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发表于 2007-12-12 23:37:10 |只看该作者 |倒序浏览
243"The true value of a civilization is reflected in its artistic creations rather than in its scientific accomplishments."

The development of human civilization is inseparable from the artistic creations and scientific accomplishments. The role of artistic creations is to bring the spirit and the enjoyment of the arts to the people. The outcome of the scientific accomplishments significance lies on lead people to understand the world and change people's lives.

The true value of a civilization is reflected in its artistic creations. The fundament of human civilization is on the spirit level, and the pursuit of the spirit level is performance in artistic creations. Such ideological activities are an important performance of the development of humanism, which involves the artistic of different areas and form such as literature and so on. Human beings have all kinds of artistic creation and other subjects mix together so that people can understand the world more clearly and make the civilization develop quickly. The creation of the early clothes is just to maintain the body temperature and withstand the cold weather. When clothes meet people's basic needs, people produced clothes in different color and different type to satisfy people's pursuit of the beauty. Therefore, the artistic creation from a certain extent are reflected the real value of civilization.

From another point of view when we talk about the true value of a civilization, we must talk about the origins of human civilization from the start. The symbol of human civilization is from the beginning of the use of fire. People use fire to make food or heating. Fire can be said to be the scientific accomplishments of early humans. Many historians believe that the creation of the steam engine during the Industrial Revolution is the most important invention of the 19 century because the emergence of the steam engine led the development of the metallurgy, coal mines and textile industry. The invented of the steam engine also promote the civilization of the mankind entered the automated production of the times. If there are no scientific accomplishments as a material basis, the human civilization will not develop. From the discussion we talk about we can found the true value of the civilization is reflected in its scientific accomplishments.

Throughout the human history, human civilization's development is inseparable from the artistic creations and scientific accomplishments. We can not simply say that the artistic creations and scientific accomplishments which is more important. The development of the artistic are base on the scientific accomplishments as a necessary material foundation. The scientific accomplishments should not be divorced by artistic creation and develop separately.

To sum up, the real value of human civilization is can not simply described by artistic creations and scientific accomplishments. I must admit that the true value of the civilization is reflected in artistic creations and scientific accomplishments.

本人写的第一篇作文,自己觉得有点龌龊,大家给点意见吧:loveliness:
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The development of human civilization is inseparable from the artistic creations and scientific accomplishments. The role of artistic creations is to bring the spirit and the enjoyment of the arts to the people. The outcome of the scientific accomplishments significance lies on (The significance of the outcome of scientific accomplishments lies on leading people to understand and changing people life)lead people to understand the world and change people's lives.

The true value of a civilization is reflected in its artistic creations. The fundament of human civilization is on the spirit level, and the pursuit of the spirit level is performance(performancing) in(on) artistic creations. Such ideological activities are an important performance of the development of humanism, which involves the artistic of different areas and form(forms) such as literature and so on. Human beings have all kinds of artistic creation(creations) and other subjects mix together so that people can understand the world more clearly and make the civilization develop quickly.(Human beings have produced all kinds of creations ,some of which are mixed with several areas knowledge. ) The creation of the early clothes is just to maintain the body temperature and withstand the cold weather. When clothes meet people's basic needs, people produced clothes in different color and different type(types) to satisfy people's pursuit of the beauty. Therefore, the artistic creation from a certain extent are reflected the real value of civilization.

From another point of view when we talk about the true value of a civilization, we must talk about the origins of human civilization from the start. The symbol of human civilization is from the beginning of the use of fire. People use fire to make food or heating. Fire can be said to be the scientific accomplishments of early humans. Many historians believe that the creation of the steam engine during the Industrial Revolution is the most important invention of the 19 century because the emergence of the steam engine led the development of the metallurgy, coal mines and textile industry. The invented of the steam engine also promote the civilization of the mankind entered the automated production of the times. If there are no scientific accomplishments as a material basis, the human civilization will not develop. From the discussion we talk about we can found the true value of the civilization is reflected in its scientific accomplishments.

Throughout the human history, human civilization's development is inseparable from the artistic creations and scientific accomplishments. We can not simply say that the artistic creations and scientific accomplishments which is more important. The development of the artistic are base(basing) on the scientific accomplishments as a necessary material foundation. The scientific accomplishments should not be divorced by artistic creation and develop separately.

To sum up, the real value of human civilization is can not simply described by artistic creations and scientific accomplishments. I must admit that the true value of the civilization is reflected in artistic creations and scientific accomplishments.

很好的Issue.
最后两段有点重复?呵呵,个人意见。

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发表于 2007-12-14 13:15:46 |只看该作者

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The development of human civilization is inseparable from the artistic creations and scientific accomplishments. The role of artistic creations is to bring the spirit and the enjoyment of the arts to the people. The outcome of the scientific accomplishments significance lies on lead people to understand the world and change people's lives.

The true value of a civilization is reflected in its artistic creations. The fundament of human civilization is on the spirit level, and the pursuit of the spirit level is performance in artistic creations. Such ideological activities are an important performance of the development of humanism, which involves the artistic of different areas and form such as literature and so on. Human beings have all kinds of artistic creation and other subjects mix together so that people can understand the world more clearly and make the civilization develop quickly. The creation of the early clothes is just to maintain the body temperature and withstand the cold weather. When clothes meet people's basic needs, people produced clothes in different color and different type to satisfy people's pursuit of the beauty. Therefore, the artistic creation from a certain extent are reflected the real value of civilization.

From another point of view when we talk about the true value of a civilization, we must talk about the origins of human civilization from the start. The symbol of human civilization is from the beginning of the use of fire. People use fire to make food or heating. Fire can be said to be the scientific accomplishments of early humans. Many historians believe that the creation of the steam engine during the Industrial Revolution is the most important invention of the 19 century because the emergence of the steam engine led the development of the metallurgy, coal mines and textile industry. The invented of the steam engine also promote the civilization of the mankind entered the automated production of the times.   "If there are no scientific accomplishments as a material basis, the human civilization will not develop. "  (这句放在例子前面应该好些吧) From the discussion we talk about we can found the true value of the civilization is reflected in its scientific accomplishments.

Throughout the human history, " human civilization's development is inseparable from the artistic creations and scientific accomplishments. " (这一句和第一句有些重复) We can not simply say that the artistic creations and scientific accomplishments which is more important. The development of the artistic are base on the scientific accomplishments as a necessary material foundation. The scientific accomplishments should not be divorced by artistic creation and develop separately.

To sum up, the real value of human civilization is can not simply described by artistic creations and scientific accomplishments. I must admit that the true value of the civilization is reflected in artistic creations and scientific accomplishments.

第四段看起来像结尾段,如果是作为单独的论点提出应该有论据的支持。
结尾段显得很仓促,变换一下句式和用词就好了。

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issue243[aero作文小组]第一次作业


243"The true value of a civilization is reflected in its artistic creations rather than in its scientific accomplishments."

The development of human civilization is inseparable from the artistic creations and scientific accomplishments. The role of artistic creations is to bring the spirit and the enjoyment of the arts to the people. The outcome of the scientific accomplishments significance lies on (The significance of the outcome of scientific accomplishments lies on leading people to understand and changing people's life) lead people to understand the world and change people's lives.

The true value of a civilization is reflected in its artistic creations. The fundament of human civilization is on the spirit level, and the pursuit of the spirit level is performance (performing) in artistic creations. Such ideological activities are an important performance of the development of humanism, which involves the artistic of different areas and form (forms) such as literature and so on. Human beings have all kinds of artistic creation (creations) and other subjects mix together (Human beings have produced all kinds of creations, some of which are mixed with several subjects) so that people can understand the world more clearly and make the civilization develop quickly. The creation of the early clothes is just to maintain the body temperature and withstand the cold weather. When clothes meet people's basic needs, people produced clothes in different color and different type (types) to satisfy people's pursuit of the beauty (wonderful!). Therefore, the artistic creation (creations) from a certain extent are reflected (‘are’ could be deleted) the real value of civilization.

From another point of view when we talk about the true value of a civilization, we must talk about the origins of human civilization from the start. The symbol of human civilization is from the beginning of the use of fire. People use fire to make food or heating. Fire can be said to be the scientific accomplishments of early humans. Many historians believe that the creation of the steam engine during the Industrial Revolution is the most important invention of the 19 century because the emergence of the steam engine led (to) the development of the metallurgy, coal mines and textile industry. The invented of the steam engine also promote the civilization of the mankind entered the automated production of the times. If there are no scientific accomplishments as a material basis, the human civilization will not develop. From the discussion we talk about we can found the true value of the civilization is reflected in its scientific accomplishments (wonderful!).

Throughout the human history, human civilization's development is inseparable from the artistic creations and scientific accomplishments. We can not simply say that the artistic creations and scientific accomplishments which is more important. The development of the artistic are (art is basing) base on the scientific accomplishments as a necessary material foundation. The scientific accomplishments should not be divorced by artistic creation and develop separately.

To sum up, the real value of human civilization is can not simply described by artistic creations and scientific accomplishments. I must admit that the true value of the civilization is reflected in artistic creations and scientific accomplishments.
很好的,呵呵,加油。思路清楚,其中例证很精彩,加油 括号里是我的意见 呵呵 供参考呀

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第一次帖子被锁了,再发一次。真心求拍。谢谢呀

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