20天托福110分复习计划，由于另一个帖子楼数太高，现在本帖也开始为各位改作文

腾格里旅狼UID: 2573178

回复zhtwd：山寨魔法部长！这么惊悚的名字，突然想起来梁山水泊的”入云龙”公孙胜了……

腾格里旅狼UID: 2573178

回复jstzfish：我非常喜欢你这篇文章，但是如果能做一下改进会更好，比如再加入一些说理效果可能个好。我不知道你这篇文章到底能得到多少分，因为没见过其他人写这样的文章。你的文章思路很清晰，只是缺少一些更具体的说理，有些论点没有阐述清楚。如果能做到这些，这篇文章得分不会太低。

lightgUID: 2620543

膜拜LZ……太感谢了。。。。

daney68UID: 2582640

149# 腾格里旅狼

非常感谢你宝贵的建议。说道例子的问题，我是一直很困惑，总觉得自己积累的例子太少了，不知道楼主是怎么积累素材的？

还有，我想把字号调大一些是为了方便你看文章，以后还是按正常字体写，再次感谢你的指点。

腾格里旅狼UID: 2573178

回复daney68：例子的问题主要就是联系自己就好了，实际上不需要很多例子，你用心准备几个万能例子就好了，比如一件事情能够从不同的角度来讲。
例子：我小学的时候捡过一个钱包，后来还给失主了。
引用：1. 随着时代的变化，人们变得越来越势力了，比如小学的时候……，现在就不会。
2. 大学应该把更多的钱投到图书馆，比如我上大学的时候捡过一个钱包……，就是因为在图书馆力看到了有关的文章……，而我经常去gym就不会。
3. 不支持在小区建工厂，比如我的小区原来很和谐，孩子捡了一个钱包……，但是自从见了工厂，人们越来越势力了，我钱包丢了，结果再也找不回来了。
4……
这种万用例子有很多，实际上每个例子都是万用的，主要是看你会不会发散的去想，以后写的话对自己用的例子多想想。你很快就会解决这个问题的。:)

阿泰UID: 209473

你签名是首诗歌？

jstzfishUID: 2542893

楼主说出了我的心声，我很难在说理和举例之间找到一个平衡，准确的说我很难分清说理和举例的界限
感觉说理说了一会儿就扯到例子了，然后有插了两句漫不经心的说理
楼主能结合这篇文章里的某些句子，给我具体讲讲吗？
谢谢先!

PS:这篇文章是某某写作小组最近一篇练习文章 151# 腾格里旅狼

腾格里旅狼UID: 2573178

回复阿泰：是啊，本来想当签名的，结果超过150个字节了……

西藏班禅仓央嘉措的情诗，读了有一种异域的风味，含蓄中蓬着激情，婉约中透着直白。我想这种诗也只有在那种天高皇帝远，没有收到世俗污染的雪域高原才能写出来。烦恼的时候读一下感觉豁然开朗。呵呵

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奔跑蜗牛UID: 2579189

回复阿泰：是啊，本来想当签名的，结果超过150个字节了……

西藏班禅仓央嘉措的情诗，读了有一种异域的风味，含蓄中蓬着激情，婉约中透着直白。我想这种诗也只有在那种天高皇帝远，没有收到世俗污染的雪域高原才能 ...
腾格里旅狼 发表于 2009-4-4 02:27

旅狼 把诗歌做成图片
然后 在https://bbs.gter.net/thread-699188-1-1.html
这里 刷积分到 800
就可以把图片做成签名档了~~

腾格里旅狼UID: 2573178

回复：jstzfish: 以这段为例：When it comes to the study of recent years . We can not highlight the important of cooperation too much . Significant though the role that a teacher plays in classes is , the lecture-dominated classes have been throughly transformed into discussion-dominated classes . Since knowledge has become more and more complex , detailed , and abstract , not a single person could gasp it all by his/her own , By participating in a discussion group , student can share their minds with each other , and easily find out the gist point and pay factors to the obscure difficulties then finally work them out . As a result , the efficiency of study would be promoted to a certain extent .你可以吧教师的例子展开的说一下，然后把中间的几句说理的简单的缩写一下就好了

HaarUID: 2625121

Frankly,whether you can get 110+ was basically determined by your start point before preparation.

daney68UID: 2582640

你的回复真够及时，非常感谢！我看过你写的几篇帖子，在作文方面主要介绍的是独立作文，你在这方面很有经验，呵呵。不过还是很想问一下，你的综合写作是怎样准备的？我在做综合写作的时候，感觉的一个问题就是，3分钟阅读完一篇文章，然后做笔记，觉得时间不够用，只能记住文章主旨，和只言片语的一两个细节，所以想问一下你在综合写作的时候，阅读和听力材料一般笔记都记下哪些信息比较有用？ 155# 腾格里旅狼

不穿裤子UID: 2601805

太强悍了，自律能力太强，偶确定偶绝对坚持不下来……

daney68UID: 2582640

接着写文章，辛苦楼主啦：
Many teachers assign homework to students every day.Do you think that daily homework is necessary for students ?Use specific reasons and details to support your answer.

It is ture that daily homework is a key step for students to increase their knowledge and develop ability of problem-sloving.However,more and more people argue that piles of daily homework can not be benifital for children to develop study skills. By constrast, daily homework could cause heavy burnden on kids and even more boredom of study.In my view teacher should help students construct their knowledge system being used to apply to new situation by assigning time-felxble homework instead of daily homework.

There has been an growing number of students who suffer from physical ill resulting from stress of the daily homework. Recently stanford University study of 2,700 high school students found that two-thirds of them were “often or always” stressed by homework. More than 50 percent of these teens complained of headaches, problems sleeping or exhaustion; 25 percent said they used stimulants like Red Bull or No-Doz, and some students often skipped lunch to take yet another class.As a result, not only do they better learn and absorb updated knowledge, but it is harmful to their health physically as well as mentally.In other words,they are gradually lose their interest in learning.Besides, a great amount of daily homework deprive a lot of time with families and friends. Without free time,they are unble to get exercise and other extracurricular activities that could helpful to shape their personality.

In fact, if the time and amount on homework assgined by teachers become more flexble, with different forms of assignments, students will have enough time to develop their imagination and creactivity on their assignments. Also,they have a chance to exchange their ideas and thoughts with parents or friends who broad their vision;they even could spend a week on doing related experiments in the lab or doing a social research on the streets.Such verious forms of assginments is a available avenue for them to connect theroies with life experience.Thus students really feel the fun of learning.

While piles of daily homework have a positive effect on students'leaning,it is not benefitful for children further development resulting in physical ill even in mental.If homework become more flexable and verious, as well as access to real life, students will get a big deal from it.

jstzfishUID: 2542893

第三篇了，楼主忍住，别嫌我烦  - -!!

When I am extremely embarrassed , when I am in a great trouble , when I am struggling for a better life but hardly see any light , there is always a soul-stirring voice stick in my inner ear, "Run,Forrest,Run!" which offers me remarkable courage and incredible power that pull me back from the dead hopes and raise me up . Actually , It is the movie <Forrest Gump> that supports me during my awkward situations which constitute the most precious time in my whole life . Considerable though the entertainment and amusement a wealth of movies bring me is , I would definitely prefer to appreciate movies that make me be more thoughtful .





In recent years , the film industry is becoming more and more
commercialized , movie-makers tend to put the economic interest as the first consideration . As long as movies can provide them decent box office returns , they would be highly satisfied . As far as I am concerned , those superficial products are typical sighs of irrationally wasting time , escaping from real life , and even being indifferent to the society . On contrary , we would become much wiser , braver , and more passionate , by watching those films which are designed to make the audience think . We may mention a common example of historical movies - <Saving Private Ryan> . It perfectly showed us the brilliant chapter of World War II Normandy landing . Besides , it offered us an opportunity to put more consideration on the catastrophe created by the war and reminded us of the hard-earned peace of the world . The example is not rare , it is typical of dozens that we have encountered .





Through a different set of eyes , we can find out that those thought-provoking cinemas are just like mirrors which remind us of the backwards and merits of ourselves . People may share the same experience and emotion with the actors or actresses.Accordingly  what the performers have done may probably be compared by the spectators with what they had done in the past , and make the audience think about whether they had done appropriately . If they actually had done a good job , they might be impressively satisfied , or if they had done something terribly , they would not make the same mistake in future due to the lessons given by the movies . More importantly , since already get to know themselves better , people incline to possess much more bottom spirit to forge ahead , without any fear , to accomplish their goals even when face up with extremely tough situations. Just like <Forrest Gump> mentioned above , it reminded me of thinking about my assets , helped me to set up my confidence , and had been encouraging me till today . Because of the significant influence of it , I have been transformed from an coward to a brilliant man .





Admittedly , though watching recreational movies is an excellent way of relaxation , people should not totally give themselves to those amusing stuffs . It is preferable for them to see some profound ones at times . Descartes once said "I think therefore I am" . In another word , a person who has ideas always live a substantial life ,both physical and spiritual which is the most valuable to humanity .





Undoubtedly , all analysis warrants an unshakable conclusion that movies which are designed to provoking our thoughts are of impressive significance and are much more worthy to appreciate . In fact , not only do I prefer those profound films but also would love that movie-makers could provide us their products which are thoughtful as well as amusing , so that people might get themselves into thinking while be amused by the funny stories .

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