也开始动手写SAT Essay了--请大家指正

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Think carefully about the issue presented in the following excerpt and the assignment below:

" f; Y; r9 G) [) t$ @/ O1 `4 sSome people believe that there is only one foolproof plan, perfect solution, or correct interpretation. But nothing is ever that simple. For better or worse, for every so-called final answer there is another way of seeing things. There always a “however.”

Assignment: Is there always another explanation or another point of view? Plan and write an essay in which you develop your point of view on this issue. Support your position with reasoning an example taken from your reading, studies, experience, or observations.

There are two sides of a coin and there is always a “however”.
1 s4 ]+ D, G$ ^. o0 @- w# G% rEvery situation has its pros and cons, its benefits and drawbacks. This principle applies to everyday life. Compelling examples drawn from our life supports this thesis.

& }% x% H6 y# S# J$ ^5 @Politics is an interesting field where there is never an absolute explanation or point of view. Simply looking at surface value, we see the proposition and opposition, the radical parties against the conservative parties. As we see here, all ideas are objective and there is no right or wrong,. Especially in political situations, there is no right party nor candidate which is all up to the voter’s decision.

; P1 j9 D! y. P2 @: [6 K$ U: Y, ?5 NTaking a look at our studies and various disciplines, we will find that there is always no explanation to the arts. When we look at a particular artwork or even a piece of literature, we will come up with different interpretations. People have different set of values, which is the major reason why there are often no definite explanation or views to life’s situations.

Even in the scientific disciplinary, I can say that there will always be differing points of views. Though many argue that scientific theories and math formulas are definite, we will find whole new interesting stories when we look at what really happens before a scientific theory is proven. For example, the basic Earth that we are living in was once a square as defined by Aristotle. Before Galileo proved the Earth to be round, different versions and ideas about the Earth are present. Furthermore, there is Einstein’s Relativity against Newton’s Quantum Mechanics. Thus for both the material world and secular world, there is always other explanation and point of view.
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All in all, when we enquire further into a matter, we will always find the other side of the coin. Thus we know deep in our hearts, there can never be definite explanation.

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Directions: Think carefully about the issue presented in the following paragraph and respond to the assignment below. You have 25 minutes.

Sometimes in life, we lose. Abraham Lincoln lost numerous congressional elections before he went on to become President of the United States. Henry Ford went bankrupt and lost his ownership in The Detroit Automobile Company before ultimately succeeding with the Ford Motor Company. Michael Jordan抯 basketball teams endured many heartbreaking playoff losses before becoming World Champions six times over.

" }0 z" C6 g6 m& w3 j7 AMaybe losing in the secret ingredient to success?

Assignment: How do you feel about the idea that losing might be the secret ingredient to success? Plan and write an essay in which you develop your point of view on this issue. Support your position with reasoning and examples taken from your reading, studies, experience, or observations.

Losing is certainly not something to rejoice, but can definitely be used as stepping stone to success. I fell strongly that losing is a secret ingredient to success.
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3 v) f! O+ w# R7 K( W# _/ KFor one thing we must know for sure, success does not come easily, but through hardwork and rounds of failure. Though some succeed in their endeavours for the first attempt, true long lasting success can never be achieved in this way. Big successes come after failure, while victory comes after defeat. This applies to all our attempts to attain success, in politics, sports, business and even simple everyday life.

Those who succeed are the ones who endured through the pains of losing, crawling back from dust to glory. These people also have secret strategies, being able to make use of past failures as the ultimate ingredient to success. They adopt a positive mindset, have immense passion, and ‘losing’ to them is no longer a grind, but a valuable lesson to learn from. These are the ‘scary’ people who know no defeat and will eventually succeed.

Examples of failure that comes before great success are evident throughout centuries, from ancient war masters to modern entrepreneurs. Good example of a modern entrepreneur will be Steve Jobs, the CEO of Apple. His character is not well-liked by his colleagues and end up being expelled from the company. For a normal person, he may dwell in sorrows and never enter the field again. However Jobs came back from failure strongly and eventually became the CEO of one of the most successful companies of the world, Apple. In ancient China, warlords also go through rounds of defeat before attaining eventual success. One great man would be Yue King, Gou Jian, who went from great defeat to success.

[ 本帖最后由 topgoer 于 2008-10-26 23:25 编辑 ]

ψ岚宇·弢∮UID: 2457398

感觉有点短了 ...

一步一杀UID: 2368111

楼主考过托福吧。
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例子太简单，不够具体。整篇文章最好一共举3-4个例子。还有，像楼上所说，就是文章太短了。你这个长度可能最多勉强写满一面纸。
6 I6 z2 R" F1 E/ J第二篇没有结尾，如果来得及的话最好把结尾写上。
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继续努力！加油~:handshake

topgoerUID: 2563731

恩，谢谢点评。
第一篇没看时间，第二篇看了时间，时间不够用，没写完。 还要多练:)

一步一杀UID: 2368111

一开始练的时候可以不是太在意时间，慢慢地熟练了就要限制每次写作的时间了

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Ideas about money have been on the minds of great thinkers for centuries. Henry Fielding said, "Make money your God and it will plague you like the devil." Ken Hakuta once said, "Lack of money is no obstacle. Lack of an idea is an obstacle."      
Maybe money is, after all, NOT, the key ingredient to providing some of life's most sought-after answers?
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5 @6 ?( f+ `. h: T5 T' iAssignment: How do you feel about the idea that there are more important things in life than money? Plan and write an essay in which you develop your point of view on this issue. Support your position with reasoning and examples taken from your reading, studies, experience, or observations.

: Z6 O8 e5 Q" g% W& qMoney is a form of currency that enables us to exchange for material gains. In simple terms, money is the God of the material world and Devil of the spiritual world. I fell that there are much more important things in life than money, for money can only buy us material comfort, and thus, is not everything.

Although many individuals view money as important aspect of their life, they can still identify other vital parts that come before money, for the simple reason that money cannot buy everything. Money is not the sole wealth income, for there is also spiritual wealth. Money can only buy us property, a place to live, but can never get us spiritual comfort, like happiness and the care of people around us. All these basic spiritual things in our life come before money. All should remember that money can be lost and gained, but not our life and our immortal spirit.

8 ]3 `' K( m& g$ O' X  }! B% DThere are many examples everywhere that support the idea that money is not of utmost importance. First, there is saying “Money is the root of all evil”. For this context, I will like to interpret it as money causes people to lose their spiritual comfort leading to a disintegration of moral standards, resorting to evil in their pursuit of money. For greed of money causes crime and evil. However, money is not a living thing. The flow of money is decided by human’s actions.
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Money can be a great or vice, is a dead material, thus is not the most important thing in life.

一步一杀UID: 2368111

老毛病：没有具体例子+太短

topgoerUID: 2563731

呵呵，是的，这是我写的第3篇。下笔才知道底子薄:)
这一篇用了27分钟，都超时了。

最好各位也写些，相互学习一下......

一步一杀UID: 2368111

建议LS看看这上面的文章修改前和修改后的样子
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topgoerUID: 2563731

谢谢你的建议，我会仔细揣摩揣摩的。

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Anger is an emotion common to all human beings. Laurence J. Peter said, "Speak when you are angry and you'll make the best speech you'll ever regret." On the other hand, Malcolm X had a different point of view about anger claiming, "Usually when people are sad, they don't do anything. They just cry over their condition. But when people get angry, they bring about a change."
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          Maybe anger has two sides, like a coin?
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% \5 S/ D' X) t+ j2 UAssignment: How do you feel about the idea that anger can be both a positive or negative force depending upon how it is used? Plan and write an essay in which you develop your point of view on this issue. Support your position with reasoning and examples taken from your reading, studies, experience, or observations.


Anger indeed has two sides, an interesting emotion that can bring forth beneficial change or fearful destruction. Anger, like all other emotions, can affect a person’s action both positively and negatively. Anger is uncontrollable force experienced by an individual when enraged, which causes people to lose their control of emotions and go on a rampage. Anger for sure, affects every normal human being, which in turn bring a riptide effect around our environment.
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Upon first thought, anger is a negative emotion to many of us. Anger causes us to mess things up most of the time, for we may completely lose control of ourselves. A truly enraged person goes on wild fury and may reveal the beast within, doing things that we regret for life. Thus for us normal people, managing our anger and prevent the negative emotion from bringing us out of control is vital.
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However, I believe that managing anger and turning the tide against us to reap benefits, making full exploitation out of a distressful situation. I see that there is a positive side to anger, as any emotion cannot be hundred-percent. For human’s emotions are complicated, as we many experience several emotions at the same time, sometimes feeling both a sense of happiness and regret. I think that anger can be stopped from building up into negative actions and be turned into a positive morale booster.
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Anger is an aggressor that pokes on our inner soul, which can indeed bring out an unbelievable surge of energy when managed well, propelling us forward to reach unachievable heights.
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+ p' @! q* C' N' [7 _) `2 E: ?Anger, at surface value, is a scary emotion which people avoid. However, if managed properly, anger is able to bring out our warrior’s might that lies beneath us, even in the seeming weakest people.

[ 本帖最后由 topgoer 于 2008-10-28 23:13 编辑 ]

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25 分钟写的，想不出好例子:(

topgoerUID: 2563731

是啊，功力不够，先坚持写吧。谢谢激励！

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Sometimes in life, we lose. Abraham Lincoln lost numerous congressional elections before he went on to become President of the United States. Henry Ford went bankrupt and lost his ownership in The Detroit Automobile Company before ultimately succeeding with the Ford Motor Company. Michael Jordan basketball teams endured many heartbreaking playoff losses before becoming World Champions six times over.
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Maybe losing in the secret ingredient to success?
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Assignment: How do you feel about the idea that losing might be the secret ingredient to success? Plan and write an essay in which you develop your point of view on this issue. Support your position with reasoning and examples taken from your reading, studies, experience, or observations.


Losing is certainly not something to rejoice, but can definitely be used as stepping stone to success. I fell strongly that losing is a secret ingredient to success.

For one thing we must know for sure, success does not come easily, but through hardwork and rounds of failure. Though some succeed in their endeavors for the first attempt, true long lasting success can never be achieved in this way. Big successes come after failure, while victory comes after defeat. This applies to all our attempts to attain success, in politics, sports, business and even simple everyday life.

. t9 k# d" a8 |( Y) w% KThose who succeed are the ones who endured through the pains of losing, crawling back from dust to glory. These people also have secret strategies, being able to make use of past failures as the ultimate ingredient to success. They adopt a positive mindset, have immense passion, and ‘losing’ to them is no longer a grind, but a valuable lesson to learn from. These are the ‘scary’ people who know no defeat and will eventually succeed.

7 w& G" G, S, ~$ M( E- m# ?; SExamples of failure that comes before great success are evident throughout centuries, from ancient war masters to modern entrepreneurs. Good example of a modern entrepreneur will be Steve Jobs, the CEO of Apple. His character is not well-liked by his colleagues and end up being expelled from the company. For a normal person, he may dwell in sorrows and never enter the field again. However Jobs came back from failure strongly and eventually became the CEO of one of the most successful companies of the world, Apple. In ancient China, warlords also go through rounds of defeat before attaining eventual success. One great man would be Yue King, Gou Jian, who went from great defeat to success. After suffering bitter defeat against Wu, the Yue King went back and tasted gall every night. His perseverance enabled him to rebuild his kingdom and make a comeback, finally building up enough power to win the longlasting war against the Wu Kingdom.
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( W' d/ C8 |$ P5 oThus, I strongly believe that losing is necessary and can be a secret ingredient to success. As we all know that we only get one success out of ten attempts, learning to fail and face defeat is an important value that we must learn in life.