issue11[Jet]第11次作业

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找不到什么好的例子 sigh..
11 Should All Nations Help Establish a Global University?

Social problems are anxieties in all countries, including poverty, starvation, discrimination and so on.  Governments are looking forward ways to solve them once and for all.  At the first glance, the author’s recommendation of an approach to solving the world’s most persistent social problems of establish a global university seems to be some what appealing.  But further reflection tells me that I cannot agree with it for the following reasons.

After the Second World War, people established the United Nation to help solve all kinds of problems, like poverty, food, and so on. Individuals from different countries work together for the human’s future and common benefits by solving social problems and reducing disputes between countries.  As a well-rounded organization, U.N has different funds and conferences committing to international problems.  In the past half century, U.N has done a quite good job, playing important roles in the development of international communication and trade since it was set up.  And I believe in the future, there will be more people join it to improve the situation of world.  Accordingly, a so-called global university seems to be redundant.

Someone may argue that young people can get trained in this university about all social problems, and then will become helpful to solves these problems.  This is a puerile viewpoint.  Schooling is a specific, formalized process, but also limited by the boundaries of subject being taught.  Young men will finally find that society is more complicated than they appears in books and professor’ doctrine.  Lacking experience in poverty-stricken areas, how can a well-raised young person really understand what poverty means to people in it, and how can he really devoted himself to solving such problems?  If never feeling frustrated given by real society, how can he know the difficulties in executing projects, and then learn to be indomitable as well as sophisticated?  Even if they can be trained in university as well as in society, no one can promise that they will get opportunities to administration.  With all theories in brain but occupation as a humble stuff, how can he be capable of solving social problems?  

It is a fact that different nations hold different values and culture as well as national strength.  Setting up a global university may ends in such a tragedy: directorate is occupied by the richest countries and countries of strongest military force who claim to perform courses at their demanding, teachers failed to cooperate with each other because of different ideas, the students themselves conflict severely on conception and in life style.  Above things will probably happen in a common multiversity, not to mention in a global one.

Besides, there are colleges studying international relations and problems in many famous universities.  I believe that with high-class experts and students, it will be enough to input persons with abilities of solving social problems for society from these colleges.

In brief, social problems is complex aggregation, can be only solved in society, with efforts of everyone, not simply by students learning about them in textbooks. People should face all problems with mettle and determination of solve them. Only in this way, maybe one day, the world will live as one, no more poverty, starvation, discrimination, and no war.  Like Beatles sang, “Imagine there is no countries… imagine all the people living life in peace”.

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变色前的文字。例如：br
A good tool.不如改为A useful/helpful tool.Social problems are anxieties in all countries, including poverty, starvation, and discrimination and so on.  Governments are looking forward ways to（look forward to似乎是“盼望”，look for） solve them once and for all.  At the first glance, the author’s recommendation of an approach to solving the world’s most persistent social problems of（介词的用法，似乎应该用by） establish a global university seems to be some what appealing.  But further reflection tells me that I cannot agree with it for the following reasons.（呵呵，这种写法太像argu了）

After the Second World War, people established the United Nation to help solve all kinds of problems, like poverty, food, and so on. Individuals from different countries work together for the human’s future and common benefits by solving social problems and reducing disputes between countries.  As a well-rounded organization, U.N has different funds and conferences committing to international problems.  In the past half century, U.N has done a quite good job, playing important roles in the development of international communication and trade since it was set up.  And I believe in the future, there will be more people join it to improve the situation of world.  Accordingly, a so-called global university seems to be redundant.（引入联合国的例子，说明已经有解决世界性问题之道，再建立一个世界性大学是多余的）

Someone may argue that young people can get trained in this university about all social problems, and then will become helpful to solves（拼写） these problems.  This is a puerile viewpoint.  Schooling is a specific, formalized process, but also limited by the boundaries of subject being taught.  Young men will finally find that society is more complicated than they appears in books and professor’ doctrine.  Lacking experience in poverty-stricken areas, how can a well-raised young person really understand what poverty means to people in it, and how can he really devoted himself to solving such problems?  If never feeling frustrated given by a real society, how can he know the difficulties in executing projects, and then learn to be indomitable as well as sophisticated?  Even if they can be trained in university as well as in society, no one can promise that they will get opportunities to administration.  With all theories in brain but occupation as a humble stuff, how can he be capable of solving social problems?  

It is a fact that different nations hold different values and culture as well as national strength.  Setting up a global university may ends in such a tragedy: directorate is occupied by the richest countries and countries of strongest military force who claim to perform courses at their demanding, teachers failed to cooperate with each other because of different ideas, the students themselves conflict severely on conception and in life style.  Above things will probably happen in a common multiversity, not to mention in a global one.

Besides, there are colleges studying international relations and problems in many famous universities.  I believe that with high-class experts and students, it will be enough to input persons with abilities of solving social problems for society from these colleges.

In brief, social problems is complex aggregation, can be only solved in society, with efforts of everyone, not simply by students learning about them in textbooks. （我觉得：把in society改成through the cooperation of different people from the whole world可能更符合你的原意）People should face all problems with mettle and determination of solve them. Only in this way, maybe one day, the world will live as one, no more poverty, starvation, discrimination, and no war.  Like Beatles sang, “Imagine there is no countries… imagine all the people living life in peace”.（这样的结尾，很文学，佩服的）

文章结构
1，已经有联合国，再建一个世界性大学是多余的
2，学生缺乏实际经验，没有能力处理world’s problems
3，世界性大学最终会被发达国家所控制
4，已经有一个处理国际关系的专业。

我觉得：1和4可以合并说，已经有了联合国，已经有了处理国际关系的专业，（还可以加一点：现有的大学都向国际型发展，招收全球各地的学生），那么，再建一个世界性大学可能是浪费人力和金钱。（仅仅说“多余”是不到位的。）然后，再是第2，3点说明不可行的问题。

建议：注意段与段的衔接，转承；即还要在每一段的TS和结尾处下功夫。

另外：这段时间，我也有这样的问题：把issue写成argu那样的风格。我觉得issue与argu的差别还是很明显的，issue更重在说理，陈述自己的理由，而不仅仅抓住对方观点的不足。这只是我的感觉，我现在也老把它们写混。