治问题
       3.丑闻过分关注名人的私生活。这种行为对社会并无益处
       4.花在关注丑闻的资金可以更好的支持一些社会上急需支援的方面，这样对丑闻的关注实际上导致了资源浪废

In my point of view, the speaker makes an over generalization about the issue over social significance of scandals. In fact, the final judgement of this issue should be based on a case-by-case study. In some cases, scandals have some merits in revealing problems that deserve attention. In other cases, however, scandals merely bring unhappiness to people and distract the public concerns from more important issues that the society should address more urgently and immediately.

On the one hand, scandals do have some merits in calling our attention to pervasive social or political problems that we would otherwise neglect. The instance in economic realm is the scandal of Enron, a prime beneficiary of the the relaxed regulatory climate of the 1990s, which finally dissolved into bankruptcy due to its accounting, tax and stock fraud. No speaker or reformer could have called the international attention to the problem with the economic fraud unless the scandal had surfaced. Another good example is the scandal of the corrupt sport umpire, so-called "black whistle" in China. This scandal have drawn increasing attention to this mispractice, as a result of which, an amendment to the criminal law was therefore passed to effectively punish the misconduct.

On the other hand, scandals can sometimes serve chiefly to distract us from more pressing community or societal problems. In fact, the media pay too much attention to the personal lives of celebrities. Much of the media, be it television, newspapers or magazines, is primarily motivated by sales and profits. Scandals are always sensational, a characteristics that attract people as a result of human nature of curiosity. To this end, the private lives of celebrities and public figures become fair game. For example, during the Monica Lewensky scandal in President Clinton's administration, the people in the United States were inundated with non-stop reporting. Besides the news programs, all the talk shows, and there are many, had commentators discussing the story. While it was a story the public needed to know, the coverage indeed went overboard, because whether the adulterous scandal will beneifit the society is problematic.

At the mean time, the large sum of public funds for pursuing celebrities' scandal could otherwise be better used for addressing the problems of unemployment, supporting arts or environment pollution. The funds would be more beneficial to the world if they could be relocated to help those sick children in the African nations,. How many primary schools could be built up to help children in the undeveloped countries if that funds could function as donation? Or,the media could devote more coverage to the many "unsung heroes "in every society, thoses who quietly give off their time, talents and finances, to help humanity.

In sum, while scandals do,in some cases, exert some merits in calling our attention to social problems, they also distract out attention from more important issues. if the media were to give less emphasis to the personal affair scandal, they would enable these people to have a bit more much needed and sought after privacy. Then the media could devote more coverage to the pressing problems and those"unsung heroes"

[ 本帖最后由 绿松石 于 2007-12-9 13:58 编辑 ]

PursueDreamUID: 2426799

真的不知道说什么了，看到差距了！！！
不知道你写出这样的文章用了多少时间，全部是记忆写的吗，没有在写的时候翻翻书？

hdofrucUID: 2434623

In my point of view, the speaker makes an over generalization about the issue over social significance of scandals. In fact, the final judgement of this issue should be based on a case-by-case study. In some cases, scandals have some merits in revealing problems that deserve attention. In other cases, however, scandals merely bring unhappiness to people and distract the public concerns from more important issues that the society should address more urgently and immediately.（赞一个）

On the one hand, scandals do have some merits in calling our attention to pervasive social or political problems that we would otherwise neglect. The instance in economic realm is the scandal of Enron, a prime beneficiary of the the relaxed regulatory climate of the 1990s, which finally dissolved into bankruptcy due to its accounting, tax and stock fraud. （这个例子用的很流畅）No speaker or reformer could have called the international attention to the problem with the economic fraud unless the scandal had surfaced（否定之否定是个好句型）. Another good example is the scandal of the corrupt sport umpire, so-called "black whistle" in China. This scandal have drawn increasing attention to this mispractice, as a result of which, an amendment to the criminal law was therefore passed to effectively punish the misconduct.（黑哨涉及刑法？）

On the other hand, scandals can sometimes serve chiefly to distract us from more pressing community or societal problems. In fact, the media pay too much (unnecessary) attention to the personal lives of celebrities. Much of the media, be it television, newspapers or magazines, is primarily motivated by sales and profits(还可能被不同利益集团利用). Scandals are always sensational, a characteristics that attract people as a result of human nature of curiosity. To this end, the private lives of celebrities and public figures become fair game. For example, during the Monica Lewensky scandal in President Clinton's administration, the people in the United States were inundated with non-stop reporting. Besides the news programs, all the talk shows, and there are many, had commentators discussing the story. While it was a story the public needed to know, the coverage indeed went overboard, because whether the adulterous scandal will beneifit（benefit） the society is problematic.（这段反证用的不错）

At the mean time（？）, the large sum of public funds for pursuing celebrities' scandal could otherwise be better used for addressing the problems of unemployment, supporting arts or environment pollution. The funds would be more beneficial to the world if they could be relocated to help those sick children in the African nations,. How many primary schools could be built up to help children in the undeveloped countries if that funds could function as donation（这个if从句读起来有点不顺）? Or,the media could devote more coverage to the many "unsung heroes "in every society（fields）, thoses who quietly give off their time, talents and finances, to help humanity.（个人意见，有个例子表述可能得稍微变换一下，媒体在西方都是自负盈亏的，让他拿出追踪丑闻的钱去直接捐赠成立学校是不现实也每依据的，就是How many primary schools could be built up to help children in the undeveloped countries if that funds could function as donation这个例子用的太“感情用事了”）

In sum, while scandals do,in some cases, exert some merits in calling our attention to social problems, they also distract out attention from more important issues. if the media were to give less emphasis to the personal affair scandal, they would enable these people to have a bit more much needed and sought after privacy. Then the media could devote more coverage to the pressing problems and those"unsung heroes"

总体感觉你本意是想平衡正反观点的，但是论证更集中在反面，特别最后总结的时候容易被人误解你原先的平衡观点

绿松石UID: 2427549

没 也参考了不少 花的时间很长

wangyu0920UID: 199396

ISSUE185"Scandals—whether in politics, academia, or other areas—can be useful. They focus our attention on problems in ways that no speaker or reformer ever could."

[outline]:1.提出中立观点：有的时候，丑闻能揭示隐藏的问题；但有时候，对丑闻的关注分散人们的注意力，浪费了社会资金
       2.丑闻能使我们注意到本来可能会被忽略的社会政治问题
       3.丑闻过分关注名人的私生活。这种行为对社会并无益处
       4.花在关注丑闻的资金可以更好的支持一些社会上急需支援的方面，这样对丑闻的关注实际上导致了资源浪废

In my point of view, the speaker makes an over generalization about the issue over social significance of scandals. In fact, the final judgement of this issue should be based on a case-by-case study. In some cases, scandals have some merits in revealing problems that deserve （to be payed?）attention. In other cases, however, scandals merely bring unhappiness to people and distract the public concerns from more important issues that the society should address more urgently and immediately.

On the one hand, scandals do have some merits in calling our attention to pervasive social or political problems that we would otherwise neglect. The instance in economic realm is the scandal of Enron, a prime beneficiary of the the relaxed regulatory climate of the 1990s, which finally dissolved into bankruptcy due to its accounting, tax and stock fraud. No speaker or reformer could have called the international attention to the problem with the economic fraud unless the scandal had surfaced. Another good example is the scandal of the corrupt sport umpire, so-called "black whistle" in China. This scandal have drawn increasing attention to this mispractice, as a result of which, an amendment to the criminal law was therefore passed to effectively punish the misconduct.(中国的例子是不是有些不太好，NBA最近也有裁判参与赌球的丑闻，似乎对老美来说更熟悉)

On the other hand, scandals can sometimes serve chiefly to distract us from more pressing community or societal problems. In fact, the media pay too much attention to the personal lives of celebrities. Much of the media, be it television, newspapers or magazines, is primarily motivated by sales and profits. Scandals are always sensational, a characteristics that attract people as a result of human nature of curiosity. To this end, the private lives of celebrities and public figures become fair games. For example, during the Monica Lewensky scandal in President Clinton's administration, the people in the United States were inundated with non-stop reporting. Besides the news programs, all the talk shows, and there are many, had commentators discussing the story. While it was a story the public needed to know, the coverage indeed went overboard, because whether the adulterous scandal will beneifit the society is problematic.

At the mean time, the large sum of public funds for pursuing celebrities' scandal could otherwise be better used for addressing the problems of unemployment, supporting arts or environment pollution. The funds would be more beneficial to the world if they could be relocated to help those sick children in the African nations,. How many primary schools could be built up to help children in the undeveloped countries if that funds could function as donation? Or,the media could devote more coverage to the many "unsung heroes "in every society, thoses who quietly give off their time, talents and finances, to help humanity.(这段跳跃性是不是有点儿大，关注丑闻就一定耗费大量公众的资金么？这点似乎值得怀疑，前面还说媒体只关注利益，说明报道绯闻可以挣钱啊……)

In sum, while scandals do,in some cases, exert some merits in calling our attention to social problems, they also distract out attention from more important issues. if the media were to give less emphasis to the personal affair scandal, they would enable these people to have a bit more much needed and sought after privacy. Then the media could devote more coverage to the pressing problems and those"unsung heroes"

总体感觉还是有些散，每一个例子说得可以更深入些

[ 本帖最后由 wangyu0920 于 2007-12-19 22:17 编辑 ]