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第十一次作业

People work because they need money to live. What are some other reasons that people work? Discuss

one or more of these reasons. Use specific examples and details to support your answer.

48. Reasons why people work other than earning a living

In this era of rapid social change leading to life complexity and displacement, both positive and negative effect among in person that whether there are some other reasons that people work? In my view, here are also two main reasons for people working as followed.

To the very basic first, the work could offer him/her more opportunities for learning specific knowledge. In the contemporary society, the person who is accomplishment because he/she has professional skill in their position and these skills are contributed from their working experience. Therefore, many boys or girls who want to be an excellent person in the future, keep working is play an essential role in their way of success. For instance, the Bill Gates, leader of Microsoft Company, his successful is due to his diversity of experiences of work in computer area. Thus, it is not difficult to imagine that learning specific knowledge from his/her job is also an important reason for work rather than only need money to live.

On the other hand, he/she could get benefits a lot from work, because there are several chances to make friends, not only earn money to live. No one can deny that the friend has crucial role in his/her whole life, and he/she has numerous opportunities and times to make friends when he/she is working. The colleagues, clients, managers who he/she has to face to usually, as result, there must be one or more people will be a good friend in the future. Oppositely, no working's life is fragile and delicate, life will become to single and lonely, anybody can not leave their job to stay with him/her, gradually and eventually, lost work not only means that no money to live, but also he/she will no friend in their rest of life. So to make friend is also another necessary reason for work, isn't it?


In conclusion, depending on money to live never is the reason which is the one and only for present people, therefore, it would not to too great an exaggeration to say that learning specific knowledge and making friends, are also important reasons for work rather than only for earning money to live.

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In this era of rapid social change leading to life complexity and displacement, both positive and negative effects among people that are there some other reasons that people work? In my view, here are also two main reasons for people working as followed.

To the very basic first, the work could offer him/her more opportunities for learning specific knowledge. In contemporary society, people who have accomplishments because they have professional skills in their position and these skills are contributed from their working experience. Therefore, many boys and girls who want to be an excellent person in the future, keep working is playing an essential role in their way of success. For instance, Bill Gates, the leader of Microsoft Company, succeed due to the diversity of experiences of work in computer area. Thus, it is not difficult to imagine that learning specific knowledge from his/her job is also an important reason for work rather than only need money to live.

On the other hand, he/she could benefit a lot from work, because there are several chances to make friends. No one can deny that the friend has crucial role in his/her whole life, and he/she has numerous opportunities and times to make friends during work. The colleagues, clients, managers who he/she has to face, usually, as result, there must be one or more people will be a good friend in the future. Oppositely, life without work is fragile and delicate, and will become single and lonely. None can leave their job to stay with him/her, gradually and eventually, lost work not only means that no money to live, but also he/she will have no friend in their rest of life. Hence making friend is also another necessary reason for work.

In conclusion, depending on money to live never is the only reason for present people, therefore, it would be not too great an exaggeration to say that learning specific knowledge and making friends, are also important reasons for work rather than only for earning money to live.

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第一次参与，有做得不好的地方请多多包涵呀:)
首先，我根据自己的理解修改了一些感觉不对或者表达不合适的地方，具体请楼主自己核对，如果有问题，提出来我们一起讨论也是好的~呵呵

说说整体的感受，文章的结构和脉络还是挺清晰的，看得出来楼主花了一番功夫的。

但是，有一个很明显的感觉就是，行文比较生硬，感觉刻意去运用一些句式和词，但是并不到位，例如，single and lonely修饰本句的主语life，感觉就不是很合适。
再就是楼主要认真的在语法方面改进一下了:D  本文fragment的问题感觉还是比较严重呢~比如第二个红字的句子，many boys and girls 就是一个主语在那里，后面又是一个句子。

我才疏学浅呀，有几句话（红字的）怎么都读不明白，所以虽然感觉有问题但也不知道该怎么修改，呵呵，只能楼主自己来解决了。

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