【Dark_Tournament TOEFL-ibt作文小组 capricon2006第十二次作业】

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【Dark_Tournament TOEFL-ibt作文小组 capricon2006第七次作业】


Many teachers assign homework to students every day. Do you think that daily homework is necessary for students? Use specific reasons and details to support your answer.

We can image a picture describing a thin child with a so big bag on the back that he almost can not move any distance. The picture is a mirror of our students rather than an illusion. Today, homework assigned by teachers cost our children much time, which would be spent by children in playing games or relaxing. May a positive effect as daily homework do play on the development of our children to a certain extent, I do not consider it necessary for students.

First, monotonous homework can hamper the development of children’s creativity. Most homework assigned by teachers is deficient in novelties. If we can image that children’s homework is joy for them? It is no more than drudgery, isn’t it? “Playing is the nature of a child.” However, instead of playing with others, many children have to suffer from trying homework after school. It’s miserable for those children, and how can they inspired by that dreary homework.

Second, homework costs students too much time. If there is no homework, children can spend more time on what they are interested in. without homework, for instance, a boy who think football is a better thing can spend more time on it, and he may become an excellent athlete. As the same, a girl interested in dance can gain better systemic training and become an outstanding dancer. In this regard, homework is an obstacle for our children to become multi-faceted.

Finally, dairy homework doesn’t always improve a student’s study. Because of no interest, some students cannot concentrate on their homework and perhaps, their studies with no efficient are futile. To the contrary, some students with no homework can still study well. Einstein is an example. In those reasons, I don’t think it is necessary for our students do so much homework!

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We can image a picture describing a thin child with a so big bag on the(the改为his) back that(that改为and) he almost can not move (for)any distance. The picture is a mirror of our students rather than an illusion. Today, homework assigned by teachers cost our children (too) much time, which would be spent by children in playing games or (for more)relaxing. May a positive effect as daily homework do play on the development of our children to a certain extent,(but) I do not consider it necessary for students.
First, monotonous homework can hamper the development of children’s creativity. Most homework assigned by teachers is deficient in novelties. If we can image that children’s homework is joy for them? It is no more than(than 改 为 a)drudgery, isn’t it? “Playing is the nature of a child.” However, instead of playing with others, many children have to suffer from trying homework after school. It’s miserable for those children, and how can they inspired by that dreary homework.

Second, homework costs students too much time. If there is no homework, children can spend more time on what they are interested in. without homework, for instance, a boy who think football is a better thing can spend more time on it, and he may become an excellent athlete. As the same, a girl interested in dance can gain better systemic training and become an outstanding dancer. In this regard, homework is an obstacle for our children to become multi-faceted.
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Finally, dairy homework doesn’t always improve a student’s study. Because of no interest, some students cannot concentrate on their homework and perhaps, their studies with no efficient are futile. To the contrary, some students with no homework can still study well. Einstein is an example. In those reasons, I don’t think it is necessary for our students do so much homework! 3 n0
总体来说是不错的·
但是有的语言的诉述上还是有一点问题···
同样我想我也有这个问题···
大家都是在不断的改进中成长的···
加油吧··· F
多看点别人写的好的作文···
一次比一次好起来吧····
嘿嘿····

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1# capricon2006
We can image a picture describing a thin child with a so big bag on the(the改为his) back that(that改为and) he almost can not move (for)any distance. The picture is a mirror of our students rather than an illusion. Today, homework assigned by teachers cost our children (too) much time, which would be spent by children in playing games or (for more)relaxing. May a positive effect as daily homework do play on the development of our children to a certain extent,(but) I do not consider it necessary for students.
First, monotonous homework can hamper the development of children’s creativity. Most homework assigned by teachers is deficient in novelties. If we can image that children’s homework is joy for them? It is no more than(than 改 为 a)drudgery, isn’t it? “Playing is the nature of a child.” However, instead of playing with others, many children have to suffer from trying homework after school. It’s miserable for those children, and how can they inspired by that dreary homework.

Second, homework costs students too much time. If there is no homework, children can spend more time on what they are interested in. without homework, for instance, a boy who think football is a better thing can spend more time on it, and he may become an excellent athlete. As the same, a girl interested in dance can gain better systemic training and become an outstanding dancer. In this regard, homework is an obstacle for our children to become multi-faceted.
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Finally, dairy homework doesn’t always improve a student’s study. Because of no interest, some students cannot concentrate on their homework and perhaps, their studies with no efficient are futile. To the contrary, some students with no homework can still study well. Einstein is an example. In those reasons, I don’t think it is necessary for our students do so much homework! 3 n0
总体来说是不错的·
但是有的语言的诉述上还是有一点问题···
同样我想我也有这个问题···
大家都是在不断的改进中成长的···
加油吧··· F
多看点别人写的好的作文···
一次比一次好起来吧····
嘿嘿····

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We can image a picture describing a thin child with a so big bag on his back with which he almost can not move any distance. The picture is a mirror of our students rather than an illusion. Today, homework assigned by teachers cost our children much time, which would be spent in playing games or relaxing. May a positive effect as daily homework do play on the development of our children to a certain extent, I do not consider it necessary for students. (Considerable though the advantages that doing homework enjoys, I am strongly support not to do the work everyday)
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First, monotonous homework can hamper the development of children’s creativity. Most homework assigned by teachers is deficient in novelties. If we can image that children’s homework is joy for them? It is no more than drudgery, isn’t it? “Playing is the nature of a child.” However, instead of playing with others, many children have to suffer from finishing homework after school. It’s miserable for those children and in that case how can they inspired by that dreary homework.


Second, homework costs students too much time. If there is no homework, children can spend more time on what they are interested in. without homework, for instance, a boy who think football is a better thing can spend more time on it, and he may become an excellent athlete. As the same, a girl interested in dance can gain better systemic training and become an outstanding dancer. In this regard, homework is an obstacle for our children to become multi-faceted.

Finally, daily homework doesn’t always improve a student’s study. Because of no interest, some students cannot concentrate on their homework and perhaps, their studies with no efficient are futile. To the contrary, some students with no homework can still study well. Einstein is an example. In those reasons, I don’t think it is necessary for our students do so much homework!



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请注意加上最后的结尾段。文中的观点展开的不是很详细，没有用例子证明。句式也不是很有变化，如果想要拿高分，需要背诵一些同种意思的不同句式，让文章有不同。（呵呵，这点我做的也不是很好。。）
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文中有些句子的意思表达的不是很完整，读起来有些吃力。
转折词最好不要用这种first,second,可以试着尝试换些高级的词语。时间不够，只能粗略的很肤浅的讲一讲。。抱歉。。