作文第二弹,求高手狠拍!!!

Sniper619UID: 2227152

我水平有限,写的不好,大家不要客气!
如果是板油大哥请帮我评个分吧.先谢谢大家了,祝大家都能取得自己满意的成绩!
如果有人要互改就给个连接,有求必应.一起进步!


题目：肥皂剧是不是会影响人际关系？或者有什么优缺点？阐述你的观点.


With the amazingly speeding up of media development, more and more people spend more time on soap operas which lavishes too much time to directly communicate to other and exchange the feeling with families. This trend reminds many people who can’t help asking: Whether or not the soap operas affect family and community relationship? As my part, I firmly have a positive answer.

For one thing, Those who criticize the soap operas, to some extent, have their reasons—the soap operas can only caters the small proportion of people’s need, such as relaxation, drive off the time and relieve the stress. But there is no more meaning thing in it and hard serve the common people.  As a Chinese old saying goes: Equating killing time with killing yourself. Many people especial youngsters lavish their precious time to watch soap series all day and seriously affect their academic performance. It’s a costly hobby and how silly with such activity.

For another, the time originally should be spend on communicating to friend and families, however, be sank in soap series. A recent survey collected by FudanUniversity indicates that 75% TV series fans have a bad community relationship and rarely take hiker and other outdoor activities. Doubtless, indulgency in soap operas will affect a person’s health, spiritual condition and even the relationship of family and community.

However, the other side of coin has voiced strong disagreement of above opinion contending that watching soap operas after work is the most efficient way to relax brain and body and relieve the stress from working and studying. More people even get a better sleeping through watching funny soap operas before go to bed. The positive efforts of soap operas bring us could never be forgotten.

In general, for my part, there are both merits and defects of soap operas what we should do is to exploit to full extent its favorable aspects and avoid unfavorable ones such as move the daytime soap series to night and limit the total length of soap operas in a day.
  

bqianaUID: 193168

第一弹在哪里?

Sniper619UID: 2227152

第一弹太烂,老大还是别看了,觉得写的太垃圾了。

safinazhuangUID: 2432942

Those who criticize the soap operas, to some extent, have their reasons—the soap operas can only caters the small proportion of people’s need, such as relaxation, drive off the time and relieve the stress
这句不错

Sniper619UID: 2227152

谢谢,能给个评分吗?做个参考?