ISSUE50 April作文小组第二次作业

九微火UID: 2343684

TOPIC: ISSUE50 - "In order to improve the quality of instruction at the college and university level, all faculty should be required to spend time working outside the academic world in professions relevant to the courses they teach."
WORDS: 406        TIME: 00:50:00          DATE: 2008-3-28 10:22:50

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The speaker asserts that faculties with relevant experience of the course they teach can provide a better impartment to college students. I agree with this statement when it refers to the subjects which need practical experience. As for basic subjects and abstract subjects, just research inside the academic is enough.
Practical experience is essential to some subjects. First, the speed of knowledge increasing in some areas is so high that the information in college books is outdated to a certain extent. For example, the content of economics has experienced tremendous changes in last century. Many new theories appear at first in the journals, and then in the conferences, and last in the colleges books. The reason lies in that any new problem is founded in the real economical and social environment which is the natural laboratory of economics. So faculties can not inform the recent development of this academic without the professional experience relevant to the courses. Second, the professional experience of a teacher can guide the students in their career planning of future. After all, many subjects do not have direct relations to special profession. Consider, the major of atmosphere or global geography. These majors have few aspects to meet a certain work; therefore bring some perplexity to the students when looking for a job. If the teachers have relevant professions, they may offer students a better understanding of their major.
However, to pursue a profession go to extreme is harmful to both teachers and students. Many faculties have a second profession and earn much money than only in college. This phenomenon drives other teachers to engage a business outside the academic world. No one has endless energies to complete all the work perfectly. An outside work is certain to affect their teaching. A joke interprets this phenomenon ridiculously: It is professors who publish their books and merchants who earn their money, while it is merchants who publish their books and professors who earn their money. The joke indicates the unsatisfied moods of public to the professors. Therefore, to be a qualified/eligible faculty, the first obligation is to educate, to cultivate, to edify students who represent the blueprint of a nation. Education should not be industrialized and teachers should no be profit-driving creatures.
In sum, for practical subjects, it is beneficial for faculty to have a profession outside the academic. However, teachers should focus their attentions on teaching and provide a good impartment to students.

[ 本帖最后由 九微火 于 2008-3-28 23:05 编辑 ]

laiy115UID: 2421161

仅供参考哈：

1。just research inside the academic is enough.
     主语是research 作名词， 那just 修饰好象不妥。 academic 是否为academe
2.After all, many subjects do not have direct relations to special profession. Consider, the major of atmosphere or global geography. These majors have few aspects to meet a certain work; therefore bring some perplexity to the students when looking for a job.
   这几句写在第二段与TC不符合。 建议单独补充。
   第二段的Second可以再适当展开。
3。to pursue a profession go to extreme is harmful to both teachers and students.
     go 是动词吧？
4。to engage a business改为 engage in
5.你的第三段的论述部分感觉没和这段TC 呼应好， 只在说在外兼职的不好，不矛盾么？没有强调兼职的程度带来的教育的危害。
6。However, teachers should focus their attentions on teaching and provide a good impartment to students.
     你结尾的论述讲老师还是应将精力放在教学上， 给人感觉不支持出去工作， 和开头的论点（I agree with this statement when it refers to the subjects which need practical experience. ）有点矛盾。

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九微火UID: 2343684

非常感谢你的修改，受教了！:handshake